高考英語讀后續寫語篇練習學生在課堂上搗亂被兩位老師留堂1題目分析讀后續寫題目再現范文呈現努力方向2Part1題目呈現3續寫原文Ralphiewasgettingboredinhisgeographyclass.Mr.HudsondisplayedamapofEuropeuponthewhiteboard,andaskedsomeonetoturnoffthelightssotheycouldseeitbetter."I'lldoit,"saidRalphie,andheputapaperspitballintoastraw(吸管)quicklyandblewitatthelightswitch.Itmissed,andlandedinMira'shairinstead.Mirascreamedindisgust.Theotherstudentsburstintolaughter.Mr.Hudsonwasannoyed."Detention(留堂),Ralph."Hewroteupapinkdetentionpaperandslapped(拍)itontheboy'sdesk.Thenhecontinuedwithhislesson."Iwasonlytryingtoturnoffthelights!"Ralphieprotested.Theteacherdidnotwanttohearit."Seeyouafterschool.Don'tbelate."4續寫原文Mathclasswasnext.Ralphiewasprettygoodatmath,sohestartedtocheerup.Hehaddonehishomework,sowhenMrs.Addisonaskedforastudenttosolveaproblemattheblackboard,Ralphiedidn'thesitate.Hejumpedoutofhisseatandannouncedinaloudvoice,"IvolunteerasTribute!"Hisfriendsburstoutlaughing.Mrs.Addisonlookedathimstrictlyoverthetopsofherglasses.Uh-oh,thoughtRalphie."Wedonotyellinmathclass,Ralph.Notanothersoundoutofyou,youngman."Sheturnedbacktotheboard."It'sfromTheHungerGames…"hetriedtoexplain.5續寫原文"That'squiteenough!Detention,Ralph."Themathteacherreachedforherpileofdetentionpaperandwrotehisnamedown."Afterschool.Don'tbelate.""Ohman,"murmuredRalphie."HowdoIgototwodetentionsatthesametime?"Whenthebellrangattheendoftheday,RalphiewenttoseeMr.Hudsonfirst.TheteachertoldRalphietositdown.Theboydidso,andfoldedhishandsinhislapforaminuteortwo.Thenheraisedoneandsaid,"Sir?CanIbeexcusedtogotothewashroom?"Mr.Hudsonnodded.6段首句Para1：Onceinthehallway,RalphieracedovertoMrs.Addison'sroom.Para2：Afterwashinghishands,Ralphietriedtoopenthedoorofthewashroom,butfoundthelockwasstuck.7Part2題目分析8續寫原文分析9本文以人物為線索展開，講述了主人公Ralphie在課堂上搗亂被兩位老師留堂的的故事，但是他如何同時去兩個老師那里呢。點1：位于續寫第一段段首，流暢銜接前面的記敘文和第一段段首語；點2：位于續寫第一段段尾，流暢銜接第二段段首句；點3：位于續寫第二段段首，續寫銜接第二段段首語；點4：文章結尾升華，給予讀者正能量，揭示和強調主題。情節構建的重點10續寫思路分析Para1:Onceinthehallway,RalphieracedovertoMrs.Addison'sroom.由第一段首句內容“一到走廊，拉爾菲就跑到艾迪生太太的房間里。”可知，第一段可描寫拉爾菲與艾迪生太太的會面過程以及想要回到哈德森先生房間的心理。11續寫思路分析Para2：Afterwashinghishands,Ralphietriedtoopenthedoorofthewashroom,butfoundthelockwasstuck.由第二段首句內容“洗手后，拉爾菲試圖打開洗手間的門，但發現鎖卡住了”可知，第二段可描寫拉爾菲如何從洗手間出來的過程以及拉爾菲向老師們解釋并道歉。12續寫素材續寫素材與艾迪生太太見面——要求去洗手間——途中去哈德森的辦公室——再次要求去洗手間——被鎖洗手間——被解救出洗手間——向老師們解釋13續寫素材續寫素材行為類①.敲門：knockatthedoor/tapatthedoor②.抬頭：raiseone’shead/lookup③.嘗試：try/attempt情緒類①.害怕：frightened/afraid/scared②.緊張：nervous/tense14續寫素材續寫素材[高分句型1].Heapologized,sittingthereinsilence.（運用了現在分詞作狀語）[高分句型2].Frightenedandpanicked,heemployedallhisstrengthtotryagainbutinvain.（運用了形容詞作伴隨狀語）[高分句型3].Afterwhatseemedages,heheardtwofamiliarvoicesofMrs.（運用了what引導賓語從句）15Part3范文呈現16范文呈現Onceinthehallway,RalphieracedovertoMrs.Addison'sroom.Anxiousandnervous,heknockedatthedoor.WithMrs.Addison'spermission,Ralphiepushedthedoorcautiously.''I'mexceedinglysorryforwhatIhavedoneinclass.''Heapologized,sittingthereinsilence.ThinkingofthedetentionfromMr.Hudson,again,Ralphieraisedhisheadandaskedifhecouldgotothewashroom.Mrs.Addisonagreed.Ontheway,hedecidedhedidactuallyneedtousethewashroom.17范文呈現Afterwashinghishands,Ralphietriedtoopenthedoorofthewashroom,butfoundthelockwasstuck.Frightenedandpanicked,heemployedallhisstrengthtotryagainbutinvain.Heyelledinaloudvoice,hopingtoberescued.Afterwhatseemedages,heheardtwofamiliarvoicesofMrs.AddisonandMr.Hudson!Ralphiejumpedtohisfeetandstruckthedoorheavily.Withthehelpofthetwoteachers,Ralphieultimatelycameout.Theboyexplainedthewholestorytothetwoteachers,promisingthathewouldneverdothatagain.18范文譯文一到走廊，拉爾夫就跑到艾迪生太太的房間。他既焦慮又緊張地敲門。在艾迪生太太的允許下，拉爾夫小心翼翼地推了推門我為我在課堂上所做的一切感到非常抱歉。”他默默地坐在那里道歉。想起哈德遜先生的拘留，拉爾夫再次抬起頭，問他是否可以去洗手間。艾迪生夫人同意了。在路上，他決定他確實需要使用洗手間。洗完手后，拉爾夫試圖打開洗手間的門，但發現鎖卡住了。他又害怕又恐慌，用