模板:一、環(huán)境描寫（惡劣）二、情緒描寫（絕望、恐懼+掙扎）三、轉(zhuǎn)機描寫——描寫聲音傳來或看見了什么四、情緒描寫（希望+努力）五、脫險描寫六、情緒描寫（感恩+高興）七、主旨描寫一、環(huán)境描寫（惡劣）自然環(huán)境描寫——描寫波濤洶涌Thecoastlinewashiddenbehindtheroaringwaves（洶涌澎湃的浪濤）withalmostnoonetobeseen.AsIfloatedon,ahugewave（—個巨浪）whistled（呼嘯而來）andapproachedus.Thebigwindroaredthroughourears（在耳邊咆哮），andwewerepushedawayfromtheshorefartherandfarther.Allmysensestoldmethatabigwavewasabouttocome.（即將來［指）Apowerful-looking（看似猛烈的）wavewascomingtowardsus.（靠近我們）Thefiercewavesshowednosignofdyingdown（沒有消退的跡象）.Theseawas（洶涌的；風浪大的）thatdayanditwasdifficulttohandle（控制）thebodyboard.鯊魚等：Agraytrianglefinstickingupthroughthewater,headingrightforher.Itwasashark,amassivesharkthatwasswimmingaround,notfarawayfromher.Theshark'sjawsopenedwide,showingrowsofrazor-sharpteeth.陸地上：Assplashingraindropshitthewindshieldfranticallyandtheskieswereoverhungwithablanketofgrey,Icouldbarelymakeoutthefigureinthetruck.雨滴瘋狂地打在擋風玻璃上，天空籠罩在一片灰色之中，我?guī)缀蹩床磺蹇ㄜ嚴锏娜擞啊hewaterkeptrising,asifitwouldengulfmealive.水不停地漲，仿佛要把我活吞下去。Unfortunately,thewaterpouredinandcreptuponmywaist.在水里行走（不可能rush,dash）wade:跋涉，踵（水或淤泥等）Joele叩edoutandwadedintotheflood.struggle:艱難地行進；吃力地進行Istruggledupthehillwiththeheavybags.struggletoone，sfeet掙扎著站起來plod:艱難地行走；吃力地Ourhorsesploddeddownthemuddytrack.我們的馬沿著泥濘小路蹣跚而行。Weploddedonthroughtherain.我們冒雨艱難地跋涉。stagger/totter/stumble蹣跚；踉蹌Withjawsclenched,Iresolvedtokeepedgingcloser,inchbyinch.Musteringupmycourage,Ipushedthedooropenwithallmymight,seizedJoe'sarmtightly,andwewaddled（蹣跚而行）tothetruckbyholdingeachotherup.Istretchedoutmyarmstoembracehim,andhepattedmeonthebackslightlytoshowcomfort.hoperekindled..（如彳可獲救）Theythrewaropeatmycar,pullingittowardsthesafeplace..Luckily,itdidn'ttakelongbeforemycarwasoutofdanger..（獲救后的動作和想法）Therainpouringandthewindroaring,IdashedtoJoeandhuggedhimtightly..（照應主旨）OnlythendidIrealizethatitwasJoewhohadbeencaringformethroughthickandthin.下水文2:Lookingovermyshoulder,Istaredintotheflashinglightsofatruck.Peekingthroughthemountingrain,Istruggledtomakeoutthevaguefigureoverthere.ItwasJoethatshoutedandwavedviolently."Joe,Tmhere!,,Iwounddownthewindow,tearsofhorrormixedwithrainstreamingdownmyface.Mycarbegantoshakeincreasinglywildly.Picturingtheroadcrackedandthecarwasfloodedaway,Ifeltmorefrightenedandsenseddeathwaswaitingfbrme."Jumpoutofthecarandrantome!^^Joeyelledandgotoffthetruck,waitingformyaction.IscreamedthatIcouldn'tmakeit.Yellingatthetopofhisking,Joetriedtosoothemeandconvincemethatitwasthebestwaytoescapethedanger.Iopenedthedoorandreachedoutmyfoot,tryingtofindaproperlandpoint.Afterconfirmingthesafety,Iinchedforwardinthemuddywaterandeventuallyrushedfranticallytowardsmyhusband.Joealsoraninmydirection,gatheredmeintohisarmsandkeptpattingmyback.Sabbinqinrelief,Iwasoverwhelmedbywavesofquiltandremorse.Imurmuredsorry,reflectingthatIshouldhavetakenhiswarningseriously.