展開練習：這個房間很熱。（100字）因果（講故事）、列舉、對比、抒發情感列舉：冰激凌馬上化、巧克力、冰水對比：吐魯番情感：太TM熱了。這個大學教授非常不負責。（展開到150字）Thisprofessorisextremelyirresponsible.有一次上課，上課鈴響了，但是老師還沒來。Once,ProfessorJasondidn’tshowuptoclassontime.我是班長，我就給老師打了個電話，老師說他已經在路上了。IcalledhimsinceI’mtheheadofourclass,andJasonclaimedthathewasalreadyonhisway.但是他應該還在家里，因為我從電話里聽到了他沖廁所的聲音。ButIrealizedthatheprobablywasstillathome,forIheardthathewasflushingthetoilet.過了一個半小時才來。Hedidn’tshowupuntilafteranhourandahalf.這個教授拉里邋遢，衣服皺皺巴巴，頭發蓬亂。講課亂講一氣，也不安書本上的知識講解。Hislectureisacompletemess.Nothingwasconsistentwithourtextbook.我們都聽不懂，當同學提問的時候，他也是嗯嗯啊啊的糊弄過去，Henevertakesourquestionseriously,andwhenfacingwithextremelyhardones,hewouldawkwardlydirectourquestiontoirrelevanttopics.我們都非常討厭他，Asaresult,wehatehimsomuch.后來他手機響了，還是鳳凰傳奇的鈴聲，特別突兀，他二話不說就接起電話，開始侃大山，有說有笑，聊了20分鐘才掛掉。Laterhisphonerang.Surely,hedidn’thesitatetopickitup.Hethenstartedtochatgailywithhisfriendforatleast20minutes,withflagrantlaughs.后來我們基本上都不去他的課了，Soeveryoneskipshisclassnow.但是考試的時候，他給我們每個人都100分，雖然分數很高，但是我們沒有學到任何有用的知識。Admittedly,someofProf.Jason’ssupporterwouldarguethatheisaverydecentguysincehegiveseverystudentatopscoreonourfinalgrade.However,welaterfindoutthathedoesthisonlytoavoidcomplaintsfromangrystudents.Thismovieisverytouching.這個電影很感人。（展開到200字）2.Themovieisverytouching.林芮竹Themovieisverytouching.Iamnotanemotionalperson.Eventhedifficultiesinlifewouldnotmakemecry.ButIcompletelylostguardwhenIcameacrossthemovieUp.Ithadnodramaticlanguages,spectacularscenes,awe-inspiringcatastrophes,orlife-or-deathdilemmas.Whatitdoesistotellyouasimplestory,justlikeanoldfriend.不像其它很多大片要到結尾才帶來波瀾壯闊的震撼，它只有了十分鐘就征服了我的心。Unlikeothermovies,whichoftenreachedtheemotionalclimax/peakonlybytheend,itcaptured/wonmyheartwithinamere10minutes.Asetofordinarypicturesisallitrelieson:fromthesecondwhentwonerdylittlekidsaccidentallymet,totheminutewhentheyfelldeeplyinlove,tothedaywhentheysadlyfoundoutthatshecouldnotbearachild,tothetimewhenthismiddle-agedcoupledancedjoyfullyinthehouse,tothescenewhenhewalkedherbacktotheirchildhoodgarden,andfinallytothemomentwhenshepeacefullylefttheworldinhisarms.Thewholetheaterwentintoadeadsilence.Wecouldnothelpbutwonderwhatitwouldbelikewhensomeonewhohasalwaysbeentherebyoursideleftusforever.Themovieleftnoextraordinarymessages,butitgottothedeepestandsoftestplaceinallofus.段內展開核心意識：區分描述詞/事實詞今天我吃得很多。今天我吃了兩斤包子。Parentsshouldspendmoretimeplayinggameswithchildrenthanhelpingthemwithhomework.第一段：與孩子多做游戲可以拉近父母和孩子之間的關系。比如，從小我的父母就經常和我打羽毛球、乒乓球，這些運動大大拉近了我們之間的距離，讓我們變得非常親密。親密：我和父母：考砸→寬慰我，鼓勵我；談戀愛→支兩招別人和別人父母：考砸→躲著家長，被發現被罵；談戀愛→收手機、監控、逼分手四種段內展開方法：1.因果：具體的從因到果把整個鏈條的細節闡述出來2.列舉：每一個描述性的概念，都可以嘗試從多個層面體現出來3.對比：即便段落主題沒有對比，我們也可以制造對比，加強效果（自我和他人、做某事和沒做某事、理想與現實、做之前與做之后、以前和現在……）4.