專題六寫作第二節一一■讀后續寫.把脈考情明考向.知規律新高考命題探究一一以浙江卷3年高考為例一項目卷別寫作文體命題類型材料詞數主題范圍2020-模擬卷敘事類記敘文半開放330人與自我?我和流浪狗的故事2018年6月故事類記敘文半開放類320人與自我?父親帶兒子去體驗農場生活2017年11月故事類記敘文半開放類338人與自我?和父母一塊去旅游的故事2017年6月故事類記敘文半開放類344人與自我?和朋友一起騎車游玩，野外遇到狼的故事2016年10月故事類記敘文半開放類332人與自我?野外游玩，女主人迷路在野外獨自過夜的故事綜合分析上表并結合最新考綱和2020年模擬卷，我們可以大膽預測2020年新高考讀后續寫會有以下命題特征：.寫作文體寫作文體仍然會繼續考查敘事類文體，所選材料一定具有更強的故事性、邏輯性?????的特點。.命題形式要求考生依據所給材料內容和段落開頭語進行續寫（150詞左右），將其發展成一篇與給定材料有邏輯銜接、情節和結構完整的短文。所給的段落提示句均是故事情節發展的過程句，對續寫故事的發展有提示、引導和限制作用。明年續寫部分的設置會更合理，這樣才能更好地激發學生的想象力，學生都有話可說，有內容可寫。.主題范圍主題范圍將仍然圍繞人與自我、人與社會、人與自然三大主題，內容來自學生的???? ???? ???? ???實際生活或是學生關心的話題。續寫話題將會更加彰顯人性光輝，體現人與自然???????????和諧相處的文章出現的可能性非常大，因為這樣的文章更適合考查學生的邏輯思維、評判性思維和創新思維能力。I真題再做北能力.知不足A閱讀下面材料，根據其內容和所給段落開頭語續寫兩段，使之構成一篇完整的短文。續寫的詞數應為150左右。（2020?模擬卷）Thoughitisoneofthefadedmemoriesofmylifetoday,therearetimeswhenIrememberhisfaceclearly,especiallyhiseyes.AshehadyellowspotsonhiseyeswecalledhimSpotty.Hewouldhavebeenastray前浪）dog,untilhecametome.Iwassevenyearsold.MydadhadjustgotanewjobinNasik.Wehadmovedintoarentedhouse.Itwasrainingveryheavilyonthedaywemoved.Itwasacolddarknight.Wehadourmealandwenttosleep.SomehowinthemidnightIheardsomestrangesoundsoutsidethemaindoor.IgatheredcourageandlookedoutthroughthewindowandIwasreallyamusedwithwhatIsawoutside.Therewasasmallpuppylyingonanolddoormatwhichmymotherhadputoutsidethedoor.Itwaswetandtrembling.Atfirstitwasdifficulttoseethelittleone.Itwastheyellowspotsonitseyesthatmademerealizeitspresence.ItwastryingtogetunderthedoormattoavoidthecoldairoutsideandithadmanagedtogetinasIcouldseeonlyitsheadoutsidethedoormat.Wasitsickorinjured?Ifeltpityforthepoorsoul.Iwentinandcameoutwithanoldtowel.Iwentneartheinnocentoneandhelditinmyhandandwipedthepuppytillhehadbecomedry.Itookhimintomyroomandmadeabedforhimwithawoolenblanketandasmallpillow.Heseemedveryhealthyandcomfortableinhisnewbedashewenttosleepimmediately.Thenextmorning,everyoneinthefamilycametoknowabouttheunusualguest."Shallwekeephimwithus?”Iquestionedmymom.Likeanyotherparentswould,myparentsfirsttotallyrefusedmyideabutmysisterandIconvincedthemtokeepSpotty.SlowlySpottygotonwitheveryoneandbecameoneofthefamilymembers.Paragraph1：DayspassedonandoneeveningwhenSpottyreturnedfromhislongwalk,heappearedveryexhausted.Paragraph2：Almostayearlater,onemidnightweheardSpottybarkingbreathlessly.【參考范文】Paragraph1：Dayspassed__on_and_one__evening_when__Spotty_returned__fromhislongwalk,heappearedveryexhausted.Hecametomyroomandsatnearme.ItwasthenthatIsawhishindlegwasinjuredandwasbleeding.Icalledoutmymotherandshequicklytiedabandagearoundhislegandgavehimfoodtoeat.Iwasveryupset.Butthenextday,Spottywasuptohisusualpranksthoughhelimpedabit.AfterthisincidentmyrelationwithSpottybecamemoreintense.Ireallyadmiredhimalotforhiscourage.Paragraph2：Almostayearlater,onemidnightweheardSpottybarkingbreathlessly.Wecameoutandsawthathewasbarkingcontinuouslyheadingsomewhere.AftersometimeSpottybecamequiet.Ipattedhimonhisbackandcameinside.Thenextdaymorning,myheartskippedabeatwhenIdidn,tseeSpotty.Isearchedforhimineachandeverycornerbuthewasnowhere.Andthistimehehadgoneandwouldnevercomeback.Icriedandwaitedforhim.Wewaitedforonelongweek.Buttherewerenosignsofhim.ThenonedaymyDadgottransferredtoMumbai.WeshiftedbacktoMumbai.WhatwouldhavehappenedtoSpotty?Wouldhehavedied?Theseweretheonlyquestionsinmymind,buttheyallremainedunansweredforever.B閱讀下面短文，根據所給情節進行續寫，使之構成一個完整的故事。