HowtobemoreattractiveContinuationWriting---遣詞造句1.Tolearnhowtomakeyoursentencesmoreattractive；2.Tograspsomeusefulsentencestructures；

3.Tomakeyourstorymorefascinating.

LearningaimsIfyouwerealittlebirdsavedbyahuman,wouldyouflyawayorstaytoshowgratitude?

Question①Iwasinvitedtoacookoutonanoldfriend’sfarminwesternWashington.Iparkedmycaroutsidethefarmandwalkedpastamilkinghousewhichhadapparentlynotbeenusedinmanyyears.Anoiseatawindowcaughtmyattention,soIenteredit.Itwasahummingbird(蜂鳥),desperatelytryingtoescape.Shewascoveredinspider-webs(蛛網)andwasbarelyabletomoveherwings.SheceasedherstruggletheinstantIpickedherup.②Withthebirdinmycuppedhand,Ilookedaroundtoseehowshehadgottenin.Thebrokenwindowglasswasthelikelyanswer.Istuffedapieceofclothintotheholeandtookheroutside,closingthedoorsecurelybehindme.③WhenIopenedmyhand,thebirddidnotflyaway;shesatlookingatmewithherbrighteyes.Iremovedthestickyspider-websthatcoveredherheadandwings.Still,shemadenoattempttofly.Perhapsshehadbeenstrugglingagainstthewindowtoolongandwastootired?Ortoothirsty?④AsIcarriedheruptheblackberry-linedpathtowardmycarwhereIkeptawaterbottle,shebegantomove.Istopped,andshesoontookwingbutdidnotimmediatelyflyaway.Hovering(懸停),sheapproachedwithinsixinchesofmyface.Foraverylongmoment,thistinycreaturelookedintomyeyes,turningherheadfromsidetoside.Thensheflewquicklyoutofsight.⑤Duringthecookout,Itoldmyhostthehummingbirdincident.Theypromisedtofixthewindow.AsIwasdeparting,myfriendswalkedmetomycar.Iwasstandingbythecarwhenahummingbirdflewtothecenterofourgroupandbeganhovering.Sheturnedfrompersontopersonuntilshecametome.Sheagainlookeddirectlyintomyeyes,thenletoutasqueakingcallandwasgone.Foramoment,allwerespeechless.Thensomeonesaid,“Shemusthavecometosaygood-bye.”Para.1Afewweekslater,Iwenttothefarmagain.Para.2Iwasjustabouttoleavewhenthehummingbirdappeared.

Step1CorrrectwanderedIwanderedinthefarm.Isurroundedthefarm.1)加形容詞（可以是一個形容詞，也可以是并列形容詞或者形容詞短語）________________________________________（滿心焦慮）,Iwanderedinthe__________（充滿生機的）farm.2）加副詞（修飾動詞、形容詞、其他副詞或整個句子，指的是時間、地點、程度、方式等概念）(_____)I_________________________________________wanderedinthefarm(_____).Fullofanxiety/overflowingwithanxietyStep2AddIwanderedinthefarm.lively

eagerly/carefully/merrily/anxiously/excitedly3)加介詞短語1.___________________________________(毫不猶豫地),Iwanderedinthefarm.2.

_______________(出于好奇地),Iwanderedinthefarm.Withoutanyhesitation/asecondthoughtOutofcuriosityIwanderedinthefarm.1.____________________________________（注意到一些正在快樂飛行的不知名的小鳥),

Istartedwanderinginthefarm.2.__________________________（受到老朋友的啟發）,Istartedwanderinginthefarm.4）加非謂語動詞Iwanderedinthefarm.NoticingsomeunknownbirdsflyingmerrilyInspiredbymyoldfriend5）加with復合結構/獨立主格結構with的復合結構1.

