十句話搞定讀后續寫4

十句五定法讀一、讀什么：讀材料（一般是記敘文）＋讀提示句（讀關鍵詞）。

時間不夠讀首尾段二、怎么讀：1.找信息——who/where/when/what/why/how2.思考——readforcharacters人物/plot情節/conflict沖突/emotionalchange情感變化/theme主題3.讀的過程中圈畫關鍵信息，重要細節內容（用以細節呼應），好的句式（用以仿寫）三、讀完之后要明白：文章主人公是誰，文章主要情節，待解決的問題，人物情緒變化與文章主題。第二節(滿分25分)閱讀下面材料，根據其內容和所給段落開頭語續寫兩段，使之構成一篇完整的短文。

I'dalwaysbeentoldtotakecareofmyolderbrother,Brian,whowasbornweakandsmall.I'doftentiehisshoesorprepareanotherglassofwaterforhim.MymomsawmylargersizeandstrongbodyasasignthatIwastobeakindofguardianangel（守護天使）forBrian.However,thatwasnotthecase.Onedayourschoolsponsoredapumpkin-carvingcontest.Firstprizewas$100,andIknewjusthowIwouldspendit.Therewasabrand-newgameIwasdyingtoown.SoIdecidedthefirstplacebonusdefinitelyhadtolandinmypocket.WhenIhadtocarvetheperfectpumpkinI'dpickedout,itdawnedonmethatwithmybigclumsyfingersI'dsurelyscrewitup（搞砸）.Ithoughtof

Brian'ssmaller,delicatehandsandknewhewasthemanforthejob.IimmediatelybeggedBrian.Unexpectedly,heaskedforacut.Thatwasfifty-fifty.Quicklydoingthemathinmyhead,IfiguredoutevenifIsplitthefirstprize,I'dstillhaveenoughcashforthegame.SoIgaveintoBrian'sdemands.WithskillfulhandsBriancarvedtheperfectface,andnowwehadthebestpumpkinever.Thentheunexpectedhappened:Wecameinsecond.Unfortunately,secondprizewasonly$50,andIneededeverypennyofthattobuythegame.Thedayoftheawardsceremony,theprincipalhandedoverthemoneytomebecauseBrianwashome,sickwithcold.Ifhereallywantedtowin,hewouldhavebeenheretoday,Ithoughttomyself,justifyingstealingthecashfromunderpoorBrian'srunnynose.Withhardlyathought,Irantothestoreandboughtmydreamgame.ThatnightwhenBrianaskedifwehadwon,Idenied,afraidtolookintohiseyes.ThewholethingwasnevermentionedagainuntilthedaywhenBrianwaspackingforcollege.IplayedmyusualroleinhelpinghimpackwhenIcameacrossanoldalbumfilledwithphotoshehadtakenastheschoolphotogragher.注意：1．續寫詞數應為150左右；2．請按如下格式作答。

Iwasenjoyingthephotoswhenonecaughtmyeye.

"Youactuallyknewanddidn'tsayanything?"Iwasshocked.

[前文大意]本文講述了一對兄弟間因學校南瓜雕刻比賽引發的道德困境。因母親囑托，身體強健的弟弟自幼照顧羸弱的哥哥布萊恩。某次學校南瓜雕刻比賽中，弟弟渴望用獎金購買游戲，卻因笨拙求助哥哥。布萊恩提出平分獎金，并以其靈巧手藝雕刻出完美作品。意外獲得二等獎后，弟弟趁哥哥病假獨自領走50美元獎金，買游戲并謊稱落選。多年后，弟弟在幫哥哥整理大學行李時，發現其作為校攝影師保存的獲獎照片，暗示布萊恩早知真相卻沉默至今，揭開了深藏多年的謊言與兄弟間未言說的愛與諒解。十句五定法paragraph11銜接para1提示句（接著para1首句往下寫）2345銜接para2提示句（根據para2首句倒推寫）paragraph26銜接para2提示句（接著para2首句往下寫）789

結尾（正能量）10

升華主題寫剩余五句補齊細節情緒動作心理語言環境描寫Para1.Iwasenjoyingthephotoswhenonecaughtmyeye.Para2."Youactuallyknewanddidn'tsayanything?"Iwasshocked.

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句1:在照片里我看到了什么？我看到了一張我在南瓜雕刻比賽頒獎典禮上的一張照片，照片里校長正給我頒獎定句6:Brian會怎么回答？會做什么？“對，我知道你很想買那個游戲，沒關系”；輕輕拍我的肩膀，話語里充滿理解句2、3:然后，我的所想？所感？驚訝，尷尬，我以為他不知道我們獲獎的事情，因為他那時生病在家句7、8：聽了Brian的話，我的所感？所做？很愧疚，我真誠道歉，然后擁抱他，我哭了定句4、5:然后Brian會做什么？對我說什么？看到我拿著這個照片，他解釋原因(學校讓他臨時去拍照)定句9、10:我的感悟：守護天使的意義不僅僅在于保護和照顧，Brian用他的寬容和理解，讓我明白了什么是真正的守護兩段十句五定法的具體思路1.handsbsth=handsthtosb1.把某物遞給某人2.catchsightof…2.看到…3.Myheartskippedabeat3.我的心漏跳了一拍。4.Withscenesof…flashingthroughmymind4.腦海中閃過…的場景，5.Thebloodrushedtomyfacewithembarrassment5.我因尷尬而滿臉通紅。6.walkovertosb6.走向某人7.Hisgazefellon…7.他的目光落在…上8.givemyshoulderareassuringpat8.輕輕拍我的肩膀以示安慰9.Mythroattightened.9.我的喉嚨收緊了。10.Wordfailedme.10.我一句話也說不出來。11.strokemyheadinasoothinggesture11.用手輕輕撫摸我的頭以示安慰12.forgiveness/tolerance12.原諒/寬容para1：Iwasenjoyingthephotoswhenonecaughtmyeye.

