2013高考上海卷英語作文點評II. Guided WritingDirections: Write an English composition in 120-150 words according to the instructions given in Chinese.上海博物館擬舉辦一次名畫展，現(xiàn)就展出場所（博物館還是社區(qū)圖書館）征集公眾意見，假設你是王敏，給上海博物館寫一封信表達你的想法。你的信必須滿足以下要求：1. 簡述你寫信的目的及你對場所的選擇；2. 說明你的理由（從便利性，專業(yè)性等方面對這兩個場所進行對比）Dear Sir/ Madam,Ive just learned that Shanghai Museum is to hold a famous painting exhibition and youre collecting public suggestions about which location to hold it. Im writing this letter to share with you my opinions. As far as Im concerned, it is more reasonable to hold the painting exhibition in Shanghai Museum than in community libraries. My reasons are as follows.On the one hand, it is more convenient for people to reach Shanghai Museum, located in the center of the city. Visitors can go there by subway and bus and so on. Whats more, Shanghai Museum is much more extensive than community libraries, providing visitors with a more comfortable environment to appreciate the famous paintings.On the other hand, Shanghai Museum, a well-known and distinguished museum at home and abroad, is more professional in holding painting exhibitions. Whats of great significance is that not only does it provide advanced facilities and high-tech monitors but also offers professional security guards to protect those famous paintings from being damaged or stolen in the process of exhibition.Consequently, I strongly propose that the painting exhibition is to be held in the Shanghai Museum. Yours, Wang Min賞析： 今年上海市的高考英語作文話題貼近學生的生活實際，用書信的載體呈現(xiàn)，讓考生對畫展感覺到有話可以說，但是想要達到A類作文，不僅需要有扎實語言功底，還需要對博物館和社區(qū)圖書館及畫展等生活類的語言應用嫻熟，更需要學生從專業(yè)一點的角度，深入分析其選擇的理由，這個層面很多學生很難用專業(yè)的語言區(qū)描述，學生平時學習時間緊張，沒有時間到社會上參加一些社會活動，而且在緊張的時間里，更別提用一些復雜的語言結構區(qū)展示自己的理由，所以學生寫到高分不是很容易，大部分學生得到15/16分是沒有問題的。采取這樣的命題思路對英語教學有較好的反饋作用，學校和家庭不僅僅督促學生的學習更要提供機會讓孩子走出課堂，走向社會，培養(yǎng)學生創(chuàng)造性和批判性思維。提示：生活類詞匯: museum library painting exhibition advanced facility high- tech monitor security guard 分詞的應用：located providing distinguished句型：主語從句 標語從句 倒裝等2012年上海高考英語作文Directions: Write an English composition in 120 - 150 words according to the instructions givenbelow in Chinese.上周一，你在一所小學觀摩了小女孩Amy所在班級的兩堂繪畫課（如圖所示），回家后你用英語寫了一篇日記，內(nèi)容包括： 對兩堂繪畫課的具體描述； 你從中獲得的啟發(fā)。2012 Shanghai English Test writing sample 3( for reference only ) Today I had an unusual experience , which refreshed my mind. With pupils I spent two periods of time in a primary school, watching them learn how to paint. A little girl named Amy, one student of the class, left me a deep impression with her unique painting. In the first lesson the teacher required the pupils to paint freely. Namely , in any way they could draw whatever theyd like to. Amy was the first one to have a try. I saw her think for a little while, take off her shoes, then dip her feet slightly into the paint/ink. Much to my surprise, in a flash she managed to make a nice design on a broad piece of white paper/blanket with both of her feet. What happened next, various of types of works painted by other children appearing before my eyes one by one ,kept me laughing with joy and amusement. Following a break, the second class began. smiling ,the teacher made a brief comment, which was full of praise as well as appreciation. After that ,she gave the students some guidance about the traditional way of painting. With her teachers words in mind , Amy practiced again. Painting-brush in hand ,she sat a desk properly/straight ,paying full attention to her work. This time，with ease and excitement she drew some birds flying high in the sky /sun. Looking back at the two ways of giving a class, I have to admit the teacher was well worth following in matters of cultivating “flowers” in the spirit of originality. Given that children are of great imagination and elasticity in their growth , they are supposed to be given as many chances and opportunities as possible in the course of being educated so as to develop their potential to the full. Were the young always confined to the established ways of doing things without a free world ,one that is also longed for by the ambitious birds drawn by Amy , how can we expect the next generation our civilized nation would be more innovative and creative ?2012 Shanghai English Test writing sample 4( for reference only ) Today I had an unusual experience , which refreshed