1、書面表達講評課教學(xué)設(shè)計長興技師學(xué)院【課時】1課時（45分鐘）【設(shè)計理念】任務(wù)設(shè)計有明確的目標(biāo)，層層深入，循環(huán)遞進。針對學(xué)生寫作中的真實困難，設(shè)計了具體的、語言真實、語境真實、語義真實的運用性任務(wù)，任務(wù)設(shè)計貼近學(xué)生生活，引起學(xué)生共鳴，激發(fā)學(xué)生積極參與的欲望。【學(xué)情分析】授課班級：高三會計（3）班班級特點：班級大部分是女生，班級氣氛不是很活躍。學(xué)生英語基礎(chǔ)比較薄弱，很多學(xué)生在寫作中有畏難情緒，高一到高二這兩年里幾乎沒有寫作文。他們不注重醞釀寫作思路，提筆就寫，沒有養(yǎng)成良好的寫作習(xí)慣，寫作中具體的問題是：詞匯貧乏、搭配不當(dāng)、句型誤用、語法不通、信息不全、條理紊亂已經(jīng)謀篇布局不合理等問題。為了解決這些

2、問題，筆者下定決心要通過作為講評課來提高學(xué)生的書面表達能力，幫助他們掌握寫作的基本步驟，消除他們的畏難情緒。【教學(xué)目標(biāo)】1. 知識目標(biāo)（1）學(xué)生能通過鑒別共性錯誤反思自己習(xí)作中的錯誤，如單詞拼寫錯誤，主謂一致錯誤，時態(tài)語態(tài)錯誤，逐字翻譯及句子結(jié)構(gòu)不完整等問題；（2）學(xué)生能欣賞班里一些同學(xué)所運用的優(yōu)美的表達，如sothat, not onlybut also,so, and, cute, be delighted, would you like to do, look forward to, etc.（3）學(xué)會能學(xué)會使用一些表達句與句之間不同關(guān)系的詞，如表并列的and, not onlybut

3、also, eitheror, neithernor,whats more, in addition, besides等; 表示順序的：firstly, secondly, thirdly, lastly, finally, last but not the least等；表轉(zhuǎn)折的but, however, yet, while等；表因果的so, so that, thus, therefore, as a result等；表達自己觀點的in my opinion, as far as I am concerned, I think, from my point of view等，使語篇具有的

4、整體性、關(guān)聯(lián)性和邏輯性，更通順、流暢；（4）學(xué)生能記住信的基本格式；2. 能力目標(biāo)（1）學(xué)生能掌握寫作的基本步驟，并能運用這些步驟提升自己的文章；（2）學(xué)生能靈活使用關(guān)聯(lián)詞使文章流暢，具有邏輯性；（3）學(xué)生能做到要點俱全并合理拓展；（4）學(xué)生能進行謀篇布局，使文章具有整體性；3.情感目標(biāo)（1）學(xué)生能養(yǎng)成良好的寫作習(xí)慣并能養(yǎng)成用英語寫日記或?qū)懳⒉┑牧?xí)慣；（2）學(xué)生能鑒賞他人的作品并有意識有選擇的去學(xué)習(xí)別人的寫作長處來彌補自己的不足；【教學(xué)重點和難點】幫助學(xué)生掌握寫作的步驟；教會學(xué)生如何使得文章更加通順、流暢；引導(dǎo)學(xué)生在寫作前做必要的準(zhǔn)備，特別是要做到提煉要點，并進行有效拓展；【教學(xué)方法及策略】任

5、務(wù)教學(xué)法、分層教學(xué)法；【課前準(zhǔn)備】課前準(zhǔn)備：多媒體PPT【教學(xué)過程】Step1: Lead-in1. Ask students the following two question.What do you think about your last writing? Why couldnt you get a high score?【設(shè)計意圖】：引導(dǎo)學(xué)生分析自己作文分?jǐn)?shù)低的原因，發(fā)現(xiàn)自己寫作中的錯誤并進行有意識的歸類自己所犯的錯誤。Step2: Presention1. Show students several kinds of mistakes in their writing.(1)Mi

6、sspelling (2) tense and voice (3) subject-verb concord(4) Qinglish(5) not being able to tell the part of speech(6) writing incomplete sentences2. Show students some wrong sentences written by their classmates and ask them to correct them.(1)MisspellingThank you for coming to my birthday party on las

7、t sunny. (2) tense and voiceI wanted to invited you to watch a new movie with me. (3) subject-verb concordI likes it very much.(4) Qinglish The birthday party I am very happy you can come.You see after remember to contact me on.(5) not being able to tell the part of speechAre you free time this Satu

8、rday?We can went to watch a new movie.I am looking forward to be with you again.(6) writing incomplete sentences Im very like.I very like.【設(shè)計意圖】：讓學(xué)生看看一些典型錯誤句子，發(fā)現(xiàn)問題并改正句子，使學(xué)生對錯誤有認(rèn)識，做到以后在自己的寫作中有意識避免。3. Appreciate some good sentences and find out why they are worth learning.(1)Thank you for coming to my

9、 birthday party and giving me a lovely toy bear. (丁佳瑤)(2) It is very lovely and I like it very much.(陶圓)(3) Your bear is so comfortable that I can sleep with it.(高蓓)(4) Its very cute. I love it very much. So I want to invite you to watch a new movie this Saturday. (岳悅)(5) If you can go with me, I wi

10、ll be very happy.(丁佳瑤)(6) I was delighted that I received your lovely toy bear.(王晨)(7) Do you have any plan for this Saturday? I am going to watch a new movie.(王晨)(8) I would like to invite you to watch a movie this Saturday.(曹鑫)【設(shè)計意圖】：讓學(xué)生欣賞自己班里部分同學(xué)寫得比較好的一些句子，要求學(xué)生讀了這些句子后能說出感受：句子寫得好，好在哪里，使學(xué)生在寫作時有意識去模