*情感：沒事干就添加自己的情緒，使文章的感情色彩豐富12.Itisbettertospendmoneyontravellingthantosaveitforthefuture.正方：旅游 反方：省錢旅游→長見識 省錢→未雨綢繆旅游→放松反駁： 反駁：旅游→不放松，不長見識別的方式也可以長見識、放松首先，生活在大城市當中，作為年輕人，以后有著很多需要用錢的地方，我們應該從現在起就未雨綢繆。因果：我朋友Jason活在當下（月光、買東西、世界各地）→生病、做手術→湊不起錢→東拼西湊非常狼狽列舉：房子（每平米10萬）、結婚（幾十萬）、孩子（幼兒園每年5萬）首先，生活在大城市當中，作為年輕人，以后有著很多需要用錢的地方，我們應該從現在起就未雨綢繆。拿我的好朋友Jason舉例。他是一個樂天派，堅持活在當下。每個月的工資基本兩天之內就全部花光，要么是買了奢侈品，要么就是到處旅游，才22歲的年齡，已經游遍了全非洲。然而，天有不測風云。去年他在旅行中意外摔斷了腿，不得不做手術。結果連手術費都掏不起，到處打電話借錢，耽擱了治療，使得他恢復期比正常人長了兩個月，還引發了并發癥。Jason的例子還只是個案，還算是意外的支出。其實現在社會當中，計劃內的大筆支出就已經夠我們擔憂了。生活在北京，要買一個市中心的30平米的房子，就得花超過300萬人民幣；結個婚，要想稍微有點體面，好歹請個二、三十個親朋好友，節約開支也得花20萬；更不用說有了孩子，連送他去幼兒園每年都得至少花5萬。看到這些可怕的數字，我就撓頭。要是我現在不攢錢，以后根本不用活。Tobeginwith,asayoungmanlivinginabigcity,Ineedtostartsavingupfromnowon,becausetherearealotofthingsinthefuturecostingtonsofmoney.TakemygoodfriendJasonforexample.Heisanoptimisticguywhopreferstoseizetheday.Hecanspendallhissalarywithinjusttwodayseitheronluxuriesorontrips.Beforehewaseven22,healreadywentaroundthewholeAfrica.Unfortunately,noteverythinggoesaccordingtoplan.LastyearduringhistriptoSouthAfrica,heaccidentallybrokehislegandhadtogothroughsurgery.However,sincehecouldnotcovertheexpense,hehadtocalleverybodytoborrowmoney.Ittooksolongforhimtocollectthemoneythatthesurgerywasdelayed.Asaresult,therecoveryperiodforhimwas2monthslongerthaneveryoneelse’s.Now,thisexamplemightbeaparticularinstance,anditisoutofhisexpectation.Nonetheless,intoday’ssociety,eventhepotentialspendingwithinourexpectationisalreadyquiteworrying.Forinstance,inBeijing,ifIwishtopurchasea30-squaremeterapartment,itwouldcostmeover3millionyuan;ifIwanttoinvite,say,20friendstomywedding,Iwouldhavetopayover200,000yuan;nottomentionifIhaveachildandwanttosupporthiseducation,itwouldcostatleast50,000yuanperyearjustforhimtogotokindergarten.Itachesmejusttolookatthesehorrifyingnumbers.IfIdon’tsaveupformyfuture,therewouldbenofuture.誠然，有人會說旅行途中，我們能夠增長很多見識，放松身心。遺憾的是，上班這么忙，即便是旅游，也只能是在節假日。然而，節假日出門的人如此之多，以至于旅游不用帶來任何爽快的感覺。對比：去之前的期望–攢了3月錢，人間仙境旅游去九寨溝→很多人→什么都沒看到→不爽很多人：火車上、旅館、排隊、照相對比：假如在家→打DotA→不花錢還開心誠然，有人會說旅行途中，我們能夠增長很多見識，放松身心。遺憾的是，上班這么忙，即便是旅游，也只能是在節假日。然而，節假日出門的人如此之多，以至于旅游不用帶來任何爽快的感覺。就拿我自己的慘痛經歷舉例吧。前年暑假，我打算去九寨溝，一個傳說中猶如人間仙境的地方。我早就在各種雜志上、電視上見到了九寨溝風景如畫的景象，因此我對這次旅行有著極高的期望。結果，一出門就諸事不順。火車上，全世界的人感覺都在旅行，連廁所里都擠的是人（我不是在夸張，中國的火車就長這樣）；到了九寨溝，旅店各種客滿，我這樣一個平時住慣5星級酒店的土豪，也只能和一群窮學生擠在青年旅舍當中；到了景點，以為一切都好說，結果排隊買門票就花了2個小時，那可是在四川的大夏天啊，我整個汗流浹背；進了景區，想要對著風景照個相，結果照片當中根本找不到山水，只有各種形狀的人頭。天哪，這簡直是場夢魘！我不能再更后悔這次出行了！假如我當時選擇待在家里，吹著空調，和好友一起網上打DotA，不比這爽多了去了！