下水文3：Lookingovermyshoulder,Istaredintotheflashinglightsofatruck.HardlyhadIrealizedthatsomeonewouldrescuemewhenmyonceviolentlybumpedheartsank.Icouldseethedrivergetoffthetruckandstumbledtowardsmewiththeheavyrainpouringdown.Meanwhile,theroaringwaterseemedtoengulfmethenextsecond,sothefrightthathadbeensubmergedinmyheartsuddenlyresurfaced."Openthedoor!,,IwasshockedtoheartheshoutofJoeandrealizedwhothewarm-heartedstrangerwas.Hiswordsreignitedtheflameofhopeinmyheart,butIwasstilldreadofthefloodoutside.IscreamedthatIcouldn'tmakeit."Believeinme,youcandoit!”Hisdeterminedvoicespreadacrosstheheavyrainandechoedinmyhead.Drivenbyhisencourapement,Istruggledtopushthedoorwithmyfullstrengthandsubmergedbytherapidcurrent.WhenIwasabouttobecarriedawaybythewater,Joegrabbedmyhandanddraggedmetothesafeplace.Wewerebothsoakedtotheskin.Lookingintohisdeepblueeyes,Iburstintotears,tearsofremorse.Actually,itwasthemanrightinfrontofmewhounderstoodhowtotakegoodcareofme.下水文4:Lookingovermyshoulder,Istaredintotheflashinglightsofatruck.Littlebylittle,thelightsseemedtodim.Off口otaman.UponrecocnizinqthemanwasJoe,Icouldn'thelprestrainingmyexcitement."Honey,don'tbefrightened!Fmthrowingathickrope,withwhichyoucangetoutofthedilemma.nHeshoutedaffectionately.Ididasheinstructed,openingthedoor,slippinginthewaterandwalkingstraighttowardhim,unafraidofsurgingwater.Everythingwasgoingwelluntilapowerful-lookingwaveapproachedme.Ilostmybalancebutseizedtheropetightly.Timepassing,tirednessengulfedmewithmyfeetstiffandshivering.IscreamedthatIcouldn'tmakeit.Mylipsquivered,bigtearsrollingdowncheeks.Confrontedwiththissituation,Joeconstantlycomfortedmetocalmdown.Actually,thetorrentwasindeedtemporary,soIgrittedoutmyteethandkeptmovingforwardslowlyandcautiously.TheinstantIgrabbedholdofhishand,Istruggletothrowmyselfathim.Joepattedmeandsiqhedingreatrelief.Iapologizedtohimformyfault,thenwegrinnedmerrilyateachother.PoorlyasJoeperformedindoinghousework,mysafetywasalwayshispriority.Thereareleestoeverywine,butrescuingmetoothandnailintheshortcutmakeshimmyperfecthusband.原題參考范文:Lookingovermyshoulder,Istaredintotheflashinglightsofatruck.ItwasJoe!Icouldn'thelpburstingintotears.Joeshoutedtomenottobefrightened.ThenhethrewathickropesothatIcouldhangontoitandwalkstraighttowardhim.Iopenedthedoor,grabbeditandinchedout.However,asuddenfallleftmeintherushingwater.Istruggledtomyfeet,onlytofindabranchblockingthewayrightinfrontofme.IscreamedthatIcouldn7makeit.Joe,however,remainedcalm!HeurgedmetotakeonestepatatimeandassuredmeIcouldmakeit.ImovedforwardslowlyandcautiouslybeforeIfellintohisarms.Sobbingaqsinsthischest,IapologizedthatIshouldn'thavetakentheshortcut.Joepattedmesayinghisprimaryconcernwasmysafety.OnlythendidIrealizeJaeactuallyunderstoodhowtotakecareofmedespitehistroublewiththehousework.Passage7水中自救Paragraph1:Allofasudden,Bettyfeltsomethingtouchingthebottomofherfoot.Paragraph2:"Help!Help!”Bettyscreamedinhorror..