11、仿，最后成為一種自己的能力。另外，好句子被展示的同學(xué)也會有一種榮譽感，促使他們再接再厲。4. Show students the four aspects when a teacher assess a passage.（1）內(nèi)容作文內(nèi)容要點全，拓展有度，有效。（2）語法語法使用要準(zhǔn)確，使用較高級語法結(jié)構(gòu)、較高級詞匯及多種句型。（3）框架有意識的使用連接詞使作文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊、流暢。（4）思想思想要開放能，引起讀者的共鳴,靈魂。【設(shè)計意圖】：讓學(xué)生知道老師是如何評價一篇作文的，使學(xué)生知道自己如何能寫出一篇讓老師評價高的作文。5. Show students the six steps before

12、writing a passage.（1）審題包括：體裁、人稱、時態(tài)、結(jié)構(gòu)、要求（包括：字?jǐn)?shù)、內(nèi)容）（2）列提綱/要點/關(guān)鍵詞（3）連詞成句（4）連句成篇（5）潤色修正（6）定稿6. Take the last writing as an example and show students how to write a passage.上周日是學(xué)校外教Kathy的生日，李梅參加了她的聚會并送給她一個可愛的玩具熊。對此，Kathy要表達謝意并發(fā)出邀請，請她本周六一起去看一部新電影。請你幫Kathy完成感謝卡。注意：感謝卡必須包括所有內(nèi)容要點，可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮 感謝卡的開頭與結(jié)尾已為你寫好，不計入總詞數(shù)

13、 詞數(shù)：5060左右 Key words: toy, lovely, go with（1）審題（要求學(xué)生根據(jù)作文話題找到以下的相應(yīng)信息）體裁: 感謝卡（書信格式）人稱: 第三、一人稱時態(tài): 一般過去時，一般現(xiàn)在時結(jié)構(gòu): 兩段要求:字?jǐn)?shù)：60詞左右內(nèi)容：列出要點（2）列提綱/要點/關(guān)鍵詞（要求學(xué)生試著來歸納要點并劃出關(guān)鍵詞）Paragraph1: 非常感謝上周日你來參加我的生日晚會。（thank sb for sth; take part in） 我很高興在我生日的時候有你的陪伴。（be happy to do, be accompanied by sb）你送給我的玩具熊真的很可愛，我很喜歡。(

14、the toy bear, very lovely) 我想邀請你本周六晚上六點和我一起去看部新電影。(invite sb to do sth, go with sb,see a new movie) 據(jù)說那部電影非常的振奮人心。(it is said that, exciting)我想那部電影是值得一看的。(be worth doing)你愿意和我一起去看嗎？（would you like to do, go with sb）Paragraph2: 我盼望著你的答復(fù)。（look forward to doing）（3）連詞成句（要求學(xué)生根據(jù)關(guān)鍵詞寫出完整的句子）Paragraph1: Than

15、k you very much for taking part in my birthday party last Sunday. I was very happy to be accompanied by you at my birthday party. The toy bear which you gave me is very lovely. I like it very much. I want to invite you to see a new movie with me at 6:00 pm this Saturday. It is said that the movie is

16、 very exciting. I think the movie is worth watching. Would you like to go with me?Paragraph2:I am looking forward to your reply.(4)連句成篇（讓學(xué)生讀一讀下面這篇文章，說說讀后的感受）Thank you very much for taking part in my birthday party last Sunday. I was very happy to be accompanied by you at my birthday party. The toy b

17、ear which you gave me is very lovely. I like it very much. I want to invite you to see a new movie with me at 6:00 pm this Saturday. It is said that the movie is very exciting. I think the movie is worth watching. Would you like to go with me?I am looking forward to your reply.【設(shè)計意圖】：教學(xué)生如何做寫作前的準(zhǔn)備，重點

18、展示如何抓住要點并進行適度有效的拓展，然后根據(jù)列出的要點劃出關(guān)鍵詞，接下來連詞成句，連句成篇。然后讓學(xué)生談?wù)勛x完這篇后的感覺，說說可做什么樣的改動來提升。（5）潤色修正（引導(dǎo)學(xué)生找出一些句子之間的關(guān)系，然后讓學(xué)生說出一些表示句與句之間關(guān)系的詞匯并使用它們是原文有所改變） I was very happy to be accompanied by you at my birthday party. The toy bear which you gave me is very lovely. I like it very much. I was happy because you accompan

19、ied me at my birthday party. Whats more, you gave me a toy bear which is so lovely that I like it very much.(I was happy because you not only accompanied me at my birthday party but also sent me a toy bear which is so lovely that I like it very much.)表示并列關(guān)系的詞匯： and, not onlybut also,eitheror, neithe

20、rnor,whats more, in addition, besides等。表示順序的：firstly, secondly, thirdly, lastly, finally, last but not the least等。 Thank you very much for taking part in my birthday party last Sunday. I was happy because you accompanied me at my birthday party. Whats more, you gave me a toy bear which is so lovely

21、that I like it very much. So I want to invite you to see a new movie with me at 6:00 pm this Saturday. It is said that the movie is very exciting.表示因果關(guān)系的詞匯：so, so that, thus, therefore, as a result等表示轉(zhuǎn)折關(guān)系的詞匯：but, however, yet, while等 I think the movie is worth watching. As far as I am concerned, the movie is worth watching.表示自己觀點的詞匯：in my opinion, as far as I am concerned, I think, from my point of view等（6）定稿Dear Li Mei, Thank you for coming to my birthday party last Sunday. I was happy because you accompanied me at my birthday party. Whats more, you gave me a