2023年新高考全國I卷英語讀后續寫解析

Step1.Readfortheplot,charactersandtheme讀Step2.Predict

theproperplotsineachparagraph思

Step3.Writevividly

寫Stepsforcontinuationwriting情節主題人物Brainstorming故事的三要素story（葛文山，2022）1Readthestory(滿分25分)閱讀下面材料,根據其內容和所給段落開頭語續寫兩段,使之構成一篇完整的短文。WhenIwasinmiddleschool,mysocialstudiesteacheraskedmetoenterawritingcontest,Isaidnowithoutthinking.Ididnotlovewriting.MyfamilycamefromBrazil,soEnglishwasonlymysecondlanguage.WritingwassodifficultandpainfulformethatmyteacherhadallowedmetopresentmypaperonthesinkingoftheTitanicbyactingoutaplay,whereIplayedalltheparts.Noonelaughedharderthanhedid.So,whydidhesuddenlyforcemetodosomethingatwhichIwassuretofail?Hisreply:“BecauseIloveyourstories.Ifyou’rewillingtoapplyyourself,Ithinkyouhaveagoodshotatthis.”Encouragedbyhiswords,Iagreedtogiveitatry.IchosePaulRevere’shorseasmysubject.PaulReverewasasilversmith(銀匠)inBostonwhorodeahorseatnightonApril18,1775toLexingtontowarnpeoplethatBritishsoldierswerecoming.Mystorywouldcomestraightfromthehorse’smouth.Notabrilliantidea,butfunny,andunlikelytobeanyoneelse’schoice.Whatdidthehorsethink,ashespedthroughthenight?Didhegettired?Havedoubts?Didhewanttoquit?Isympathizedimmediately.Igottired.Ihaddoubts.Iwantedtoquit.But,likeRevere’shorse,Ikeptgoing.Iworkedhard.Icheckedmyspelling.Iaskedmyoldersistertocorrectmygrammar.Icheckedoutahalf-dozenbooksonPaulReverefromthelibrary.Ievenreadafewofthem.WhenIhandedintheessaytomyteacher,hereadit,laughedoutloudandsaid,“Great.Now,writeitagain.”Iwroteitagain,andagainandagain.WhenIfinallyfinishedit,thethoughtofwinninghadgivenwaytotheenjoymentofwriting.IfIdidn’twin,Iwouldn’tcare.注意:1.續寫詞數應為150個左右；2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應位置作答。Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Iwenttomyteacher’sofficeaftertheawardpresentation.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Who,When,Where,What,Why,How5W+1HWhenandWhere_WhoWhatHowandWhyAtfirst,I___________________becauseI_________________and_____________________________.However,withthe___________oftheteacher,Idecidedto___________.Duringwriting,I_____________,butI______________________.Finally,whenIfinishedwriting,I_____________andnolongercaredabout_____________________________.Mysocialstudiesteacheraskedmetoenterawritingcontestrefusedwithoutthinkingdidn’tlovewritingWhenIwasinmiddleschoolmysocialstudiesteacherandIEnglishwasmysecondlanguageencouragementwantedtoquitkeptwritingandworkedhardgiveitatryenjoyedwritingwinningorlosing/theresultPara1.WhenIwasinmiddleschool,mysocialstudiesteacheraskedmetoenterawritingcontest.Isaidnowithoutthinking.Ididnotlovewriting.

MyfamilycamefromBrazil,soEnglishwasonlymysecondlanguage.Writingwassodifficultandpainfulformethatmyteacherhadallowedmetopresent

mypaperon

thesinkingoftheTitanicbyactingoutaplay,whereIplayedalltheparts.Noonelaughedharderthanhedid.

