讀后續寫Jennywastheonlychildinherhome.Shehadaquarrelwithhermotherthatafternoonandsheranoutofthehouseangrily.Shecouldn’thelpweepingwhenshethoughtofscoldingfromhermother.Havingwanderedinthestreetforhours,shefeltalittlehungryandwishedforsomethingtoeat.Shestoodbesideastandforawhile,watchingthemiddle-agedsellerbusydoinghisbusiness.However,withnomoneyinhand,shesighedandhadtoleave.Thesellerbehindthestandnoticedtheyounggirlandasked,“Hey,girl,youwanttohavethenoodles?”Oh,yes...butIdon’thavemoneyonme,”shereplied.“That’snothing.I'lltreatyoutoday,”saidtheman.“comein.”Thesellerbroughtherabowlofnoodles,whosesmellwassoattractive.Asshewaseating,Jennycriedsilently.“Whatisit?”askedthemankindly.“Nothing,actuallyIwasjusttouchedbyyourkindness!”saidJenny.“Evenastrangeronthestreetwillgivemeabowlofnoodles,whilemymotherdrovemeoutofthehouse.Sheshowednocareforme.Sheissomercilesscomparedtoastranger!”Hearingthewords,thesellersmiled,“Girl,doyoureallythinkso?Ionlygaveyouabowlofnoodlesandyouthankedmealot.Butitisyourmotherwhohasraisedyousinceyouwereababy.Canyounumberthetimesshecookedforyou?Haveyouexpressedyourgratitudetoher?”Jennysatthere,speechlessandnumbwithshock;sherememberedMother’sfamiliarfaceandweatheredhands.“WhydidInotthinkofthat?Abowlofnoodlesfromastrangermademefeelgrateful,butIhaveneverthankedmymumforwhatshehasdoneforme.”Onthewayhome,Jennymadeuphermindtomakeanapologytohermotherforherrudenessassoonasshearrivedhome.Paragraph1Nearingthedoorway,Jennytookadeepbreath.________________Paragraph2Agentletouchonherhaircalledhermindback.__________________Jennywastheonlychildinherhome.Shehadaquarrelwithhermotherthatafternoonandsheranoutofthehouseangrily.Shecouldn’thelpweepingwhenshethoughtofscoldingfromhermother.Havingwanderedinthestreetforhours,shefeltalittlehungryandwishedforsomethingtoeat.Shestoodbesideastandforawhile,watchingthemiddle-agedsellerbusydoinghisbusiness.However,withnomoneyinhand,shesighedandhadtoleave.Thesellerbehindthestandnoticedtheyounggirlandasked,“Hey,girl,youwanttohavethenoodles?”Oh,yes...butIdon’thavemoneyonme,”shereplied.“That’snothing.I'lltreatyoutoday,”saidtheman.“comein.”Thesellerbroughtherabowlofnoodles,whosesmellwassoattractive.Asshewaseating,Jennycriedsilently.“Whatisit?”askedthemankindly.“Nothing,actuallyIwasjusttouchedbyyourkindness!”saidJenny.“Evenastrangeronthestreetwillgivemeabowlofnoodles,whilemymotherdrovemeoutofthehouse.Sheshowednocareforme.Sheissomercilesscomparedtoastranger!”Hearingthewords,thesellersmiled,“Girl,doyoureallythinkso?Ionlygaveyouabowlofnoodlesandyouthankedmealot.Butitisyourmotherwhohasraisedyousinceyouwereababy.Canyounumberthetimesshecookedforyou?Haveyouexpressedyourgratitudetoher?”Jennysatthere,speechlessandnumbwithshock;sherememberedMother’sfamiliarfaceandweatheredhands.