（2018年6月.浙江高考）Itwassummer,andmydadwantedtotreatmetoavacationlikeneverbefore.HedecidedtotakemeonatriptotheWildWest.WetookaplanetoAlbuquerque,abigcityinthestateofNewMexico.WereachedAlbuquerqueinthelateafternoon.Uncle二Paul,mydad,sfriend,pickedusupfromtheairportanddroveusuptohisfarminPecos.HiswifeTinacookedusadeliciousdinnerandwegottoknowhissonsRyanandKyle.MydadandIspentthenightintheguestroomofthefarmhouselisteningtothefrogsandwaterrollingdowntherivernearby.Veryearlyinthemorning,UnclePaulwokeusuptohavebreakfast.“Thedaystartsatdawnonmyfarm，”hesaid.Afterbreakfast,IwenttohelpAuntTinafeedthechickens,whilemydadwentwithUnclePaultotakethesheepouttograze（吃草）1wasimpressedtoseemydadandUnclePaulridinghorses.Theylookedreallycool.Intheafternoon,IaskedUnclePaulifIcouldtakeahorseride,andhesaidyes,aslongasmydadwentwithme.Iwasn,tgoingtotakeahorseridebymyselfanyway.So,mydadandIputonournewcowboyhats,gotonourhorses,andheadedslowlytowardsthemountains.“Don,tbelateforsupper，”UnclePaulcried,“andkeeptothetracksothatyoudon,tget10st！”“OK！”mydadcriedback.AfterawhileUnclePaulandhisfarmhousewereoutofsight.Itwassopeacefulandquietandthecolorsofthebrownrocks,thedeepgreenpinetrees,andthelateafternoonsunmixedtocreateamagicscene.Itlookedlikeabeautifulwoven（編織的）blanketspreadoutuponthegroundjustforus.注意：1.所續寫短文的詞數應為150左右；.至少使用5個短文中標有下劃線的關鍵詞語；.續寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語已為你寫好；.續寫完成后，請用下劃線標出你所使用的關鍵詞語。Paragraph1：Suddenlyalittlerabbitjumpedoutinfront0fmyhorse.Paragraph2：Wehadnoideawherewewereanditwasgettingdark.【文章大意】父親帶兒子去西部荒野的一個朋友家喂雞牧羊，體驗農場生活，見父親和叔叔騎馬很是瀟灑，兒子也很想騎，于是親身上馬體驗……【寫作指導】 第一段所給首句Suddenlyalittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhorse.是故事發展的轉折點，可從rabbit出現后帶來的結果入手，可以寫馬受到驚嚇狂奔而去，也可以寫人的反應，無論從何角度拓展，需注意與續寫第二段首句呼應。第二段首句Wehadnoideawherewewereanditwasgettingdark.呼應前文UnclePaul的叮囑——不要耽誤吃晚飯，可從如何尋路返回農場來寫。已給提示詞匯：dad，UnclePaul，farmhouse，river，feed，sheep，late，track，getlost，sight話題激活詞匯：情感：panic，relief，nervous，worried；動作：run，cry，thinktooneself；環境：shower，mountain，forest，valley，tree，lake，sun【參考范文1】Paragraph1：Suddenlyalittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhorse.DadandIfounditwassocutethatwedecidedtochaseit.Afterawhile,wewerecompletely10stintheforest.Therewasnothingleftinoursightbutthetrees."Wemaynotbeabletomakeitbacktothefarmhouseintimeforsupper.”Ithoughttomyself.Afteraseriesoffruitlessattemptstofindawayout,wefelthungryandtired.Paragraph2：Wehadnoideawherewewereanditwasgettingdark.Wegotstuckintheforest.Andanunexpectedshoweraddedtoourdifficultyinfindingawayhome,forallthetrackswehadmadedisappearedbecauseoftherain.Iwasalmostontheedgeofbreakingdownwhenmyfathersaid,“Don,tworry,myson.Irememberthereisarivernearthefarmhouse.Findtheriverandwewillbebackhome.”Finally,wefoundtheriverandgotbacktothehousealongit.Needlesstosay,weatealatedinner.