作文講評作文講評TeachingAimsAttheendoftheclass,thestudentsaresupposedto

1.bemoreawareofmistakesmadeintheirarticles2.knowmoreabouttherightwaysofwriting3.beabletopolishuptheirwritingsTeachingAimsAttheendoftheLead-in1.Whatcanbecalledagoodarticle?【評分標準】內容完整，語言規范，語篇連貫，詞數適當。2.Whatarethedifficultiesyoumeetinwritingarticles?1).加強基礎詞匯和基本句子結構學習。2).提高綜合運用復合句的能力。3).注意句子間的過渡和銜接。4).仿寫、背誦、熟讀話題范文。Lead-in1.WhatcanbecalledaCommentsonthewritingsStrongpoints:Ifso,wewillbuildanenvironmentallyfriendlysociety.(省略句)(邢臻)Lastbutnotleast,whenridingbikes,wewillfeelmorerelaxedafterthewholeday’shardwork.(省略句)(鄧雪怡)Usebike-sharing,andyouwillfindthatitisuseful.（祈使句+and+陳述句）(張子瑩)CommentsonthewritingsStrongAsfarasthepromotingofthebike-sharingisconcerned,Ithink...(活用句型)(吳雨欣)Abovearemyopinions.（倒裝）(吳雨欣)Ican’tbeinmorefavorofit.（can’t...more句型）(胡慧月)....bicycleridingistheleastexpensivewayoftravelingapartfromwalking.(adj最高級用于否定表達)(呂露露、程亞瑋)AsfarasthepromotingoftheWearesupposedtoachieveabalancebetweendevelopmentandnature.（achieveabalancebetween...高級詞匯）(陶敏)However,it’sourdutytoprotecttheenvironmentwhichwerelyon.(it作形式主語，relyon高級詞匯,復雜結構)(陶敏)Itcanalsobuildsocialbondsbetweenpeople.(高級詞匯)(陳楚喬)Thisisoneofthegreatestinvitationstotrafficaccidents.(高級詞匯)(呂夢娟)WearesupposedtoachieveabNotice:Theyhaveachievedmuchinadvancedphrasesandsentencestructures.Weshouldlearnfromthem.Notice:Weakpoints:錯誤統計：高二13（41人）錯誤類型數量搭配錯誤50單復數錯誤35單詞拼寫31動詞運用19詞性14句首大小寫14Weakpoints:錯誤統計：高二13（41人）錯誤類1.Collocation搭配錯誤...becausebikesarealmostdistributedtoeverywhere.Althoughtheserviceofthebike-sharingisnotwell,itcanbringsomeadvantages.good1.Collocation搭配錯誤goodyoucanfinditeasilyandonlypayforalittlemoney.so,weshouldencouragepeopletorideBike-sharingquiteoftenthandriving.butthebike-sharingservicestillexistssomeproblem.bicyclesbutsomeproblemswithbike-sharingservicestillexist.youcanfinditeasilyandonl2.Singularandplural單復數錯誤1）單復數InChina,manyvehicleslikebusandcarspolluteenvironmentbadly.What’smore,thedestructionofbike-sharingisabigproblems.buses2.Singularandplural單復數錯誤1）單復2）Agreement主謂一致itseemsthatBike-sharinggiveawaypeople’sinformation.What’smore,itbringabigconveniencetopeople.ss2）Agreement主謂一致itseemsthatB3.Spelling單詞拼寫錯誤weshouldhelpintroductthebike-sharingtoeveryone.Besides,ifcityiscrowedwithcarsduringrushhours,thecitizencanusethosebikestotheircompaniesassoonaspossible.First,withthedevelopingofsociaty,therearemoreandmorecarsontheroad.