確定主題：水中遇險自救。.時空變化：時空變化不大，霎時之間發(fā)生的險情。.續(xù)寫難點：具體的細節(jié)描寫與心理活動。下水續(xù)寫Paragraph1:Allofasudden,Bettyfeltsomethingtouchingthebottomofherfoot.JWhatwasthat?Shewondered.Aseafish?JBeforeshecouldgetonthesurfboard,itbumpedherinthefootonceagain.JShesuddenlyhadthefeelingthatanenormousfish,biggerthanher,wascirclingaroundher.JAchillfeelingcreptupherspineasshethoughtofthejokeUncleMarkplayedonher.AndthenBettysawit:agraytrianglefinstickingupthroughthewater,headingrightforher.JItwasashark,amassivesharkthatwasswimmingaround,notfarawayfromher.JForasplitsecond,herheartpracticallyskippedabeat.JParagraph2:"Help!Help!”Bettyscreamedinhorror.]Hearingtheterriblescreamforhelp,UncleMarkinstantlyrealizedthatsomethingbadwashappening.JWithoutthinking,heswamasquicklyashecouldtowardsBettyandyelled,"Getout!??.”JButBettyseemedstuck,tooscaredtomove.JAttheverymoment,theshark'sjawsopenedwide,showingrowsofrazor-sharpteeth.]Withallhismight,UncleMarkstabbeditinthemouthwithhissurfboard,scaringthemonsteraway.AndthenhegrabbedholdofBetty'sarmanddraggedhertothebeach.Allthistookonlyafewminutes,butBettywouldneverforgetthefrighteningexperience.Paragraph1:Allofasudden,Bettyfeltsomethingtouchingthebottomofherfoot.Whatwasthat?Shewondered.Aseafish?Beforeshecouldgetonthesurfboard,itbumpedherinthefootonceagain.Shesuddenlyhadthefeelingthatanenormousfish,biggerthanher,wascirclingaroundher.AchillfeelingcreptupherspineasshethoughtofthejokeUncleMarkplayedonher.AndthenBettysawit:agraytrianglefinstickingupthroughthewater,headingrightforher.Itwasashark,amassivesharkthatwasswimmingaround,notfarawayfromher.Forasplitsecond,herheartpracticallyskippedabeat.Paragraph2:"Help!Help!”Bettyscreamedinhorror.Hearingtheterriblescreamfbrhelp,UncleMarkinstantlyrealizedthatsomethingbadwashappening.Withoutthinking,heswamasquicklyashecouldtowardsBettyandyelled,“Getout!ButBettyseemedstuck,tooscaredtomove.Attheverymoment,theshark'sjawsopenedwide,showingrowsofrazor-sharpteeth.Withallhismight,UncleMarkstabbeditinthemouthwithhissurfboard,scaringthemonsteraway.AndthenhegrabbedholdofBetty'sarmanddraggedhertothebeach.Allthistookonlyafewminutes,butBettywouldneverforgetthefrighteningexperience.Passage8暴雨中救人脫困Paragraph1:Atthatmoment,theyhadtotakeactionandgetout.Theyshoutedatthetopoftheirvoice,butnoonecouldhearthem.Theybegantoworryandwereconvincedtheyhadtostayintheirsnowmobilingbuddyforthenight.Suddenly,agoodideaoccurredtoKathy.Shetookoffoneofherclothesandburnedit.Seeingthefire,peopleranoverandmanagedtopullhercaroutwithalltheirefforts,makingCrisashamedforhisrefusaltoothers.Paragraph2:WhenKathyarrivedatherhome,hermotherwaswaitingforher.SheaskedKathywhathadhappened.Kathyexplained,"Imadeaterriblemistake.Butforothers'help,Icouldn'thavebeenhomefbrthenight.