my mind. With pupils I spent two periods of time in a primary school, watching them learn how to paint. A little girl named Amy, one student of the class, left me a deep impression with her unique painting. In the first lesson the teacher required the pupils to paint freely. Namely , in any way they could draw whatever theyd like to. Amy was the first one to have a try. I saw her think for a little while, take off her shoes, then dip her feet slightly into the paint/ink. Much to my surprise, in a flash she managed to make a nice design on a broad piece of white paper/blanket with both of her feet. What happened next, various of types of works painted by other children appearing before my eyes one by one ,kept me laughing with joy and amusement. Following a break, the second class began. With a smile ,the teacher made a brief comment, which was full of praise as well as appreciation. After that ,she gave the students some guidance about the traditional way of painting. With her teachers words in mind , Amy practiced again. Painting-brush in hand ,she sat a desk properly/straight ,paying full attention to her work. This time，with ease and excitement she drew some birds flying high in the sky /sun. Simple and amusing as it seemed, the two ways of painting are thought-provoking. As is generally accepted ,students ,especially, children have great potential in their growth and development. As a matter of fact, whether their talents can be developed to the full, to a great degree, depends on how children are educated. While some valuable traditions are well worth cherishing, thinking in an original way should be encouraged and emphasized among children when it comes to teaching or education, who are supposed to be characterized by “innovation and creation ”. Only in this way, can they keep in pace with the fast-developing modern world.2011年上海卷高考英語作文范話題：向一個基金會申請2000元做個項目來支持貧困學生，需要包含以下的一些要點1.介紹自己 2.項目具體實施方案 3.2000元如何利用Dear foundation organizers,My name is Jerry Lu, a student currently studying at Shanghai XX High school. I am writing, on behalf of my classmates, to apply for the 2000 yuan worth of fund in a bid to initiate a program aimed at helping those students who are financially disadvantaged.Being raised in families that dont have to worry about putting food on the table need not mean oblivion to our less fortunate peers. On this account, we would appreciate it if you could sponsor our poverty-relief endeavor. The following is how we would go about using the money. We would spend 1500 yuan purchasing some stationery for the needy students at our school. It is worth noting that we would inform them to pick up the school supplies themselves instead of us “doling out” the supplies so that we wouldnt embarrass those who we want to help. The remainder of the fund would be used to invite a motivational speaker who was to talk about how to lift oneself out of poverty by making right academic and professional decisions.Modest as our efforts may sound, we believe they will warm some hearts. Much obliged if you could reply at your earliest convenience. Yours Sincerely, Jerry Lu2010年上海高考作文及范例 下圖是小學新生的課堂一腳，對照你當時的上課情況，作出比較并談談你的感受。你的作文必須包括：描述圖片里學生上課的場景比較你同時期的上課情況簡單談談你的感受As is described in the picture, a group of foreign students are raising their hands to give answers to the question in a joyful and active way. The purpose of the picture is to show us how active the class performance is in the foreign country.Western students are more likely to be open-minded and willing to express their unique ideas in class. Just as the picture shows: When the teacher is asking a question, every child raises their hands and is eager to answer the question. They do not fear giving the in-class performance while others are watching. This scene reminds me of my own class situation when I was at elementary school. As Chinese children are more often than not very conservative and modest, therefore, my teachers usually called a students name if nobody dared to answer the questions. Then the appointed child behaved awkwardly and was reluctant to say just a few words. This recollection makes me feel rather disappointed. In fact, we should at least give a try, whether the answer is perfect or not. Its a chance of learning, more specifically, if we are well-done, we will gain confidence; if not, we will get informed of a better solution, which will provide us experience in the later situation. All in all, its more sensible to be active in class.