________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________para2:"Youactuallyknewanddidn'tsayanything?"Iwasshocked.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________接下來可描寫Brian的回答，作者的反應以及作者的感悟。我看見了哪張照片，是張什么樣的照片？Brian會怎么回答“我”，我的內心感受？接下來可描寫這張照片和作者看到這張照片后的反應以及Brian注意到我的異常，他的解釋。第一句話：____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________第二句話：____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________我出現在那張照片里，站在舞臺上，校長正把獎金遞給我。(SbdidA,doingB.)我一看到它，心臟就漏跳了一拍。我從沒想過他會知道獎金的事，因為他當時生病在家。(Themoment+句子,sbdidsth.)(Never

hadsbdonesth部分倒裝結構)Iwasinthephoto,standingonthestageastheprincipalhandedmetheprizemoney.十句五定法：ThemomentIcaughtsightofit,myheartskippedabeat.NeverhadIthought

hewouldknowabouttheprize,sincehewassickathomethen.第三句話：________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________第四句話：________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Brian注意到了我的異常行為，便走過來，他的目光落在了那張照片上。(HavingdoneA,sbdidB.)Havingnoticedmyunusualbehavior,Brianwalkedovertomeandhisgazefellonthephoto.我自私地拿走了錢，還對Brian撒了謊，這些場景在我腦海中閃過，我感到血液涌上臉頰，滿心尷尬。(Withscenesof…flashingthroughmymind,sbdidsth.)WithscenesofhowIselfishlytookthemoneyandliedtoBrianflashingthroughmymind,Ifeltthebloodrushingtomyfacewithembarrassment.

第五句話：________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________第六句話：________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________“盡管生病，學校也要求我去拍照。所以我拍下了這個，”他說道，聲音充平靜。(“…”sbsaid,hisvoicefilledwith…

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“TheschoolaskedmetotakephotoseventhoughIwassick.SoIcapturedthis.”hesaid,hisviocefilledwithcalmness.“沒關系，我們都會犯錯，重要的是我們能從錯誤中吸取教訓，”他說道，輕輕地拍了拍我的肩膀。(“…”sbsaid,doingsth

)“It’salright.Weallmakemistakes.Whatmattersisthatwelearnfromthem.”hesaid,givingmyshoulderareassuringpat.第七句話：________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________第八句話：________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________聽到他的話，我又是感動又是愧疚，喉嚨一下子收緊了，一句話也說不出來。(So+adj.+wassbthat+句子)我再也忍不住自己的情緒，撲進他的懷里失聲痛哭起來。“Brian，我很抱歉，對不起，我太自私了。”我低聲說道，聲音因羞愧而顫抖。(SbdidA,doingB.)Afterhearinghiswords,somovedyetguiltywasIthatmythroattightenedandwordsfailedme.Unabletoholdbackmyemotion,Ithrewmyselfintohisarms,sobbinguncontrollably.“I’msosorry,Brian.Iwassoselfish,”Iwhispered,myviocetremblingwithshame.第九句話：___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________第十句話：___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Brian把我拉近，輕撫我的頭。(SbdidA,doingB.)那一刻，我突然意識到Brian也是我的守護天使，用他的寬容和原諒守護著我。(At

thatmoment,itdawnedonmethat+句子.)Brian

pulledmecloser,strokingmyheadinasoothinggesture.

At

thatmoment,itdawnedonmethatBrianwasmyguardianangeltoo,guardingmewithhistorelanceandforgiveness.step1認真剖析首句，構思段落內容step2十句五定法

展開劇情para1para2考慮與上下文的融洽銜接和續寫第二段開頭語的呼應和銜接關注與文章開頭的遙相呼應根據具體語境弘揚感情的真、人性的善或拼搏的美第1句：接著para1首句(心理/動作鏈）第5句：根據para2首句第6句：接著para2首句(心理/動作鏈）第9句：結局第10句：升華總結：step1讀原文，梳理信息，3-5分鐘step2構思、初稿（十句五定法），10-15分鐘step3補充細節，寫剩下五句，潤色，定稿，10-15分鐘step4謄寫到答題卡上，5分鐘[參考范文]

Iwasenjoyingthephotoswhenonecaughtmyeye.

Iwasinthephoto,standingonthestageastheprincipalhandedmetheprizemoney.ThemomentIcaughtsightofit,myheartskippedabeat.NeverhadIthought

hewouldk