應用文＋讀后續寫素材積累第一節

應用文寫作（滿分15分）

假定你是李華，計劃組織一次郊游，請給你的英國朋友Chris寫封郵件邀請他參加。內容包括：

1.參加者；

2.時間、地點；

3.活動：登山、野餐等。

注意：

1.詞數80左右；

2.可以適當增加細節，以使行文連貫。優秀學生現場作文1DearChris,

I’mwritingtoinviteyoutoatourtotheWest

MountainPark.Asyoualreadyknow,theparkisfamousforitsbeautifulscenery.Myfamilyandsomeofmybestfriendswilljoininthetourandwehavemadefullpreparations.Accordingtotheplan,themountainclimbingrangesonthetopofthelist.Then,afterrechargingourselves,wewillhaveapicnicsurroundedbyfreshair,whichwillpromoteustofeelthenature.Meanwhile,acamerawillcapturethosepleasantmoments.Ifyoudecidetocome,pleaseinformmeandmeetusat6:00amnextFridayatthefrontgateofthepark.Lookingforwardtoyourreply.

Yours

LiHua

DearChris,

Iintendtoorganizeatrip,hopingtogathermyclosefriendstohaveagoodtime.Withexcitementanddelight,I’dlovetoinviteyoutojoinus.

Weatherpermitting,wearegoingtomeetatmyschoolgateatseveno'clockonJune28th.Duringthetrip,youareabletotakepartinavarietyofcheerfulactivities,includingmountainclimbingandhavingapicnic.

Ifirmlybelievethatitwillbeasuccessandwewillenjoyourselves.Ifyouwanttojoinus,pleasereplytomeatyourearliestconvenience,enablingmetoprepare.

Bestwishestoyou.

Sincerely,

LiHua

邀請信素材【篇首句】介紹自己，簡要說明活動，并邀請對方。1.I’mWangMingfromYuWenSchool，thepresidentoftheStudentUnion.我是來自育文學校的王明，學生會主席。2.AnEnglishspeakingcontestofourschoolwillbeheldonAugust6.我們學校有一場英語演講比賽將在8月6號舉行。3.TherewillbeapartyinmygardenonSunday.周日，在我的花園里會舉行一場聚會。4.I’dliketoinviteyoutojudgeit.我想邀請你做它的裁判。5.I’mwritingtoinviteyouto...我寫信是邀請你......6.Iwonderifyoucancometo...我想知道你是否能來......7.Wesincerelyhopeyoucanattendit.我們真誠希望你能夠參加。8.It’smypleasure/agreathonourformetoinviteyouto...我很榮幸的邀請你......9.It’sapitythatyouhavetogobacktoAmericasoon.SoafarewellpartyforyouwillbeheldintheSunClubthisSaturdayevening.Couldyoucomeat6:00pm?很遺憾你不久就要回美國了。所以，這周六，在陽光俱樂部我們會為你舉行一個歡送會。下午六點你能來嗎？【篇中句】介紹活動具體內容，并說明受邀人參加理由。1.Itwillbeginat2:00pmandlasttwohours,duringwhichtime15well-preparedcontestantswilldelivertheirspeeches.它將于下午兩點鐘開始，四點鐘結束，在此期間將會有十五位準備充分的參賽者發表演講。2.Wewillstartat8:00amandarrivethereat9:00.我們將會在上午八點出發，九點到達那里。3.Duringtheafternoon,we’ll...together.下午，我們會一起......4.Remembertotakewaterandlunchwithyou.記得帶上水和午餐。5.Bytheway,youmaytakeBusNo.322infrontofyourapartmentanditwilltakeyoudirectlytotheclub.順便說一下，你可以乘坐你家公寓前的322路公交車，它會直接把你帶到俱樂部。6.IknowyouareanativespeakerofEnglishandanEnglishteacher,andI,onbehalfofourschool,sincerelyinviteyoutobepartofthecontest.我知道你的母語是英語，還是一個英語老師。我，代表我們學校，真誠的邀請你來比賽現場。7.SinceyouaresoeagertoimproveyourEnglish,itwillprovetobeagreatchance.既然你如此渴望提高英語，這會是一個很好的機會。8.I’msurethatyouwillenjoyyourselfthere.我保證你在那里會過得很愉快。【篇尾句】期待對方接受邀請，并期待對方盡快回復。1.Willyoubeavailableduringthattime?Pleasecontactmeat1234567atyourearliestconvenience.那期間你有空嗎？請方便時盡快給我打電話1234567。2.Wouldyoupleaseletmeknowassoonaspossibleifyoucanacceptmyinvitation?請盡快告訴我你能否接受我的邀請好嗎？3.Wewillfeelmuchhonoredifyoucouldcome.如果你能來，我們會非常榮幸。4.Wearelookingforwardtoyourcoming.我們期待著你的到來。5.Iamlongingtoseeyousoon.我期待著盡早見到你。讀后續寫題目第二節

