B3U3ContinuationWriting導(dǎo)學(xué)案（教師版）——構(gòu)造“動作鏈”兩大句式仿寫班級姓名小組___________【學(xué)習(xí)目標(biāo)】1、在續(xù)寫過程中學(xué)會把一個動作結(jié)果拆分成一連串的細(xì)微動作，讓動作生動豐富。2、構(gòu)造“動作鏈”時，精準(zhǔn)地使用兩大句式。【重點難點】重點：分解動作為細(xì)微動作，形成動作鏈。難點：模仿兩大句式，完成仿寫任務(wù)。【導(dǎo)學(xué)流程】學(xué)（5mins）用下面的單詞完成短文，注意使用正確的形式。tellaskcallshoutreplydemandyellcry“Helpme!”1.cried(叫道)thewoman.“Ican’tswim.”Alittlegirlrantothesideoftheboatandlookedintothewater.“Justaminute,”she2.called(喊道)downthewoman.“I’llgoandgetsomehelp.”Thegirlrantowardstwomenstandingontheothersideoftheboat.“Quick.ewithme,”she3.demanded(要求道).“Whatdoyouwant?”4.asked(問道)oneofthemen.“There’sawomaninthewaterandshecan’tswim,”she5.shouted(喊道)pullingattheman’ssleeve(衣袖).Thetwomenrantotheothersideoftheboat.“I’ming!”6.yelled(喊道)oneofthemenandhejumpedintothewater.Heswamquicklytothedrowningwomanandheldontoherarm.“StaystillandI’llpullyoubacktotheboat,”he7.told(對……說)her.讀后續(xù)寫作為記敘文(文體)，其核心只有一個，那就是“人”。因此一切的筆墨，都是為了塑造人物形象，使人物更加飽滿。最為重要的描寫有五類：環(huán)境、動作、心理、情緒、語言動作鏈：把一個動作結(jié)果拆分成一連串的細(xì)微動作，讓動作描寫既豐富又生動。展(15mins)構(gòu)造動作鏈句式一：主語+動作A+動作Band動作C（三個并列謂語，動作依次發(fā)生）【示例】歌手瞥一眼觀眾，深呼吸一下，就開始唱起來。Thesingerglancedattheaudience,tookadeepbreathandbegantosing.仿寫1:Hetookataxitothepolicestation.翻譯:他攔下一輛的士，拿著手提箱跳進去沖著司機說，“去警局。”改寫:He_stopped_ataxi,_jumped_inwiththesuitcaseand_told_thedriver,“Gotothepolicestation,please.”仿寫2:Theboysjumpedintothelaketoplay.翻譯:男孩們興奮地跑到湖邊，脫下衣服，跳入湖中玩耍。改寫:Theboysexcitedly_rushed_tothelake,quickly_took_offtheirclothesand_jumped_intothewatertoplay.仿寫3:Iwenttoschoolinahurrythismorning.翻譯:我早上匆忙穿上大衣，抓起書包，騎著自行車匆忙去上學(xué)了。改寫:I_pulled_onmycoathurriedly,_grabbed_mybagand_cycled_toschoolhurriedlythismorning.仿寫4:Irushedhometogetthecottonhat.翻譯:我沖回家，翻遍我收集的帽子，拿起了那頂棉質(zhì)的。改寫:I_opened_home,_took_throughmycollectionofhatsand_handed_thecottonone.仿寫5:ShelookedatthetrophyandthankedTUNTUN.翻譯:她先看一下獎杯，深吸一口氣，說道：“謝謝吞吞！”改寫:She_glanced_atthetrophy,_tookadeepbreathand_said,“ThankTUNTUN!”構(gòu)造動作鏈句式二：Havingdone…,主謂賓（表示先做了某事，再發(fā)生核心動作）【示例】在銀行排隊等了一個小時后，這個女人變得不耐煩，然后離開了。Havingwaitedinlineforanhouratthebank,thewomangrewimpatientandleft.仿寫1:Afterhavingqueued（排隊）for3hours,shewastoldthattheticketshadbeensoldout.翻譯:排了三個小時隊后，他被告知票賣完了。改寫:_Havingqueued_for3hours,shewastoldthattheticketshadbeensoldout.

仿寫2:Shewanderedaimlesslyinthestreetforhours,thenshefeltalittlehungryandwishedforsomethingtoeat.翻譯:她在街上漫無目的地逛了好幾個小時，感到有點餓，想吃點東西。改寫:_Havingwandered_aimlesslyinthestreetforhours,shefeltalittlehungryandwishedforsomethingtoeat.

