2021年11月暨陽聯考讀后續寫講評SavingtheDaisies陳星可

浙江省天臺中學試題呈現：

Atdawn,Tayloropenedhersleepyeyesandlookedoutofthewindowatthefoggyfieldbelow.“NO!"shecried,nowfullyawake.ButtermilkthecowwasinMama'sdaisypatch(雛菊地).

“Imusthaveforgottentolockthegatelastnight,”Taylorthoughtasshepulledasweateroverherhead.Mamawasplanningtoselldaisybouquets

(花束)atthefairnextweek,butButtermilkwaseatingtheflowers.

Taylorhurriedoutsideandgrabbedtheleadropeonthewall.“Whycan'tyoustayinthefield?”shecalledtoButtermilkassheheadedacrosstheyardtothedaisypatch.

Buttermilkstillstoodtherechewingflowers.Annoyed,Taylorthoughttoherself,“WhenIgrewup,I’llbeanartistandpaintpicturesallday.I’llneverownacow.Toomuchtrouble.”

JustasTaylorwasabouttothrowtheleadropeontoButtermilk'scollar,thefamilydog,Red,roundedthecornerofthehouse.Startled,Buttermilktookoff,tearingthroughthedaisiesandacrosstheyard.Shefinallyran試題呈現：throughtheopengateandintothefield.“Thankgoodness!”Taylorsaidassheclosedthegateandsecuredthelock.

Sheturnedtolookattheflowergarden,wheremostofthedaisieswereeithereatenortrampled(踩踏).

Mamacameoutofthehouse.“What'sgoingon?”sheasked.Shelookedsadlyathergarden.“Iforgottolockthegate,”Taylorsaid.“I'msosorry.”“Iknowyouare.”MamasighedandgaveTaylorahug.“Youlearnedanimportantlessontoday.”Taylor’sheartwasheavyasshewentbackintothehouse.Shehadtothinkofawaytomakeituptohermother.

Paragraph1:Suddenly,apaintingonthewallcaughtTaylor’seye._______________________________________________________________

Paragraph2:Themorningofthefair,TaylorcamedownstairstoinviteMamatoseethesurprise.______________________________________Learnlanguage：1.天亮時我突然明白...2.胡亂穿上一件衛衣3.正準備所就在這時4.繞過屋角5.受到驚嚇6.橫沖直撞穿過雛菊7.上好鎖8.吸取教訓給某人一個教訓9.彌補10.吸引某人的注意力1.atdawn

Itdawnedonmethat...2.pullon/throwonasweater3.wasabouttodo..when...4.roundthecornerofthehouse5.be/getstartled6.tearthroughthedaisies7.seurethelock8.learnalesson

teachsb.alesson9.makeup(for...)10.catch/arrest/attractsb’seye/attentionUnderstandthestory：

Taylor’smothergrewapatchofdaisies______sheplannedtosellthedaisyboutiquesattheairnextweek.ButlastnightTaylorforgot______(lock)thegate,asaresultof______Buttermilkthecowgotintothefieldthismorning.Thecowwaschewingtheflowers,leavingthedaisieseithereatenor_________(trample).Andthe___________(appear)ofthefamilydogRedmadeButtermilkstartled,leavingthesituationeven________(bad).Feelingquiteguilty,Taylor_________(apologize)tohermother,admittinghercarelessnessandatheartshedecidedtodosomethingtomakeit_____tohermother.Allofasudden,thepainting__________(hang)onthewallcaughtherattention.andtolockwhichtrampledappearanceworseuphangingapologizedUnderstandthestory：MamagrewdaisiesinthefieldandandwantedtosellthematthefairTaylorforgottolockthegateandButtermilkatethedaisiesTaylor’sheartwasheavyandwantedtomakeituptoMamaThepaintingcaughtherattention...?TaylorinvitedMamatoseethesurprise...?StoryEmotionexpectantannoyedfrustrated,guiltyinspired+？expectant+?Designtheplot:UnderlinedwordsTaylorMamadaisyboutiquewallwayhughugpaintrunownTip:Imporantunderlinedwordscanhelpyouthinkupaplot/sceneappropriatetothestory.“MaybeIcanpaintasmanypicturesofdaisiesasIcanandsellthematthefair.Thisway,IcanmakeituptoMamasomehow.”Taylorthoughttoherself.ThentogethertheyloadedthedaisybouquetsleftinthefieldandTaylor’spaintingsontothevanandsetoffforthefair.“Amazing!”Mamawastooexcitedtouttermorewords,givingTaylorabighug.Andheinstantlyunderstoodwhyhergirlhadbeenlockingherselfupinthebedroomthesedays.Whattheydidn’texpectwasthatthepaintingsweresoldoutinjustawhile,muchmorepopularthattherealdaisiesgrowninherfield.Reallydelightedthatshehadsuccessfullymadeituptomother,Daisyranintohermother’sarmsandherDadscoopedherupthrewherherintheair.Designtheplot:Q-AParagraph1:Suddenly,apaintingonthewallcaughtTaylor'seye._______

