1、精選優質文檔-傾情為你奉上寫作丨冠軍林遠展議論文展示（另附13年冠軍點評）2015-12-23 2015“外研社杯”全國英語寫作大賽議論文賽題Can being positive backfire？Optimism provides a multitude of benefits across many facets of life. Researchers have linked looking on the bright side to everything from improved pain tolerance to increased longevity. Theres n

2、odenying the incredible power an optimistic outlook can have on our health, relationships, and performance. But like much in life, it is possible to have too much of a good thing. There are some cases when an overly optimistic outlook can do more harm than good.Suppose there is an online discussion

3、forum on the topic “Can being positive backfire?” Write a post to the forum, clearly stating your opinion and supporting your ideas with specific reasons and examples. You should write about 800 words.冬至福袋親愛的U粉兒，你對英語寫作有什么困惑？歡迎在文末評論區留言，小U會連線本屆寫作大賽冠軍林遠展同學為你解答留言從速！林遠展2015“外研社杯”全國英語寫作大賽冠軍選手解題思路拿到題目之后，我足

4、足看了三遍題目中的文本信息。其中，提到了兩點：一是being positive；二是being overly positive。我自己的想法就是折中。然后，開頭明確提出自己的觀點再以一個詳例子和三個短例子對所持觀點進行適當佐證。接著回到文本信息中的overly positive，對其提出反對和批評，并選取一個例子進行佐證，證明為什么要反對overly positive。最后是對整體的總結，明確表達自己對題目 “Can being positive backfire？”的看法。冠軍議論文賞析注：文章為從系統摘出的原生作品，目的是為了展現出選手三個小時內的寫作風貌，可能存在部分拼寫錯誤，僅供學習分

5、享使用。Emotions are miscellaneous, such as optimism and pessimisism; merriment and sorrow; excitement and despondency;. Human beings are inherently emotional and emotions do play a significant role in our actions and attitudes. We may encounter some personal tragedies or sufferings, but the actions and

6、 attitudes we take might differ. For example, being moderately positive means that we can keep a sanguine outlook on our experience; means that we can transmute the negative feelings into a positive attitude towards our frustration; means that we can look the unpleasant matters in a positive light a

7、nd tackle them with great resilience. Personally, I espouse bing a moderately positive individual.Hellen Keller, who was blind and deaf, became a celebrated writers with unflagging belief in herself and unyielding willpower. In front of Hellen Keller, there lied two options: either live live to its

8、fullest or wither away like the autumn leaves. Instead of capitulating to the sheer darkness and silence, she harbored prodigious fortitude to vanquish the personal trageies and sufferings. Under the assistance of her teacher Anne, she learnt Braille and writing. After reading a sea of books, Hellen

9、 Keller soaked up all the quintessence and wisdom of other writers and attempted to write her own. The spirit of never being pessimistic sustained her in the most darkest hours of her life and she rose like a shinging star in the firmament of writing. Her teacher also held a positive belief in Helle

10、n so she resolved to help Hellen face life positively.There are innumerable other examplars of being moderately positive. Thomas Edison, by dint of a postive mindset and unwavering pursuit, invented the most endurable and suitable material to make the incandescent bulb which marked the inauguration

11、of the electrical era. Madame Curie, by virtue of a optimistic attitude and steadfast tenacity, extracted an infinitesimal amount of radium from tons of impure materials after three-year-and-nine-month experiment and advocated to use radioisotope to cure cancer which rendered humanity a powerfu

12、l weapon to fight against the fatal disease. Hua Luogeng, a renowned Chineses methematician, metamorphosed into a math master by holding a positive outlook and unswerving doggedness.It's not hard to find the common denominator of the brilliant and reverent giants: a positive outlook towards the

13、sufferings and failures.Being moderately positive will arm us with an effective weapon to repel the enemies of negative feelings that will hold us back and become a stumbling block on the way ahead. It will bolster up our belief and confidence in the face of the mishaps and torments and we will poss

14、ess a more optimistic perspective to the life tragedies. Being moderately positive is like a beacon light of hope which will illuminate our way ahead and resembles a lighthouse which show us the path when we are disoriented. Then all the darkness will fade away and crumble into dust. Being moderatel

15、y positive is the inner force which propels you froward in the teeth of setback and hurdles. We will ooze confidence and persistence no matter how tough the situation is.Nevertheless, we are supposed to put the positive mindset in perspective, which means we need to understand it in the appropriate

16、and right way. Here the positive mindset is a moderately positive one, not overly optimistic. Anything that is too much will backfire. The last emperor of Shang Dynasty was being too sanguine and optimistic and believed that his kingdom was impregnable and was never to be toppled by others. Thus he

