高考英語讀后續寫語篇練習當老人接到了詐騙電話1題目分析讀后續寫題目再現范文呈現努力方向2Part1題目呈現3續寫原文GrandpaBillRodgershasnarrowlyescapedaphonescam(欺騙).Itallbeganwithatelephonecall.BillisanelderlymanfromCincinnati,Ohio,whowaslookingforwardtospendingtimewithhisfamilyovertheholidays.TheywereallcomingtovisithimathisElmwoodPlacehome,includinghisadultgrandsonDavid.Oneafternoon,whilenappinginbed,hewasawakenedbythesharpringingofhistelephone.4續寫原文“Whowillringmeupatthistime?”Hewondered.Peeringtowardsthephone,hehesitantlypickeditup.Fromthereceivercameanurgentvoice.“Grandpa,thisisDavid.Iamintrouble.”BeforeBillcouldaskhimanyquestion,hecontinued,onandoff,halfcrying,“Ihitawoman’scarandshewassevenmonthspregnant.AndtheychargedmewithdrunkendrivingandI’minprison...”Hesobbedloudly.HisvoicewassobrokenthatBillcouldhardlymatchitwiththegentleandwarmvoiceofhisgrandson.PoorDavid!Hemustbesuffering!Billpanicked(驚慌)immediately.5續寫原文Withoutmoredetailedcommunication,thephonepassedsuddenlytoanotherperson—David’slawyerwhohadadeepervoice.Seemingly,heunderstoodBill’sanxietyandattemptedtocomforthimwithasolution.“NowtheonlywaytohelpDavidistogotoWal-Martandtransfer$2,300toanotherstore.IwouldpickupthemoneyandthenuseittopostDavid’sbail(保釋金).”“IamsureeverythingwouldbeOKaslongasthemoneyisinplace,”headded.Ultimately,heloweredhisvoice,“Don’ttellanybody.Youdon’twanttomakeyourgrandsonlookuglyinyourneighborhood.”ThelawyerhungupevenbeforeBillcouldgiveananswer.6段首句Para1：Billwastotallyataloss.Para2：TheluckypartofBill’sdaywaswhenhesteppedintocashierMary’slineinWal-Mart.7Part2題目分析8續寫原文分析9本文以人物為線索展開，講述了老人Bill一天突然接到一個電話，電話里稱孫子David遇到了麻煩，被指控酒后駕車，現在關在監獄里。律師告訴老人唯一能幫助David的方法就是去沃爾瑪把2300美元轉到另一家商店，然后用它來交David的保釋金。并且囑咐老人不要把這件事告訴別人。點1：位于續寫第一段段首，流暢銜接前面的記敘文和第一段段首語；點2：位于續寫第一段段尾，流暢銜接第二段段首句；點3：位于續寫第二段段首，續寫銜接第二段段首語；點4：文章結尾升華，給予讀者正能量，揭示和強調主題。情節構建的重點10續寫思路分析Para1:Billwastotallyataloss.由第一段首句內容“Bill完全不知所措。”可知，第一段應該描寫老人想盡辦法救孫子，取了錢去沃爾瑪轉錢。11續寫思路分析Para2：TheluckypartofBill’sdaywaswhenhesteppedintocashierMary’slineinWal-Mart.由第二段首句內容“Bill一天中最幸運的時刻是，他走進了沃爾瑪并且遇到了收銀員Mary。”可知，第二段應該描寫Mary怎樣幫助老人識破騙局，使錢財沒有損失。12續寫素材續寫素材取錢——匆忙去轉錢——遇到Mary——詢問——幫助老人——識破騙局13續寫素材續寫素材行為類①抓起：grab/catch/snatchup②拒絕：refuse/reject/decline/turndown③泄露：reveal/leakout/letout情緒類①心碎：heartbreaking/heartrending/heart-broken②懷疑：doubtful/skeptical/suspicious/incredulous14續寫素材續寫素材[高分句型1]NotingBill’sdesperateandanxiouslook,Maryinstantlyknewsomethingwaswrong.(運用了現在分詞作狀語和省略that的賓語從句)[高分句型2]DavidwassafeandsoundandBillrealizedthathenearlyfellvictimtoaphonescam!(運用了that引導的賓語從句)15Part3范文呈現16范文呈現Billwastotallyataloss.HismindwentblankandDavid’sheartbreakingsobswereechoinginhisears.Withoutasecondthought,hequicklygrabbedhisbankcardanddecidedtosparenoefforttogotoDavid’srescue.Withthecardtightlyinhishand,herushedouttothebank.Afterwithdrawingthemoney,hewentstraighttothelocalWal-Mart.Hewasoverwhelmedbythethought“Sendthemoneyandmygrandsonwillbesaved”.17范文呈現TheluckypartofBill’sdaywaswhenhesteppedintocashierMary’slineinWal-Mart.NotingBill’sdesperateandanxiouslook,Maryinstantlyknewsomethingwaswrong.Yet,havingthelawyer’swordsinmind,Billstubbornlyrefusedtoleakoutanyinformationandinsistedontransferringthemoney.SuddenlyanideahitMary.“Iguessyouareworryingaboutsomebody.Ibetifyoucallhimrightnow,hewillanswerthecall.”shesuggested.Thoughdoubtful,Billpressedthetelephonekeys.Theendingcanbeexpected:DavidwassafeandsoundandBillrealizedthathenearlyfellvictimtoaphonescam!18范文譯文比爾完全不知所措。他腦子一片空白，大衛令人心碎的抽泣聲在他耳邊回響。他毫不猶豫地迅速抓起銀行卡，決定不遺余力地去救大衛。他緊緊地握著卡片，沖向銀行。取完錢后，他直接去了當地的沃爾瑪。他被“把錢寄出去，我孫子就會得救”的想法淹沒了。比爾一天中最幸運的部分是，他走進沃爾瑪收銀員瑪麗的隊伍。瑪麗注意到比爾絕望而焦慮的神情，立刻知道出了什么事。然而，考慮到律師的話，比爾固執地拒絕泄露任何信