仿寫3:Afterhetoldthetruth,hefeltateaseinhismindandreturnedhomewithalighterheart.翻譯:說出真相后,他心里輕松了很多,心情放松地回家了。改寫:_Havingtold_thetruth,hefeltateaseinhismindandreturnedhomewithalighterheart.仿寫4:Aftergettingmypromiseoftendingtomymother,myfatherfeltassuredandloadedhisluggageintothecar.翻譯：得到了我會好好照顧母親的承諾后，爸爸放心地把行李放進車?yán)铩８膶?_Havinggotten_mypromiseoftendingtomymother,myfatherfeltassuredandloadedhisluggageintothecar.仿寫5:Afterfightinginthewarforyears,thesoliderreturnedtohishome,onlytofindhisfamilieshadmovedaway.翻譯:征戰(zhàn)多年后，戰(zhàn)士回到家中，發(fā)現(xiàn)家人已經(jīng)搬走了。改寫:_Havingfought__inthewarforyears,thesoliderreturnedtohishome,onlytofindhisfamilieshadmovedaway.三、釋(5mins)描寫“眼神”:1.lookatsb/sth看著2.stareatsb/sth(withhiseyeswideopen)盯著3.glanceatsb./sth.匆匆一瞥glancearound匆匆環(huán)視四周4.glareatsb.withannoyedexpression怒目而視5.spot發(fā)現(xiàn)sb/sthwasspotted.描寫“手部”:1.throwone’sarmsaroundsb.tightly緊緊地抱著某人2.pat/tapsbontheshoulder拍打某人的肩膀3.holdone’shand握住某人的手4.strokeone’shairgentlyortouchone’shair輕輕撫摸某人的頭發(fā)5.claphishands拍手6.pickup拾起撿起素材積累（動作描寫）描寫“腳步”：1.jumpwithjoy喜悅地跳2.stamp跺腳3.rush/dashto猛沖4.stormoutoftheroom沖出房間5.kneel（過去式/過去分詞knelt）down跪下6.risetoone’sfeet站起來測(25mins)鞏固練習(xí)句式一：主語+動作A+動作Band動作C（三個并列謂語，動作依次發(fā)生）用下面的單詞完成句子，注意使用正確的形式。（注：部分單詞可重復(fù)使用）takejumpthrowaimkneelgathercycleopengrabtakedashslampullhandpickShehuggedhersontightly.翻譯:她沖上前，跪下，把兒子抱在懷里。改寫:She__dashed__forwardwithouthesitation,_knelt_downand__gathered_hersonintoherarmstightly.Macjumpedoffthebicycletoshutthedoor.翻譯:麥克毫不猶豫跳下自行車，沖向車的后門，猛然地關(guān)上車門。改寫:Mac_jumped_offthebicyclewithoutanyhesitation,_dashed__tothebackdoorand_slammed_thedoorheavily.Iwenttoschoolinahurrythismorning.翻譯:翻譯：我早上匆忙穿上大衣，抓起書包，騎著自行車匆忙去上學(xué)了。改寫:I_pulled_onmycoathurriedly,_grabbed_mybagand_cycled_toschoolhurriedlythismorning.Mymumgavefiftydollarstothepooroldman.翻譯:媽媽打開錢包，拿出五十元錢，遞給那個貧困的老人。改寫:Mymom_opened_thepurse,__took__outfiftydollarsand__handed__ittothepooroldman.Shepickedupthephotoandplaceditintothealbum.翻譯:她拿起照片，盯著看一會兒，仔細(xì)放進相冊里。改寫:She__picked_upthephoto,_aimed_atitforawhileand_threw_itcautiouslyintothealbum.句式二：Havingdone…,主謂賓（表示先做了某事，再發(fā)生核心動作）AfterIpromisedthatwewouldgettherebeforefive,Iwasseizedwithpanicwhenthecarbrokedown.翻譯:因為承諾了五點之前我們一定到那兒，所以當(dāng)車拋錨的時候，我非常慌張。改寫:__Havingpromised__thatwewouldgettherebeforefive,Iwasseizedwithpanicwhenthecarbrokedown.

Aftershemadefullpreparations,shestoodbythewindowandexpectedthearrivalofherdaughter.翻譯:做好充分的準(zhǔn)備后，她站在窗邊，期待著女兒的到來。改寫:_Havingmade_fullpreparations,shestoodbythewindow,expectingthearrivalofherdaughter.AfterreceivingtheNimbus2000,HarryPotterwassohappythathedidn’tknowwhattodo.翻譯:哈利波特收到光輪2000后高興得不知所措。改寫:__Havingreceived_theNimbus2000,HarryPotterwassohappythathewasatalosswhattodo.