【參考范文2】Paragraph1：Suddenlyalittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhorse.MyhorseturnedtothelefttoavoidthelittlerabbitasIheldontightlyandtriednottofall.Thenmydadturnedaroundandshouted,“Holdon!”Allofasuddenthehorsebegantorun.Mydadtriedtokeepupbehindus.Forafewminutesmyhorsesloweddownandthenstoppedbesideariver.Ilookedaroundandrealizedthatwewereawayoffthetrack.Paragraph2：Wehadnoideawherewewereanditwasgettingdark.Luckilythestarscameoutandgaveusalittlelightwhenwewerelookingforthewaytothefarmhouse.Afterwhatmusthavebeenseveralhours,wesuddenlyheardthesoundofsheepinthedistance.MydadandIbothrodeourhorsestowardsthesoundofthesheep.AswegotcloserwesawUnclePaulwithaflashlightwavingusover.Whatanight!C閱讀下面短文，根據所給情節進行續寫，使之構成一個完整的故事。（2017年11月.浙江高考）AVacationwithMyMotherIhadaninterestingchildhood:Itwasfilledwithsurprisesandamusements，allbecauseofmymother-loving，sweet，yetabsent-mindedandforgetful.OnestrangefamilytripwetookwhenIwaseleventellsalotabouther.MytwosetsofgrandparentslivedinColoradoandNorthDakota,andmyparentsdecidedtospendafewweeksdrivingtothosestatesandseeingallthesightsalongtheway.Asthefirstdayofourtripapproached,David,myeight-year-oldbrother,andIunwillinglysaidgood-byetoallofourfriends.Whoknewifwe,deverseethemagain?Finally,themomentofourdeparturearrived,andweloadedsuitcases,books,games,campingequipment,andatentintothecarandbravelydroveoff.Webravelydroveoffagaintwohourslaterafterwe,dreturnedhometogetthepurseandtraveler,schecksMomhadforgotten.DavidandIwerealwaysalittlenervouswhenusinggasstationbathroomsifMomwasdrivingwhileDadslept:“Youstandoutsidethedoorandplaylookout（放哨）whileIgo,andI,llstandoutsidethedoorandplaylookoutwhileyougo."Ihadterriblepicturesinmymind:“Honey,wherearethekids?”“What?!Oh,Gosh...Ithoughttheywerebeingawfullyquiet."Wewereneveractuallyleftbehindinastrangecity,butweweren,tabouttotakeanychances.Onthefourthorfifthnight,wehadtroublefindingahotelwithavacancy.Afterdrivinginvainforsometime,Momsuddenlygotagreatidea:Whydidn'twefindahousewithalikely-lookingbackyardandaskifwecouldsetuptentthere?DavidandIbecamenervous.Toourgreatrelief,Dadturneddowntheidea.Momnevercouldunderstandourobjections.Ifastrangefamilyshoweduponherfrontdoorstep,Momwouldhavebeendelighted.Shethinkseveryoneintheworldisasniceassheis.Wefinallyfoundavacancyinthenexttown.注意：1.所續寫短文的詞數應為150左右;.至少使用5個短文中標有下劃線的關鍵詞語;.續寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語已為你寫好;.續寫完成后，請用下劃線標出你所使用的關鍵詞語。Paragraph1:Thenextdaywerememberedthebrand-newtentwehadbroughtwithus.Paragraph2：Wedrovethroughseveralstatesandsawlotsofgreatsightsalongtheway.【文章大意】童年總是充滿驚喜和歡樂，皆因母親可愛又迷糊健忘的性格。出發兩小時后又返回家中，因為媽媽忘了錢包等。