We'retryingtosavetheearth!We'retryingtosavetheearth!Unit13Period6(3a-3b+Topicwriting)Unit13Period6(3a-3b+Topicwriting)R九年級LearningobjectivesBytheendofthisclass,youwillbeableto：talkaboutpollutionsaroundusandthinkaboutcausesandsolutions;writeanarticletointroduceenvironmentalproblemsandgivesuggestions.LeadinWhat’swrongwiththeearth？Itissick.Whyistheearthsick？Becausetherearemanykindsofpollutionsontheearth.Pre-writingWhatkindsofpollutionsarearoundus？Pre-writingWhatkindsofpollutionsarearoundus？airpollutionPre-writingWhatkindsofpollutionsarearoundus？noisepollutionPre-writingWhatkindsofpollutionsarearoundus？waterpollutionPre-writingWhatkindsofpollutionsarearoundus？landpollutionPre-writingWhatkindsofpollutionsarearoundus？wastepollutionPre-writingWhatisthevideoabout？Itisabout

.pollutionsOurearthis

.badlypollutedOurearthisingreat

.dangerWehaveonlyoneearth.Pre-writingWhatisthepollution？DescribethecauseairpollutionTheairisbadly

becausetherearesomany

ontheroadthesedays.carspollutedPre-writingWhatisthepollution？DescribethecauseairpollutionFactoriesthatburncoal

theairwithalotof

.polluteblacksmokeThereistoomuch

ontheground.People

thingseveryday.Pre-writingWhatisthepollution？DescribethecausewastepollutionrubbishandwastethrowawayPeoplearelitteringin

likeparks.Thisisturning

placesinto

ones.Pre-writingWhatisthepollution？DescribethecausewastepollutionpublicplacesbeautifuluglyPre-writingWhatisthepollution？DescribethecausewaterpollutionTheriverisreally

，eventhebottomoftheriverwasfullof

.Therearenomore

forfishermentocatch.dirtyrubbishfishPre-writingWhatisthepollution？DescribethecausewaterpollutionFactoriesareputting

intotheriver.wastewaterPre-writingWhatisthepollution？DescribetheproblemnoisepollutionSomepeopleplay

inpublic.loudmusicPre-writingWhatisthepollution？Describetheproblemnoisepollution

honkalotontheroad.DriversPre-writingTalkaboutpollutionsandcausesaroundusProblemsCausesWhatarethepollutions？Whatcausedthepollutions？While-writing

6月5日是世界環境日，我校英語社團正在組織主題為Let’sprotectourriver的征文活動。作為一名初中生，請你寫一篇倡議書,倡議廣大師生參與保護河流的行動。寫作要求：1.談談河流目前的問題以及造成這個問題的原因。2.我們可以做什么來保護河流。3.號召大家參與環保活動，讓我們的城市更干凈。4.不少于80詞。

While-writing審題

（五個審定）審體裁：審人稱：審時態：審要點：審背景：說明文（exposition）第一人稱（firstperson）一般現在時（presenttense）1.談談河流目前的問題以及造成這個問題的原因。2.我們可以做什么來保護河流。3.號召大家參與環保活動，讓我們的城市更干凈。反映環境問題，倡導環境保護。While-writingStructureofyourpassageLet’sprotectourriverBeginningBodyEndingFacts/ProblemsCausesSolutionsCallonIndividualSoceityGovernmentWhile-writingHowtosolvetheseproblems(solutions)IndividualSocietyGovernment1.Wecan’tthrowtherubbishintotheriver.2.It’snecessayforustocleanuptherivereverymonth.It’simportanttohandoutenvironmentalnoticesandpostarticlesontheInternet.1.Ourgovernmentshouldaskthefactoriestostoppouringthewasteintotheriver2.Makinglawsisalsoagoodwaytosaveourriver.Asweknow,theniceenvironmentisgood

forourlifeandhealth.However,therearestillmuchpollutionaroundus.While-writingStructureofyourpassageBeginningAtpresent,moreandmorepeoplepayattentiontotheenvironmentaroundus.Ourriverisbadlypolluted.While-writingStructureofyourpassage1.should/need/hadbetterdo…2.It’snecessaryforustodo…3.Wemustn't/shouldn't...4.Wearen'tsupposedtodo…5.Itiseveryone'sdutyto…6.Thegovernmentshould…1.Herearesomereasons2.Firstly...3.What’smore...BodyWhile-writingStructureofyourpassageEnding1.Ibelieveifeveryonecanmaketheireffort,ourworldwillbemuchbetter.2.Smallthingscanalsomakeabigdifference.3.Let’stakeactionnow!While-writingWorkingroupsandwriteaboutenvironmentalproblems.評價指標得分（滿分30分）

評分標準1.短文是否突出了主題

5=Excellent(優秀)4=Good(良好)3=Acceptable(合格)2=NeedsImprovement（需要改進）1=Rewrite(重寫)2.短文是否有清晰的開頭和結尾

3.短文是否分段

4.短文是否使用了恰當的句型和豐富的詞語

5.短文的單詞拼寫和標點符號是否正確

6.短文的語法是否正確

Post-writingAssesmentPost-writingSamplewriting

I’dliketotalkabouttheriverinourcity.theriverisnotasbeautifulasbefore.Environmentalproblemsarebecomingmoreandmoreserious.Theriverisdirtiernow.Peoplearethrowinglitterintotheriver.Thisisturningabeautifulplaceintoanuglyone.Factoriesareputtingwasteintotheriverandtheyburncoal,whichalsopollutetheairwithalotofblacksmoke.Ithinkitistimetoplayapartinsavingtheearth.Problems/FactsCausesPost-writingSamplewriting

Firstofall,weshouldletmorepeopleknowtheimportanceofenvironmenta