ContinuationWritingSkillsfortheDescriptionofaseriesofactions讀后續(xù)寫微技巧———動作描寫Howtomakeyourwritingvividandattractive?細(xì)節(jié)描寫(detaileddescription)主要有五類：環(huán)境、動作、心理、情緒、語言(environment、action、psychology、emotionandlanguage)2Step1:Leadin

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strategiestocreateaseriesofactions.

5分解動作，建構(gòu)畫面Example1憨豆先生試圖在考試中作弊。Mr.beanattemptedtocheatintheexam.Duringtheexam,Mr.beanlookedaround,foundeveryonewritingpapersseriously,

slowlymovedtowardshisdeskmate,andattemptedtoglanceathisanswers.在考試期間，憨豆先生環(huán)顧四周（lookaround），發(fā)現(xiàn)(find)每個人都在認(rèn)真寫試卷，然后他的身體慢慢地向他同桌移動(move)，試圖瞥一眼（glanceat）他的答案。Structure:

S+V1...,V2...,V3....andV4.............動作1動作2動作3動作4動作分解后的畫面：6Example27Thestepsweshouldtaketoeathotstrips(辣條)Step1:Step2:Step3:tearupthepackagesqueezeoutonestriptakeabigbite撕開包裝擠出一根大咬一口8

形成動作鏈：剛才湯姆吃了辣條（全過程）。Justnow,Tomtoreupthepackage,squeezedoutonestripandtookabigbite.Structure1:

S+V1...,V2...,andV3....

動作1動作2動作39Justnow,Tomtoreupthepackage,squeezingoutonestripandtakingabigbite.Structure2:

S+V1...,doing..,anddoing....orDoing...anddoing....,S+V3

動作1動作2動作302

Strategy2:generalwords→specificwordsabstractwords→concretewords

101.Olivewentintotheroom,tookhisbag,andwentoutagain.dashed/rangrabbed/grasped/seizedrushedExample1:generalwords→specificwords通用詞匯→明確的詞匯11Olivedashed/ranintotheroom,grabbed/grasped/seizedhisbag,andrushedoutagain.Example2:abstractwords→concretewords抽象詞匯→具體詞匯2.Thecakelookssodelicious.這蛋糕看起來很美味。

Thecakemakes

_________________.

這個蛋糕使我流口水。mymouthwater1203Strategy3:ActionScenes動作面13TheEventOrder(外研社必修一Unit5AnEncounterwithNature):12345①Iwalkedthroughaforest.②Iadmiredthelandscape.③IfeltIwasbeingwatched.④Isawaviolentbear.

⑤Itookaphotoofthebear.⑥Thebearranaway.15

Fillintheblankstocompletethestory:當(dāng)我正聚精會神地拍攝這驚人的景觀時,我突然感覺有什么在盯著我。我慢慢地轉(zhuǎn)身,相機(jī)還端在眼前……然后我僵住了。那是一只熊,離我只有幾米遠(yuǎn)。它也盯著我,水珠從厚厚的棕色皮毛上滴下來。時間凝固了,我和熊都等著看誰會先動。我的雙腿開始顫抖。但我竟然還硬是按下了快門。一秒鐘過后,那頭熊轉(zhuǎn)身跑回了森林。等我從震驚中緩過神來,我查看了相機(jī)。這個可怕至極卻又如此神奇的經(jīng)歷已經(jīng)被永久地定格在一張照片中。

WhileIwasconcentratingonphotographingthisamazingscene,IsuddenlyhadafeelingthatIwasbeingwatched.Slowly,andwiththecamerastillheldtomyeye,Iturned…and1.

______.Onlymetresawayfrommewasabear.Withwaterfallingoffitsthick,brownhair,thebearstaredbackatme.2.______________asthebearandIbothwaitedtoseewhowouldmovefirst.3.

.Somehow,Iforcedmyfingertopressthebutton.Asecondlater,thebearturnedandranbackintotheforest.WhenI4.______________________Ilookedatmycamera.Mymost5._____________________________wasnowcapturedforeverinasingleimage.

frozeTimestoodstillMylegsstartedshakingrecoveredfromtheshockfrighteningbutmagicalexperienceStep3:Summary(Mind-map)

Strategy1.actionchains：S+V1...,V2...,andV3....

S+V1...,doing..,anddoing....orDoing...,anddoing...,S+V3

Strategy2.①:generalwords→specificwords

②:abstractwords→concretewords

Strategy3.actionscenes：

Combinethedescriptionsofactions,facialexpressions,psychologytogethertocreateasceneofactions.Howtomakeyourwritingvividandattractive?16患有腦疾的小男孩David參加越野比賽，賽前他信心動搖想要放棄，“我“鼓勵他積極面對困難，戰(zhàn)勝自我，David接受了我的建議，盡管困難重重他依然勇敢地完成了比賽，贏得其了同學(xué)們的喝彩。(選自2022年高考全國1卷)Step4Consolidation:completethefollowingparagraphfeaturingaseriesofactions請運用所學(xué)技巧續(xù)寫故事第二段：Para2：IwatchedasDavidmovedtothestartinglinewiththeotherrunners.He①__________________________________（轉(zhuǎn)過頭來看著我）andI②__________________________（我豎起大拇指向他示意，我為他感到驕傲）He③_________________________________________________（笑了笑，深吸一口氣，準(zhǔn)備比賽，眼里充滿決心）.Withabang,everyrunner④______________(跑得像箭一樣快).He⑤________________________________________________（盡管腳步異常，還是用盡全身力氣跑）.Eventually，hefinishedtherunning.AsDavid,thelastone,madeittothefinishingline,⑥__________________________.(時間像靜止了一樣)Thunderousapplausebrokeout,withthenameDavidechoingagainandagain.1718患有腦疾的小男孩David參加越野比賽，賽前他信心動搖想要放棄，“我“鼓勵他積極面對困難，戰(zhàn)勝自我，David接受了我的建議，盡管困難重重他依然勇敢地完成了比賽，贏得其了同學(xué)們的喝彩。(選自2022年高考全國1卷)請運用所學(xué)技巧續(xù)寫故事第二段：Para2：IwatchedasDavidmovedtothestartinglinewiththeotherrunners.He①______________________（轉(zhuǎn)過頭來看著我）andI②________________________________________________（我豎起大拇指向他示意，我為他感到驕傲）.He③_______________________________________________________________________________（笑了笑，深吸一口氣，準(zhǔn)備比賽，眼里充滿決心）.Withabang,everyrunner④_______________(跑得像箭一樣快).He