讀后續寫素材與練專題（6）句型點撥與例文講評建議句子結構1.

"....,"hesaid,

doing

...

--say后接分詞作狀語1)"Ididn'tknowwhatIwasdoing,"shesaid,

laughing

atthememory.2)"I'llgetussomecoffee,"shesaid,

heading

forthekitchen.3)"That'snice,"Alexsaidquietly,

focusing

onhisplate.4)"Veryclever,"saidtheteacher,

nodding

hisheadasifpleased.5)"Uncle,forgiveme,Ididthat...unintentionally,"hesaid,

pointing

tothebrokenglass.6)"Wedon'tdoanyharm,"saidtheboy,evidently

frightened

bymywords.2.

"...,"hesaid,

as/when/before/asif...

--say后接時間狀語從句1)"Watchout!"sheshouted,

as

thecarstartedtomove.2)"Whatabeauty!"saidthenurse

as

shecametothedoor.3.

"....,"hesaid,

and

(thenhe)did....--say后接and,先后動作或構成并列句1)"Goodmorning,children!"saidtheminister;

and

hekindlyshookhandswithboth.2)"Yes,Ithinkso,"hesaidreluctantly(無奈地),

and

leftthestudy.3)"Comehere,"saidthelittleman,

and

tookhertooneofthecornersofthebuilding.4.

"....,"hesaid,

“...”--say后接要說的另一句話1)"TherewasaletterfromPrinceAndrewtoday,"hesaidtoPrincessMary

"Haven'tyoureadit?"2)"Well,well!"saidtheman;

"aretherereallypeopleinthisroom?"3)"Sinceyoulovehimsowell,"saidtheking,

"Iwilltellyousomething.4)"Sheisaveryadmirableandexcellentyoungwoman,"saidshe,

"andyoumustgoandcallonher."5.

...did..,

did,

and

said,“...”--say前有并列關系的先后動作He

paused,

looked

straightintohereyes,

and

said

inaquietvoice,"that'strue."6.

"....,"saidtheman,

who...

--用定語從句補充說明說話的人1)"Idon'tknow,"saidZeb,

who

wasstillconfused.2)"Toyourhealth!"saidMr.White,

who

alsoemptiedhisglass,andwipedhismouthwithhishandkerchief.7.

