高考英語(yǔ)讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)語(yǔ)篇練習(xí)友情故事——暖心老師安排“秘密朋友”活動(dòng)，幫助學(xué)生形成深厚友誼1題目分析讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)題目再現(xiàn)范文呈現(xiàn)努力方向2Part1題目呈現(xiàn)3續(xù)寫(xiě)原文Asasixthgrader,Ibegannoticinghowotherkidswereseparatingintodifferentgroupsintheclass.Therewerethegeeks,thejocks(小丑),andthepopularcoolkids.Iwasn’tsurewhereIbelonged.AndIthinkthatwasaproblem.Ourteacherhadassigned“secretfriends”forthecomingweek.Thepurposeofthisassignmentwastodonicethingsforyourfriendwithoutlettingthemknowwhowasdoingit.Wecouldleaveencouragingnotesontheirdeskormysteriouslyleaveacardintheirbackpackorbook.Ourteacherwroteeachkid’snameonapieceofpaperandthrewthemintoabucket,thenweeachclosedoureyesanddrewthenameoftheclassmatewhoweweretosecretlybefriendandsupportoverthenextfiveschooldays.Everyonewasexcitedtogetinvolved,includingRochelle.Bythemiddleoftheweek,wehadturnedthisassignmentintoacontesttoseewhosesecretfriendcouldleavethebestgift.Insteadofencouragingnotes,weleftstationarysetsonourfriend’sdesk.Insteadofgivingcompliments,weweregivingbubblegum,lollipopsandevenmoney.Itseemedthateveryonewasgettingcoolpresentsfromtheirfriends.Everyoneexceptme,thatis.4續(xù)寫(xiě)原文Mysecretfriendfollowedourteacher’sdirectionswithoutafault.Ireceivedhandmadecards,noteswithnicethoughtsandcountlesssmileyfacepicturessayingthatIwasoneofthenicestgirlsintheclass.Thisfriendseemedtothinkhighlyofmefromthenotesthatwereleft,butthelackofgiftskeptmewonderingwhatwasupwithwhoeverhadpulledmyname.Onthelastmorningofourassignment,Iwalkedintomyclassroomandnoticedapackageonmydesk.Atlast,mysecretfriendhadgraspedtheideathatagiftwaswhatIreallyneeded.Iquicklyrippedopenthegiftpaper,onlytofindasmalldollinside.Thepinkwool-knitdollseemednotnewbutdelicate.Butthegirlssittingnearmegiggledandgossipedaboutthe“l(fā)ittlegirl”giftIhadreceived.5段首句Para1:Hearingthis,Ifeltmyfaceturnred.Para2:ItturnedoutthatmysecretfriendwasRochelle,comingfromapoorfamily.6Part2題目分析7點(diǎn)1：位于續(xù)寫(xiě)第一段段首，流暢銜接前面的記敘文和第一段段首語(yǔ)；點(diǎn)2：位于續(xù)寫(xiě)第一段段尾，流暢銜接第二段段首句；點(diǎn)3：位于續(xù)寫(xiě)第二段段首，續(xù)寫(xiě)銜接第二段段首語(yǔ)；點(diǎn)4：文章結(jié)尾升華，給予讀者正能量，揭示和強(qiáng)調(diào)主題。情節(jié)構(gòu)建的重點(diǎn)8續(xù)寫(xiě)思路分析本文以找“秘密朋友”活動(dòng)為線索展開(kāi)，講述了老師為了讓同學(xué)們找到好朋友，舉行了找“秘密朋友”的活動(dòng)。大家都為自己的秘密朋友留下最好的禮物，例如泡泡糖、棒棒糖甚至是錢。而作者收到的確實(shí)是手工制作的卡片、便條和笑臉照片，還有一個(gè)看起來(lái)很不起眼的洋娃娃。作者感到很失望，甚至和其他同學(xué)一起取笑這個(gè)洋娃娃。