讀后續寫（滿分25分）

閱讀下面短文，根據所給情節進行續寫，使之構成一個完整的故事。

Onabright,warmJulyafternoon,

Mac

Hollan,aprimaryschoolteacher,wascyclingfromhishometoAlaskawithhis

friends.Oneofhisfriendshadstoppedtomakea

bicycle

repair,buttheyhadencouragedMactocarryon,andtheywouldcatchupwithhimsoon.AsMac

pedaled

(騎行)alongalone,hethoughtfondlyofhiswifeandtwoyoungdaughtersat

home.Hehopedtoshowthemthisbeautifulplacesomeday.

ThenMacheardquickandloudbreathingbehindhim.“Man,that'sabigdog!"hethought.Butwhenhelookedtotheside,hesawinstantlythatitwasn’tadogatall,buta

wolf

:quicklycatchingupwithhim.

Mac’sheart

jumped.Hefoundouthiscanofhearspray.Withonehandonthebars,hefiredthesprayatthewolf.Abrightredcloudenvelopedtheanimal,andtoMac'srelief,itfellback,shakingitshead.Butaminutelater,itwasbyhissideagain.ThenitattackedthebackofMac'sbike,tearingopenhistenthag.Hefiredatthewolfasecondtime,andagain,itfellbackonlytoquicklyrestartthechase（追趕).

Macwaspedalinghardnow.Hewavedandyelledatpassing

carsbutwascarefulnottoshowdown.Hewasasteepuphill

climb

beforehim.Heknewthatoncehehitthehill,he’dbeeasycaughtupandthewolf’steethwouldbetearingintohisflesh.

Atthismoment,

Paul

andBeekyweredrivingtheircarontheirwaytoAlaska.Theydidn’tthinkmuchofitwhentheysawtwocyclistsrepairingtheirbikeonthesideoftheroad.Abitlater,theyspottedwhatthey,too,assumedwasadogrunningalongsideamanonabike.Astheygotcloser,theyrealizedthatthedogwasawolf.Macheardalargevehiclebehindhim.Hepulledinfrontofitasthewolfwascatchingupfast,justadozenyardsawaynow.

注意：

1.所續寫短文的詞數應為150左右；

2.應使用5個以上短文中標有下劃線的關鍵詞語；

3.續寫部分分為兩段，每段開頭語已為你寫好；

4.續寫完成后，請用下劃線標出你所使用的關鍵詞語。

Para1:Thecarabruptlystoppedinfrontofhim.Para2:Afewminuteslater,theothertwocyclistsarrived.解題思路1.核心內容解讀：Mac與朋友一起去游玩。一個朋友的自行車壞了，就讓他先走，說之后他們會趕上他的。他在前行的時候，卻意外被狼追趕了。于是他拼命逃，卻得不到援助。這時，一輛車停在了他前面......對今年續寫題型的粗淺看法：今年的續寫寫作風格沿襲了去年十月的高考題型，都是記敘文，都是遇險。提供的前文難度不大，大多考生能看懂前文。但是在續寫的時候，有考生反應比較難寫。續寫考察考生的想象能力、創造能力與語言運用能力等，對考生的綜合素養是一種很好的檢驗方式。2.寫作思路：審要求：閱讀下面短文，根據所給情節進行續寫，使之構成一個完整的故事。明確作文是讀后續寫。審體裁：記敘文審時態：一般過去時審前文大意以及要點who:

Mac

hisfriends

PaulandBeekywhen:

onabright,warmJulyafternoonwhere:fromhishometoAlaskawhat:tookatripandadventured

why:enjoyedthelife

審續寫所給首句：仔細研讀細細題目給出的第一句話，有助于我們編寫后續故事時與前文敘述的高度融合。續寫段首1：Thecarabruptlystoppedinfrontofhim.

抓住段首句設問：Whosecarwasit?Whydiditstop?HowdidMacfeel?

WhatwouldMacdo?

續寫段首2：Afewminuteslater,theothertwocyclistsarrived.抓住段首句設問：Whatdidtheydobeforetheyarrived?Aftertheyarrived,whatwouldtheydo?

3.寫作關鍵點這次續寫可以著重從心理、場景兩方面入手。根據所給關鍵詞建立情節與內容支架，根據“協同效應”原理，注意語言協同與內容協同。心理變化：happy，terrified.....場景：satisfying,urgent,nervous,scared....4.寫作注意點融洽性、邏輯性、想象的合理性、時態、書寫等讀后續寫優秀學生現場作文1Para1:

Thecarabruptlystoppedinfrontofhim.