"....,"hesaid+方式副詞(-ly)或短語,

--作狀語修飾say1）"Ofcourse,"Nacyreplied

withasmile.2）"I'msorry,"shesaid

withasigh.3）"Buttheydon'tunderstandourtalkatall,"saidthedancer

withapuzzledsmile.4）"Natasha,youloveme?"shesaid

inasofttrustfulwhisper.5）"CometoyourPapaatonce,please!"saidshe

withastrange,excitedlook.6）"IfonlyIhadknown..."shesaid

throughhertears.強調一下，概要寫作一般以議論文或說明文為主，提煉中心詞，關鍵句，不忘承上啟下的連接詞，千萬不要加上自己的觀點，一般以第三人稱概述。讀后續寫應遵從以下原則，下面以一篇原文為例來說明一下讀后續寫的6大步驟。1.理解閱讀文本，掌握其大意，關注畫線關鍵詞2.找出閱讀文本中的懸念，并根據懸念發揮想象，續寫故事；3.理解所給兩個段落首句的隱含意思，注意續寫故事的連貫性4.明白讀后續寫的要求和評分原則。Step1：Skimthepassageandfindoutthebasicinformationofthepassage.重讀原文，找記敘文要素之時間、地點和人物Iwasrespondingtoacallfromasmallbrickflatinaquietpartoftown.IassumedIwasbeingsenttopickupsomeparty-goers，orsomeonewhohadjusthadafightwithalover，oraworkerheadingtoanearlyshiftatsomefactoryfortheindustrialpartoftown.WhenIarrivedat2：30a.m.,thebuildingwasdarkexceptforasinglelightinagroundfloorwindow.Undersuchcircumstances,manydriversjusthonk（按喇叭）onceortwice，waitaminute，thendriveaway.ButIhadseentoomanyweakpeoplewhodependedontaxisastheironlymeansoftransportation.Unlessasituationsmelledofdanger，Ialwayswenttothedoor.Thispassengermightbesomeonewhoneedsmyassistance，Ireasonedtomyself.SoIwalkedtothedoorandknocked.“Justaminute，”answeredafrail(虛弱的)，elderlyvoice.Icouldhearsomethingbeingdraggedacrossthefloor.Afteralongpause，thedooropened.Asmallwomaninher80sstoodbeforeme.Shewaswearingaprintdress(印花裙子)andapillboxhat(小圓帽)，likesomebodywhowasgoingtoapartyina1940smovie.Byhersidewasasmallnylonsuitcase.Theapartmentlookedasifnoonehadlivedinitforyears.Allthefurniturewascoveredwithsheets.Therewerenoclocksonthewalls,noequipmentonthecounters.Inthecornerwasacardboardboxfilledwithphotosandglassware(玻璃器皿).“Wouldyoucarrymybagouttothecar？”shesaid.Itookthesuitcasetothecab，thenreturnedtoassistthewoman.Shetookmyarm，andwewalkedslowlytowardthecab.Shekeptthankingmeformykindness.“It'snothing.IjusttrytotreatmypassengersthewayIwouldwantmymothertreated.”Itoldherandaskedwhereshewasheaded.Havinggivenmeanaddress,ahospice(臨終醫院),sheasked.“Couldyoudrivethroughdowntown?”Para1:"Butitisn’ttheshortestway,”Iremindedher.“No,itisn't.”sheanswered,“Butitwasthelastchanceformeto…Para2:Wedroveinsilencetotheaddressshehadgivenme,and…WHEN:2:30amWHERER:abrickflatinaquietpartoftownahospice--ahospiceisaspecialhospitalforpeoplewhoaredyingWHO:“I”thedriver,asmallwomanStep2:readthepassageagainandfindthedetails.Abrickflat:“thebuildingwasdarkexceptforasinglelightinagroundfloorwindow”“Theapartmentlookedasifnoonehadlivedinitforyears.Allthefurniturewascoveredwithsheets.Therewerenoclocksonthewalls,noequipmentonthecounters.Inthecornerwasacardboardboxfilledwithphotosandglassware(玻璃器皿).”Downtown:“‘Butitisn’ttheshortestway,’Iremindedher.‘No,itisn’t.’”“Butitwasthelastchanceformeto…”“I”thedriver:Unlessasituationsmelledofdanger，Ialwayswenttothedoor.Thispassengermightbesomeonewhoneedsmyassistance,Ireasonedtomyself.Itookthesuitcasetothecab，thenreturnedtoassistthewoman.Shetookmyarm，andwewalkedslowlytowardthecab.Shekeptthankingmeformykindness.