我不愿參加寫作比賽2.祖籍巴西，英語二外3.寫作于我困難/痛苦(但是創作內容很有趣)Para2.So,whydidhesuddenlyforcemetodosomethingatwhichIwassuretofail?Hisreply:“BecauseIloveyourstories.Ifyou’rewillingto

applyyourself,Ithinkyou

haveagoodshotatthis.Encouragedbyhiswords,Iagreedtogiveitatry.老師喜歡我寫的故事，鼓勵我我被鼓勵，同意試一下Para3IchosePaulRevere’shorseasmysubject.PaulReverewasasilversmith(銀匠)inBostonwhorodeahorseatnightonApril18,1775toLexingtontowarnpeoplethatBritishsoldierswerecoming.Mystorywouldcomestraightfromthehorse’smouth.Notabrilliantidea,but

funny;andunlikelytobeanyoneelse’schoice.開始寫作：銀匠PR的馬人=馬有趣funny;獨特distinctivePara4Whatdidthehorsethink,ashespedthroughthenight?Didhegettired?Havedoubts?Didhewanttoquit?Isympathizedimmediately.Igottired.Ihaddoubts.Iwantedtoquit.But,likeRevere’shorse,Ikeptgoing.Iworkedhard.Icheckedmyspelling.Iaskedmyoldersistertocorrectmygrammar.IcheckedoutahalfdozenbooksonPaulReverefromthelibrary.Ievenreadafewofthem.寫作感受:想放棄,但繼續前行。行動：努力完成,改正查閱Para5WhenIhandedin

theessaytomyteacher,hereadit,laughedoutloud,andsaid,“Great.Now,writeitagain.”Iwroteitagain,andagainandagain.WhenIfinallyfinishedit,thethoughtofwinninghadgivenwaytothe

enjoymentofwriting.IfIdidn’twin,Iwouldn’tcare.老師讓我重寫，反復享受寫作，看淡輸贏【故事主旨】文章講述了一名英語為第二語言的中學生,在老師的鼓勵下，克服了對英語寫作的恐懼和困難，通過不懈努力，在寫作比賽中取得優異成績的故事。【作者情感emotion的變化】自卑---懷疑自己---堅持不懈---從修改文章中獲得樂趣--對贏得比賽沒有信心，但對結果并不在乎relativeemotionswiththedevelopmentofthestorylineWhenIwasinmiddleschool,mysocialstudiesteacheraskedmetoenterawritingcontest,Isaidnowithoutthinking.Self-abasedIgottired.Ihaddoubts.Iwantedtoquit.SelfdoubtedBut,likeRevere’shorse,Ikeptgoing.Iworkedhard.Icheckedmyspelling.Iaskedmyoldersistertocorrectmygrammar.Icheckedoutahalf-dozenbooksonPaulReverefromthelibrary.persistentWhenIfinallyfinishedit,thethoughtofwinninghadgivenwaytotheenjoymentofwriting.IfIdidn’twin,Iwouldn’tcare.Enjoyableandselfbreakthrough2PredictthestoryParagraph1：

Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews.______________________________________________________________Paragraph2：

______________________________________________________________Writingideas在老師辦公室里我們會有怎樣的互動/對話？老師祝賀我，肯定我的天賦。我感謝老師的鼓勵，讓我對寫作有了態度上的轉變。根據第二段段首句theawardpresentation可以推斷出，我的作品獲獎了并且我要參加頒獎典禮Iwenttomyteacher’sofficeaftertheawardpresentation.news是什么？Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews.Iwenttomyteacher’sofficeaftertheawardpresentation.1_____________________________________________________________2._____________________________________________________________3.______________________________________________Whatwasthenews?/Whotoldmethenews?HowdidIfeel?/whatwasmyfeelingafterhearingthenews?WhatwouldIdo/say/thinkofattheawardpresentation?Whatwouldmyteacherfeelandsaywhenseeingme

?WhatwouldIsay/dotomyteacher?WhatdidIlearnfromthisexperience？如何升華主題Question-Answer”Strategy（Q&A）Whatwasthereactionofmyteacherandclassmates(/audience)?news說什么？（Iwon，anawardpresentation）我的反應（不敢信/震驚/激動）感恩老師我參加awardceremonyawardpresentation細節(臺下老師/同學鼓掌)情節設計(Para1)newsIwonmyresponseteacher(help/thanks)Iattendedtheawardceremony/presentation.P1:Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews.細節描寫P2:Iwenttomyteacher’sofficeaftertheawardpresentation.