^^Whenaskedwhatshewoulddowhensomeonehaddifficulty,Kathyansweredimmediatelythatshewoulddoanythingtohelpothersbecausetoday'sexperienceturnedouttobeagreatlessonforher.Passage9漂筏遇險Ineverpicturedmyfamilyonawhitewaterrafting（漂筏）vacationinColorado.Wehadtriedraftingseveraltimesbeforewithinstructorsandguides.Allofuslikedit!Icomefromafamilyofexcellentathletes,andIsometimeshavetoworkhardatholdingmyown.Ididn'tevenmindwhenmysister,Marta,whoisfourteen,keptcorrectingmytechnique.Becauseshe'sthreeyearsolder,MartabelievesifshermissioninlifetomakesureIdoeverythingperfectly."Nina,holdyourpaddle（槳）thisway.Nina,plantyourfeetfirmly,“shecorrects.Honestly,sometimesshe'sfullofherself,althoughIguessshemeanswell.Thatmorning,Dadhadusgatherourequipment,aswehadlearned.Hethentookusthroughhischecklist.OnlyDadcouldreadhischecklistbecausehishandwritingwassohardtoread.“Paddles-check,helmets-check,lifejackets-check,buckets-checkjuntileverythingwasaccountedfor.ThenweboardedourrubberraftforourtripandheadeddownthebeautifulColoradoRiver.Momhadmappedoutourroute.Itfeltgreattopaddletogetherwitheveryoneelse.DadandIsatintherear（尾部）oftheraft.MomandMartasatinthefront.Fromtimetotime,wavesbeatagainstthesidesoftheraft,sprayingwaterinourfaces.Allofasudden,ourraftcametoacompletestop.“What'swrong?”Iasked,hopingIdidn'tsoundnearlyasanxiousasIffelt."Yikes!”exclaimedMom.“We'restuckonsomerocks!”"Maybeariverguidewillcomebyandhelp."suggestedMarta.However,therewasn!tasoulinsight.Shetriedshouting,“HELLO,OUTTHERE!^^Allweheardbackwasanecho.“Don'tworry.Iknowwhatwecando/9saidDad."Itisthefrontoftheraftthatisstuck,solet'sallsitintherear.Ourweightwillprobablygettheraftofftherocks."Cautiously,MomandMartamovedtotherear.Nothinghappened.注意：.所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應為150左右；.續(xù)寫局部分為兩段，每段的開頭語已為你寫好；.續(xù)寫完成后，請用下劃線標出你所使用的關鍵詞語。Paragraph1:Myheartsank.Nervousandanxious,Ibegantocomplainaboutwhathadhappened.“Comeon-where'syoursenseofadventure（冒險）？"DadandMomstrokedmyheadandkeptmecalm.However,mysister,Marta,whowassittingacross,gavemealonghardstarewithanairofaccusation（責備）andthenturnedtoaddress（對人說）meinanaggressivevoice,“Nina,Actyourage!It'snousecomplaining.Highontheagendaistofindawayout”Withtheseacid（亥I［薄的）remarks,sheadvisedthatallofusmovetothefrontoftherubberraft.Wemovedtothefrontcautiouslyassheinstructedus,butstillwithnosuccess.Afterthat,wemadeallvainattemptstogettheraftofftherocks,feelinginastateofabsolute（絕對的）terror/desperatelyhopeless.Paragraph2:SuddenlyIhitonanidea.Pointingtotheriver,Istartedshoutingwithexcitement.HDad,Dad...theriverisactuallyshallow.Whydon'twepushitofftherocks?"Father,absorbedinhisplan,lookedatthewaterwithdoubtandjumpeddown,noddingtomewithadmiration.Offtheboatwejumpedintothecoldwater,whichweaccommodatedtosoon,andpusheditwithgreatefforts.Afterwhatseemedages,wegotoutoftroubleandcontinuedthegreattripwithlotsoflaughs.WhatisworthmentioningisthatMartachangedherattitudetowardmeaftertheexperience.