高考英語(yǔ)讀后續(xù)寫語(yǔ)篇練習(xí)校園故事——暖心老師為孩子帶來(lái)圣誕禮物1題目分析讀后續(xù)寫題目再現(xiàn)范文呈現(xiàn)努力方向2Part1題目呈現(xiàn)3續(xù)寫原文HernamewasMrs.Thompson.Andasshestoodinfrontofthe5thgradeclassontheveryfirstdayshelookedatherstudentsandsaidthatshelovedthemallthesame.ButthatwasimpossiblebecausethereinthefrontrowwasalittleboynamedTeddyStoddard.Mrs.ThompsonhadwatchedTeddytheyearbeforeandnoticedthathedidn'tplaywellwiththeotherchildren,thathisclothesweremessyandthatheconstantlyneededabath.ShepaidnoattentiontoTeddy.However,whenshereadhisfile,shewasinsurprise.Teddy'sfirstgradeteacherwrote,"Teddyisabrightchildwithareadylaugh.Hedoeshisworkneatlyandhasgoodmanners...heisajoytobearound."Hissecondgradeteacherwrote,"Teddyisanexcellentstudent,welllikedbyhisclassmates.Butheistroubledbecausehismotherhasadeadlyillnessandlifeathomemustbeastruggle."Histhirdgradeteacherwrote,"Hismother'sdeathhasbeenhardonhim.Hetriedtodohisbestbuthisfatherdoesn'tshowmuchinterest."Teddy'sfourthgradeteacherwrote,"Teddyiswithdrawnanddoesn'tshowmuchinterestinschool.Hedoesn'thavemanyfriendsandsometimessleepsinclass.”Bynow,Mrs.Thompsonrealizedtheproblemandshewasashamedofherself.Shethoughtthatshecouldmakeadifference.4續(xù)寫原文ShefeltevenworsewhenherstudentsbroughtherChristmaspresents,wrappedinbeautifulpaperandtiedwithprettyribbons,exceptforTeddy's.Hispresentwasclumsilywrappedintheheavy,brownpaperthathegotfromagrocerybag.Mrs.Thompsonopeneditinthemiddleoftheotherpresents.Someofthechildrenstaredtolaughwhenshefoundastonebracelet(手鐲)withsomeofthestonesmissing,andabottlethatwasone-quarterfullofperfume.5段首句Para1:Mrs.Thompson,hervoicechokedupwithtears,thankedherstudentsfortheirpresents.Para2:Tenyearslater,TeddyinvitedMrs.Thompsontoattendhisweddingasgroom'smother.6Part2題目分析7點(diǎn)1：位于續(xù)寫第一段段首，流暢銜接前面的記敘文和第一段段首語(yǔ)；點(diǎn)2：位于續(xù)寫第一段段尾，流暢銜接第二段段首句；點(diǎn)3：位于續(xù)寫第二段段首，續(xù)寫銜接第二段段首語(yǔ)；點(diǎn)4：文章結(jié)尾升華，給予讀者正能量，揭示和強(qiáng)調(diào)主題。情節(jié)構(gòu)建的重點(diǎn)8續(xù)寫思路分析本文以人物為線索展開(kāi)，講述了湯普森夫人的班里有一個(gè)叫特迪的男孩，她發(fā)現(xiàn)這個(gè)孩子和其他孩子玩得不好，衣服很臟。當(dāng)湯普森夫人閱讀了特迪的檔案后，發(fā)現(xiàn)是生活的變故使得這個(gè)男孩發(fā)生了改變。湯普森夫人意識(shí)到了這個(gè)問(wèn)題，她為自己感到羞愧。她覺(jué)得自己能有所作為。當(dāng)學(xué)生們給她帶來(lái)圣誕禮物時(shí)，她的感覺(jué)更糟了，特迪帶來(lái)了很不同的禮物。9續(xù)寫思路分析Para1：Mrs.Thompson,hervoicechokedupwithtears,thankedherstudentsfortheirpresents.由第一段首句內(nèi)容“湯普森夫人含淚哽咽地感謝學(xué)生們送的禮物”可知，第一段可描寫湯普森夫人表現(xiàn)出特別喜歡特迪的禮物。從那以后，湯普森夫人就特別關(guān)注特迪。特迪成了班里最優(yōu)秀的孩子之一。10續(xù)寫思路分析Para2:Tenyearslater,TeddyinvitedMrs.Thompsontoattendhisweddingasgroom'smother.由第二段首句內(nèi)容“十年后，特迪以新郎母親的身份邀請(qǐng)湯普森夫人參加他的婚禮”可知，第二段可描寫湯普森夫人用的是那年特迪送給她的手鐲和香水。特迪和老師見(jiàn)面后，表達(dá)自己深藏在內(nèi)心深處的情感，湯普森夫人和自己的媽媽一樣。湯普森夫人同樣感激特迪，讓自己有所作為，今天成為他的媽媽。11續(xù)寫思路分析續(xù)寫線索注意——閱讀檔案——發(fā)現(xiàn)原因——決心有所作為——表現(xiàn)出喜歡禮物——關(guān)注——以媽媽身份出席婚禮——感悟12續(xù)寫素材可用詞匯：行為類注意：payattentionto/notice小聲說(shuō)話：whisper/murmur鼓勵(lì)，激勵(lì)：stimulate/inspire/impel回應(yīng)，回答：reply/react情緒類喜歡：like/befondof驕傲：beproudof/takepridein13續(xù)寫素材14Part3范文呈現(xiàn)15范文呈現(xiàn)16范文呈現(xiàn)Tenyearslater,TeddyinvitedMrs.Thompsontoattendhisweddingasgroom'smother.Sheusedthebraceletandtheperfumewhichwerethepresentofthatyear.Attheweddingceremony,shemetthemanwithgoodmanners.Hesaidtoher,"Thankyou,Mrs.Thompson.Todayyousmelledjustlikemymomusedto."Mrs.Thompson,withtearsinhereyes,whisperedback.Shesaid,“Teddy,youweretheonewhotaughtmethatIcouldmakeadifference.I'msoproudthattodayIcanbeyourmother!”17范文譯文湯普森夫人淚流滿面，感謝學(xué)生們送的禮物。然后她展示了她是多么喜歡泰迪的禮物，戴上手鐲，在手腕上涂上香水。從那時(shí)起，湯普森夫人特別關(guān)注泰迪。當(dāng)她和他一起工作時(shí)，他的思想似乎活躍起來(lái)了。她越是鼓勵(lì)他，他的反應(yīng)就越快，他對(duì)學(xué)習(xí)也表現(xiàn)出了很大的興趣。到今年年底，泰迪已經(jīng)成為班上優(yōu)秀的孩子之一。18范文譯文十年后，泰迪邀請(qǐng)湯普森夫人作為新郎的母親參加他的婚禮。她用了那一年的禮物手鐲和香水。在婚禮上，她很有禮貌地見(jiàn)到了那個(gè)男人。他對(duì)她