“It'snothing.IjusttrytotreatmypassengersthewayIwouldwantmymothertreated.”Thesmallwoman:“ButIhadseentoomanyweakpeoplewhodependedontaxisastheironlymeansoftransportation.”“‘Justaminute,’answeredafrail(虛弱的)，elderlyvoice.Icouldhearsomethingbeingdraggedacrossthefloor.”“Asmallwomaninher80sstoodbeforeme.Shewaswearingaprintdress(印花裙子)andapillboxhat(小圓帽)，likesomebodywhowasgoingtoapartyina1940smovie.Byhersidewasasmallnylonsuitcase.”“Shekeptthankingmeformykindness.”“Havinggivenmeanaddress,ahospice(臨終醫院),sheasked.‘Couldyoudrivethroughdowntown?’”StepThree:Readthepassageforthethirdtimeandtrytooutlinethedevelopmentoftheplot:三讀原文，續寫情節。“Butit(throughdowntown)isn’ttheshortestway,”Iremindedher.“No,itisn’t.”sheanswered,“Butitwasthelastchanceformeto…Wedroveinsilencetotheaddressshehadgivenme,and…首先要明確的是，從老人家里蒙著床單的家具(coveredbysheets)，司機對她是“身體不好(weakpeople)”的推測,80多歲的高齡(inher80s),虛弱的聲音(frailvoice)，和沒有被補充完整的“最后的機會”(mylastchance)，要去臨終醫院(thehospice)的人肯定是老人自己(thesmallwoman)，而不是她的兒子或丈夫甚至父母之類。根據老人哪怕繞遠路也要去市中心，以及她的富有年代感的盛裝打扮，應當可以推斷出老人是想要去故地重游，在生命終結之前，對往昔歲月進行一場隆重的告別。所以第一段的主要內容應圍繞著“懷舊”來寫，可以描述車窗外市中心的場景，輔以老人的訴說(自言自語)。根據給出的第二段開頭“她之前給我的地址”(“theaddressshehadgivenme”)所指為臨終醫院(thehospice)，第二段的主要內容應圍繞到達臨終醫院后老人和司機的互動展開。為了連接續寫的兩個段落，第一段結尾最好提一下市中心之旅已經結束，比如“Atlast,shesaidshewastiredandwantedtogotothehospice.”。根據行駛過程中兩人都沒有說話(“Wedroveinsilence…”)，最好在第一段結尾交代一下原因，比如老人沉浸在回憶中，又想到生命走到盡頭，因為悲痛所以沒有說話；或者是老人本來會低聲自語，但司機提到了讓她傷心的往事，于是陷入沉默；再比如老人身體虛弱，所以無力再說話……Stepfour:Inferthethemeandfinishtheendofthewriting:推斷主題，完成續寫。可以是體現愛。雖然司機和老人是陌生人，但是司機把老人當做自己母親來對待（有些考生還提到老人也覺得司機像自己的兒子），讓老人在人生的最后一程感覺到溫暖。文章可以以老人感謝司機結尾（也有同學寫到司機經過此事的啟發，決定第二天去看望自己的母親）。可以是對死亡的思索。原文中的老人雖然孤苦，但卻在告別人生的儀式中穿上了年輕時穿過的裙子(aprintdress)和禮帽(apillboxhat)，所以可以順應原文塑造一下老人或是優雅從容或是樂觀豁達去赴“死亡之約”(thepartyofdeath)的形象。文章可以以司機為老人感動結尾。StepFive:briefthestudentssomeunreasonablepoints.以孩子為重點。“Itturnedoutthatshewasdiagnosedwithcancerandbecamesingleafterherson’sdeath.”Para1:去看兒子（結婚五年了，沒來看過她）Para2:回憶兒子的各種好。點評：不要增加不必要的跟主題無關的故事情節。（比如講述兒子是怎么死的？---有的交通事故，有的交友不慎，走上犯罪的道路，有的跟媽媽有過節，不來看媽媽等等。）老人死在路上。“…andwhenwearrivedatthehospice,IfoundthatshehadpassedawayasIopenedthedoortoassisther.”點評：（盡量不要安排這樣的情節。老婦人是一個很有計劃的人---看她的打扮，看她的說話方式，看她打電話叫車，看她家里的家具sheets）結尾過于出乎意料，偏離主題。“Idrovebackhome,openedthesuitcaseandfounditwasfilledwithmoney.（crazyaboutmoney?）StepSix:Briefthestudentssomeexcellentideas.第一段重游市中心的過程中，司機故意開得很慢，為了讓老人不留遺憾。第二段老人下車時，要付錢給司機，司機拒絕了。適當呼應前文。·Shesmiledandturnedaround,saying"goodbye"asifshewasgoingtoapartyina1940smovie.·Wedroveinsilencetotheaddressshehadgivenme,andwithmyassistance,shegotoutofthecar.Shethankedmeagainandmadeanattempttopayme,whichimmediatelymetwithmyrejection.Withaglimpsenotonpurposethough,Isawaphotoinherpurse.Asshemadeherwaytothehospicewithastagger,thedawnappearedandoutlinedhersmallfigure.Bathinginthelightofthemorningsun,sheturnedaroundandwavedmegoodbyewithawarmsmile,sowarmthatitremindedmeofwhatIhadseeninthatphoto:Ayoungcouple，thehusbandinasoldiersuit,andthewifewearingaprintdressandapillboxhat.參考范文Paragraph1:

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