introducecrowdedsociety3.Spelling單詞拼寫錯誤weshouldhelp4.Usageofverbs動詞處理不當,thenewservicenamedbike-sharingisappeared.However,therehasbeensomeproblemsappeared.appearsHowever,someproblemsexist.4.Usageofverbs動詞處理不當,thene5.Partofspeech詞性錯誤First,itisveryconveniencefortravelerstotravelinthecity.Ridingbikesisagoodwaytokeephealth.convenienthealthy5.Partofspeech詞性錯誤First,iti6.Capitalizedletters大小寫錯誤Ontheonehand,Itisveryconvenientforustouseabike-sharing.Inconclusion,Thepromotingofthebike-sharingserviceisofbeneficialtous.itthe6.Capitalizedletters大小寫錯誤itthNotice:MoreattentionmustbepaidtothesemistakesinyourdailyEnglishstudy.Notice:task-basedwriting讀寫類作文

1.用約30個單詞概述上述信息的主要內容；考查閱讀及概括能力，以及語言組織能力。2.用約120個單詞發表你的觀點，內容包括：（1）支持成反對共享單車的推廣；（2）用2-3個理由或論據支撐你的觀點。考查分析問題、解決問題的能力，內容組織能力。task-basedwriting讀寫類作文

1.審題：讀出信息，進行概括。Bike-sharinghastakenoffinChinafarfasterthaninanyothermarket.Themarkethasbecomefloodedwithnewcompaniesinrecentmonths.Thebike-sharingcompaniesoperateinasimilarway.Theyuseappsthatallowusers,afterpayingadeposit,tounlockthewheelswiththeirsmartphones.

Afterthejourney,userscanleavebikesanywhereinpublicandpayalittlemoneyfortheuse.Theserviceisverypopularasitprovidesaneffective

solutionto“thelastkilometer”problem.Thepromotingofthebike-sharingserviceisalsoraisingquestions

aboutprofitability,wide-spreadbikevandalism(破壞)andtheft,andgrowinggovernmentregulation.AHongKongmanwhowasarrestedforthrowingseveralsharedbikesintoriverssaidhehadnoregretdestroyingthembecause”theGPSdevicesinthebikesgiveawayusers'personalinformation,suchastheirlocations.”現象好處問題1.審題：讀出信息，進行概括。Bike-sharingh2.把握第一段:

比較哪個開頭好1.Bike-sharing,claimingtobeuser-friendlyandaffordable,hasrecentlycaughtonthroughoutChina.However,lackofregulationgivesbirthtovarioussocialproblems,suchasbikevandalismandtheft.2.Bike-sharingisverypopularinChinanowadays.Thecompaniesproductitthatinasimilarway.However,someonetheftitforwhichindicatespersonalinformation.現象好處問題現象問題好處?2.把握第一段:

比較哪個開頭好現象好處問題現象問題好處?3.Withthedevelopmentoftechnology,bike-sharingisturningup.Becauseofit’stooshort,therearealotofproblemsexists.Bike-sharingasanewwayoftraffic,turningupourlife.Althoughtheserviceofthebike-sharingisnotwell,itcanbringsomeadvantages.Forexample,it’sconvenientforus...

要點重復，雜亂3.WiththedevelopmentoftecNotice:1.coverthemainpoints.2.(1).現象(2).好處(3).問題3.三個要點，5分，每點2分.Notice:3.充實第二段：argumentstosupportyouridea.要求：用約120個單詞發表你的觀點，內容包括：（1）支持成反對共享單車的推廣；（2）用2-3個理由或論據支撐你的觀點。

3.充實第二段：argumentstosupporty不足分析：

IarguewithBike-sharingservice.First,itisveryconvenientfortravelerstotravelinthecity.Whenyouinanunfamiliarcity,youcanusethebiketogoaround.What’smore,Bike-sharingservicehelpusliveinbetterenvironment.Whenyourideabikeinsteadoftakingataxi,theairpollutionwillreduceandtheairinthecitywillbecomemorefresh.Thelastbutnotleast,theBike-sharingservicehelpcitylifeinahealthierway.Manypeopleinthecitybenefitfromtheservice.topicsentence?supportingsentences不足分析：IarguewithBike-sharinNotice:1.主題句Topicsentence3分，很重要！！！贊成或反對，觀點要明確，不能騎墻！！！2.2-3論據，每個5分,共10分。3.銜接手段,3分。4.中間段內容要充實，說理要有條理性和層次性。