圖畫式議論文1. 特點： 是通過觀察和分析單幅或一組畫，把圖畫內(nèi)容轉化成文 字信息。2. 注意點：(1). 要認真審圖(2). 需從整體上把握圖畫所呈現(xiàn)的主要內(nèi)容，處理好人物與時空的 關系及局部與整體的關系，找出文章的線索或主題。(3). “豐滿的想象 + 變化的表達”3. 結構： 第一段 描述圖畫，一般不超過三分之一篇幅 第二段 揭示畫旨 （一般一言即可） 第三段 發(fā)表感想、評論或提出建議（占主要篇幅）第四段 簡單談談自己的感受注意：二三兩段可合成一段2009年上海高考作文及范例某海外學校舉辦英語夏令營，開設了如下課程：園藝（gardening），烹飪（cooking）,防身術（self- defence），護理（nursing）。假如你是王躍華（不可以用自己的真實姓名），寫一封申請信，報名參加其中一門課程的學習。信的內(nèi)容必須包括：1、你感興趣的課程 2、你期望從這門課程中學到什么 3、為什么想學這些內(nèi)容 It is said that a summer camp is to be held by your school and a few courses are available to choose from. I am interested in gardening, in that I believe it features my character and personal benefits.During the learning period, I expect to gain some unexpected knowledge. A radical technique Id like to obtain is to know how to tell different species of plants and flowers apart. This helps me to have a clear outlook of those in my garden. Furthermore, the proper cutting time and frequency to water are some other skills I want to learn. A little knowledge concerning choosing suitable soil or the reasonable planting positions will also be a good choice.The mani reason why I choose gardening is that I want to help my parents with their work in the domestic garden. In addition, I find that we students generally lack the knolwdge of gardening, missing a chance to have a word with nature, so that knowing the surroundings is imperitave. Last but not least, by attending the course, I will have a meaningful summer vacation, and drowning myself bewteen plants will by all means add a brilliant touch to my life.2008年上海高考作文及范例你班將組隊參加學校組織的集體舞比賽（group dancing cooipetition)，班長希望大家積極參加。對此談談你的看法。你的文章必須包括以下內(nèi)容：你是否會參加比賽你做出該決定的具體理由Version 1:A group dancing competition will be held in our school and the monitor calls on everybody to take an active part in it. While most of my classmates are still hesitating whether to participate, I have said yes to our monitor with great pleasure.Generally speaking, there are two reasons for my decision. First, it is a good opportunity for me to relax myself, which will enable me to study more efficiently. All work and no play makes Jack a dull boy, so goes the saying, which clearly shows us the importance of relaxation. Besides, I think I am a good dancer after learning dance for more than five years. Participating in the contest will be a golden chance for me to show my dancing skills and make some contributions to the class.For the two reasons mentioned above, it is no surprise that I have such a strong enthusiasm on the group dancing competition.Version 2:Today the monitor calls on everybody to take an active part in the group dancing competition which will be held in a couple of days in our school. But after some careful consideration, I have decided not to participate.There are a number of reasons for my decision. First and foremost, as the College Entrance Exam is just around the corner, study is the top priority for me. Participating in the group dancing competition has to give way because it might take me too much time. Whats more, without any experience of dancing, I dont think I can be a good dancing partner. I am afraid my poor dancing skills will probably spoil the performance of the whole class. In this case, its better for me to be a spectator cheering for my classmates. For these reasons, it seems more appropriate for me to watch the competition than to dance myself.2007年上海高考作文及范例以“禮物”為主題寫一篇作文。該文章必須包括以下內(nèi)容：你送禮物的對象及所送的禮物；該禮物對他（她）可能產(chǎn)生的影響或帶來的變化。A Present for Fathers DayThe Fathers Day will come soon. and I want to give my Dad a present. That is a VIP card of a health club. When I was a little boy, Dad worked hard as a teacher. During term, Mother and I sometimes accompanied Dad in his office till a late hour. From then on, I understood that Dad worked with great effort. There are still too many precious memories which Ill cherish in my heart. And I want to give this present to express my thanks to him.Time flies and Im 18 now. As I grow up, Father is getting older. He is now still diving into piles of books. With the health club membership, I hope that he will make time to do more exercises. I think that he will relax in the health club and make more friends.2006年上海高考作文及范例下表提供了你所心儀的南、北兩所大學的招生信息。