讀后續(xù)寫微技能寫作指導(dǎo)

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情感描寫

教學(xué)目標(biāo):Bytheendoftheclass,studentswillbeableto:1.Mastersomewordsaboutemotions.2.Mastersomeofthewritingskills.3.Expressdifferentfeelingsinwritingproperly.emotion

happy,glad,delighted,excited,joyful,pleasedangry,annoyed,mad,crosssad,upset,depressed,sorrowfulsurprised,amazed,astonished,shockedfearful,frightened,scared

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Step1Circlethewordsaboutemotions(考題回顧)

Linda,

ahighschoolgirl,

wasfeelingdepressedaftershehadfailedhermid-termexams.....Herfriendsandclassmateswereworriedabouther,

butshedidn'tfeelliketalkingaboutitwiththem.....

Oneday,

Mrs.Greenenteredtheclassroomandaskedherstudentstoprepareforasurprisetest.

Theywaitedanxiouslyattheirdesksforthetesttobegin.....

“Iwantyoutowritewhatyouseethere.”

Thestudents,

confused,

gotstartedonthetask.......

“Er...Yes,

madam!”

Lindawaspuzzledbecauseshethoughtherideawasnobetterthananyoneelse's....

Feelingnervous,LindawentintoMrs.Green’soffice.Step2

Writingskills1.be/feel/become+adj.(系表結(jié)構(gòu))2.Feeling+adj，主+謂+賓

(非謂語短語，作原因/伴隨狀語)3.adj,

主+謂+賓（形容詞，作原因/伴隨狀語)4.(形容詞+ly→)副詞(修飾動詞/句子/形容詞/副詞)5.with/in+n.(介詞短語，作原因/伴隨狀語)Skill1.be/feel/become+adj.(系表結(jié)構(gòu))2.聽到那個壞消息，她很傷心。He_______________andsweet.wasveryhappy1.他又高興又甜蜜。

Hearingthebadnews,she___________.feltverysad

3.天黑了，她非常擔(dān)心她兒子的安全,

情不自禁哭了。she_______________aboutherson'ssafetywhenitwasdark,andcouldn'thelpcrying.feltveryworriedSkill2.Feeling+adj，主+謂+賓(非謂語短語,作原因/伴隨狀語)1.他感到很激動，立刻拿出手機(jī)，迫不及待地告訴他的朋友這次經(jīng)歷。Shewentonherway,_____________,andsoonmetanoldmanontheroad.feelingupset2.她不開心地繼續(xù)趕路，不久就在路上遇到一位老人。

_________________,hetookouthisphoneatonce,eagertotellhisfriendstheexperience.FeelingexcitedWangPengsatinhisemptyrestaurant,_____________________.feelingverydepressed3.王鵬坐在空蕩蕩的飯店里面，感到非常沮喪。

Skill3.adj,主+謂+賓（形容詞，作原因/伴隨狀語）3.難過但不恐懼，他決定要改變這一切。Wefinallyarrivedatourdestination，______________．tiredandhungry2.我們終于到達(dá)了目的地，又累又餓.

Heartbrokenbutfearless_________________,ElliandItriedallthebear

defenseactionsweknew.1.嚇壞了，埃利和我嘗試了所有我們知道的防御熊的行動。Frighted/Terrified________________________,

hedecidedtoturneverythingaround.Skill4.(形容詞+ly→)副詞（修飾動詞/形容詞/副詞/句子）

1.他高興地笑了，露出了一排潔白整齊的牙齒。__________________,IhadtaughtAnthonytosewwhenhewas13,whenhestillrespectedme.Luckily/Fortunately2.幸運(yùn)地,

在安東尼13歲時我已經(jīng)教過他縫紉,那時他還在崇拜我.

Hesmiled________,revealingarowofwhiteandeventeeth.happilySkill5.with/in+n.（介詞短語）2.“但是我知道他剛才就在那兒。”露茜說，眼里含著淚水。Shelookedatme________________.1.她驚奇地看著我。"ButIknowhewas,"saidLucy,__________

inhereyes.withtearsinamazement

英語課開始了,老師要把改好的試卷發(fā)下來。請使用前面所學(xué)的方法描述Tom在拿到試卷前內(nèi)心的情感(60詞左右)。

When

the

bell

rang,

the

English

teacher

was

about

to

give

out

the

test

papers

she

hadcorrected._____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Step3

Micro-writing

When

the

bell

rang,

the

English

teacher

was

aboutto

give

out

the

test

papers

she

had

corrected.

Tom

held

his

breath

and

kept

whispering,

“God

bless

me!”

Nervous

and

worried,

Tom

couldn’t

help

squeezing

his

sleeve(袖子)and

he

could

feel

his

heart

beating

faster

and

faster.

He

tried

to

stop

mind-wandering

but

in

vain.

He

felt

he

might

have

failed

the

test

and

wondered,

“How

will

the

teacher

blame

me?

Will

mum

nag(數(shù)落)

me?

Afterstruggling

hard

inside,

Tom

got

his

paper.神態(tài)語言動作心理Tip：情感描寫經(jīng)常結(jié)合心理、動作、語言、神態(tài)等多種寫作手段有機(jī)結(jié)合起來，以豐富故事情節(jié)。情感參考范文讀后續(xù)寫評分原則：1.本題總分為25分,按5個檔次給分。2.評分時,先根據(jù)所續(xù)寫短文的內(nèi)容和語言初步確定其所屬檔次,

然后以該檔次的要求來衡量、確定或調(diào)整檔次,最后給分。3.評分時,應(yīng)主要從以下四個方面考慮:(1)與所給短文及段落開頭語的銜接程度;(2)應(yīng)用語法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯的豐富性和準(zhǔn)確性;(3)上下文的連貫性。(4)拼寫與標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號是語言準(zhǔn)確性的一個重要方面,評分時,應(yīng)視其對

交際的影響程度予以考慮。4.如書寫較差以致影響交際,可將分?jǐn)?shù)降低一個檔次。根據(jù)評分的量化表，評一下自己作文的得分。itemscore1.

寫作內(nèi)容52.語法、詞匯53.連貫、銜接54.書寫、詞數(shù)55.拼寫、標(biāo)點(diǎn)5總分？高分作文:高顏值+好內(nèi)涵Step4SummaryWritingskills：1.be/feel/become+adj.(系表結(jié)構(gòu))2.Feeling+adj，主+謂+賓

(非謂語短語作原因/伴隨狀語)3.adj,主+謂+賓（形容詞，作原因/伴隨狀語)4.副詞(修飾動詞/句子/形容詞/副詞)5.with/in+n.(介詞短語，作原因/伴隨狀語)Step5Homework1.熟讀情感描寫積累素材2.完成短文寫作：Jenny無意中泄露了她的好朋友Lucy的秘密，為此Lucy大罵了她一頓然后憤怒地離開了。請描述Lucy離開后Jenny的情感變化。（詞數(shù)60左右）Looking

at

Lucy

storming

out

of

the

classroom,

Jenny

st