Notice:試與下文比較2.Undoubtedly,Iaminfavorofthepromotingofthebike-sharingservice.Thereasonsaccountingformyopinionlieintwoaspectscomingfromindividualandsocietyrespectively.Ononehand,soconvenientisbike-sharingthatitsavesthetimewhichcouldhavebeenwastedontraffic.Ontheotherhand,intermsofsocialbenefits,bike-sharingcangraduallyreducetheuseofprivatecars,thusprovidingcitizenswithamoresatisfyingenvironment.topicsentence!Supportingsentences試與下文比較2.Undoubtedly,Iamin4.不忘結論：Whichofthefollowingpassagescanbeused?1.Inaddition,usingbike-sharingcanbenefitforairpollution,becausewhenwegoforaplacewhichisfromashortdistance,wecanchoosebike-sharinginsteadofprivatecars.2.Therefore,inordertohelpbike-sharingdevelopbetter,weusersshouldbeartheresponsibilitytoputthebikeinplace.Moreover,governmentoughttopublishlawstoregulateit.Onlywhenjointeffortsaremadecanbike-sharingenjoyabrightfuture.還在論證4.不忘結論：Whichofthefollowing3.Ithinkyoucanagreewithme.4.Therefore,Isupportthewidespreaduseofit,Ithinkitwillmakeourlifemorepeacefulandharmonious.5.Thebike-sharinghassomanycreativeeffectsthatofferachancetomakepeoplegoonatriporgoworkinginafasterway,andalsocanmakeuserskeephealth.SoitispopularinthewholeChina.一廂情愿還在描述3.IthinkyoucanagreewithNotice:Don'tforgetyourconclusion.結論：重申自己的觀點，呼應前文。結論部分，4分。Notice:范文欣賞

Recently,bike-sharingservicehasgainedconsiderablepopularity,allowinguserstoconvenientlytravelwithbicyclesprovided.However,issueslikevandalism,theftandsoonhasalsoarisen.Frommyperspective,Iamabsolutelyforthiswiseidea.Tobeginwith,bike-sharingserviceoffersatime-savingwaytothosewhoarehurryingtotheirdestinationsorhavingtroublefinishingkilometersofjourneysentirelyonfoot,provingaconvenienceorevennecessitywithoutmuchexpensesconsequently.Butforthisbrilliantservice,manycitizenswouldhavestruggledtheirwayhomeortowork.范文欣賞Recently,bike-sharingseMoreover,inagesturetokeepthisbike-sharingsysteminorder,individualsmaypayextraattentiontotheregulationandprotectionofthebikes.Therefore,people’sawarenessofsocialresponsibilitycanbesignificantlyraised,enhancingpeople’sself-disciplinelevelandshapingtheirmoralvalues.Takingthefactorsaboveintoconsideration,wecansafelydrawtheconclusionthatbike-sharingisareasonableservice.Moreover,inagesturetokeep出彩詞匯gainconsiderablepopularity;inagesturetodosth.;keep...inorder;oconsideration所用句型和手法butfor…,…wouldhavedone;tothosewhoare;besignificantlyraised;drawtheconclusionthat;allowing;proving;enhancing;shaping;taking銜接手段however;frommyperspective;tobeginwith;moreover;therefore.出彩詞匯gainconsiderablepopulariSuggestions:Practicemakesperfect!Studyhardeverydayandimproveyourwritingstepbystep:1.加強基礎詞匯和基本句子結構學習。2.提高綜合運用復合句的能力。3.注意句子間的過渡和銜接。4.仿寫、背誦、熟讀話題范文。Suggestions:PracticemakesperHomework1.Rewriteyourarticles2.AndfinishtheexercisesinthepapersHomework1.RewriteyourarticleThankYou!ThankYou!附錄（高二）錯誤類型數量搭配錯誤50單復數錯誤35單詞拼寫31動詞運用19詞性14句首大小寫14（高三）錯誤類型數量搭配錯誤52單復數錯誤40單詞拼寫35動詞運用27詞性28句首大小寫5附錄（高二）錯誤類型數量搭配錯誤50單復數錯誤35單詞拼寫3定語從句高二(數量)高三(數量)Which1917That98Who59Whose10Why10As114---21定語從句高二(數量)高三(數量)Which1917That名詞性從句高二（數量）高三（數量）主語從句what18形式主語it33賓語從句2223形式賓語01表語從句33同位語從句Problem1Problem2;convenience1;debate1;view2;fact1question1Requirement1;basis1;Tendency1;doubt1;Saying1;suggestion1名詞性從句高二（數量）高三（數量）主語從句what18形式主狀語從句高二（數量）高三（數量）條件If10;solongas1If15;onlyif1;providing1;onconditionthat1;省略2時間When10;while3;assoonas1;省略5when9;