showmyprizeexpressgratitude老師表揚：creative,improvedgrammar.我的感受：回想。悟道理：過程比結果更重要老師在干嘛？悟道理：過程比結果更重要續寫線索：比賽消息傳來——作者獲獎——高興——頒獎典禮感謝老師——頒獎后來到老師辦公室——老師告訴作者堅持寫作——作者表達了對寫作的喜愛——作者寫作取得了成功——感激老師3WritethestoryTipforwriting口訣：人物時態和事件，語言特色不要變58細節添加法Tips:想問題：What?Why?Who?When?How?并列：形容詞，名詞，動詞。延長句子1.令我感到驚訝的是，我被告知我在寫作比賽中獲得了一等獎，并且3天后將舉行頒獎典禮。Muchtomysurprise/astonishment,

Iwasinformed/toldthatIwonthefirstprizeinthewritingcontestandthattherewouldbeanawardpresentationinthreedays.(換withanawardpresentationtobeheldin

threedays）2.結果是我在寫作比賽中獲得了一等獎，我無法相信我的耳朵直到我被告知3天后要去參加頒獎典禮。ItturnedoutthatIgotthefirstprizeinthewritingcontest.Icouldn’tbelievemyearsuntilIwasinformedtoattendtheawardpresentationin

threedays.（我的反應和心理活動）Ifeltexcited.（如何擴寫句子？？）Asenseofhugeexcitementseizedme.Instantly,asenseofenormousexcitement

anddelightfloodedoverme.當我發現我的努力終于得到回報，我立即感到一陣興奮Instantly,asenseofenormousexcitementanddelightfloodedovermewhenIfoundallmyeffortspaidoff.(無靈主語句：情緒名詞+固定動詞+人+as/whensb.didsth.)當某人做某事時，一股XXX的情緒涌上心頭Instantly,asenseofexcitement

seizedmewhenIheardthenews.馬上，一股激動的感覺抓住了我，當我聽到消息時。I

thankedmyteacher.高級詞匯：Iappreciatedmyteacher.Iappreciatedmyteacher

fromthebottomofmyheart

forhisappreciationandencouragement.Why?

完全倒裝

時間、地點、方位介詞或副詞置于句首

（謂語+主語）這一天終于到來了。Thencamethebigday.Iattendedtheawardpresentation.

Iattendedtheawardpresentation,invitingmyeldersistertobepresentalongwithme.心緊張得怦怦直跳，我走上舞臺。Withmyheartpoundingwildlywithnervousness,Iwent/steppedontothestage.(award場景細節)他們為我鼓掌？？當我從校長那里領獎時，觀眾爆發了雷鳴般的掌聲。ThunderousandwarmapplausebrokeoutfromtheaudiencewhenIreceivedtheprizegivenawaybythepresident.在場的所有人都爆發出掌聲和歡呼，在他們中間，我瞥見了我的老師，他的眼睛里閃爍著驕傲。(burstout;catchsightof;radiate流露,顯現）Allthepeoplepresentburstoutclappingandcheering,amongwhom,Icaughtsightofmyteacher,prideradiatingfromhiseyes.我手里拿著獎狀，迫不及待地想要向老師分享這份喜悅。

Holdingtheawardinmyhand,Icouldn’twaittosharethejoy/enjoymentwithmyteacher.我一進門就聽到他清脆響亮的笑聲。HardlyhadIenteredwhenIwasgreetedwithhisloudandclearlaughter.

老師一看到我就給我一個大大的擁抱。Nosoonerhadmyteacherseenmethanhegavemeabighug.我走進老師的辦公室，他微笑著看著我，鼓掌歡迎。Iwalkedintomyteacher’soffice,andhelookedatmewithasmile,clappinghishandsinwelcome.

我向他表達了我真誠的感激，并說道，“如果沒有你的欣賞和鼓勵，我不可能獲得這個獎項。”