Paragraph2:Themorningofthefair,TaylorcamedownstairstoinviteMamatoseethesurprise.______________________________________逆推法Q3:Whatwasthesurprise?Andwhatdidshelookforwardto?

Q1:Whatwasherideaaboutthepainting?Whatdidsheintendtodo?Q2:Howdidsheputtheideaintopractice?Q1:Whatdidhermothersee?Andhowdidshereact?Q2:Howdidtheydealwiththesurprise?Andwhere?Q3:DidshemakeituptoMamathisway?Designtheplot:Q-AParagraph1:Suddenly,apaintingonthewallcaughtTaylor'seye._______

Q1:Whatwasherideaaboutthepainting?Whatdidsheintendtodo?“MaybeIcanpaintasmanypicturesofdaisiesasIcanandsellthematthefair.Thisway,IcanmakeituptoMamasomehow.”Taylorthoughttoherself.“Sincethedaisiesweredestroyed,willpaintingsomepicturesofthedaisybouquetsdo?”shethoughttoherself,“maybewecansellthedaisypicturesasmydreamistobeanartist.”“Icanpaintsomedaisybouquetsandsellthematthefair.Hopepeoplewillbuymyworks,throughwhichIcouldmakeituptoMama,”Taylorthoughttoherself,herfacelightingupwithexcitement.Onthepainting,afieldofdaisieswereswayinggentlyinthegentlebreeze,bathedinthegentlesunlight.Designtheplot:Q-AParagraph1:Suddenly,apaintingonthewallcaughtTaylor'seye._______

Q2:Howdidsheputtheideaintopractice?Immediatelyshestartedtowork,devotingeverymomentshecouldsparetoherpaintingwork.ThefollowingweekwitnessedTailorwatchingthedaisiescarefullyinthefield,anddrawingpicturesofdaisyfromdifferentangels.Taylorracedupstairs,grabbedherartsuppliesandgotreadytopaint.Shesatdownatherdesk,lookingoutthewindowattheremainingdaisiesbelow.Asherbrushmovedsmoothlyacrossthepapers,daisiescamealive.ItwasnotlongbeforeTaylorcompletedtwelvepiecesandthebedroomnowturnedintoagardenofdaisies,whichseemedtocomealive.Designtheplot:Q-AParagraph1:Suddenly,apaintingonthewallcaughtTaylor'seye._______

Q3:Whatwasthesurprise?Andwhatdidshelookforwardto?Lookingatallthis,DaisylookedforwardtothefaireagerlyandanticipatedtogiveMamaasurprise.Alltheworkdone,Tailorheavedadighofrelief.“ItmustbeabigsurpriseforMama.”Taylornodded,abigsmilecreepingoverherface.Duringthedaysbeforethefair,Taylormadeonepaintingafteranother,hopingtogiveMamaabigsurprise,whichcouldpotentiallymakeupforhermistake.Bytheendoftheweek,shehadcompletedtwodozenpaintings.Appreciatinghergreatmasterpieces,shecouldn’tcontainherexcitement,jumpingandclapping.Designtheplot:Q-AParagraph2:Themorningofthefair,TaylorcamedownstairstoinviteMamatoseethesurprise.___________________

