1、讀后續寫之提分秘籍讀后續寫之提分秘籍一一細節描寫考試說明中評分原則部分規定，讀后續 寫閱卷時按5個檔次給分。參考最高檔次第五檔 (21-25分)的描述并考慮寫作部分評分的其它 國素，可以認為一篇優秀的讀后續寫具備以下特1 .內容豐富充實，與所給短文融洽連貫；2 .連接成分應用得當，行文結構緊湊一體，與 所提供各段落開頭語的銜接緊密合理；3 .使用并用下劃線標示5個以上短文中標出的關鍵詞語上4 .詞匯豐富高級，語法準確多變主被動句式、 各類從句、特殊句式、非謂語動詞拿的使用情況 靈活恰當、不拘一格、游刃有余)；5 .詞數充分，150詞左右。評分細則規定少于 130詞的？從總分年減去2分：6 .拼

2、寫準確，英式或美式拼法皆可；7 .標點合理，使用得當讀后續寫基本是以記敘文為主，而記敘文是 以記人敘事為主要內容，以敘述為主要表達方式 來反映豐富多彩的現實生活的一種文體。 一般來 說，完成一篇完整的記敘文寫作，需要選取合適 的角度、按照一定的順序組織素材進行敘述， 其 中包括六個基本要素：時間、地點、人物，事情 的起因、經過和結果，即我們通常所說的五個:W”(what, who, when, where, why ) 和一個 “ H” (hoW)。除此之外，鮮明的主施和生動的語言，也是一篇優秀的記敘文所不可或缺的。人、情感心理描寫描寫作為記敘文的一種輔助的表達方式對加 強文章的表現力發揮著重

3、要的作用，它要求我們 善于捕捉細節、刻畫細節，有時還可以用上比喻、 擬人、夸張等修辭手法。一篇好的作文往往因為 一兩處細節描寫而出彩。同樣地，議論、抒情的 表達方式對記敘文主題的展現也發揮著重要的 作用。1.在寫作中，對人物情感的描寫常常能使人物的 形象顯得生動鮮活。人的情感可以分很多種，時祥翳失秋濕沸野陶斜 箕稀迭致些不同的情氤1. He is very happy and sweet.他又高興又甜 蜜。.2. They didn' t know what to do with themselves for joy.他桁高興得不知道怎么 辦好。3. He jumped for fun

4、.他iWj將得跳了起來口4. Her face brightened up.她喜形于色。More examples:L The smile on her face shone like a diamond.2. His eyes twinkled with pleasure.3. I was wild with joy,.4. I was pleased beyond description.5. She wore a shining smile on her face.6. Her smile lit up the whole room.7. She shed tears of joy.8.

5、 She was overflowing with happiness*9. Her flushed face was shining with excitement-10. I was floating on air.滿意1. The result is satisfactory.結果令人滿 意。. . 人s a smile of contentment on3. There is aher face.臉上總是掛著心滿意足的微笑2. It is difficult to please everybody* 眾 口難調口4. She belongs to those who are very

6、difficult to satisfy-姬屬于那種極難討好 的人口他們感到很滿意。5.Seeing their task finished gives them a sense of satisfaction,看到任務完成了,surprised to find you here. 在這里焦訝3 .看判你我很奇怪。4 . 11' s nothing to be surprised about. 不值得大驚小怪。5. To mysurprise, he didn ' t comeyesterday.令我吃驚的是他昨天沒有來。-7. Her appearance fairl她的美貌

7、令我神魂顛，took mybreath away.o8. Everyone looked at her in astonishment.大家都驚在:應看著施。悲1. He looks so sad.他看起來很悲傷。2. Heds no stranger to sorrow.傷中。3. His sad story makes her feel pity.悲慘經歷使她深表同情。他生活在悲他的4. His wife ' s disease took妻子的病令他茶飯不思。5. The news depresses her.苦。More examples:1. He stood silently