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20分20分16分16分12分12分9分9分6分6分作文講評作文講評TeachingAimsAttheendoftheclass,thestudentsaresupposedto

1.bemoreawareofmistakesmadeintheirarticles2.knowmoreabouttherightwaysofwriting3.beabletopolishuptheirwritingsTeachingAimsAttheendoftheLead-in1.Whatcanbecalledagoodarticle?【評分標準】內容完整，語言規范，語篇連貫，詞數適當。2.Whatarethedifficultiesyoumeetinwritingarticles?1).加強基礎詞匯和基本句子結構學習。2).提高綜合運用復合句的能力。3).注意句子間的過渡和銜接。4).仿寫、背誦、熟讀話題范文。Lead-in1.WhatcanbecalledaCommentsonthewritingsStrongpoints:Ifso,wewillbuildanenvironmentallyfriendlysociety.(省略句)(邢臻)Lastbutnotleast,whenridingbikes,wewillfeelmorerelaxedafterthewholeday’shardwork.(省略句)(鄧雪怡)Usebike-sharing,andyouwillfindthatitisuseful.（祈使句+and+陳述句）(張子瑩)CommentsonthewritingsStrongAsfarasthepromotingofthebike-sharingisconcerned,Ithink...(活用句型)(吳雨欣)Abovearemyopinions.（倒裝）(吳雨欣)Ican’tbeinmorefavorofit.（can’t...more句型）(胡慧月)....bicycleridingistheleastexpensivewayoftravelingapartfromwalking.(adj最高級用于否定表達)(呂露露、程亞瑋)AsfarasthepromotingoftheWearesupposedtoachieveabalancebetweendevelopmentandnature.（achieveabalancebetween...高級詞匯）(陶敏)However,it’sourdutytoprotecttheenvironmentwhichwerelyon.(it作形式主語，relyon高級詞匯,復雜結構)(陶敏)Itcanalsobuildsocialbondsbetweenpeople.(高級詞匯)(陳楚喬)Thisisoneofthegreatestinvitationstotrafficaccidents.(高級詞匯)(呂夢娟)WearesupposedtoachieveabNotice:Theyhaveachievedmuchinadvancedphrasesandsentencestructures.Weshouldlearnfromthem.Notice:Weakpoints:錯誤統計：高二13（41人）錯誤類型數量搭配錯誤50單復數錯誤35單詞拼寫31動詞運用19詞性14句首大小寫14Weakpoints:錯誤統計：高二13（41人）錯誤類1.Collocation搭配錯誤...becausebikesarealmostdistributedtoeverywhere.Althoughtheserviceofthebike-sharingisnotwell,itcanbringsomeadvantages.good1.Collocation搭配錯誤goodyoucanfinditeasilyandonlypayforalittlemoney.so,weshouldencouragepeopletorideBike-sharingquiteoftenthandriving.butthebike-sharingservicestillexistssomeproblem.bicyclesbutsomeproblemswithbike-sharingservicestillexist.youcanfinditeasilyandonl2.Singularandplural單復數錯誤1）單復數InChina,manyvehicleslikebusandcarspolluteenvironmentbadly.What’smore,thedestructionofbike-sharingisabigproblems.buses2.Singularandplural單復數錯誤1）單復2）Agreement主謂一致itseemsthatBike-sharinggiveawaypeople’sinformation.What’smore,itbringabigconveniencetopeople.ss2）Agreement主謂一致itseemsthatB3.Spelling單詞拼寫錯誤weshouldhelpintroductthebike-sharingtoeveryone.Besides,ifcityiscrowedwithcarsduringrushhours,thecitizencanusethosebikestotheircompaniesassoonaspossible.First,withthedevelopingofsociaty,therearemoreandmorecarsontheroad.