Q1:Whatdidhermothersee?Andhowdidshereact?Whensheopenedthedoor,whatgreetedherwasapileofpaintingsofdaisiesfillingeverycorneroftheroom,floatingherinaworldofwarmfragrance.ImmediatelyawareofwhatthesurprisewasandwhatwasinTaylor’smind,MamagaveTaylorabighug,reallyproudofher.HardlyhadMamaopenedthedoorwhenshewasentirelysurprisedatthescene,utterlyindisbeliefatwhatshewasseeing.Daisypaintingswereeverywhere,brightandcheerfulinthemorninglight.Amazedbythepictureseverywhere,Mamaalmostdroppedherjaw,andrealizedimmediatelywhatherlovelygirlwasuptoupstairsthesedays.Designtheplot:Q-AParagraph2:Themorningofthefair,TaylorcamedownstairstoinviteMamatoseethesurprise.___________________

Q2:Howdidtheydealwiththesurprise?Andwhere?ThentogethertheyloadedthedaisybouquetsleftinthefieldandTaylor’spaintingsontothevanandsetoffforthefair.“Doyouthinkanyonewillbuythem?”Taylorasked.Strokingherhairaffectionately,Mamawrappedherinahugandnodded,“Oh,sweetie,yes.I’msuretheywill.”Afterloadingthedaisybouquetsandpaintingsintothevan,theyheadedforthefair.“Oh,yes,sweetie.I’msuretheywill.AndyouhaveabetterlessonthanIexpected.”Mamasmiled.Designtheplot:Q-AParagraph2:Themorningofthefair,TaylorcamedownstairstoinviteMamatoseethesurprise.___________________

Q3:DidshemakeituptoMamathisway?Nomatterhowmuchmoneythepaintingsvalued,Taylor’swarmheartandcommitmentwereinvaluable.Whattheydidn’texpectwasthatthepaintingsweresoldoutinjustawhile,muchmorepopularthattherealdaisiesgrowninherfield.Itturnedoutthatpeoplelovednotonlythosedaisybouquetsbutthedaisypaintingsaswell.Allweresoldoutsoon.Designtheplot:foreshadowingTip:Overshadowingcanmakethestoryyoumakeupreasonable,logicalandcoherent.OvershadowingPossibleplotMamawasplanningtoselldaisybouquets

(花束)atthefairnextweek;Suddenly,apaintingonthewallcaughtTaylor’seyePara2:Taylor把她所畫的雛菊的畫拿到fair去賣。WhenIgrewup,I’llbeanartistandpaintpicturesallday.I’llneverownacow.Para1:Taylor打算努力多畫一些畫，來彌補對媽媽的過失。Youlearnedanimportantlessontoday.Para2:媽媽從Taylor身上學到了更重要的一課。Shehadtothinkofawaytomakeituptohermother.Para2:Taylor成功地彌補了她的過失。參考范文：

Suddenly,apaintingonthewallcaughtTaylor’seye.“That’sit,”sheexclaimed,hereyestwinklingwithexcitement.Taylorracedupstairs,grabbedherartsuppliesandgotreadytopaint.Shesatdownatherdesk,lookingoutthewindowattheremainingdaisiesbelow.Asherbrushmovedsmoothlyacrossthepapers,daisiescamealive.Atthethoughtthatthisidealwaymightwork,Taylor’sfacelitupwithpleasure.Duringthedaysbeforethefair,Taylormadeonepaintingafteranother,hopingtogiveMamaabigsurprisewhichcouldmakeupforhermistake.參考范文：

Themorningofthefair,TaylorcamedownstairstoinviteMamatoseethesurprise.HardlyhadMamaopenedthedoorwhenshewasentirelysurprisedatthescene,utterlyindisbeliefatwhatshewasseeing.Daisypaintingswereeverywhere,brightandcheerfulinthemorninglight.“Doyouthinkanyonewillbuythem?”Taylorasked.Strokingherhairaffectionately,Mamawrappedherinahugandnodded,“Oh,sweetie,yes.I’msuretheywill.”Afterloadingthedaisybouquetsandpaintingsintothevan,theyheadedforthefair.Nomatterhowmuchmoneythepaintingsvalued,Taylor’swarmheartandcommitmentwereinvaluable.下水作文：

Suddenly,apaintingonthewallcaughtTaylor'seye.Onthepainting,afieldofdaisieswereswayinggentlyinthegentlebreeze,bathedinthegentlesunlight.“MaybeIcanpaintasmanypicturesofdaisiesasIcanandsellthematthefair.Thisway,IcanmakeituptoMama

somehow,”Taylorthoughttoherself.Immediatelyshestartedtowork,devotingeverymomentshecouldsparetoherpaintingwork.ItwasnotlongbeforeTaylorcompletedtwelvepiec