_________________________(睜大了眼睛),Iwanderedinthefarm.獨立主格結構(身體部位+非謂語動詞）________________________(心狂跳),Iwanderedinthefarm.WithmyeyeswideopenMyheartbeatingwildlyIwanderedinthefarm.6）加銜接詞/過渡詞表因果

_________________________（由于受到我朋友的鼓勵），Iwanderedinthefarm.表轉折Iwanderedinthefarm,

________，(然而)tomydisappointment,there’snosignofthelittlebird.表遞進

Iwanderedinthefarm,___________，(此外）,Isearchedthewoodsnearbyforthelittlebird.Duetomyfriend’sencouragehoweverwhat’smoreIwanderedinthefarm.1.三大從句定語從句Iwanderedinthefarm，_________________________________(我與小鳥相遇的).名詞性從句____________________________________________(好奇小鳥的近況),Iwanderedinthefarm.狀語從句（so+adj.+be+sb.+thatsbdidsth）

我如此擔憂以至于我迫不及待地在農場里來回漫步,想要再次遇到蜂鳥.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________whereImet/encounteredthelittlebirdCuriousaboutwhatwouldhappenedtothelittlebirdSoanxiouswasIthatIcouldn’twaittowanderinthefarmbackandforthinthehopeofmeetingthehummingbirdagain.Step3Upgrade2.三種特殊句_______________________________(一陣焦慮感向我襲來)，Iwanderedinthefarm.

Afloodofanxietysweptoverme無靈主語句afloodof...sweptoversb表示人感到……”或“一陣/一種……向某人襲來”用于該句式的有靈動詞（短語）有：seize/takeholdof“抓住；攫住”；getthebetterof/defeat“擊垮”；

sweep，/flood，rushover“襲來”；runthrough/passthrough“掠過”；

swallow“吞噬；淹沒”；choke“使哽咽,哽住”；

desert“背離”escape“逃離”

opieces“把……撕碎”；fail“使失望；有負于”；2.三種特殊句強調句

直到我在農場里漫步時，我才意識到我有多么思念這只小鳥。_________________________________________________________________________________________________倒裝句

我立刻開始在農場里開始漫步起來.（innotime)_______________________________________________InnotimedidIwanderinthefarm.Itwasn’tuntilIwanderedinthefarmthatIrealizedhowmuchImissedthelittlebird.3.三種修辭手法比喻Iwanderedinthefarm,_____________________________________.(農場的風景美麗的如同一幅畫)whosescenerywerejustlikeapainting夸張Iwanderedinthefarm,thinking____________________________________.(你一定已經等了我幾個世紀了)排比我不僅在田野里，在農場里，而且在附近的小樹林里漫步了起來___________________________________________________________________________“Youmusthavewaitedformeforcenturies”Istartedwanderingnotonlyinthefeild，inthefarm,butalsointhewoodsnearby.Howtobemoreattractive

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加副詞

加介詞短語

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Reading①Iwasinvitedtoacookoutonanoldfriend’sfarminwesternWashington.Iparkedmycaroutsidethefarmandwalkedpastamilkinghousewhichhadapparentlynotbeenusedinmanyyears.Anoiseatawindowcaughtmyattention,soIenteredit.Itwasahummingbird(蜂鳥),desperatelytryingtoescape.Shewascoveredinspider-webs(蛛網)andwasbarelyabletomoveherwings.SheceasedherstruggletheinstantIpickedherup.②Withthebirdinmycuppedhand,Ilookedaroundtoseehowshehadgottenin.Thebrokenwindowglasswasthelikelyanswer.Istuffedapieceofclothintotheholeandtookheroutside,closingthedoorsecurelybehindme.③WhenIopenedmyhand,thebirddidnotflyaway;shesatlookingatmewithherbrighteyes.Iremovedthestickyspider-websthatcoveredherheadandwings.Still,shemadenoattempttofly.Perhapsshehadbeenstrugglingagainstthewindowtoolongandwastootired?Ortoothirsty?④AsIcarriedheruptheblackberry-linedpathtowardmycarwhereIkeptawaterbottle,shebegantomove.Istopped,andshesoontookwingbutdidnotimmediatelyflyaway.Hovering(懸停),sheapproachedwithinsixinchesofmyface.Foraverylongmoment,thistinycreaturelookedintomyeyes,turningherheadfromsidetoside.Thensheflewquicklyoutofsight.⑤Duringthecookout,Itoldmyhostthehummingbirdincident.Theypromisedtofixthewindow.AsIwasdeparting,myfriendswalkedmetomycar.Iwasstandingbythecarwhenahummingbirdflewtothecenterofourgroupandbeganhovering.Sheturnedfrompersontopersonuntilshecametome.Sheagainlookeddirectlyintomyeyes,thenletoutasqueakingcallandwasgone.Foramoment,allwerespeechless.Thensomeonesaid,“Shemusthavecometosaygood-bye.”nsavedabirddidn’tflyawaysaygood-byePara.1Afewweekslater,Iwenttothefarmagain.Para.2Iwasjustabouttoleavewhenthehummingbirdappeared.plotlineemotionallinesavedabirddidn’tflyawaysaygood-byewenttothefarmagainthebirdappearedjoyful/touchedsympathetic/caring