Afterwaitingforalongtime,Iwalkedtoschoolthroughthesnowbymyself.翻譯:等了很久之后，我獨自在雪地里跋涉到學(xué)校。改寫:_Havingwaited_forwhatseemedtobeages,Itrudgedtoschoolthroughthesnowbymyself.Afterexperiencingsomanyfailuresoneafteranother,shefinallypickedherselfup.翻譯:她接連經(jīng)歷了那么多次失敗后，終于振作起來了。改寫:__Havingexperienced__somanyfailuresoneafteranother,shefinallypickedherselfup.實戰(zhàn)運用：運用讀后續(xù)寫“動作鏈”技巧，把下面的語篇補充完整。Inthemorning,asscheduled,1thetwinsgotupearly,tiptoedtothekitchenandscoopedsomeflouroutofthebag（雙胞胎早早起床，踮著腳走進廚房，從袋子里舀出面粉）(主語+動作A+動作Band動作C,tiptoeto...,scoopsomeflour)Oncetheysetaboutmakingbread，theyfeltconfused.Atthattime,2theirfatherslidintothekitchen,pattingthetwins’shouldersandfortingtheminasoftvoice,（他們的爸爸溜進廚房，輕拍雙胞胎的肩膀，柔聲安慰道）(主語+動作A+動作Band動作C,slideinto,patone’sshoulders,fortsb.)“Don’tquit.Youcanoverethechallenge.”Thetwinsmadethebreadsmoothly.Then,3Thentheycarriedthebreakfast,advancedupstairsandwokeuptheirmother（他們端著早餐，向樓上走去，喊醒他們的媽媽）(主語+動作A+動作Band動作C,carry,advanceupstairs,wakeup).Withhereyesglitteringwithexcitement,themotherwassocontentthatshegatheredherchildrenintoherarms.(2021年新高考I卷讀后續(xù)寫片段)Afewweekslater,Iwenttothefarmagain.

Istillrememberedmyfriends'promisesoIwentpasttheabandonedmilkinghousetoseeiftheyhadfixedthebrokenwindow.To

mysatisfaction,noothertinycreatureswouldmeetthistroubleanymore.AsIapproachedthefarm,Iwasgreetedbyaspicysmellofthebarbecue,urgingmetowalkfaster.Weweretotallyimmersedinthepeacefulatmosphere,enjoyingthedelicatecuisines,talkingaboutourinterestingexperiencesandsingingsongstillthesunset.（享受著精致的美食，談?wù)撝覀兊挠腥そ?jīng)歷，唱著歌直到日落。）(動作A+動作Band動作C,delicatecuisines)enjoyingthedelicatecuisines,talkingaboutourinterestingexperiencesandsingingsongstillthesunset.Itwastimeforustosaygoodbyesowewenttotheparkinglottogether.(2023年1月浙江卷讀后續(xù)寫片段)Afewweekslater,Ialmostforgotthecontestwhenthenewscame.Tomysurprise,Iwasinformedthatmyessayhadrankedfirstinthecontest.Amixofexcitementanddoubtwashedoverme.Havingdoublecheckedit,IcouldnolongercontainmyselfandpromptlysharedthenewswithmyEnglishteacher（再三仔細(xì)檢查后，我再也無法控制自己，立即與我的英語老師分享了這個消息。）(Havingdone…,doublecheck,nolonger,share...with...)Withoutherhelp,Iwouldneverhavehadthechancetoobtainthehonor.MyfacelitupwithjoyasIacceptedtheaward,mysmilefilledwithpride.Ifeltaburstofgratitudewellingupinmyheartandsurgingthoughme.(2023年新高考I卷讀后續(xù)寫片段)Afewweekslater,Iwenttothefarmagain.AsmycarneareditmythoughtsdriftedbacktothemomentwhenIrescuedthehummingbirdfromthespider’sweb.Passingthedesertedhouse,Ispottedthebrokenglass,whichhadbeenfixedperfectly.Itremindedmeofthehummingbird,thetinycutecreature._Havinghadasmallchatwiththehost,Iwasinformedthatshehadn’tebackeversincethatday.（在和主人聊了一會兒之后，我被告知她從那天起就再也沒有回來過。）(Havingdone…,haveachatwith...,inform,eversince)“Perhapssheisenjoyingthevaluablefreedomatthismo