8、, tears cheeks.away his appetite.這個消息讓她愁rolling down his6. She looked at me in amazement. 她驚奇的 看著我。2. I feel like I am floating in an ocean of sadness.3. Hearing the news, so desperate was he that he drowned sadness in wine.4. She burst into tears and ran out of the room.5. She sobbed, hiding her fa

9、ce in her hands.6. I tried to fight back tears.7. M eyes were filled with tears.8. A frown （皺眉）now stood on his face.9. These days he was in low spirits.憤怒1. She was burning with anger. 她怒火中燒。2. He easily loses his temper. 他很容易發脾3. He was in a rage.他大發雷霆她因為發怒臉漲得4. She was red with anger.通紅。More exam

10、ples:1. I was seized by anger.2. His anger boiled over.3. He could hardly/scarcely contain his rage.4. His voice trembled with anger.5. He gave me a look of burning anger.6. He glared at me with burning eyes.7. His face clouded with anger.感動1. Touched deeply/immensely, we 2. Tears filling her eyes,

11、she offered her heartfelt gratitude.3. VUh tears streaming downher face, she.害怕 He turned to me, with his eyes full of horror.She was struck with horror when. She was choked by fear. Her face turned pale and stood there tongue-tied. Fear flooded over him. Her heart beat so violently that she felt ne

12、arly suffocated（窒息）. She shook all over, feeling like sittingon pins and needles.二、動作描寫動作描寫也是描寫人的重要一點。利用適當 的詞語對表達人們的心理和性格有很大的幫助。表達說話電動同：speak:說，講，饋話，演說。著重開口發音。say:說，說話。意義非常廣泛，是一般用語。著 重內容，指連貫的說話。talk:講，說話。著重說話的動作，而不著重所 說的話。它多指兩個人或多個人在一起講話。tell：說，告訴，講。指把一件事情傳達給別人 或講述一個故事等。有連續敘述的意思。1. gossip:只在后面說人是非）閑

13、談他人的事情。2. Can you child speak yet?你的孩?會說話了嗎？chat:閑談，聊天。多指非正式的，輕松的，愉 快的，沒有中心地、沒有特殊目的地談話或聊天 含有親熱的意味。他說他3. He said he wanted to go to town. 想去城里。4. I want to talk to you about an urgent matter.我想和你談一件緊急的事。5. Tell me what happened.告訴我發生了什么事。6. They dropped in for a chat last night. 他 們昨晚順便來，閑聊了一會兒。、7. Y

14、Ou shouldn ' t listen to gossip. 你不應 該聽流言蜚語。無聲的微表示美的動詞： smile:今微至"。通常指好意的微笑, 笑，如表示親切、愉快等。指面露喜色，帶有笑容的意思。她看見我時露laugh: "笑"."發笑"指一般的笑。beam: “笑”。出微笑1. She smiled when she saw me.2. We all laughed loudly whenshe madea joke.她說了個燙話，我們都大聲笑起來。、微笑3. He beamed on his visitors.他對著客人們

15、 表示哭我們可以說：cry: “哭泣、“流淚”。意義及用法最廣泛。多 強調聲音？指呼號和叫喊地哭，一般由于痛苦， 悲哀，恐，網 也可能是歡呼引起的。weep: “哭源、“流淚”。指不出聲的哭，著重在 由于悲傷而流淚。sob: “哽咽”，“嗚咽”，“啜泣”。指盡力抑制自己的感情時發出抽泣的聲音。也可以指哭訴1. She started to cry when she heard the sadnews.當她聽到翅個悲痛的消息時，她開始哭她哀悼2. She wept the death of the child.這個孩子大聲地孩子的死亡。3. The child sobbed loudly.哭泣。

16、表示走的動詞：gO: “走” L意義范圍較廣，是一般用語。表示向 一定的地點運動。少仃_ _ _ _，、一k，pace: te過） wander: “4%回”定路線。“踱步”。尤指以普通的步子走。，“到處走”，“漫游”。側重無確walk: “步行”走"表示有目的或無目的的步 行、散步、游玩。1. W went by plane.我們是乘飛機去的。>11 B II" , 、-2. I can t walk about in this heat.在這本中.The fence is only ten paces from the house 圍墻離屋子只看十步遠大熱天我簡直