introducecrowdedsociety3.Spelling單詞拼寫錯誤weshouldhelp4.Usageofverbs動詞處理不當,thenewservicenamedbike-sharingisappeared.However,therehasbeensomeproblemsappeared.appearsHowever,someproblemsexist.4.Usageofverbs動詞處理不當,thene5.Partofspeech詞性錯誤First,itisveryconveniencefortravelerstotravelinthecity.Ridingbikesisagoodwaytokeephealth.convenienthealthy5.Partofspeech詞性錯誤First,iti6.Capitalizedletters大小寫錯誤Ontheonehand,Itisveryconvenientforustouseabike-sharing.Inconclusion,Thepromotingofthebike-sharingserviceisofbeneficialtous.itthe6.Capitalizedletters大小寫錯誤itthNotice:MoreattentionmustbepaidtothesemistakesinyourdailyEnglishstudy.Notice:task-basedwriting讀寫類作文

1.用約30個單詞概述上述信息的主要內容；考查閱讀及概括能力，以及語言組織能力。2.用約120個單詞發表你的觀點，內容包括：（1）支持成反對共享單車的推廣；（2）用2-3個理由或論據支撐你的觀點。考查分析問題、解決問題的能力，內容組織能力。task-basedwriting讀寫類作文

1.審題：讀出信息，進行概括。Bike-sharinghastakenoffinChinafarfasterthaninanyothermarket.Themarkethasbecomefloodedwithnewcompaniesinrecentmonths.Thebike-sharingcompaniesoperateinasimilarway.Theyuseappsthatallowusers,afterpayingadeposit,tounlockthewheelswiththeirsmartphones.

Afterthejourney,userscanleavebikesanywhereinpublicandpayalittlemoneyfortheuse.Theserviceisverypopularasitprovidesaneffective

solutionto“thelastkilometer”problem.Thepromotingofthebike-sharingserviceisalsoraisingquestions

aboutprofitability,wide-spreadbikevandalism(破壞)andtheft,andgrowinggovernmentregulation.AHongKongmanwhowasarrestedforthrowingseveralsharedbikesintoriverssaidhehadnoregretdestroyingthembecause”theGPSdevicesinthebikesgiveawayusers'personalinformation,suchastheirlocations.”現象好處問題1.審題：讀出信息，進行概括。Bike-sharingh2.把握第一段:

比較哪個開頭好1.Bike-sharing,claimingtobeuser-friendlyandaffordable,hasrecentlycaughtonthroughoutChina.However,lackofregulationgivesbirthtovarioussocialproblems,suchasbikevandalismandtheft.2.Bike-sharingisverypopularinChinanowadays.Thecompaniesproductitthatinasimilarway.However,someonetheftitforwhichindicatespersonalinformation.現象好處問題現象問題好處?2.把握第一段:

比較哪個開頭好現象好處問題現象問題好處?3.Withthedevelopmentoftechnology,bike-sharingisturningup.Becauseofit’stooshort,therearealotofproblemsexists.Bike-sharingasanewwayoftraffic,turningupourlife.Althoughtheserviceofthebike-sharingisnotwell,itcanbringsomeadvantages.Forexample,it’sconvenientforus...

