題目原文I’dalwaysbeentoldtotakecareofmyolderbrother,Brian,whowasbornweakandsmall.I’doftentiehisshoesorprepareanotherglassofwaterforhim.MymomsawmylargersizeandstrongbodyasasignthatIwastobeakindofguardianangelforBrian.However,thatwasnotthecase.Onedayourschoolsponsoredapumpkin-carvingcontest.Firstprizewas$100,andIknewjusthowIwouldspendit.Therewasabrand-newgameIwasdyingtoown.SoIdecidedthefirst-placebonusdefinitelyhadtolandinmypocket.WhenIhadtocarvetheperfectpumpkinI’dpickedout,itdawnedonmethatwithmybigclumsyfingersI’dsurelyscrewitup.IthoughtofBrian’ssmaller,delicatehandsandknewhewasthemanforthejob.IimmediatelybeggedBrian.Unexpectedly,heaskedforacut.Thatwasfifty-fifty.Quicklydoingthemathinmyhead,IfiguredoutevenifIsplitthefirstprize,I’dstillhaveenoughcashforthegame.SoIgaveintoBrian’sdemands.Withskillfulhands,Briancarvedtheperfectface,andnowwehadthebestpumpkinever.Thentheunexpectedhappened:Wecameinsecond.Unfortunately,secondprizewasonly$50,andIneededeverypennyofthattobuythegame.Thedayoftheawardsceremony,theprincipalhandedoverthemoneytomebecauseBrianwashome,sickwithacold.Ifhereallywantedtowin,hewouldhavebeenheretoday,Ithoughttomyself,justifyingstealingthecashfromunderpoorBrian’srunnynose.Withhardlyathought,Irantothestoreandboughtmydreamgame.ThatnightwhenBrianaskedifwehadwon,Idenied,afraidtolookintohiseyes.ThewholethingwasnevermentionedagainuntilthedaywhenBrianwaspackingforcollege.IplayedmyusualroleinhelpinghimpackwhenIcameacrossanoldalbumfilledwithphotoshehadtakenastheschoolphotographer.Paragraph1:Iwasenjoyingthephotoswhenonecaughtmyeye.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:“Youactuallyknewanddidn’tsayanything?”Iwasshocked.————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————文本主旨“我”Brian更加深厚。同時也體現了“我”在得知真相后的愧疚以及決心改正，做一個更好的弟弟，守護這份親情。詞匯積累1.：吸引某人的目光。文中“Iwasenjoyingthephotoswhenonecaughtmyeye.”表示一張照片吸引了“我”的注意。2.a：（心臟）突然停跳，此處指心跳加速，形容驚訝或激動的心情。“ButwhatmademyheartskipabeatwasthesmallnoteBrianhadwrittenontheback.”說明紙條上的內容讓“我”十分震驚。3.a：喉嚨哽咽，形容因激動、難過等情緒而說不出話。“Istaredatthewords,feelingalumpforminmythroat.”生動描繪出“我”看到紙條后的情緒反應。4.“MemoriesofallthetimesIhadbeenlessthankindtohimfloodedmymind...”形象地體現出“我”開始回憶過去對哥哥不好的種種時刻。5.a：使某人深受打擊。“Hiswordshitmelikeatonofbricks.”突出哥哥的話給“我”帶來的強烈沖擊。6.：放下。“Iputdownthealbumandwalkedovertohim...”描述了“我”放下相冊走向哥哥的動作。7.a“wrappinghiminatighthug”表達了“我”對哥哥的情感釋放。續寫分析1.銜接句：第一段首句“Iwasenjoyingthephotoswhenonecaughtmyeye.”承接上文提到的在幫Brian收拾行李時看到舊相冊，自然地引出關鍵照片及背后的紙條，從而推動情節發展。第二段首句“‘Youactuallyknewanddidn’tsayanything?’Iwasshocked.”則是基于第一段紙條內容的發現，直接引出與Brian的對話，銜接緊密，過渡流暢。2.Brian知曉“我”他一直以來寬容善良的性格特點。在比賽時他提出分成，說明他對金錢并非完全不在意，但在親情面前選擇了讓步。而“我”在Brian中，整個情節發展符合人物性格和故事邏輯。3.“我”一直被要求照顧Brian南瓜雕刻比賽獎金這件事上表現自私，這為后文“我”的愧疚埋下伏筆。Brian對“我”愿意幫“我”“我”偷錢后選擇沉默這一情節的情感鋪墊充足，不顯得突兀。情感走向起初，“我”看到紙條時內心充滿震驚與愧疚，回想起過去對Brian的Brian“我”自身行為的悔恨。最后，“我”與Brian擁抱和解，情感變得溫暖而堅定，決心要守護這份兄弟情，情感基調從低沉轉向積極向上。主題深化來。Brian的寬容讓“我”認識到親情的珍貴，不能因一時的自私而破才能讓親情更加牢固。