17、無法走動。4. The children wandered in the woods. 孩子 們在森林里漫步。動作描寫美句欣賞1. The first actor was dragging through the snow when the second began walking towards him trembling with cold.第一位演員翟雪地里拖著腳步艱難移動，這時候第二位演員朝他走去，身子在寒氣中不僅顫抖。2. I still remember the shock that rooted me flat against the wall.我仍熟記得當時驚呆了，靠在墻上，一

18、動不動。3. The pounding in my ears drowned out the rest of the words, only a word here and there filtered through.我的耳朵里嘿嗡作響，聽不見他們后來講的話， 只是東一點西一點滲入的只言片語。4. I stared at him in shock and a small sound of dismay escaped my throat.我驚愕地盯著他，不紊發出輕輕的沮喪聲。5. Standing with all the dignity I could muster, I said not

19、hing.帶著所有的尊嚴，我融在那里一句話都沒說。6. I clasped my hands behind my back so he wouldn' t see them shaking.我緊握著雙手藏在背后，這樣他就看不見我的手7. The last words cameout in an eager rush.最后幾個字是急切地蹦出來的。8. He went back to hoeing the weeds that sprang up between the delicate little bean plants.他又去鋤生在在青嫩的豆苗間的雜草了。9. The next da

20、y, it was a very sad and withdrawn girl who dragged into the principal's office.第二天？我沉默不語，一副十分傷心的小女孩的 模樣，拖著腳步走近校長辦公室。10. He looked out of the window, biting his lips, as if thinking.施一邊看著窗外，一邊咬著嘴唇，仿佛在思考。三、練一練：找找下面的勵志美文中動作、神態、 心理描寫，If the Dreamls Big Enough, the Facts Don tCountI used to watch he

21、r from my kitchen window, she seemed so small as she muscled her way through the crowd of boys on the playground. The school was across the street from our home and I would often watch the kids as they played during recess. A sea of children, and yet to me, she stood out from them all.I remembered t

22、he first day I saw her playing basketball. I watched in wonder asshe ran circles around the other kids. She managedto shoot jump shots just over their heads and into the net. The boys always tried to stop her but no one could.I began to notice her at other times, basketball in hand, playing alone. S

23、he would practice dribbling and shooting over and over again, sometimes until dark. One day I asked her why she practiced so much. She looked directly in my eyes and without a momentof hesitation. She said, “I want to go to college. The only way I can go is if I get a scholarship. I like basketball.

24、 I decided that if I were good enough, I would get a scholarship. I amgoing to play college basketball. I want to be the best. My Daddy told meif the dream is big enough, the facts don' t count. " I had seen over and over again.Well, I had to give it to hershe wasdetermined. I watched her t

25、hrough those junior high years and into high school. Every week, she led her varsity team to victory.One day in her senior year, I saw her sitting in the grass, head cradled in her arms. I walked across the street and sat down in the cool grass beside her. Quietly I asked what was wrong."Oh, no

26、thing, " came a softreply. "I amjust too short. ' The coach told her that at5 ' 5" she would probably never get to play for a top ranked team much less offered a scholarshipso she should stopdreaming about college.She was heartbroken and I felt my own throat tighten as I sense

27、d her disappointment. I asked her if she had talked to her dad about it yet. She liftedher head from her hands and told methat her father said those coaches were wrong. They just did not understand the power of a dream. He told her that if she really wanted to play for a good college, if she truly w

28、anted a scholarship, that nothing could stop her except one thjng her own attitude.He toldher again, “If the dream is big enough, the facts don' t count. ”The next year, as she and her team went to the Northern California Championship game, she was seen by a college recruiter. She was indeed offered a scholarship, a full ride, to a Division I, NCAA women s basketball team. She was going to get the college education that she