要點重復，雜亂3.WiththedevelopmentoftecNotice:1.coverthemainpoints.2.(1).現象(2).好處(3).問題3.三個要點，5分，每點2分.Notice:3.充實第二段：argumentstosupportyouridea.要求：用約120個單詞發表你的觀點，內容包括：（1）支持成反對共享單車的推廣；（2）用2-3個理由或論據支撐你的觀點。

3.充實第二段：argumentstosupporty不足分析：

IarguewithBike-sharingservice.First,itisveryconvenientfortravelerstotravelinthecity.Whenyouinanunfamiliarcity,youcanusethebiketogoaround.What’smore,Bike-sharingservicehelpusliveinbetterenvironment.Whenyourideabikeinsteadoftakingataxi,theairpollutionwillreduceandtheairinthecitywillbecomemorefresh.Thelastbutnotleast,theBike-sharingservicehelpcitylifeinahealthierway.Manypeopleinthecitybenefitfromtheservice.topicsentence?supportingsentences不足分析：IarguewithBike-sharinNotice:1.主題句Topicsentence3分，很重要！！！贊成或反對，觀點要明確，不能騎墻！！！2.2-3論據，每個5分,共10分。3.銜接手段,3分。4.中間段內容要充實，說理要有條理性和層次性。

Notice:試與下文比較2.Undoubtedly,Iaminfavorofthepromotingofthebike-sharingservice.Thereasonsaccountingformyopinionlieintwoaspectscomingfromindividualandsocietyrespectively.Ononehand,soconvenientisbike-sharingthatitsavesthetimewhichcouldhavebeenwastedontraffic.Ontheotherhand,intermsofsocialbenefits,bike-sharingcangraduallyreducetheuseofprivatecars,thusprovidingcitizenswithamoresatisfyingenvironment.topicsentence!Supportingsentences試與下文比較2.Undoubtedly,Iamin4.不忘結論：Whichofthefollowingpassagescanbeused?1.Inaddition,usingbike-sharingcanbenefitforairpollution,becausewhenwegoforaplacewhichisfromashortdistance,wecanchoosebike-sharinginsteadofprivatecars.2.Therefore,inordertohelpbike-sharingdevelopbetter,weusersshouldbeartheresponsibilitytoputthebikeinplace.Moreover,governmentoughttopublishlawstoregulateit.Onlywhenjointeffortsaremadecanbike-sharingenjoyabrightfuture.還在論證4.不忘結論：Whichofthefollowing3.Ithinkyoucanagreewithme.4.Therefore,Isupportthewidespreaduseofit,Ithinkitwillmakeourlifemorepeacefulandharmonious.5.Thebike-sharinghassomanycreativeeffectsthatofferachancetomakepeoplegoonatriporgoworkinginafasterway,andalsocanmakeuserskeephealth.SoitispopularinthewholeChina.一廂情愿還在描述3.IthinkyoucanagreewithNotice:Don'tforgetyourconclusion.結論：重申自己的觀點，呼應前文。結論部分，4分。Notice:范文欣賞

Recently,bike-sharingservicehasgainedconsiderablepopularity,allowinguserstoconvenientlytravelwithbicyclesprovided.However,issueslikevandalism,theftandsoonhasalsoarisen.Frommyperspective,Iamabsolutelyforthiswiseidea.Tobeginwith,bike-sharingserviceoffersatime-savingwaytothosewhoarehurryingtotheirdestinationsorhavingtroublefinishingkilometersofjourneysentirelyonfoot,provingaconvenienceorevennecessitywithoutmuchexpensesconsequently.Butforthisbrilliantservice,manycitizenswouldhavestruggledtheirwayhomeortowork.范文欣賞Recently,bike-sharingseMoreover,inagesturetokeepthisbike-sharingsysteminorder,indiv