17、sank into the debauched and promiscuous lifestyle, listened to the malign suggestions of his diabolical officers and precluded any good suggestions from being sent to him. The decadence and depravity eventually led to his downfall and his power was nullified and compromised. This renders us a good l

18、esson that we shall never become overly optimistic about our lives, works, conditions and circumstances because undue and inordinate optimism led to the complacent and smug mentality. It is always counterproductive.Individuals should always strive for the better selves rather than rest and wallow in

19、 self-contentment when the achievements are made. That is why being overly optimistic should be deprecated and criticized.So, what we need to do is to differentiate the positive mind from the overly-optimistic one, for there is a blurry line between these two. Our capacity to distinguish between the

20、m must be acuqired by constant failures and attempts. Always being moderately positive is not an easy task and trying to keep it is even much harder. Sometimes we will become disheartened and lose all the hope; sometimes we will enjoy the exhilaration of being successful and then get obsessed with t

21、he current achievements. Through failures, we can have a much clearer interpretation of being moderately postive. And this is a long process that should be covered step by step and brick by brick.Can being positive backfaire? I cannot answer in the affirmative. But add "moderately" to the

22、sentence: Can being moderately positive backfire? My answer is definitely NO.往屆選手點評牛云鳳 天津外國語大學研究生2013“外研社杯”全國英語寫作大賽冠軍2015聯合國學術影響力寫作大賽獲獎者Unipus微信U主播對于議論文來說，審題永遠都是重中之重。而其實審題也是最具趣味性的，品味題目的引導性，琢磨關鍵詞帶來的啟發。這篇議論文的題目恰恰就是這種非常吸引人的類型。讀到疑問句的標題“Can being positive backfire?”讓人耳目一新。通常提到樂觀主義，大家想到的可能都是其種種好處。題目材料第一段也

23、順著讀者的思路寫出了樂觀使人長壽、助人成功等等。但筆鋒一轉，材料第一段最后兩句給出了這篇文章的關鍵：樂極可能生悲。關鍵詞是“Overly optimistic outlook”。分析到這里可能對于許多同學來說，這道題的謎已經解了。樂觀是好的，但樂到極端則會有害。因此推斷只有適度樂觀才是解決辦法，就如白馬非馬。材料第二段則為硬性的要求：字數限制，陳述觀點并提供支持的材料、理由或實例。從內容上說，作者的這篇文章內容詳實，論據有力。第一段雖并沒有開門見山，而是談論了人性情多變，樂觀有其獨特的好處。但第一段結尾給出了明確的論點：Personally, I espouse being a moderat

24、ely positive individual.這里如果觀察仔細的話就能發現作者的高明之處在于對題目的回應。作者作出了回應并沒有逃避沖突，但絕不是盲目的回應是或否，而是有條件的回應?！癿oderately” 這個副詞的出現體現了作者審題的功力。立論之后就要提供論據來支持論點。作者分別選取了海倫凱勒和居里夫人作為主要的正面實例。接下來的過渡段非常巧妙的總結了她們成功的眾多因素中的“公分母”是樂觀的態度。并進一步引出證實了適度的樂觀確實對人大有裨益。而接下來筆鋒一轉到了駁論的階段，過度樂觀有怎樣的害處呢？作者舉了商紂王荒淫無度、貪圖享樂最終家破國亡的例子給人以警示，也充分證明了過度樂觀的害處。那我

25、們究竟該如何做呢？作者在倒數第二段提議我們應在成功和挫折中學會調適、適度樂觀。文章最后一段意味深長，回應論點，整篇文章顯示了作者嚴密的邏輯和辯證的思維。語言運用也是該文章一大亮點。詞匯豐富，運用自如。比如：prodigious fortitude, unswerving doggedness, mishaps and torments和setbacks and hurdles 等短語充分體現了作者高端詞匯運用的嫻熟。而像Braille, radioisotope和the incandescent bulb等不常用的技術型的詞匯體現了作者詞匯量之大。除此之外，作者句式運用靈活多變，長短句交叉結合

26、非常老練。作者還尤其擅長使用修辭，文章中大量使用排比，對偶和比喻等修辭手法，都體現了作者深厚的語言功底。從結構來看，整個謀篇布局一氣呵成。開頭給出論點。主體明晰，立論有據，駁論有力。結論明確，首尾呼應。三大部分之間的過度和銜接也非常自然。組織順序合理，再一次提醒大家提綱的重要性。不得不承認，這是一篇難得的好議論文，各方面都可圈可點，尤其是作者既有男選手擅長的縝密的邏輯，又有優美精確的語言實在難得。當然，看到各閃光點的同時也要注意到細節的不完美。比如，作者有多處拼寫錯誤，冠詞使用不當等。但瑕不掩瑜，短短三個小時的時間，好文章倚馬可待，相信作者完成這樣一篇美文落筆劃上句點時應該是幸福得讓人羨慕吧。

