跨越時空的等待：狗狗Spider的尋家之旅1題目分析讀后續寫題目再現語言賞析范文呈現2Part1題目呈現3續寫原文MyfamilymovedfromToowoomba,CanadatoLondonin1950.Mymotherwasingreatpainfromthe1950sepidemicofpolio(小兒麻痹癥).ShewishedtovisitspecialistsinLondon.Thedaybeforeweboardedtheship,Fatherbadeatenderfarewelltohisfive-year-old"friend"atthedock(碼頭),anAustraliancattledog,Spider,whowaslovedbyusall.Father'sfriendSandywastobehisguardianwhilewewereoverseas.Sixweekslater,aletterarrivedfromSandy,givingmyfatherthenewsthatSpiderhadrunawayjusttwoweeksafterwehadsailed.Iwillalwaysremembermyfather'sfacecrumblingandhiseyesglisteningashereadtheletter.Wetriedtocomforthim,knowinginourheartshowuselessthiswas.SandyhadadvertisedconstantlyonABCradioandotherlocalnewspapers.Despitesome"sightings"inthedockatfirst,thedogwasneverfoundlater.ItseemedSpiderdecidedtosearchforuselsewhere.4續寫原文Wesailedbacktwoyearslaterandre-establishedourhomeinToowoomba.MyfatherimmediatelybeganhisownsearchingforSpider.SeveralmonthspassedbuttherewasstillnonewsconcerningSpider.Thedogwasgone,possiblyshotordeadfromstarvationorexhaustion.Onecoldmorningeightmonthsafterourreturn,myfatherhadacallfromanoldladywhosaidshewasputtingfoodoutforaveryolddog.Inthenightthefooddisappeared.Thishadbeengoingonforafewweeks.Thatwasenoughformyfathertointerruptmyhomeworkandwesetoffimmediately.Whenwearrivedattheoldlady'shouse,sheinvitedusintoanoldbush.Sadly,shethentoldusthatthe"dingodog"hadn’tbeenaroundforafewdays.Myfatherhadastrangelookinhiseye.Heputtwofingerstohislipsanddidhisspecialwhistle（口哨）forSpider.GivenSentence:Suddenlytherewasabarkinthebush.5Part2題目分析6續寫原文分析7全家因母親治病搬去英國，Spider被托付給朋友。情節開篇交代了遷徙的背景和原因，為后續故事發展埋下伏筆。Beginning:家庭遷徙與離別Spider跑丟，多方尋找無果。這一情節增添了故事的懸念，引發讀者對狗的安危和能否找回的擔憂。Development:Spider失蹤與尋找全家回國后父親繼續尋找，接到老婦人電話前往卻得知狗已幾天未出現，父親吹口哨。情節再次出現轉機，為續寫提供了廣闊的空間。Climax:家庭回歸與再尋找續寫思路分析8①父親在聽到灌木叢中聲音時的緊張與期待②看到Spider出現時的激動與喜悅③狗是否還活著，如何找到④在灌木叢中尋找的過程⑤對狗身體狀況的擔憂①描寫狗在野外的艱難生存，如覓食、躲避危險，以及它對家的思念，不斷尋找主人②想象狗的生存狀態和與家人重逢的方式，描寫狗聽到口哨聲后的反應，以及家人看到狗時的驚喜和心疼，讓故事更加生動感人。續寫要與原文結構呼應，如開頭和結尾的情感呼應。①開頭描寫父親的擔憂和期待，結尾描寫家庭的團聚和幸福②情感升華，如重逢后的喜悅和對家庭的珍視③描寫家人對Spider的精心照顧，體現家庭的溫暖和對寵物的關愛，升華故事的主題。情感與懸念的延續合理想象與情節發展結構與情感升華010203續寫思路分析Suddenlytherewasasoundinthebush.1.小狗聽到口哨聲從灌木叢中出現。2.家人看到小狗，父親沖過去抱住它。3.家人發現小狗的身體狀況很差。4.帶小狗回家，為它清理身體。5.照顧小狗，小狗逐漸恢復精神。*6.小狗與家人重新建立親密關系，快樂生活。9Part3語言賞析101111動詞的生動運用形容詞/副詞的細膩描寫句式與修辭的運用語言點賞析121212語言點賞析“bade

atenderfarewell（溫柔地告別）”生動描繪父親與狗的深情告別，展現了父親對狗的不舍。“crumbling（破碎）”和“glistening（閃光）”形象地表現父親讀信時的悲痛，生動地描繪了父親的內心世界。“jumpedintomyfather’sarms,lickinghisfaceexcitedly”生動地表現狗的激動和依戀，增強了畫面感。131313語言點賞析“weathered,skinny

andweary-looking”細膩描寫狗的憔悴，生動地展現了狗在野外的艱難生存。“excitedly”生動表現狗重逢時的激動，增強了情感表達。“delicate

careandprofessional

medicaltreatment”細膩描寫家庭對狗的關愛，體現了家庭的溫暖和對寵物的重視。141414語言點賞析疑問句“CoulditbeSpider?”增強懸念和期待，讓讀者產生強烈的好奇心。比喻句“myheartalmostpoundedoutofmychest”生動表達內心的激動，增強了情感的表達。感嘆句“Spider!Myfather’sfacelitupandhiseyesglistened.Eventually,Spiderreunitedwithourfamily!增強了語言的節奏感和感染力，讓讀者感受到家庭團聚的喜悅。15151515五處伏筆以及在續寫中的回應1.

“Spider,whowaslovedbyusall”——回應：續寫中家人對Spider的關愛體現在找到它后的精心照顧，如為它清理、陪伴它恢復。2.

“Sandyhadadvertisedconstantlyonthemedia.Despitemany‘sightings’,thedogwasneverfound.”——回應：暗示小狗一直在流浪尋找主人，續寫中可體現小狗歷經艱難最終找到主人。3.

“Thedogwasgone,possiblyshotordeadfromstarvationorexhaustion.”——回應：找到小狗時它可能又瘦又虛弱，體現父親之前擔憂的合理性。4.

“Onecoldwinter’sSaturdaymorning”——回應：可描述小狗在寒冷環境下的狀態，如瑟瑟發抖，更凸顯找到它后的溫暖。5.“HeputtwofingerstohismouthanddidhisspecialwhistleforSpider.”——回應：續寫中小狗聽到口哨聲有反應，如從灌木叢中跑出來。Part4范文欣賞16范文呈現17Suddenlytherewasabarkinthebush.Whatshockeduswasthat

thebarksoundedsofamiliartous.MyfatherandIjustcouldn'tbelieveourears.CoulditbeSpider?Myheartalmostpoundedoutofmychest

aswefollowedthebark,pushing

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thethickbush.Andthen,aweathered,skinny

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