Admittedly,somemayarguethattravellingcanwidenourknowledgeandrelaxourbody.Sadly,workinginacompanywithsuchatightschedule,evenifIwishtotravel,itcanonlyhappenduringvacation.Yetsincetherearesomanypeopleouttravellingduringholiday,travellingisnolongerenjoyableatall.Takemyownsadexperienceforinstance.Twoyearsago,IdecidedtogotoJiuzhaigouduringsummerbreak.Itisaplacewidelyknownastheheavenonearth.IhadlongseenitsgorgeouspicturesonmagazinesandTVshows,soIhadmyexpectationforthistripheldextremelyhigh.Unfortunately,thetripturnedouttobeadisaster.AssoonasIgotonthetrain,itfeltlikethewholeworldwasontrip,andeventhebathroomwasfilledwithpassengers(ifyoususpectthatIamexaggerating,youshouldreallycometoChina);whenIgottoJiuzhaigou,allthegoodhotelswerealreadyfull,soIhadtobestuckwithabunchofcollegekidsinayouthhotel;whenIgottothegate,ittookmeover2hoursjusttogettheticket–Iwasunderthesummerheatforawholeof2hoursandhadsweatallovermybody;finallyIwasinJiuzhaigouandwasreadytoenjoytheview,yetwhenItookapicture,theframewasfilledwithnomountain,nostream,butallshapesofhumanheads.Dearlord,whatanightmare!Icouldnotregretmydecisionanymore.HadIchosentostayhome,playingDotAwithmypalsinawellair-conditionedroom,Iwouldhavehadamuchmorepleasantsummer!Competitionisoftenverystiffinbigcorporations.去年進了XDF→競爭特別激烈→特別努力→吃不消競爭激烈：20個實習生，各個都是MIT或Harvard之類的頂級名校畢業生，我個Iowa的小嘍嘍超級沒自尊；我們都在競爭五個全職崗位，意味著15個人都會被淘汰特別努力：所有人每天8點到，10點走，甚至有人住公司，牙刷內褲都帶來了；吃飯都不敢出去吃，都是提前買的711沙拉吃不消：有人精神壓力過大抑郁了對比：之前我在新航道，特小的公司，每天朝九晚五，對著公司電腦打游戲，優哉游哉Competitionisoftenverystiffinbigcorporations.Twoyearsago,IwasinatinyeducationcompanycalledXHD,whichhadbarelymorethan20staff.Lifewaseasy.Ionlyneedtowork6hoursaday,andhalfofthedaywasspentinfrontofacomputerplayingTetra.ThenIdecidedtogetamorecompetitivejobinalargercompany,NewOriental,tostrengthenmycapability.Itwasacompletelydifferentexperience.Togetherwithmewere20otherinterns,mostlyfromtopuniversitieslikeHarvardorMIT.AgraduatefromUniversityofIowalikemyselfwasliterallynobody.The20ofuswerefightingfor5full-timejobs,meaningthatthreequartersweregoingtobefiredintheend.Undersuchintensepressure,everybodyhadtogive120%oftheireffort.Forinstance,Ioftenarrivedinthecompanybefore8inthemorning,justtofindthatallofthemwerealreadythere;apersonwhowenthomeby9intheeveningwouldbeconsideredanearlyleaver.What’smore,someofthemliterallychangedthecompanyintotheirhome,bringingalltheirdailystuffliketoothbrushandunderwear.Asyoucanimagine,withinhalfamonth,somecouldnotstanditanymore;twoevengotdepressedandhadtoseeashrink.Thisisthetoughlifeinabigcorporation.Itisnoteasymoneylikemanywouldthink.Somejobscanpayhighsalariesbutrequireemployeestoleavetheirfamilyandfriends.somejobspayfewsalariesbutallowemployeesstayingwithfamilyandfriend.Whichjobdoyouprefer?Why?