其它:Theyweregettingdrenchedbyicywater.他們被冰冷的水澆透了。Theheavyrainwasviolentlybeatingagainstthewindow.大雨瘋狂地擊打窗戶oTheraindrummedontheroofofthebuilding.雨不停地擊打著房預。AstormisCatherine.一場暴風雨正在醞釀之中cThefuriousstormiswrumblinwoutside.狂風暴雨在室外呼嘯著。Thestormragedforseveralhours.猛烈的風暴持續(xù)了幾個小時。Thewindblows/whistles/howls/picksup/whipsthroughsth/sweepsacrosssth.風刮/颼颼的刮/呼嘯而過/愈刮愈大/刮過??????/掠過??????Theicywindstartedhowling,stinwinwmyface.寒風開始咆哮，刺痛了我的臉。Aflashofliehtninqlitupthewholesky.一道閃電點亮了整個天空。Thesharpdapsofthunderpiercedthequietnight.聲聲清脆的雷聲劃破了寧靜的夜晚。Theblindinglightningflashedinthesky.天空中眩目的閃電閃亮。Theboltoflightningstabstheearth.一道閃電劃過天空。Asitthunderedintosight,theroarofthewavewasdeafening.當它雷鳴般進入視線時，海浪的轟鳴聲震耳欲聾。巨浪拍打海岸Ihugewaveslash/breakontheshore猛烈拍打Ithewavespound/crash/smashagainstthepier細浪拍擊船舷Ismallwavesslapagainstthesideoftheboat波浪涌向海灘Iwavesroll/surgeontothebeach轟鳴|thesearoars/rumbles/thusders波濤洶涌Itheseaswells/chums天空和海洋融為一體Itheskyandtheoceanmeltintoeachother二、情緒描寫（絕望、恐懼+掙扎）——描寫疲倦/寒冷Drowninthesea,Ilostmybalance（失去了平衡）butseizedthebodyboardtightly.Timepassingus,tirednessengulfed（包圍了）uswithmyfeetstiff'/numb（僵硬/麻木）andshivering.Exhaustedaswewere（盡管彳艮累）,wedidn'tstop.Grittingoutteeth,wekeptswimming.Afterwhatseemedacentury.IfeltextremelyfatiguedGE常累）whileswimminghardtokeepmyself叨。點（漂浮著的）.CastingalookatTom,Icouldtellhewasalsoapparentlyvvo”-。"/（明顯地精疲力盡了）.Findersnumbedbythechillywater,throatchokedbyicywind,Ifeltontheverqeofcollapsing.SheclaspedthebabytoherbosominthebitinRcuttinQ/pierdng/sharpwind.在刺骨的寒風里，她把孩子緊緊地抱在胸前。Theicywindstartedhowling,cuttingmyfacelikeasharpknife/needles.寒風開始咆哮，像鋒利的小刀/針一樣刺痛了我的臉。Herteethwerechatteringwithcold.她冷得牙齒直打顫。Hewashuddledintohiscoat,hisfacebluewithcold.他縮講大衣里,冷得臉都發(fā)紫了。Saltstinging（刺痛）myeyes,IcouldhardlytellhowlongIcouldholdon.描寫害怕1.1tookadeepbreathandswallowedhard（害怕地咽了口吐沫）.Watchingtheshoreinthedistance,Ifeltpowerless（無力的）asifwewerebrokentinyboatsatthemercyofstrong（simile）Exhaustedandcold,thethoughtthatwemightdiehereflashedacrossmymind,whichmademequiverwithanuncontrollable粗〃。/772。〃。為?欣/2,（難以控制地發(fā)抖）.Lookingatthevastsea,Ifeltasenseoffearsurgingthroughmywhole力.（在身體涌動）Astimetickedby,fearcreptuponmy片（爬上我/（L'頭）andIcouldhardlytellhowlongIcouldplough（前行）.Thethoughtofhopelessnesssentshiversdownmys〃沅e（讓我后脊背發(fā)涼）.Iwasfloodedwithasenseef（被恐懼感淹沒）.Seeingthis,Ifeltmyfear且2卬"吆/7〃"6。5加米劇增）inside.9.1feltawaveofanxiety^一陣焦慮）sweptovermybody（襲來）.10.Achillfeelingcreptupherspine.其它恐慌：Tearsoffrustrationandhorrorgushingfrommyeyes,IfeltIhadsunkintohopelessness.Asenseofterrorsweepingthroughmybody,Ishoutedinpanic,"Help!Help!”Seizedbyastrongsenseoffright,Istruggledtoshove（猛推）thedooragain.ThehairsonthebackofmyneckprickledwithdreadandIwasdrenchedinsweat.C千毛彳到豎；濕透）Swallowedbyawaveofdespair,Icrossedmyfingers,closedmyeyesandprayedinashiveringvoice.Tremblinglikealeaf,thecarwasreadytobefloodedawayatanytime,whichrefrainedmefrommovingasingleinch.