“Comeon，getinthecar.”Paul

shoutedandopenedthedoor.Mac

jumped

offthebikeandslidedintothecarwithouthesitationasthewolfwasabouttotear

Mac

intopieces.Whatanarrowescape!ThoughMacwassafe,hestillfeltthedreadstoppingthepassageofairtohislung,withhislegstrembling.Afterafewminutes,hesuddenlyshouted,"ohmygod,my

friends

arestillrepairingthebicycle!"Withoutasecondthought,Pauldrovethecarquicklybacktothetwocyclists,onlytofindtheyweregone.Beingenormouslyworried,theydecidedtowaitforthemat

Mac's

home.

Para2:

Afewminuteslater,theothertwocyclistsarrived.

“Thankgod,it'snicetoseeyouagain.Wheredidyougo?"Macheldhistwofriendstightlyinarmsandwasinfloodsoftears."Goodtoseeyou,myfriend.IspottedabigdogrunningontheroadwhenIwasrepairingmybike.Andwehidbehindtherockthenfiguredoutitwasa

wolf,sowekepthidingourselvesuntilitwentaway."Tohisrelief,Macsaidinarelaxingtone,"God,withoutthesetwogentlemen'shelp,Iwouldbethedinnerofthewolf,sodon'tletmepedalaloneagain!"

習作點評全文敘述有條理，發揮自然，想象力豐富，銜接合理。如：在段首句

Thecarabruptlystoppedinfrontofhim.車突然停在他面前，該生緊接其后用一句“Comeon，getinthecar.”Paulshoutedandopenedthedoor.，講述車停下的目的是為了救他。出現救人英雄Paul，之后該生對Mac一系列的動作描寫一氣呵成：如jumpedoffthebike,slidedintothecarwithouthesitation，充分體現了Paul

及時的幫助以及Mac逃命的狀態。

該生的細節描寫很形象，如

hestillfeltthedreadstoppingthepassageofairtohislung,withhislegstrembling.說明他的恐懼程度。Macheldhistwofriendstightlyinarmsandwasinfloodsoftears，表述他見到朋友后的激動。

inarelaxingtone表示獲救后與朋友團聚的放松狀態。情節曲折合理：被追，逃生，獲救，重聚情感態度方面也表現得不錯。“ohmygod,myfriendsarestillrepairingthebicycle!”，自己獲救，還不忘朋友。表達對Paul他們的感謝“withoutthesetwogentlemen'shelp,Iwouldbethedinnerofthewolf.”讀后續寫優秀學生現場作文2Para1:

Thecarabruptlystoppedinfrontofhim.

Paul

rolleddownthewindowandyelled,“Man,getinthecar!”Withoutanyhesitation,Mac

jumpedoff

the

bicycle

anddashedintothebackseatofthecar.Atthesametime,

thewolf

caughtup.Luckily,thecar’sdoorwasfirmenoughtostopthewolf.However,theycouldn’tjuststaythere.Forthewolfwasundertheprotectionofthelaw,theycouldn’tkillit.SoBeekythrewsomemeatoutofthewindowandPaulpressedthebuttonofthehorntomakeanalert.Finally,thewolfleftanddisappeared.

Para2:

Afewminuteslater,theothertwocyclistsarrived.

TheywereshockedtoseethatMac’stentbagwasinpoorcondition.Andtheywereevenmoreshockedtohearthathemetawolf.Afterashortrest,Macwasmuchbetter.SotheythankedPaulandBeekyanddecidedtocontinuetheirtriptoAlaska.Timeflew;thesunwashidingitslastgoldlikeamiser.Thoughtired,

Mac

thoughtofhiswifeandlovelychildrenagain.Hehadsuchahorriblebutexcitingexperiencetoshare!

本習作充分利用下劃線構建了與上文合情合理的情節結構，銜接自然。首句出現“car小車”，該生利用“小車”為切入點，Paul

rolleddownthewindow，用rolleddownthewindow，銜接極為自然。然后用“yelled”這個詞體現當時的緊急狀態，“Man,getinthecar!”簡潔有力的話語。很到位。之后的行為jumped（跳），dashed（沖）等動作用詞均很貼切。

值得一題的是，該生想到了保護動物這一點。根據法律，不能殺死動物。

“Forthewolfwasundertheprotectionofthelaw,theycouldn’tkillit.”

而緊接其后，設計情節Beeky用扔肉的方式引導狼走開，很好地避免了人與動物的沖突，實現人與動物和諧共存的目的。"....

threwsomemeatoutofthewindowandPaulpressedthebuttonofthehorntomakeanalert.Finally,thewolfleftanddisappeared."當旅行繼續，該生用描寫景象的方式表示人物心情，如：Timeflew;thesunwashidingitslastgoldlikeamiser.結尾與開頭呼應。結尾他又想到了家人“Thoughtired,

Mac

thoughtofhiswifeandlovelychil