兄弟倆對母親的粗心大意可謂是心有余悸，生怕媽媽把他們落在加油站的廁所里獨自上路，以至于上廁所要輪流“放哨”。媽媽是善良的，自然認為所有人都和自己一樣善良，所以在找不到有空房的酒店時，媽媽提議去別人的院子里搭帳篷。兄弟倆很緊張，還好爸爸否決了這個提議。最終一家人還是住進了酒店……【寫作指導】Paragraph1的開頭是“第二天，我們想起了我們帶來的嶄新的帳篷”。本段開頭給考生提供了廣闊的想象空間。既然記起了帳篷，那么可以圍繞帳篷展開段落，可以體現母親的“健忘”，也可突出母親的“善良”，落腳點放在一些比較有趣的事上，與第一段中的surpriseandamusements呼應。Paragraph2的開頭是“我們開車經過了好幾個州，沿途看到了許多風景名勝”。與前文“意外不斷”不同，本段畫風突變，轉而寫風景，續寫可往心情愉悅的方面寫。此處可以用一些描述景色環境的表達來烘托氛圍，最終可把故事的落腳點放在“親情，生活的樂趣，母親的趣事”等方面。已給提示詞匯：absent-minded，forgetful，trip，David，camping，tent，Mom，Dad，trouble，nice話題激活詞匯：情感：happy，glad，wonderful，terrific，great；動作：laugh，smile；交通、旅行：drive，pullover，setthebrake，setout，setoff，trip，journey；環境：scenery，mountain，range，valley，river，lake，forest，sun，wind，blow【參考范文1】Paragraph1：Thenextdaywerememberedthebrand-newtentwehadbroughtwithus.Butthenwewerehalfanhourawayfromthehotel，wherethetentwasleftbehind.Dadrecommendedbuyinganewone，whileMominsistedonourgoingbacktofetchit，saying，”Forgetfulpeoplelikememaylosethingsrepeatedly，soit’sunwisetogiveupthetent."Finally,wegotbackthetentandhittheroadagain.IfMomhadn,tbeenthatabsent-minded,itwouldhavesavedusthetroubleofgoingbackagainandagain.Paragraph2：Wedrovethroughseveralstatesandsawlotsofgreatsightsalongtheway.Oneday,towardsevening,wefoundagreatcampingsiteatthefootofahighmountain.DavidandIhelpedDadputupthetent,andMomwasbusypreparingsupper.Whenthesettingsuncastanorangelightoverthemountains,thetentwassetupandthemealwasready.Sittingaroundthecampfire,wetalkedandlaughed.EverytimewementionedthefunnyincidentsofthejourneyapleasantsmilewouldspreadoverMom,sface.【參考范文2】Paragraph1：Thenextdaywerememberedthebrand-newtentwehadbroughtwithus.Toourdelight,Momgaveuptheideaofcampinginsomestranger,sbackyard.Instead,wefoundawonderfulcampingsiteinthewild.Itwasaclearinginthewoodsbyasmalllake,whereDadcouldcatchsomefishfordinner.Wehadnotroublesettingupourtent,butweweredisappointedtofindthatMomforgottopackuppillows.Needlesstosay,weallwokeupwithasoreneckthenextmorning.Paragraph2：Wedrovethroughseveralstatesandsawlotsofgreatsightsalongtheway.Itwasafantastictrip.Wecrossedbigriversandvastplains,climbedhighmountains,andoverlookeddeepvalleys.Duringthetrip,Mom,sbeingabsent-mindednotonlygotusintomuchtrouble,butalsogaveusmanyfunnymoments.Butluckily,shewasnotsoforgetfulastoleavemeandDavidbehindinthegasstationbathrooms.Weallarrivedatgrandparents,homesafeandsound.D閱讀下面短文，根據所給情節進行續寫，使之構成一個完整的故事。（2016年10月?浙江高考）OneweekendinJuly,Janeandherhusband,Tom,haddriventhreehourstocampovernightbyalakeintheforest.Unfortunately,onthewayanunpleasantsubjectcameupandtheystartedtoquarrel.Bythetimetheyreachedthelake,JanewassoangrythatshesaidtoTom,“I'mgoingtofindabetterspotforuSandcampwalkedaway.Withnopathtofollow,Janejustwalkedonforquitealongtime.Aftershehadclimbedtoahighplace,sheturnedaround,hopingtoseethelake.Tohersurprise,shesawnothingbutforestand,farbeyond,asnowcappedmountaintop.Shesuddenlyrealizedthatshewaslost.“Tom!”shecried.