27、寫作大賽冠軍林遠展決賽記敘文展示2015-12-22 2015“外研社杯”全國英語寫作大賽記敘文賽題Read the beginning of the story below and complete the story in 600-800 words.An Unexpected GuestRiya was terrified when she heard the news on television that an alien spaceship had landed in her city. As a precaution, her father closed all the

28、doors and windows.Though everyone was asleep, Riya could not sleep a wink. The thought of aliens in her city kept her mind racing. It was almost midnight when she heard the door bell ring.By now she was really scared. She ran towards the door but her father instructed her to go back to bed. She pret

29、ended to go towards her room, but hid behind the sofa and watched her father open the door.冬至福袋親愛的U粉兒，你對英語寫作有什么困惑？歡迎在文末評論區留言，小U會連線本屆寫作大賽冠軍林遠展同學為你解答留言從速！林遠展2015“外研社杯”全國英語寫作大賽冠軍When her father opened the door, a human-like alien was standing outside the house, looking weary and exhausted in the faint

30、light radiated from the house. Her father stepped back to the house instinctively. "Please don't be afraid. My name is Carson and I come from another planet outside of the solar system," Carson replied with a unusual voice, similar to the alien-like voice heared on the television. &quo

31、t;We are not your enemies and won't do any harm to human beings."Riya's father still did not trust him. "Our planet is being attacked by another planet dwellers and they are much more powerful than we are. Our home is almost devastated by their ruthless assault. Thousands of us are

32、 uprooted and cannot find an asylum nearby. And Earth is the most pleasant place to go, which is not far from our home compared to other inhabitable planets in the boundless universe. I lose contact with my fellows and that's why I am here all alone," Carson said genuinely without any tryin

33、g.Riya's father gained courage to greet Carson and shook hands with him. "I really empathize with your tribulation," her father said, quite careful with his words. "Can I just stay the night in your sofa because I am utterly out of strength after the trip," Carson implored. R

34、iya's father was a person with a heart of gold who usually don't know how to refuse others. "Ok, just one night. Tomorrow you are leaving," her father said. He ushered Carson in the house and gave a cashmere blanket to Carson. "Thanky you very much, Sir. I owe you a lot,"

35、 Carson said full of emotion.Carson lied down on the sofa and began to soothe the tiredness from his muscle. Riya, who huddled behind the sofa, crept from the sofa and wanted to have a close look at Carson beacause the darkness of the night prevented her from seeing him clearly. She found he was not

36、hing different from the homon sapiens, which gave her a great deal of courage to greet Carson."Hello, Carson," she said in an intentionally muffled voice because she did not want to wake her father up. Carson was startled by the sudden meterializetion of such a tiny little girl but he rega

37、ined his composure in an instant. "Hello," Carson replied. "My name is Riya," she whispered. "Hi, Riya, thank you so much for letting me stay here," Carson said with gratitude. "No, you are welcome," she replied. Out of her curiosity, she could not subdue the

38、urge to learn more about this unexpected guest from another planet."I always think there is no other planet where living creatures inhabit," she said. "That's not true. There are thousands of other planets in the enormous univers that are suitable for living and teeming with great

39、 wonders like Earth," Carson replied with an air of intelligence. "Really?" Riya gasped. "Yes, of course," Carson said."In my planet, the trees are sky-reaching; flowers never wither; seasons never change; cars can fly in the sky; our buildings can migrate on their own;

40、 everything is computerized in our lives," Carson said. "Wow, that's wonderful. I can only watch such a scene in the scientific films and I always yearn to visit such a place personally," she siad with excitement and mirth. "But almost everything is ravaged by our foes who ar

41、e relentless in their barbaric invasion. And all the charm and beauty perished in their remorseless attack. It's not an easy job to restore and rebulid our home," Carson replied in melancholy."I'm so sorry to hear that but you can stay here so that I can hear more interesting thing

42、s that I do not know," she said in a serious tone. "I will persuade my father to let you stay and you don't need to fret about it." "You are the angel and I really appreciate that," Carson replied, tears brimming up in his eyes. And Riya found that aliens also had personal feelings, which was quite different from the scenes in the film in which aliens are heartless and devoild of an