這時(shí)候，羅謝爾站出來(lái)說(shuō)禮物是她送的，她來(lái)自一個(gè)貧困家庭，為了送給作者一個(gè)禮物，她攢了平時(shí)的零花錢。作者頓時(shí)感到很羞愧而向羅謝爾道歉，最終羅謝爾原諒了作者，她們成為了最好的朋友。9續(xù)寫(xiě)思路分析Para1：Hearingthis,Ifeltmyfaceturnred.由第一段首句內(nèi)容“聽(tīng)到這些，我覺(jué)得我的臉變紅了。”可知，第一段可描寫(xiě)作者為收到這樣的禮物而感到尷尬，因此，和周圍同學(xué)一起嘲笑這個(gè)“洋娃娃”。這時(shí)候，送禮物的羅謝爾難過(guò)的跑出去，作者才知道，自己的秘密朋友是她。10續(xù)寫(xiě)思路分析Para2:ItturnedoutthatmysecretfriendwasRochelle,comingfromapoorfamily.由第二段首句內(nèi)容“原來(lái)我的秘密朋友是羅謝爾，來(lái)自一個(gè)貧窮的家庭。”可知，第二段可描寫(xiě)羅謝爾雖然很貧困，但是她依然攢錢給自己的秘密朋友買最好的禮物。11續(xù)寫(xiě)思路分析續(xù)寫(xiě)線索嘲笑禮物——發(fā)現(xiàn)秘密朋友羅謝爾——羞愧——道歉——成為好朋友12續(xù)寫(xiě)素材可用詞匯：行為類①.開(kāi)始：begin/start②.分開(kāi)：separateinto/splitinto③.參與：getinvolved/joinin/attend情緒類①.興奮的，積極的：excited/active②.羞愧：ashamed/compunctious13續(xù)寫(xiě)素材可用句型：[高分句型1].WhenIcontinuedwithmeanremarks,agirlsittingatthelastrowaroseandcameup,castingmeanangryanddisappointedlook.(由連接詞when引導(dǎo)的時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句)[高分句型2].SoashamedwasIthatittookmeafewdaystopluckupmycouragetofaceuptoRochelleandapologize.(副詞so后接形容詞ashamed位于句首,其后用部分倒裝)14Part3范文呈現(xiàn)15范文呈現(xiàn)Hearingthis,Ifeltmyfaceturnred.Embarrassedandashamed,Isecretlycomplainedthatthegirlgavemesostupidagifttoarouseothers’derision.Ievenjoinedothergirlsingossipingaboutmysecretfriendandthepoordoll.WhenIcontinuedwithmeanremarks,agirlsittingatthelastrowaroseandcameup,castingmeanangryanddisappointedlook.Withtearsstreamingdownherface,sheadmitted,“I’myoursecretfriendandI’msorryaboutthegift.”Thensheranoutoftheclassroom.Frozenwithshock,Icouldn’tutterasingleword.16范文呈現(xiàn)ItturnedoutthatmysecretfriendwasRochelle,comingfromapoorfamily.Shehadsavedeverypennyinherpocketmoneyinordertogivemeacoolgift.Withthelimitedmoney,shevisitedalotofstoresandfinallyselectedthelovelydollfromasecond-handstore.Actually,shegavemeamostvaluablegiftwithhersincereheart.However,Ididn’ttreasureandhurtherbadlyinsuchacruelway.SoashamedwasIthatittookmeafewdaystopluckupmycouragetofaceuptoRochelleandapologize.Muchtomydelight,sheforgavemeandlaterwebecamebestfriends.Mostimportantly,wefoundwherewebelonged.17范文譯文聽(tīng)到這里，我覺(jué)得自己的臉都紅了，既尷尬又羞愧，我偷偷抱怨說(shuō)，這個(gè)女孩送給我這么笨的禮物，是為了引起別人的嘲笑。我甚至和其他女孩一起八卦我的秘密朋友和那個(gè)可憐的娃娃。當(dāng)我繼續(xù)說(shuō)刻薄的話時(shí)，坐在最后一排的一個(gè)女孩站了起來(lái)，走了過(guò)來(lái)，向我投來(lái)憤怒和失望的目光。她淚流滿面，承認(rèn)：“我是你的秘密朋友，很抱歉收到禮物。”然后她跑出了教室。我嚇得渾身發(fā)抖，一句話也說(shuō)不出來(lái)。18范文譯文原來(lái)我的秘密朋友是羅謝爾，來(lái)自一個(gè)貧窮的家庭。為了給我一份很酷的禮物，她把零花錢里的每一分錢都存了下來(lái)。用有限