“Help!”Noreply.IfonlyshehadnotlefthermobilephoneinthatbagwithTom.Janekeptmoving,butthefarthershewalked,themoreconfusedshebecame.Asnightwasbeginningtofall,Janewassotiredthatshehadtostopforthenight.Lyingawakeinthedark,JanewantedverymuchtobewithTomandherfamily.Shewantedtoholdhimandtellhimhowmuchshelovedhim.Janeroseatthebreakofday,hungryandthirsty.Shecouldhearwatertrickling^落）somewhereatadistance.Quicklyshefollowedthesoundtoastream.Tohergreatjoy,shealsosawsomeberrybushes.Shedrankandateafewberries.Neverinherlifehadshetastedanythingbetter.Feelingstrongernow,Janebegantowalkalongthestreamandhopeitwouldleadhertothelake.Asshepickedherwaycarefullyalongthestream,Janeheardahelicopter.Isthatforme?Unfortunately,thetreesmadeitimpossibleforpeopletoseeherfromabove.Afewminuteslater,anotherhelicopterflewoverhead.Janetookoffheryellowblouse,thinkingthatsheshouldgotoanopenareaandflagthemiftheycamebackagain.注意：1.所續寫短文的詞數應為150左右；.至少使用5個短文中標有下劃線的關鍵詞語；.續寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語已為你寫好；.續寫完成后，請用下劃線標出你所使用的關鍵詞語。Paragraph1：Butnomorehelicoptercameanditwasgettingdarkagain.Paragraph2：ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.【文章大意】主人公Jane和丈夫去野營，途中發生爭吵，Jane離開宿營地，導致迷路。她沒帶手機，又找不到歸路，所以只能在森林里過了一個晚上。第二天她發現一條小溪，打算順著小溪走，這時聽到有直升機的聲音，但是直升機沒看到她……【寫作指導】根據第一段的首句可知，本段應該描述當天晚上Jane的心態和行動。而根據第二段的提示句可知，本段主要敘述Jane最終是如何獲救的。當然，在續寫中，一定要反映出Jane的堅韌和聰明，同時，最后一定要有Tom努力救援的信息，這樣的續寫故事結尾才有正能量。已給提示詞匯：Jane，Tom，lake，walk，climb，atadistance，stream，tohergreatjoy，helicopter，yellowblouse話題激活詞匯：環境：forest，stream，rock，berry，valley，steep，cave，lake，waterfall；困難：hunger，starve，thirsty，injure，broken，blood，panic，shelter，survive，suffer，cold，severe；活動：walk，climb，fall，crawl，taste，attempt，struggletoone,sfeet，makeone,swayto，pickup；情緒：toone’sgreatjoy，break~。亞口；救援：rescueteam，doctor，searchfor，spot；意志品質：calm，courage，will；評價：amazing，makeit【參考范文1】Paragraph1：Butnomorehelicoptercameanditwasgettingdarkagain.Sheknewthatshedidn'tdaretostayhereforalongtimebecausemaybethereweresomedangerousanimalsintheforest.Soshecontinuedtoclimb.Tohergreatjoy，shehadsomewatertodrinkandsomewildfruittoeatthere.Afterthat，ittookherthreehourstowalkintheforestalongthelake.Feelingverytired,shesoonfellasleep.Paragraph2：ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.Shebegantothinkawaytosaveherself.First,shefoundagoodplacenearbythelake,whereshecouldbefoundwithheryellow blouse.Forthreehours,nohelicopters.Then,shethoughtofaspecialwayshehadlearnedinherfirstaidclass.Maybeitwasfirethatcoulddrawthehelicopter'sattention.Thenshemadeafireandbeforelongahelicopterappearedaboveintheskyandtherescuingteamtogetherwithhishusband,Tom,cametosaveher.