Howtoimprovepassages

Focusingonvarietiesofwordsandsentencepatterns.1993年高考作文

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OnedaymyparentswenttoworkinthefieldsandmylittlesisterandArFufollowed.Whilemyparentswereworking,mysisterwalkedtotheriverandArFufollowedher. Shesawabeautifulfloweronthebankoftheriver,shewantedtopickit.Shefellintotheriver.WhenArFusawthat,itbarkedandjumpedintotheriverquickly.

Oneday,followedbymylittle

sisterandArFu,myparentswenttoworkinthefields.Whilemyparentswereworking,mysister,withnothingtodo,walkedtotheriversidenearbywithArFu. Atthesightofabeautifulflowerontheriverbank,shewantedtopickit.However,shefellintotheriver.SeeingthatArFubarkedandjumpedintothewaterassoonaspossible.2_________________________________________________________________________________________.書面表達(dá)評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)：

北京卷2005年考試說明中的評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)情景作文一、評(píng)分原則：本題總分為20分，按5個(gè)檔次給分。評(píng)分時(shí)，先根據(jù)文章的內(nèi)容和語(yǔ)言質(zhì)量初步確定其檔次，然后以該檔次的要求來衡量，確定或調(diào)整檔次，最后給分。評(píng)分時(shí)應(yīng)考慮：內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)，上下文的連貫，詞匯和句式的多樣性及語(yǔ)言的準(zhǔn)確性。拼寫、標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)或書寫影響內(nèi)容表達(dá)時(shí)，應(yīng)視其影響程度予以考慮。英、美拼寫及詞匯用法均可接受。詞數(shù)少于60，從總分中減去1分。詞匯和句式的多樣性.(因?yàn)?_____hishelp,Ifinishedtheworkatlast.ThankstoAsaresultofOwingtoDueto因?yàn)锽ecauseof/with/for.我花了50塊錢買這本字典。Spend…on/inItcosts/takes…toPay…for…Chargesb…for…Iwascharged$50forthedictionary..我會(huì)盡我所能去幫助他。

do/trymybestdoeverythingIcan

doallthatIcan

dowhat/whateverIcan

Iwilltohelphim.I’llhelphimasmuchaspossible..高考經(jīng)典句型結(jié)構(gòu):1.It’syearssinceIworkedinBeijing.2.Itwon’tbelongbeforeyougetwell.3.ItwasnotuntilyoutoldmethatIrealizedmymistake.4.NotuntilyoutoldmedidIrealizemymistake.5.Itissaidthat

afirebrokeoutlastnight.6.Therealwaysexistbiggapsbetweendreamsandrealities.7.Shewas

soexcitedthatsheburstintotears.8.Workhard,andyouaresuretowin..Hesatthere,____________（手里拿著書）。

____________

（eyes/closed）。

____________（背著書包）。____________

（nothing/todo)。

.Thereisagirl.Sheissittingbetweenus.

2.Thisisabook.Thebookwasboughtyesterday.

Thereisagirl

whoissittingbetweenus.Thisisabookwhichwasboughtyesterday.Rewritefollowingsentences.3.走在大街上，他遇見了一個(gè)老朋友.Whilehewaswalkinginthestreet,hemetanoldfriend.4._________________,thecitylooksbeautiful.Walkinginthestreet從天空中看，Whenitisseenfromthesky,thecitylooksbeautiful.Seenfromthesky.由于不知道他的電話，他無法與Tom取得聯(lián)系。Notknowinghistelephonenumber,hecan’tgetintouchwithTom..Rewritethefollowingpassage：Theywentforawalkonthestreet.Theysawtheoldman.Hewasknockeddownbyacar.Thecarwaspassingby..readingsleepingshoesbarkingcatdumbfounded（adj.目瞪口呆）請(qǐng)你根據(jù)以下四幅圖(總分20)寫一篇100詞左右的短文。

參考詞語(yǔ):

slippers(拖鞋)

要點(diǎn)：1老人穿著拖鞋讀報(bào),狗在邊上睡覺。2老人想出門，叫狗拿鞋。3狗閉著眼睛，一動(dòng)不動(dòng)，汪汪直叫，老人很納悶。4貓嘴里叼著鞋走進(jìn)來，老人目瞪口呆。.

Anoldmanwassittinginanarmchairathome,readinghisnewspaper.Besidehimlayadogsleepingsoundly. Suddenlytheoldmandecidedtoleavehomeforawhile,buthecouldn’tgooutwithhisslipperson.Sohewokeupthedogtogettheshoesforhim.Outofhisexpectation,thedogjustbarkedwithtwoeyesclosedagain. Theoldmanwascompletelypuzzled.Ashewaswonderingwhatwashappening,hesawthecatcomingtowardshimwiththepairofshoesinitsmouth.Seeingthis,hewastotallydumbfounded.

Anoldmanwassittinginanarmchairathome,readinghisnewspaper.Besidehimlayadogsleepingsoundly. Suddenlytheoldmandecidedtoleavehomeforawhile,buthecouldn’tgooutwithhisslipperson.Sohewokeupthedogtogettheshoesforhim.Outofhisexpectation,thedogjustbarkedwithtwoeyesclosedagain. Theoldmanwascompletely

puzzled.Ashewaswonderingwhatwashappening,hesawthecatcomingtowardshimwiththepairofshoesinitsmouth.Seeingthis,hewastotallydumbfounded..

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