通過比較作出選擇，并結合個人情況說明理由。南方大學北方大學學費8000元/年5000元/年招生人數(shù)20人10人優(yōu)惠政策無加20分Version AOf the two universities listed above, I prefer the one in the north. The main reason is that the tuition is only 5,000 RMB for the university a year, compared with 8,000 RMB for the university in the south. This makes a big difference for a family like a mine, because my father is peasant and the only breadwinner in the family. Studying at the northern university can save my father big money.Another reason I take into consideration is the preference policy the northern university offers. Any candidate who chooses to study there may gain an extra 20 points, which greatly raises the possibility of my being admitted to this university. Of course, it doesnt mean that it will be quite easy to pass the entrance exam because this university has limited the number of qualified candidates to 10 only. However, I have been doing quite well in school, so I believe I can pass the entrance exam with flying colors.Version BCompared with the northern university, the southern one is more to my liking. It is true that in terms of tuition the former is 3,000 RMB cheaper than the latter. However, thats not a problem to me because I can work my way through college once I get admitted. What counts is the reputation it has. Once I enter this school, my future career is guaranteed.Also, the university in the south recruits 20 new students instead of 10, which means that I will stand a better chance of getting admitted. The competition is very keen, though, as you can see because this university doesnt give candidates any extra points. So all I can do now is study hard, pass the tough entrance exam, and qualify as a student of the university of my choice.2005年上海高考作文及范例古人云：“天生我材必有用” 請你描述你生活中的一件事，說明人各有所長，無論才能大小都能成為有用的人。Many people, especially those who think they are not as talented as others, tend to give up in their undertakings and thus complain about life. Such people will certainly end up getting nowhere. Notice that most successful people are not unlike us. What makes them stand out is their devotedness to the job they are doing, which is typical of the story of Li Dahua, a neighbor of mine.Dahua was brought up in a poor family. Since he didnt do well in school, he joined his father in collecting garbage for a living soon after he graduated from elementary school. His neighbors shook their heads whenever they saw him, thinking that this boy would by no means carve out a bright future. Years passed by, and Dahua kept collecting garbage, but he took one step further. Through books he knew how to sort out the waste he had collected and have it recycled. You know what? He has set up a recycling factory and become the richest man in town! His success proves the ancient Chinese saying: There must be a use for my talent.2004年上海高考作文及范例老師要求你負責班級墻報(wall newspaper)工作并征求你的意見。在日記中表述你的決定并談談想法。My Diary Thursday, March 11This morning my headmaster had a chat with me. He told me that he decided to choose me to be in charge of the class wall newspaper. He wants to kinow if I am willing to accept the task and what I plan to do for it.First of all, I would like to say I would always set a high value on doing a service for the class. So Im only too willing to be in charge of the wall newspaper. As a student, to do my bit for our class is a good way to put my ability to good use. To help run the wall newspaper can give ful play to my talent. We all know our society needs people full of creativity anf creativity doesnt come from books but from practice. The wall newspaper provideds me with a chance to practise. Im sure I can benefit a lot from it.Secondly, I regard the wall newspaper as a window of our class. It serves as a bridge between the teachers and the students. With the active participation of the whole class I can have it published every two weeks. Through the wall newspaper we can exchange our ways of learning, freely communicate our views on school life, voice our concerns over health cares and even make proposals on the teaching method and the testing system. Some of my classmates are good at drawing. They can help to add colour to the wall n