下水文一Paragraph1:Iwasenjoyingthephotoswhenonecaughtmyeye.Itwasapictureofthepumpkinwecarvedtogether.ButwhatmademyheartskipabeatwasthesmallnoteBrianhadwrittenontheback.Itread,“Iknewyoutookthemoney.Ijustdidn'twanttoruinourrelationship.”Istaredatthewords,feelingalumpforminmythroat.Thisdiscoverywaslikeawake-upcall.Alltheseyears,Ihadbeenlivingwithmyselfishact,thinkingIwasgettingawaywithit.ButBrianhadseenthroughmeandstillchosetoloveme.IrealizedhowmuchIhadgrownupsincethen.Iusedtobesofocusedonmyowndesires,butnow,lookingatthisnote,Ifeltastrongurgetomakethingsright.MemoriesofthetimesIhadletBriandownfloodedmymind,andIknewIcouldn'tkeepbeingthatperson.Paragraph2:“Youactuallyknewanddidn’tsayanything?”Iwasshocked.Brianlookedupfromhispackingandsmiledgently.“You'remybrother.Iloveyou.Iknewhowmuchthatgamemeanttoyou.AndIwassickthatday,soIcouldn'treallygotoclaimtheprizeanyway.”Hiswordshitmelikeatonofbricks.Inotonlyfeltguiltybutalsoinspired.Iputdownthealbumandwalkedovertohim,wrappinghiminatighthug.“I'msosorry,Brian.Iwaswrong.Ishouldhavenevertakenthemoney.Youdeservedhalfofit.”Brianhuggedmeback.“It'sokay.Let'sjustforgetaboutit.We'rebrothers,andthat'swhatmatters.”Fromthatdayon,Imadeapromisetomyself.IwouldnotonlybeabetterbrothertoBrianbutalsousethisexperiencetobecomeamorehonestandcaringpersoninallaspectsofmylife.IwouldnolongerletmydesirescloudmyjudgmentandwouldalwaysprioritizethefeelingsofthoseIloved.下水文二Paragraph1:Iwasenjoyingthephotoswhenonecaughtmyeye.Itwasapictureofthepumpkinwecarvedtogether.ButwhatmademyheartskipabeatwasthesmallnoteBrianhadwrittenontheback.Itread,“Iknewyoutookthemoney.Ijustdidn'twanttoruinourrelationship.”Istaredatthewords,feelingalumpforminmythroat.AsIstoodthere,memoriesofthatdaycamefloodingbackevenmorevividly.IrememberedhownervousIwaswhenBrianfirstaskedforacutoftheprize.IwassofocusedongettingthatgamethatIdidn'tevenconsiderhisfeelingsproperly.Now,lookingatthisnote,IsawallthetimesIhadbeenimpatientwithhimwhenheneededhelptyinghisshoesorgettingaglassofwater.Irealizedhowmuchhehadenduredfromme,yethestillheldontoourbrotherlybond.Paragraph2:“Youactuallyknewanddidn’tsayanything?”Iwasshocked.Brianlookedupfromhispackingandsmiledgently.“You'remybrother.Iloveyou.Iknewhowmuchthatgamemeanttoyou.AndIwassickthatday,soIcouldn'treallygotoclaimtheprizeanyway.”Hiswordshitmelikeatonofbricks.Iputdownthealbumandwalkedovertohim,wrappinghiminatighthug.“I'msosorry,Brian.Iwaswrong.Ishouldhavenevertakenthemoney.Youdeservedhalfofit.”Brianhuggedmeback.“It'sokay.Let'sjustforgetaboutit.We'rebrothers,andthat'swhatmatters.”Fromthatdayon,everytimeIthoughtofBrian,Iwouldalsorememberthismomentoftruth.Iwouldrecallallthelittleandbigthingshehaddoneformeovertheyears.AndImadeasolemnvowtomyself.Iwouldcherishourrelationship,andwheneverIwasfacedwithachoice,IwouldalwaysthinkofhowmyactionswouldaffectBrian.Iwouldbethebrotherhetrulydeserved,makingupforallthetimesIhadfallenshortinthepast.參考答案Paragraph1:Iwasenjoyingthephotoswhenonecaughtmyeye.Itwasapictureofthepumpkinwecarvedtogether.ButwhatmademyheartskipabeatwasthesmallnoteBrianhadwrittenontheback.Itread,“Iknewyoutookthemoney.Ijustdidn'twanttoruinourrelationship.”Istaredatthewords,feelingalumpforminmythroat.Alltheseyears,IhadthoughtIgotawaywithit,butBrianhadknownallalong.Icouldn'tbelieveIhadbeensoselfishandthathehadbeensoforgiving.MemoriesofallthetimesIhadbeenlessthankindtohimfloodedmymind,andIfeltanoverwhelming