——描寫掙扎努力Tomlookedthoughtful（假設有所思）"Weneedtothinkoutaway!”Imuttered（喃喃自語），scratchingmyhead（絞盡腦汁）...,Weswamtoothandnail（全力以赴地）.Wesparednoeffortto（不遺余力地）toswimtowardstheshore.Weexchangedadeterminedlook（互換了堅定的神情），thenploughedon（繼續(xù)前行）atanincrediblespeed（難以置信的速度）.Theydozedoffandthenjerkedthemselvesawake.三、轉(zhuǎn)機描寫——描寫聲音傳來或看見了什么Adistantsoundreachedour（傳入耳朵）Asoft,憶66（似笛聲的）soundfloatedacrossthesea（漂浮在海上）Thesoundoftheboatechoedinour在我們耳內(nèi)回響）Atthatmoment,ashrillwhistle（汽笛聲）rippedtheair（劃破天空）.Whenwewereatalossofwhattodo,therewererasping（刺耳的）雙喊叫聲）risingfromthedistance（從遠處升起）.Aship'shornsounded（喇叭聲響起）.Insheerdesperation（在絕望中），Ifinallycaughtsightofsomeboatswithlifeguardsonthemheadingtowardsusinthedistance.Afteralongtime,alightspotappearedinthedistance!Wewavedourhandsandyelledoutforhelp.Jasonsawsomethingflickerinthedistance."Lights!Iseelights!”Jasonshoutedout.Justthen,mymindraced-whynotcall911andJoe?四、情緒描寫（希望+努力）一描寫如釋重負Ensuringtheirsafety,Ifeltasurge.次次啊也（感到一陣勝利的喜悅）Hearingthecomfortingnews,Icouldnrthelprestrainingmyexc泥〃情難自抑）Itthrilledus（聽到..彳艮高興）tohearthegoodnews.Onhearingthegoodnews,TomandIsighedingreat2〃呢如釋重負地嘆了口氣），grinningmerrilyateachother.Smilingin憶生/1（如釋重負地微笑）,Ifeltarush（內(nèi)mde（感到一陣自豪）.Ove/joyed（狂喜）toseeaboatcomingtoourrescue,TomandIbreathedasighqfc/（如釋重負地松了口氣）Stifffromkeepinginonepositionfor...hours,theyslowlyunfoldedtheirbodies.Asifclutchingatstraws,Idialedthenumberagainandagain.Hiswordsreignitedtheflameofhopeinmyheart五、脫險描寫Theboatfinallyreachedusandtookallofusbacktotheshore.YeHingatthetopofhislung,Joetriedtosoothemeandconvincemethatitwasthebestwaytoescapethedanger.Withallhismight,hestabbeditinthemouthwithhissurfboard,scaringthemonsteraway.六、情緒描寫（感恩+高興）Whenwepicturedwhatthemerryscenewouldbe,relieflayinmyheartandhappinessetched/waswrittenonmyface.Sighinginrelief,Icouldn'tstopthinkingaboutthewholeevent.Iknewtheywouldhavediediftheyhadbeenintheseaforanylonger.七、主旨描寫Itoccurredtomethathelpingotherswaspricelessandeveryoneshouldbealifeguard.Forthefirsttimesince.??,one'semotionsgotthebestofhimandtearstrickleddownhischeeks.OnlythendidIrealizethatitwasJoewhohadbeencaringformethroughthickandthin.Sobbinginrelief,Iwasoverwhelmedbywavesofguiltaedremorse.Imurmuredsorry,reflectingthatIshouldhavetakenhiswarningseriously.Allthistookonlyafewminutes,butBettywouldneverforgetthefrighteningexperience.Passage1風雨中助人Wehadtowait.場景一：Theicywindstartedhowling,stineingmyface.Theseawas（洶涌的；風浪大的）thatdayanditwasdifficulttohandle（控制）thebodyboard.Fingersnu/nbedbythechillywater,throatchokedbyicywind,Ifeltonthevergeofcollapsing.場景二：“Weneedtothinkoutaway!”IcastaencouragingeyeatMoisesandmuttered（□南口南自語）,scratchingmyhead（絞盡腦汁）Weexchangedadeterminedlook（互換了堅定的神情）,thenploughedon（繼續(xù)前行）atanincrediblespeed（難以置信的速度）.