家遠錢多：錢多更好的物質生活+更好的照顧家庭家近錢少：家近更好維系朋友感情，更親密Doyouagreeordisagreewiththefollowingstatement?Themostimportantcharacteristicforapoliticianoraleaderisgoodcommunicationskill.承合：更高效的傳達信息和想法/更好的說服別人反駁缺點：覺得你是大胡喲反駁絕對：更重要特質=顏值這個電影相當感人了，我直到現在還在意猶未盡！我對劇中的男主角印象非常深刻，他為了保護自己的男朋友FOOSEN不惜去和歹徒進行搏斗，最后遍體鱗傷，變成了植物人，但是他的男朋友不離不棄，一直陪伴著他。這其中凄美的愛情深深的打動了我，尤其是里面的一個情節。FOOSEN每天早上都會為Jason做早飯，然后再給他帶到家中。雖然有些人認為這種感人的愛情故事在現實生活中不太可能存在。但是FOOSEN這種不離不棄的精神正是這部電影想要傳達的，編劇通過這種感人的情節來影響一代又一代的年輕人。Becausethismovieissotouching,Iamstilldeeplyimmersedinitsincredibleplots.Thetwomaleprotagonist,JasonandFoosen,leavesmewithaprofoundimpression.InordertoprotectFoosen,Jasonevenriskedhislifetoconfrontwithnotoriousgangs.Unfortunately,heendedupbeingseriouslybeatenandbecomesavegetable.(/hasbeeninapersistentvegetativestate.)Nonetheless,Jason’sboyfriendnevergivesup,andhasbeenthereforhimeversince.Thissweetandsadstorytouchesmyheartintensely,especiallyasaresultofoneparticularscene,inwhichFoosenwouldpreparesbreakfastforJasoneverymorning,andbringthefoodtoJason’ssanatorium,regardlessoftheweathercondition.Admittedly,somemightarguethatnobodywouldbehavelikethisinreallife,andthisistruetosomeextent.Yet,everybodyhastorighttodreamandtofantasize.Inspiteoftheknowledgeofitsfalsity,IamstilldeeplytouchedbythissimplestoryandwishthatIcouldonedaymeetsomeonelikeJasonwhoiswillingtostandupforme,evenwiththeriskofbecomingavegetable.妙峰中關村地鐵很慘一直是一個姿勢：最后神志不清OncetherewasabrokedowninHUIXINXIJIENANKOUstation,thetransferstationofline5andline10.Becausetheautomaticdoorontheplatformwasbroken,allthetrainsweremerelypassingby,withoutstopping.SopeoplestartedtoaccumulatewithinthestationandeventuallybecamesopackedthatIevencouldn’tmanagetogetoutofthestation,whenIchangedmymindandwantedtotakeataxi.Whenatrainfinallystopped,becausepeoplearegettingsoimpatientthattheycompletelyforgotaboutpolitenessandorder.Somejuststartedtorushintothetrainassoonasthedoorwasopened.Iliterallysawayounggirl,beingpushedbackintothetrainbytheforceofthecrowd.Shewasstrugglingwithbothherarmsandlegs,andyellingdesperately,“letmeout….!”Unfortunately,allhereffortsprovedfutileandofcourse,shedisappearedinablinkofaneye.架橋路標詞Firstly,lettingothersparticipateintheprocesscreatesstrongerbondsandmoretrustbetweentheleaderandtherestofthegroup.Whenothersinthegrouparebroughtintothedecision-makingprocess,theywillfeelmorevaluedandmoreessentialtothegroup’ssuccess.Thiswillengenderastrongersenseofcamaraderieandbelonging,andsubsequently,willleadthemtoworkhardertoseetheirgroupsucceed.Also,theywillgainsomeinsightintohowtheleadermakeshisorherdecision.Thiswillmaketheleadersdecisionseemlessmysteriousorarbitrary.Thegroupwillcometotrusttheleader’sdecisionsmoreinthefuture,evenwhentheyarenotpartofthedecision-makingprocess.架橋解釋同義改寫：_