【參考范文2】Paragraph1：Butnomorehelicoptercameanditwasgettingdarkagain.Janewassotired,hungry,andextremelyfrightened.Shethoughttoherself,“IfonlyIhadnotquarrelledwithTom.WhereisTom?Hemusthavemadetheemergencycall.WhatIneedisenoughcourage.IfIcontinuemyspiritstomorrow,Iwillbelikelytoguidethehelicopter.”Lyingbesidethestream,shefellasleepverysoon.Suddenly,sheheardtheshoutsoftigers,whichmadeherscaredtodeath.Aftersheheldherbreathforafewminutes,everythingwasquietagain.Intheterribledarkness,shesleptagain.Paragraph2：ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.Shecaughtsightofafishermanatadistance,—with whosehelpsheclimbedtoanopenarea.To.her.great.joy,—ahelicopterflewoverheadjustatthatmoment.Thefishermanhelpedflagheryellowblousewildly.Thisdidcatchtherescuers,attention!Janewasrescued.SeeingTom,shetoldhimhowmuchshemissedhim.Neverwouldtheybeawayfromeachother.Tomgaveherthewarmestandlongesthugshehadeverreceived.I"枝遺點撥 析考法.通技法對于這種新的題型，考生首先要能對所給的文章有深刻的理解，對文章的脈絡和發展的方向有很好的把握，對文章使用的詞匯的特點有整體的認知。然后，根據對文章結構的理解設計合理的情節，完成對文章的續寫。因此，續寫文章的關鍵是：.掌握所給文章的主旨意圖及故事情節的發展方向這點至關重要。只有把握了文章的主旨意圖，才能很好地完成續寫。.正確理解故事的脈絡線索和段落結構，設計續寫內容的基本框架只有對原文的脈絡線索和段落結構有正確的和深刻的理解，續寫的內容才能和原文骨肉相連，契合緊密。.理清文章中的要點信息和邏輯關系確保續寫的內容和原文要有邏輯上的一致性，并能回應原文的信息。.感知文章的用詞特點以便使續寫的內容在語言色彩上和所給文章保持一致。.注意語言的使用考試說明中非常明確地指出，寫作中要準確使用語法和詞匯，清楚、連貫地表達自己的意思。所以，在考慮文章結構的同時，一定要注意使用比較“高級”的詞匯和語法結構。????典例示范????原題呈現閱讀下面短文，根據所給情節進行續寫，使之構成一個完整的故事。（2017年6月.浙江高考）Onabright,warmJulyafternoon,MacHollan,aprimaryschoolteacher,wascyclingfromhishometoAlaskawithhisfriends.Oneofhisfriendshadstoppedtomakeabicyclerepair,buttheyhadencouragedMactocarryon,andtheywouldcatchupwithhimsoon.AsMacpedaled（騎行）alongalone,hethoughtfondlyofhiswifeandtwoyoungdaughtersathome.Hehopedtoshowthemthisbeautifulplacesomeday.ThenMacheardquickandloudbreathingbehindhim.“Man,that’sabigdog!”hethought.Butwhenhelookedtotheside,hesawinstantlythatitwasn,tadogatall,butawolf,quicklycatchingupwithhim.Mac,sheartjumped.Hefoundouthiscanofbearspray.Withonehandonthebars,hefiredthesprayatthewolf.Abrightredcloudenvelopedtheanimal,andtoMac'srelief,itfellback,shakingitshead.Butaminutelater,itwasbyhissideagain.ThenitattackedthebackofMac,sbike,tearingopenhistentbag.Hefiredatthewolfasecondtime,andagain,itfellbackonlytoquicklyrestartthechase（追趕）.Macwaspedalinghardnow.Hewavedandyelledatpassingcarsbutwascarefulnottoslowdown.Hesawasteepuphillclimbbeforehim.Heknewthatoncehehitthehill,he,dbeeasilycaughtupandthewolf,steethwouldbetearingintohisflesh.Atthismoment,PaulandBeckyweredrivingtheircarontheirwaytoAlaska.Theydidn,tthinkmuchofitwhentheysawtwocyclistsrepairingtheirbikeonthesideoftheroad.Abitlater,theyspottedwhatthey,too,assumedwasadogrunningalongsideamanonabike.Astheygotcloser,theyrealizedthatthedogwasawolf.Macheardalargevehiclebehindhim.Hepulledinfrontofitasthewolfwascatchingupfast,justadozenyardsawaynow.注意：1.所續寫短文的詞數應為150左右；.至少使用5個短文中標有下劃線的關鍵詞語；.續寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語已為你寫好；.續寫完成后，請用下劃線標出你所使用的關鍵詞語。Paragraph1：Thecarabruptlystoppedinfront0fhim.Paragraph2：Afewminuteslater,theothertwocyclistsarrived.寫作指導第一步：快速瀏覽，讀懂原文通讀全文首先要解決好五個W和一個H的問題，即理清人物who,地點where,時間when,事件what,原因why及怎樣發展how。理解這篇文章的五個W之后就能快速了解文章大意：Mac與好友一起騎行去阿拉斯加，路上同伴因修自行車落后，Mac獨自一人前行，遇到狼的突襲，好一番搏斗，幸虧此時Paul和Becky兩人開車經過，出手相救。至于如何發展(how)？這要看考生的想象力如何。?