金十二校讀后續寫解析Forcourage,myfingersclungtotheharness(背帶、保護帶)onCho'sbroadbackaswepassedthefenceofmyneighborMr.Groll'syard.WalkingbyMr.Groll'syardisthebestpartofourmorningwalk,andalsotheworst.Itisthebestpartbecausetherosestalktous.“Goodmorning,Cho,”whispertherosescentstomyguidedog'snose.Otherrosesshouttome,“Hello,Mai!”Nowcomestheworstpart:Mr.Groll.Asusual,friendlyChthumpshertail.ButCh6isjustadog;howcansheknowthatthisneighbordoesnotlikemeatall?“Hello,Mr.Groll.”IgreetedhimasIdideverymorning.Andlikeeveryothermorning,hedidnotanswerme.ButIknewhewasthere,watching,behindhisfence.Healwayssoundsoutofbreath.andthecreakygateswingsnervouslyinhishand.Maybehe'safraidofmebecauseI'mblind.Disabilitiesdoscaregrown-upssometimes.ThenIremembered:theotherdayIheardhimplayingcheckers(西洋跳棋)withmyfriendJimmy,who'sinawheelchair.Ch6andImarchedon,andmythoughtskeptstep.WhydidMr.Grollignoreme?It'samysterytome.Papahastoldmethatsomefolksdonotlikepeoplefromfarawayplaces.Doesthissolvethemystery?MaybeMr.Grolldoesnotlikeneighborsfromfarawayplaces.No,thatcan'tbeit.EverySaturdayMr.Grollandmybigbrother,Lien,helpeachotherwithyardwork.Theyarefriends.Well,then,Iwondered,whywouldn’thetalktome?Thetoeofmyshoescuffedthesidewalk.andIthink,maybehedidn'tlikemebecauseI'magirl.Thesidewalkhummedbeneathmyfeet.Askateboardzoomedby.“Hello,MaiandCho!”myfriendJanayelled.“Hi,Mr.Groll”Iwaited.IfMr.GrollignoredJana,thenthemysterywassolved.Buthisvoicecalledout,“Hello,Jana!”Paragraph1:Thesoundofittwistedmyheart.Paragraph2:“ItisCh6thatscaresmywordsaway.”hereplied.文本解讀：可遷移性短語：有描寫主人公Mai的“clingto”，“mythoughtskeptstep”，形容Chó的“thumphertail”和Mr.Groll的“outofbreath”等。1.緊緊握住(抓住不放;貼近)clingto2.thumphertail.甩尾巴3.氣喘吁吁outofbreath4.marchon繼續前進5.mythoughtskeptstep邊走路邊思考6.我的鞋尖刮擦著人行道Thetoeofmyshoescuffedthesidewalk.7.人行道在我的腳下發出喻喻聲Thesidewalkhummedbeneathmyfeet.滑板快速經過Askateboardzoomedby.把...嚇跑scaresb./sth.away情節理解：故事主要圍繞著主人公Mai和她的導盲犬Chó以及鄰居Mr.Groll展開。Mai發現Mr.Groll對她冷漠，開始思考他為什么不喜歡她。她排除了自己來自遙遠地方的原因，然后懷疑是因為她的女孩身份。但當她的朋友Jana經過時，Mr.Groll卻友善地和她打招呼，這使得她對Mr.Groll的態度更加困惑。原文怎么“說”：通過主人公Mai的視角，描繪了她和導盲犬Chó的早晨散步，以及與鄰居Mr.Groll的互動。用簡潔而生動的語言，展示了Mai對周圍環境的感知和對鄰居冷漠行為的思考。行文中出現多種“說”的表達方式，可供學生把握情節和人物情緒，利于之后續寫的展開。1.Goodmorning,Cho,whispertherosescentstomyguidedog'snose."whisper”描述玫瑰花香對導盲犬Ch的輕聲說話2.Otherrosesshouttome,“Hello,Mai!”"shout"表示其他的玫瑰對主角大聲說話。3.“Hello,Mr.Groll.”Igreetedhimasl"greeted"表示主角向Mr.Groll問好，是dideverymorning.種禮貌的說話方式。Andlikeeveryothermorning,hedidnotanswerme.