場景三：Suddenly,Ifinallycaughtsightofsomeboatswithlifeguardsonthemheadingtowardsusinthedistance./outofnowhere,someboatswithlifeguardsonthemcameintoview二/Jasonsawsomethingflickerinthedistance."Lights!Iseelights!”Morisyelledatthetopofhislung.場景四：Insplitseconds,theboatsfinallyreachedusandtookallofusbacktotheshore.Thetwokidsweresenttothehospitalwithoutdelay.Paragraph2:Thatnight,wordcamefromthehospitalthatthetwopeoplewereingoodcondition.場景五：感嘆+虛擬Whenwepicturedwhatthemerryscenewouldbe,relieflayinmyheartandhappinessetched/waswrittenonmyface.Wecannotimaginewhatwouldhavehappenedbutforthetimelyappearanceoftheboats./Sighinginrelief,Icouldn'tstopthinkingaboutthewholeevent.Iknewtheywouldhavediediftheyhadbeenintheseaforanylonger.Thedesperationstilllingeredinmyheartthatwithsaltstinging（刺痛）myeyes,IcouldhardlytellhowlongIcouldholdon.場景六：主旨點題Thenextmorning,allthepeopleImetsmiledtomeandcouldnotstoppraisingme.Itseemedlikeagoodopportunitytoshowmyselfoff,butIdidn'tmeanto.Infact,IwasashamedIhadthoughtaboutit.Itoccurredtomethathelpingotherswaspricelessandeveryoneshouldbealifeguard./ObviouslyIhaddoneabigdealwhichissurelyagoodopportunitytoshowoff.Ratherthanfeellikeahero,Ibelieveanyonewhocouldswimwouldhavedonethesamething.其它版本一：Wehadtowait.Weeagerlyhopingforthearrivalofthesavingboat.Thewildwindblewandthefreezingseawaterclappedourbodiescontinuously.30minutesseemedmuchlongeraswejusthelplesslyfloatedontheboundlesssea.Afteralongtime,alightspotappearedinthedistance!Wewavedourhandsandyelledoutforhelp.Theboatfinallyreachedusandtookallofusbacktotheshore.Thetwochildrenwereimmediatelysenttothenearesthospital.Thatnight,wordcamefromthehospitalthatthetwopeoplewereingoodcondition.Picturingwhatthemerryscenewouldbe,relieflayinmyheartandhappinessetchedonmyface.Thenextmorning,allthepeopleImetsmiledtomeandcouldnotstoppraisingme.Itseemedlikeagoodopportunitytoshowmyselfoff,butIdidn'tmeanto.Infact,IwasashamedIhadthoughtaboutit.Itoccurredtomethathelpingotherswaspricelessandeveryoneshouldbealifeguard.版本二：Wehadtowait.Pattingtheirfacestowakethemup,wecontinuouslytoldthemtobestrong.Afterwhatseemedacentury,Ifeltextremelyexhaustedwhileswimminghardtokeepmyselfafloat.CastingalookatTom,Icouldtellhewasalsoapparentlyworn-out.Lookingatthevastsea,Ifeltasenseofhorrorsurgingthroughmywholebody.Saltstinging（刺痛）myeyes,IcouldhardlytellhowlongIcouldholdon.ButIstillshoutedinmyhead:focus.Insheerdesperation（在絕望中），Ifinallycaughtsightofsomeboatswithlifeguardsonthemheadingtowardsusinthedistance.Thankyou,Lord.Quitesoon,Ifeltstrongarmspullmeoutoftheseaontotheboard,andthetwokidsweresenttothehospitalwithoutdelay.Thatnight,wordcamefromthehospitalthatthetwokidswereingoodcondition.Sighinginrelief,Icouldn'tstopthinkingaboutthewholeevent.Iknewtheywouldhavediediftheyhadbeenintheseaforanylonger.ObviouslyIhaddoneabigdealwhichissurelyagoodopportunitytoshowoff.Ihadexpectedtoexperiencesomesortofsenseofwellbeingorgreatness,butnoneofthatcame.Ratherthanfeellikeahero,Ibelieveanyonewhocouldswimwouldhavedonethesamething.Passage2落水被救“IfmumfindsoutthatPmgoingtothebeach,Pllbeinbigtrouble.1saidtomyselfsoftlyinalowvoice.Iwentdownstairsslowlyandtriedtowalkcasuallyintothekitchen.AsIwaswalkingtowardsthebackdoor,mumaskedwithoutlookingupfromher“dish-washing“，“Whereareyougoing?