高考復習---書面表達評析及指導HowtoimprovethewritingskillsIfyouaretheteacher

假定你是李華,你的英國朋友Peter來信詢問你的英語學習情況并希望你簡單介紹自己家鄉，請你根據下列要點寫回信。要點:

1.我學英語已經六年了，在老師和同學們的幫助下取得了一些進步；2.但是總覺得英語難學，尤其是英語中的一些習慣用法；3.今后一定要努力學習這門有用的外語，爭取能用流利的英語和你寫信；4.我的家鄉發生很大的變化，蓋起了許多高樓，拓寬了道路，變得越來越漂亮和現代化；5.如果有時間可以到中國來，我會帶領你參觀我的家鄉。

注意：

1.詞數100左右；

2.可適當增加細節，以使行文連貫；

3.開頭語已為你寫好。

June8,2008

DearPeter,

I'mverygladtoreceiveyourletter.IwilltellyousomethingaboutmyEnglishstudyandhometown.………….Badsample卷面不整潔;涂改較多;語言錯誤多;層次不清;得11分samplesofstudentworkreadandwritefindithard

fluentEnglishtowriteGreatchanges

roads

hadtakenplaceinmyhometownbuildingswidenedItwillbewonderfulwhen

youcometoChinaifyouarefreeshowyouaroundIwillbegladto語言不地道;中文式思維;語言錯誤較多，得分13分samplesofstudentworklearnoftheteachersandmyprogressreadandwriteithardtolearnhardwork.writelettersinfluentEnglishfoundhadbecomeWelcometoChinaifyouhavetimeshowyouaround語言素質較好;基本功不差;語句仍有毛病；得15分.samplesofstudentworkprogresswell∧widenedare詞匯有錯誤;卷面有涂改;得19分.samplesofstudentworkroadsMyhometownisbecomingmoreandmore3.IfyougettoChinathathavetime,mewithyoulookmyhometown.

4.Iwillwelcometoyou.

◆“小錯誤”主要是反應在個別單詞拼寫錯誤、冠詞介詞使用不準確等方面,如：

Undermyteacherandclassmatesallhelptome,…….

→Ihopeyou’llgetachancetocometoChinaandI’llshowyouaroundmyhometownifyouarefree.→WelcometoChina.→Withthehelpofmyteachersandclassmates,……◆書寫是否工整清晰也會影響答卷得分。卷面不整潔，涂改多；大小寫;標點符號;書寫不清，得分會很低！★完全完成了試題規定的任務，覆蓋所有內容要點。

★應用了較多的語法結構和詞匯。

★

語法結構和詞匯方面有些錯誤，但為盡力使用較復雜結構或較高級詞匯所致；具備較強的語言運用能力。

★有效地使用了語句間的連接成分，使全文結構緊湊。

書面表達評分最高標準（第五檔21---25分）Onepossibleversion:

June8,2008

DearPeter,

I'mverygladtoreceiveyourletter.IwilltellyousomethingaboutmyEnglishstudyandhometown.

ItissixyearssinceIbegantolearnEnglish.Withthehelpofmyteachersandclassmates,IhavemadesomeprogressinEnglish.HoweverIstillfindEnglishhardtolearn,suchassomedifficultidiomswhichmademeconfused.Nomatterhowharditis,Ihavemadeupmymindtomasterthisusefullanguagebymyhardwork.NotlongagoIreturnedtomyhometownandfoundgreatchangeshadtakenplacethere.Manynewhouseshadbeenbuiltandroadshadbeenwidened.Myhometownisgettingmodernandmoreandmorebeautiful.IhopeifyouhaveachancetocometoChinaandI’llshowyouaroundmyhometownwhenyouareonleave.

Bestwishes,

LiHuaMySuggestions:1.percomplexsentences5.writingmodelsSixstepsforwriting(寫作六步驟）

1.

Cross-question(審題)※

Mainidea※Style※

Verbtense※Person2.Seizethemajorpoints/keywords(抓要點)3.Arrangement(布局)！4.Sentencesconnection(連句)Words/phrasesSentences6.

Errorcorrecting(查錯改錯)5.Expressyouropinion

(發表觀點）Conjunctions/conjunctiveadverbssentencespassage

技巧1.使用較高級的詞匯3.使用恰當的連接詞詞匯反映你知識貯存量的多少，也是衡量英語水平的一個重要標志。運用得當的句子結構可以給文章增色不少，從而使整篇文章因此而生輝。使用恰當連接詞，對寫一篇有“英語味”的文章很重要，能使文章上下銜接自然、緊湊。增強書面表達效果的技巧2.使用較豐富的句式1.Becausetheweatherwasgood,ourjourneywascomfortable.(幸虧…)2.Weallthinkheisagreatman.（評價很高）3.SuddenlyIthoughtoutagoodidea.（occur）

Thankstothegoodweather,

ourjourneywascomfortable.I.怎樣使用較高級的詞匯Weallthinkhighlyofhim.Agoodideaoccurredtome./Agoodideasuddenlystruckme.II.豐富的句式：(常用到的句型結構）利用不同的句型來表達同一個意思，能增加文章的文采。

HowhappyIwaswhenIreceivedyourletter!