“WhydidInotthinkofthat?Abowlofnoodlesfromastrangermademefeelgrateful,butIhaveneverthankedmymumforwhatshehasdoneforme.”Onthewayhome,Jennymadeuphermindtomakeanapologytohermotherforherrudenessassoonasshearrivedhome.Paragraph1Nearingthedoorway,Jennytookadeepbreath.________________Paragraph2Agentletouchonherhaircalledhermindback.__________________一、讀懂大意，理清脈絡主要是根據記敘文的六要素弄清文章大意，特別要弄清故事的人物，時態（通常是一般過去時），事件（故事的起因和經過），語言特色（以便在續寫時語言特色前后一致，保持不變），等等。（總結：人物，時態和事件，語言特色不要變）characters人物:Jenny,hermother,thesellertense時態:simplepasttenseevents事件:events事件：1.Jennyquarreledwithhermother,lefthomeandafewhourslater,feltalittlehungry.2.ThesellergaveabowelofnoodlesandJennythankedtheselleralot.3.Theselleraskedherhowmanytimeshermothercookedforherandifshethankedhermother.4.Sherealizedhermistakesanddecidedtogohometomakeanapologytohermother.1.珍妮跟母親吵架，離家出走，街上游蕩幾個鐘后，感覺饑餓。2.好心人給她一碗面吃，她感動流淚。3.這位陌生人告訴她，母親將她養大，給她做了無數次飯菜，應當感謝她的母親。4.珍妮意識到自己錯了，決定回家向媽媽道歉。語言特色1．分詞短語作狀語(1)Havingwanderedinthestreetforhours,shefeltalittlehungryandwishedforsomethingtoeat.(2)Shestoodbesideastandforawhile,watchingthemiddle-agedsellerbusydoinghisbusiness.(3)Hearingthewords,thesellersmiled…2．形容詞短語作狀語（有的學者認為是補語）Jennysatthere,speechlessandnumbwithshock驚呆了.3.with的復合結構However,withnomoneyinhand,shesighedandhadtoleave.4．定語從句Thesellerbroughtherabowlofnoodles,whosesmellwassoattractive.二、細讀首句，構思框架兩段首句定一框即根據所給兩段的首句確定第一段的框架。二框二首正能量即第二段的框架，由第二段首句與故事正能量結尾，來確定框架。Paragraph1Nearingthedoorway,Jennytookadeepbreath.（走到門口，珍妮深吸了一口氣）Paragraph2Agentletouchonherhaircalledhermindback.（輕輕一碰她的頭發，她的思緒又回來了）從第一段首句可知，珍妮應是鼓起勇氣敲門回家，但從第二段首句來看，“輕輕碰她的頭發”的應是母親，因為人物就三個，續寫中一般不要隨意冒出一個新的人物，除非情節發展的確需要；“思緒回來”說明第一段中，珍妮回家沒見母親（根據常識，母親可能去找女兒了），在回憶跟母親吵架的事，或在回憶母親多年的關愛，等等。構思：Paragraph1Nearingthedoorway,Jennytookadeepbreath.（走到門口，珍妮深吸了一口氣）根據構思的大致框架，推斷故事中人物所見、所思、所說、所做等每段增加五至七個具體細節或叫"57細節法”。鼓足勇氣，推門進屋母親外出，該去何處累而難過，沙發上坐爭吵場面，浮現腦海自己粗魯，愧對其母母親責罵，皆因關愛自感羞愧，淚流臉頰三、增加細節，開始寫作Paragraph2Agentletouchonherhaircalledhermindback.（輕輕一碰她的頭發，她的思緒又回來了）頭一望，看見母親到處找你，你在這里母親雖累，松了口氣撲入懷里，道歉致謝母親聽后，喜在心頭根據一致性原則，除內容上要語義銜接，上下連貫外，語言風格也要一致，應使用分詞語短和形容詞作狀語，同時注意使用從句。三、增加細節，開始寫作審讀初稿，注意語義是否銜接，前后是否連貫，事件是否符合邏輯，語言特色是否與前文一致。在修改潤色之后，整齊工整地謄寫在答卷上。四、修改潤色，整潔譽寫

Paragraph1:Nearingthedoorway,Jennytookadeepbreath.Whenshepushedthedooropenandenteredthehouse,shefoundhermotherwasnotin.Tiredandsad,shesankdownontothesofa.“Wherecouldmymotherbe?”shewondered.“Wasshestillangrywithme?”Again,thesceneofthequarrelappearedinhermind.Sherememberedherrudenesstohermother.Realizingthatallthescoldingfromhermotherwasduetothefactthathermotherreallycaredalotabouther,shefeltratherashamed,andtearsbegantorolldownhercheeks.

Paragraph2:Agentletouchonherhaircalledhermind