^^Iansweredbackwithouthesitation/Iamgoingtothegardentoplay."AfterIgotoutofthekitchen,Ibreathedasignofrelief.Myplanhadworkedoutfinesofar.Iclimbedthefenceandjumpedontothemuddyfieldnexttomyhouseandstartedrunningtowardsthebusstopattopspeed.AfterhalfanhourIwasatthebeachscanningthecrowdformyfriends,JimmyandBobby.Twoyoungmenwereracinginthecanoes（獨木舟）.Afterawhile,Isawthemnearacoconuttree.Irantowardsthemandgotintomyswimmingtrunk（游泳褲）.Foraboutanhour,weplayedvolleyballhappily.Suddenly,Bobbyhittheballtoohardandtheballfellintothesea.JustasBobbywasgoingtopickuptheball,thetidecameinandcarriedtheballfurtherandfurtherawayfromtheshore.IwantedtoshowoffmyswimmingskillssoIdeclaredtohelpgettheballforthem.Idivedintothewaterandstartedswimmingatasteadypace.Afterswimmingforabouttenminutes,IbecametiredbutwhenIsawthattheballwasonlyafewfeetawayfromme,Iputinanextraburstofspeed.However,justasIwasgoingtogettheball,averystrongcurrentswepttheballfurtherawayfromme.Atthatmoment,astringofweed（海草）tangled（纏繞）upwithmyfeetandIcouldnotswimproperly.Istruggledtokeepafloatbutitwasnouse."IfIhadlistenedtomyparents,thiswouldneverhavehappened,,?Ithoughtsilently.Paragraph1Finally,afterstrugglingforaminuteortwo,Istillgotpulledunderwater.Paragraph2WhenIwokeup,Iwasinanemptyroomlyingonabed.參考范文:Paragraph1Finally,afterstrugglingforaminuteortwo,Istillgotpulledunderwater.場景一：Timepassingus,tirednessengulfed（包圍了）mewithmyfeetstijf/numb（僵硬/麻木）andshivering./Watchingtheshoreinthedistance,Ifeltpowerless（無力的）asifIwasbrokentinyboatsatthemercyoftheterribleweed,（simile）Achillfeelingcreptupherspine./Tearsoffrustrationandhorrorgushingfrommyeyes,IfeltIhadsunkintohopelessness.場景一：“Ineedtothinkoutaway!^Imuttered（喃喃自語）.ItoldmyselfIshouldnevergiveup.ThenIpulledtheweedagainwithgreateffortsbutinvainagain.場景三：Insheerdesperation（在絕望中），Ifinallycaughtsightofsomeboatswithlifeguardsonthem.Asifclutchinqatstraws,Ishoutedatthetopoflung.Themensawmeandracedtowardsme.Bythetimetheyreachedme,Ihadbeenalreadyunconscious.Paragraph2WhenIwokeup,Iwasinanemptyroomlyingonabed.場景四：朋友ItwasnotuntiladoctorcameintotheroomthatIrealizedthatIwasinahospital.JimmyandBobbytoldmethetwoyoungmenbroughtmetotheshoreandsentmetothehospital.場景五：關于我Sighinginrelief,Icouldn'tstopthinkingaboutthewholeevent.IknewIwouldhavediediftheyhadnotturnupforanylonger.場景六：父母Afterafewminutes,myparentswithhalfangryandhalfworriedfaceswalkedin.MyparentsscoldedmeforrunningoutofthehousesecretlybutwerealsogladthatIwasnotseriouslyinjured.場景七：點題：Iwillneverforgetthatterrifyingexperience.Neither