shocked/amazedcurious/disappointed（grateful/attached）confusedOverviewofthetwolinesofstory054Fallingaction5Ending1Beginning(backgroud)2Risingactionsavedabirddidn’tflyawaysaygood-byewenttothefarmagainthebirdappearedjoyful/touchedsympathetic/caringgrateful/attachedshocked/amazedcurious/disappointed3Climax①Iwasinvitedtoacookoutonanoldfriend’sfarminwesternWashington.Iparkedmycaroutsidethefarmandwalkedpastamilkinghousewhichhadapparentlynotbeenusedinmanyyears.Anoiseatawindowcaughtmyattention,soIenteredit.Itwasahummingbird(蜂鳥),desperatelytryingtoescape.Shewascoveredinspider-webs(蛛網)andwasbarelyabletomoveherwings.SheceasedherstruggletheinstantIpickedherup.②Withthebirdinmycuppedhand,Ilookedaroundtoseehowshehadgottenin.Thebrokenwindowglasswasthelikelyanswer.Istuffedapieceofclothintotheholeandtookheroutside,closingthedoorsecurelybehindme.③WhenIopenedmyhand,thebirddidnotflyaway;shesatlookingatmewithherbrighteyes.Iremovedthestickyspider-websthatcoveredherheadandwings.Still,shemadenoattempttofly.Perhapsshehadbeenstrugglingagainstthewindowtoolongandwastootired?Ortoothirsty?④AsIcarriedheruptheblackberry-linedpathtowardmycarwhereIkeptawaterbottle,shebegantomove.Istopped,andshesoontookwingbutdidnotimmediatelyflyaway.Hovering(懸停),sheapproachedwithinsixinchesofmyface.Foraverylongmoment,thistinycreaturelookedintomyeyes,turningherheadfromsidetoside.Thensheflewquicklyoutofsight.⑤Duringthecookout,Itoldmyhostthehummingbirdincident.Theypromisedtofixthewindow.AsIwasdeparting,myfriendswalkedmetomycar.Iwasstandingbythecarwhenahummingbirdflewtothecenterofourgroupandbeganhovering.Sheturnedfrompersontopersonuntilshecametome.Sheagainlookeddirectlyintomyeyes,thenletoutasqueakingcallandwasgone.Foramoment,allwerespeechless.Thensomeonesaid,“Shemusthavecometosaygood-bye.”Para.1Afewweekslater,Iwenttothefarmagain.Para.2Iwasjustabouttoleavewhenthehummingbirdappeared.Mainidea:Thestoryisaboutamanwhosavedalittlebirdandthebirdknewhowtobegrateful.foreshadowing(伏筆):1.mycar;2.thewindowofthemilkinghouse;3.thebirddidn’tflyawayForeshadowing(伏筆)ThinkingMainidea

Discussingroupsoffour.

(1min)WhatshouldwementioninPara.1?1.Parkedthecar2.Noticedthefixedwindow3.Thehummingbirdwouldregularlyflybacktothefarm4.Triedtofindthehummingbird5.Waitedbutthehummningbirddidn’tappearDiscussion

Clue:developthestoryaccordingtothetwogivensentencesandtheforeshadowings(1.mycar;2.thewindowofthemilkinghouse;3.thebirddidn’tflyaway)Usewhatwe’velearnedtopolishorrewritePara.1Practice

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