Itwasthisyoungboywho

helpedtheoldgranny.

Onlyinthiswaycanyousolvethisproblem.

Theyreadwhilewalkingor

ridingonabus.

1.感嘆句2.強調句3.倒裝句4.省略句

Isawayoungladywalkingslowlyinthestreetwithahandbaginherhand.

Let’scometothemainteachingbuilding,atthebackofwhichstandstheschoollibrary.

That’swhatIshoulddo.

Timepassedquicklybeforeweknewit.

5、with短語6、定語從句7、各種名詞性從句8、各種狀語從句3.表示因果關系

因為，因此，所以:4.表示條件關系

如果，只要:

除非:

否則:since;as;because(of);so;thus;therefore;asaresult;if;oncondition(that);aslongasunless

orelse

5.表示時間關系當…的時候:

when;while

在…之后:

after

在…之前:

before

直到:

until

直到…才…:

not……until……

一…就…:

assoonas

后來，然后:

later;

afterwards

不久:

soon

近來:

lately;

recently

自從…:since

從那時起:

fromthenon6.表示特定的順序關系

首先:firstly

最主要的:

aboveall

其次:

secondly

然后:

then;next

最后:

finally;intheend7.換一種方法表述

換句話說:

inotherwords;thatistosay;

10.

對一個話題進行總結

總而言之，總的來說:

onthewhole;inshort;allinall;ingeneral;inaword,finally,inconclusion,generallyspeaking,asyouknow,intheend,其它常用到的副詞

therefore;otherwise;finally;

furthermore;thus;namely;although;afterwards;personally;12.

表示結果：

thus,therefore,so,asaresult,seeingthat,luckily,unfortunately

13.表示強調：

aboveall,indeed,surely,certainly,ofcourse,afterall,withoutanydelay,atleast,atmost,mostimportant,undoubtedly6.表示特定的順序關系

首先:firstly

最主要的:

aboveall

其次:

secondly

然后:

then;next

最后:

finally;intheend7.換一種方法表述

換句話說:

inotherwords;thatistosay;

聯合國教科文組織某考察團正在我國某鄉村參觀考察。假定你是接待人員,請根據下列提示以發言稿的形式簡要介紹這個村的情況：1)大小：近100戶人家，約500口人。2)變化：過去很窮，78年后變化很大。人們生活比以前好多了。現已舊貌換新顏。3)教育：原來的學校很小，現已經過改建。新建的教學樓有4層，是村里最美的建筑物。村所有學齡兒童在此免費就讀。注意：1）要點齊全，前后連貫。2）詞數：100-120之間。PracticeLadiesandgentlemen,Welcometoourschool.Thisvillageisverysmall.Ithasnearly100familiesandabout500people.Itusedtobeverypoor.Ithaschangedalotsince1978.Peopleherearericherthanbefore.Nowitistakingonanewlook.Theschoolherewasverysmall.Nowithasbeenrebuilt.Thenewlybuiltteachingbuildinghas4storeys.Itisthemostbeautifulbuildinginthevillage.Alltheschool-agechildrencanstudyhere.Theyenjoyfreeeducationinit.Thankyou.Ladiesandgentlemen,

Welcometoourschool!Ladiesandgentlemen,Welcometoourschool!①Thisvillageisverysmall.Ithasnearly100familiesandabout500people.Itusedtobeverypoor.②Ithaschangedalotsince1978③.Peoplehere④arericherthanbefore.Nowitistakingonanewlook.①Thisvillageisasmallonewith/whichhasnearly100familiesandabout500people.Itusedtobeverypoor.②However,

ithaschangedalotsince1978③andhasbeendevelopingveryfast.Peoplehere④liveamuchbetterlifethanbefore.書面表達：Nowitistakingonanewlook.

Inthepast,theschoolherewasverysmall⑤.⑥Nowithasbeenrebuilt.⑦Thenewlybuiltteachingbuildinghas4storeys⑧.Itisthemostbeautifulbuildinginthevillage.Alltheschool-agechildrencanstudyhere.⑨Theyenjoyfreeeducationinit.⑩Thankyou.

Inthepast,theschoolherewasverysmall⑤andmostchildrencouldn’taffordtogotoschool.⑥

Butnowithasbeenrebuilt⑦and⑧whichhas4storeysisthemostbeautifuloneinthevillage.Alltheschool-agechildrencanstudyhere.⑨What’smore,

theyenjoyfreeeducation.⑩Mayyouenjoyyourstayherethenewlybuiltteachingbuilding/Mayyouhaveapleasantti