第二步：構思情節，謀篇布局布局謀篇的關鍵是利用好兩方面的信息：.續寫部分所給的兩個段落的首句Thecarabruptlystoppedinfrontofhim.和Afewminuteslater,theothertwocyclistsarrived。這兩句話起到非常關鍵的作用，無論從時間的先后、情節的發展都要以這兩句話作為內在邏輯關系。.在情節的安排中，必須按照敘述的順序，繼續緊密結合原材料中五個W的邏輯順序發展下去。(1)第一段寫什么？應圍繞PaulandBecky如何救助Mac展開，充分發揮豐富的想象，把Paul停車后如何在千鈞一發之際拯救Mac的過程寫得趣味橫生又合乎情理。⑵第二段寫什么？弄清楚開頭的這兩個人是誰很重要，然后依照符合故事情節發展的內在邏輯推進下去。朋友到達之后看到、聽到并做了什么。最后應該提煉思想性和體現價值觀的傳遞正能量的元素(如珍愛生命，學會合作或感激等)，以提升文章的檔次。注意：第一段和第二段要銜接緊密，相互關聯，不能獨立存在。?第三步：理清邏輯，優化語言這一步側重點為語言邏輯，詞句結構都必須符合當時人狼大戰的情景。續寫時要按照情節的發展進行延續，寫作手法上必須以敘為主，描寫上以動作描寫為重心，情節的發展合乎邏輯地推進。?第四步：以優美的文字譽寫［閱卷名師點津］.內容方面在閱卷過程中發現，一部分考生沒有讀懂原文，如不認識bearspray,不理解abrightredcloudenvelopedtheanimal,沒有理清人物關系，誤認為Paul與Mac是好朋友：這部分考生由于閱讀能力直接影響到續寫的發揮。還有些考生描寫心理活動和場景過多，缺乏具體描寫，導致故事不夠連貫，不夠完整。.語言方面從評卷結果來看，考生出現的問題偏向于刻意追求運用高級、新穎的詞匯，強行運用復雜句型等語法結構，而忽略了與原文語言環境的符合度和連貫度。同時出現了一些單詞拼寫錯誤等。更有甚者用套路作文，這與讀后續寫的全新創作宗旨相違背。.邏輯方面(1)違背生活真實。如在緊張的人狼大戰環境下，有的考生卻寫兩人在拉家常。⑵人物關系混亂。如增加了一些人物，讓故事變得更加復雜；把Paul與Mac看成是原先認識的；有些故事的結局并沒有交代如何處理狼。⑶兩段的開頭語理解不到位，以及兩段之間銜接不夠，也帶來了很多故事上的混亂。比如第一段的Thecarabruptlystoppedinfrontofhim，學生理解為是Mac要求他停車等。.其他問題閱卷中發現很多標點錯誤，以下幾點需注意：英語中沒有頓號，分割句中并列成分多用逗號，如Sheslowly,carefully,deliberatelymovedthebox；英文的句號是實心點(.)；英文的省略號是三個點(…)，位置在行底。-???專家點評【考場范文1】Paragraph1：Thecarabruptlystoppedinfrontofhim.Awomanhurriedlyopenedthedoorandstretchedoutherhand,shouting,“Getin!”Macgrabbedherhandwithouthesitation,leavinghisbicyclelyingontheroadandjumpedintothecar.Themomentheshutthedoor,hecaughttheglimpseofthefierceeyesandhungrylookofthewolfbythedoor.Acoldfeelingcreptoverhisheartandmadehimshiver.However,thecarhadleftthewolffarbehind,whichmadehimsighwithrelief.MacthankedPaulandBeckyandafterwardstheypulledoverbytheroadtowaitforMac,sfriends.Paragraph2：Afewminuteslater,thetwoothercyclistsarrived.Assoonastheymet,hisfriends'worriedlookfadedaway.“Wherehaveyoubeen?Wesawyourbicycleontheroad.”Hisfriendaskedandthesewordslikeapenetrateofsunshinewarmedhisheart.AfterMacexplainedtothem,theysaidfarewelltoPaulandBeckyinsincerelyindebtedness.Onthewayhome,nightbreezemadehimateaseandhecouldn,twaittosharehisexperiencewithhiswifeandchildrenandshowthekindnessoftheworld..這篇文章語言上最大的特色是用無生命特征的名詞作句子的主語。整篇11個句子，其中無靈主語就有5句，占了42%。(1)Acoldfeelingcreptoverhisheartandmadehimshiver.(2)However,thecarhadleftthewolffarbehind,whichmadehimsighwithrelief.(3)Assoonastheymet,hisfriends,worriedlookfadedaway.(4)thesewordslikeapenetrateofsunshinewarmedhisheart.(5)Onthewayhome,nightbreezemadehimatease.這樣，同樣含義的句子就由平淡變得生動有力了。.語言上的第二大特色就是這篇文章詞匯的使用，如indebtedness等于gratitude感激，pullover表達路邊停車，這些都體現了較為深厚的語言功底。.但是，文章還是有些瑕疵。Macgrabbedherhandwithouthesitation,leavinghisbicyclelyingontheroadandjumpedintothecar.這一句中應將leaving改為left,使其與前面的grabbed及后面的jumped成為連貫動作，也可把jumped改為jumping同leaving平行成為grabbed的伴隨狀語；Hisfriendaskedandthesewordslikeapenetrateofsunshinewarmedhisheart.此句中的penetrate是個動詞被錯誤地當作名詞使用，可以改為Hisfriendaskedandthesewordslikearayofsunshinewarmedhisheart;AfterMacexplainedtothem,theysaidfarewelltoPaulandBeckyinsincerelyindebtedness.