雖然這句話并沒有直接用到表示說話的動詞但"answer”暗示了通常在說話中的互動。這句話是主角的內心猜想，并不是直接的說話表達，但它反映了主角對情境的理解。4.Maybehe'safraidofmebecauseI'mblind.Theotherdaylheardhimplaying"heard”在這里說明主角聽到Mr.Groll和Jimmy在玩西洋跳棋，涉及到說話的場景checkerswithmyfriendJimmy,who'sinawheelchair.5.“Hello,MaiandCh!”myfriendJana"yelled”描述Jana大聲向主角和她的導盲犬打招呼。yelled.“Hi,Mr.Groll.”Iwaited.Buthisvoicecalledout,"Hello,Jana!"這里"Hi"是主角對Mr.Groll的簡短問候。“calledout”描述Mr.Groll對Jana的回應他大聲地說出了問候語。主題：理解他人的困難和建立友誼的重要性寫作思路:根據原文，我們可以看到Mai正在嘗試理解和解決一個社會性的謎題:為什么Mr,Groll會選擇性地忽視某些人。這種探索不僅展示了Mai對于自我認知和社會互動的敏感性，也反映了她的思維過程是開放和多角度的。她沒有立即下結論，而是通過觀察、回憶和邏輯推理來逐步剖析問題，并且在這個過程中保持了對他人的尊重和理解。盡管Mai是盲人，但她展現了對周圍世界的深刻洞察力和強烈的求知欲，這是故事中非常重要的主題.從段首句看，Mr.Groll的沉默并非是因為他不喜歡Mai，而是因為他害怕Ch6，也就是Mai的導盲犬。這個揭示出來的答案與Mai之前的種種猜測完omm全不同，她曾經以為Mr.Grol1可能因為她的盲目、她的性別，或者她來自遙遠的地方而對她產生敵意但實際上，MrGrol1對她的冷淡只是因為他害怕她的導盲犬。這個結果讓Mai感到心痛，可能是因為她一直把Ch6當作自己的朋友和伙伴，而現在卻發現Ch6成為了她與鄰居交流的障礙。這是一個關于誤解、預設觀念和真實理解之間差距的故事，提醒我們在對寺他人的行為時，應該保持開放和理解的態度，而是立即做出判斷。參考范文：Para.1Thesoundofittwistedmyheart.Itwasaconfirmationofmyfearsthattheissuewaswithme,aninvisiblewallbetweenusthatIhadnotknownhowtoscale.Mythoughtsswirledwithquestionsandtheories,eachasunlikelyasthenext.Wasitmyblindness,orsomethingelseaboutmethatkepthimatsuchadistance?Cho'ssteadypresenceatmysidewasacomfortingweightagainstthestingofrejection,herloyaltyasilentpromisethatnotallconnectionsweresoeasilybroken.Para.2“ItisChothatscaresmywordsaway,’hereplied.Thisrevelation(披露的真相startledme,asChohadalwaysbeenagentleguideandcompanion,neveronceasourceoffear.IwonderedifperhapstherehadbeenanincidentinMr.Groll'spastthathadlefthimwaryofdogs.UnderstandingbegantoreplacethehurtIhadfelt;thiswasn'taboutme,butratherhisownfears.Adialoguehadopened,achancetoaddresstheunspokentension,andmaybe,withtime.wecouldfindcommonground.默寫版：Para.1Thesoundofittwistedmyheart.Itwasaconfirmationofmyfearsthattheissuewaswithme,____________________________我們之間有一面無形的墻thatIhadnotknownhowtoscale.________________________________我的思想充滿了問題和理論,eachasunlikelyasthenext.Wasitmyblindness,orsomethingelseaboutmethat________________________讓他保持如此的距離?Cho'ssteadypresenceatmyside________________________是抵御拒絕刺痛的一種安慰,herloyaltyasilentpromisethatnotallconnectionsweresoeasilybroken.Para.2“ItisChothatscaresmywordsaway,’hereplied.Thisrevelation(披露的真相__________________驚到了我,asChohadalwaysbeen_________________一個溫柔的向導和伙伴,neveronceasourceoffear.IwonderedifperhapstherehadbeenanincidentinMr.Groll'spastt