此句中的sincerely應該改為形容詞修飾名詞indebtednesso【考場范文2】Paragraph1：Thecarabruptlystoppedinfrontofhim.Mac,sheartjumpedwildly,andhedashedtowardsthecarwithouttheslightesthesitationforheknewitwashisonlychance.Itwasarealraceagainsttimetomakeit!Thankgod,Macsuccessfullymadethedooropenandthatfiercewolfwasjustaroundthecorner.TheinstantMacsettledhimontheseat,Paulstartedthecarinaflash.Thewolfhadtogiveupandfindanothergoal.Whatanarrowescape!Maccollapsedintotheseatandsmiledbitterly.Theothertwoguysdecidedtostopatthegasstationtohavearest.Paragraph2：Afewminuteslater,thetwoothercyclistsarrived.Seeinghisfriends,Macfeltagreatweighttakenoffhismind.HisfriendswereamazedatMac,sexperience,foritwasamiracletoescapefromahungrywolf!MacthankedPaulandBeckyagainandagain,buthisappreciationwasbeyondwords.Hesaidsincerely:“Youcan,timaginehowgratefulIwas,forIhavebeengivenasecondlife!”TearsgatheredupinMac,seyeswhenhewavedthemgoodbye.Itwasobviouslyanunforgettableexperience,andMacwouldhavealottosharewithhisfamilyafterhegothome.Itwashiscourageandotherpeople,skindnessthatsavedhim..從語言角度出發，這篇文章特征明顯。.首先是語言地道，表現在三處for的使用：(1)Mac'sheartjumpedwildly,andhedashedtowardsthecarwithouttheslightesthesitationforheknewitwashisonlychance.(2)HisfriendswereamazedatMac,sexperience,foritwasamiracletoescapefromahungrywolf!(3)Youcan'timaginehowgratefulIwas,forIhavebeengivenasecondlife!句子中使用for更加符合英語的思維習慣，盡管前后是并列關系，但是前面提供了主要的信息，然后進行補充說明。如：因為李越出色的表現，校長授予他“本周學生之星”榮譽稱號。在這句話中，漢語的思維是先說原因，而英語的翻譯則是先說結果：ThepresidentawardedLiYuethetitleof“StarStudentoftheWeek”forwhatshedidforourclass原因和結果的位置是有很大差異的。.再者，此文章比較嫻熟地使用了寫作的各種技巧，如強調句的使用：Itwashiscourageandotherpeople'skindnesssatethim.感嘆句的使用：(1)Youcan5timaginehowgratefulIwas!(2)Whatanarrowescape!等。.但是，這篇文章也存在一些不足。TheinstantMacsettledhimontheseat,Paulstartedthecarinaflash.此句中的him應該改為himself。第一段尾句Theothertwoguysdecidedtostopatthegasstationtohavearest.這句話與上下文脫節，起不到承上啟下的作用，出現了情節邏輯的問題。.總的說來，該文章比較好地完成了讀后續寫的任務，既讀懂了原文，又有比較好的語言功底將故事敘寫下去。【考場范文3】Paragraph1：Thecarabruptlystoppedinfrontofhim.SeeingPaulwaveathimkindlyandopenthecardoorforhim，Macimmediatelyjumpedoutofhisbicycleandrushedintothecar.NosoonerthanthepoormanhadgotindidPaulclosethedoor.Thewolfwalkedaroundthecarandhowledfuriouslyatthem，butjustinvain.Realizingitcouldn'tcatchMacanymore，thewolfultimatelygaveupandwalkedawaygloomily.Watchingthewolfwasswallowedbytheroad,Mac，bathedinperspiration，sighedwithreliefandsankdowntothebackseat.Paulhandedhimabottleofwaterandhemanagedaweaksmile，murmuringsomethinglike“Thankyouverymuch”.Paragraph2：Afewminuteslater，theothertwocyclistsarrived.KnowingthatMachadbeenchasedbyawolf，theywerestumpedforwordsandparalysedwithfear.Fortunately，atthatmomentappearedPaulwholentahelpinghandtoMac.ThetwofriendsextendedtheirearnestgratitudetoPaulforrescuingMacandthentookMacbackhome.Aftersuchaterribleexperience，thesplendidlandscapeofAlaskaseemednolongertobeatemptationtothem.Onthewaybackhome，feelingthelightbreezethroughhishair，Macfeltwhathappenedjustnowwas