Iexpressedmysinceregratitudetohim,saying,“Withoutyourappreciationandencouragement,Iwouldnothavewontheaward.”我永遠不會忘記，是你的賞識和鼓勵讓我愛上寫作并贏得這個獎項。Iwouldneverforget,

itwasyourappreciationandencouragementthat

enabledmetofallinlovewithwritingandwinthisaward.聽到我說的話，他拍了拍我的頭，高興地說：“恭喜！你看，你做到了！”（或者你是個很好的作家，繼續寫作吧。）HearingwhatIsaid,hepattedmeonthehead,sayinggladlytome,“Congratulations!Yousee,youmadeit!”（Youareagreatwriter,sokeepwriting!）他告訴我他為我感到驕傲并且鼓勵我繼續寫作。我點了點頭，心里充滿了決心。Hetoldmehewasproudofmeandencouraged/inspiredmetocontinuewriting.Inoddedmyhead,filledwithdetermination.“某人的話還在某人的耳邊回響”one’swords(echoed回響/rangout)inone’sears老師鼓勵的話還在她的耳邊回響。Myteacher’sencouragingwordsstillrangoutinmy

ear.老師的話猶如迷霧中的燈塔，一直激勵著我前進。(lighthouse;mist)Justlikethelighthouseinthemist,myteacher’swordsalwaysmotivatedmetomoveforward.從那時起，我寫了許多好作品，現在我是一位著名的作家。我把我的成功歸功于我的社會學老師，他是我寫作道路上的指路明燈。（owe…to…;beacon）Sincethen(Fromthatmomenton),IhavewrittenmanygreatworksandnowIamafamouswriter.Iowemysuccesstomysocialteacher,whoisabeaconinmylifeontheroadtowriting.（我的感悟）正是在那一刻，我感受到了走出舒適區的力量和堅持的價值。英語寫作曾經是一個艱巨的挑戰，現在已成為我的激情所在。ItwasatthatmomentthatIperceivedthepowerofsteppingoutofmycomfortzoneandthevalueofpersistence.Englishwriting,whichhadoncebeenaenormouschallenge,nowbecamemypassion.一條成為英國作家的新道路在我腳下延伸得很遠。我會繼續走這條新路，就像里維爾的馬一樣。AnewpathwayofbeinganEnglishwriterstretchedfarundermyfeet.Iwouldkeepgoingonthisnewpath,likeRevere'shorse.Topic：

堅持不懈地努力、勇于挑戰自我，可以成就更好的自己.Also:老師的欣賞和鼓勵會對學生產生積極的影響.Gobeyondone’slimits.超越突破自我，挑戰無限可能！theme?Whatcanwelearnfromthisstory?理解文章主題ThethemeEventhoughsomethingmaybeachallengeforyouatfirst,onceyoumakeconstanteffortsandneverstop,itwillbecomeyourpassionandstrenghth.

參考范文 Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews.IwasinformedthatIwonthefirstprizeinthewritingcontestandthattherewouldbeanawardpresentationintwodays.IwassoexcitedtohearthenewsthatIimmediatelyshareditwithmyteacher.“Iknewyou’dwin!Iamproudofyou.Youmadeit!”hesaidexcitedly.Thencamethebigday.WhenIwasinvitedtothestagetoreceivetheaward,Iexpressedmythankstomyteacher.Isaid,“It’syouwhomakemefallinlovewithwriting,mysocialstudiesteacher.Withoutyourrecognitionandguidance,Icouldn’thavewrittenthisarticle.Againthankyouverymuch!” Iwenttomyteacher’sofficeaftertheawardpresentation.Myteacherwaswaitingforme.Holdingmyhands,hesaid“Congratulations!Youareagoodwriter,sokeepwriting.”“YouknowIdidn’tlikewritingbefore,butnowIamcrazyaboutit!Iwilltrymybesttocreategoodworks.”Isaidseriously.Sincethen,IhavewrittenmanygoodworksandnowIamafamouswriter.

Iowemysuccesstomysocialteacherwhoisabeaconinmylifeontheroadtowriting.Sample

Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews.Iwonthefirstplace.Hearingthenews,Istoodthere,frozen.Icouldn'tbelievemyears.HadIheardright?Myclassmatesgavemealookofdisbeliefatfirst,andthencheeredandclappedhappily.WhenIcametomysenses,tearsofexcitementcametomyeyes.Attheawardpresentation,Iacceptedtheawardcertificate,extremelynervousandexcited.Atthatmoment,Icouldn’thelpthinkingofmyteacher.Iwenttomyteacher'sofficeaftertheawardpresentation.WhenIpresentedtheawardcertificatetomyteacher,hiseyesglisteningwithtears,hereachedouthishandsandhuggedmetightly.Iexpressedmysincerestgratitudetotheteacherandattributedthissmallachievementtohim.Lookingintomyeyes,hesaid,“I'msoproudofyou.It'syourownhardworkthatpaidoff.Believeinyourselfandyoucanwritebetterandbetter.”Inoddeddeterminedly.ThatwaswhenIfellinlovewithwriting.什么信息？—獲得第1句我：驚訝，張嘴，手舞足蹈；同學：歡呼，拍掌，欽佩；銜接：參加頒獎會，與別人互動

Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews.Icouldn’tbelievemyearswhenIwastoldthatmystorywonthefirstinthewritingcontest.Astrongsenseofsurpriseandexcitementfloodedintomyheartsothatmymouthwaswidelyopen.Myeffortsandhardworkpaidoff!Lookingaroundandhearingthecheersaroundme,Ijumpedintotheair.Onthenextmorning,Iattendedanawardpresentationinourschoolandsharedtheenjoymentofwritingwithothertalentedstudents.(80words)為什么去辦公室？感恩老師；分享興奮我：開門，看見老師，說謝謝；老師：贊揚肯定，繼續鼓勵；升華：借物抒情，弘揚師生關系Iwenttomyteacher’sofficeaftertheawardpresentation.Ijustwantedtosharethehappinesswithmyteacher.Itwashisencouragementthatledmetotheworldofwriting,sofunandenjoyable.“Thankyou,sir!”,Imadeabowtohim.Whenseeingtheawardinmyhand,hepattedmeonthehead,sayinghappilytome,“Yousee,youmakeit!”Atthemoment,Icaughtsightofmyteacherinthewarmingraysofthesettingsun,hisbrightsmilewarmingusanddrivingawayallthedarknessinmyheart.(88words)Para1Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews.

IcouldhardlybelievethatIwonthefirstplace,whichfeltlikeadream.ThenIwasinformedthattheawardpresentationwasjusttwodayslater.

NotuntilthebigdaydidIrealizeitwasthecreativityandemotionsinmyessaythatimpressedalljudges.Immersedinexcitementandjoy,Icouldn’twaittosharemyfeelingswithmy

socialstudiesteacher,

whomIshouldbemostgratefulto.Para2Iwenttomyteacher’sofficeaftertheawardpresentation.

“Congratulations!WhenIwatchedyouactouttheplay

oftheTitanic,Iknewyouweregiftedatwritingstories.

”

hesaid,

hiseyesfilledwithpride.

“Thankyou.”

Ireplied,

“Butforyourencouragement,Iwouldn’thavetakenthefirststepandseenmyownpotential.”

“Yourhardworkandpersistencealsoplayedanimportantpart!Sokeepwriting!”

hepattedmyshouldergently.Ilearnedoneofthemostimportantlessonsinmylife—Itisyourattitudeanddiligencethatdetermineyourfinalachievement.P2:Iwenttomyteacher’sofficeaftertheawardpresentation.ShewasstillreadingmyessayagainandagainwhenIcamein.Ican’twaittoshowmyprizetoherandexpressedmygratitudecapinhand.“Yourcreativityandimaginationareprettyamazing,whichgiveyouadvantagesandprivilegestodefeatothercontestants/participants.”Shesmiled.“What’smore,yourgrammarandwritingskillshavegainedgreatimprovementwhenyourewroteitagainandagain.”Myteacher’swordsremindedmeofthatroughbutmeaningfulexperience.IguesseditwasPaulRevere’shorsethatgavemehugemotivationandcouragetoovercomeobstaclesandinsistonperfectingmyself.Myteacherlookedintomyeyesandsaid,“It’snotthefinalresultbutwhatyouhavelearnedduringtheprocessthatreallycounts!”Plot1IgotthefirstprizeinthewritingcontestwritevividlyPara1Plot2Iwaspresentattheawardpresentation.Plot3IdecidedtotellmyteacherthegoodnewsItturnedoutthatIgotthefirstprizeinthewritingcontest.Icouldn’tbelievemyearsuntilIwasinformedtoattendtheawardpresentationattheschoolhall.Whenaskedtosharemywritingskills,Iwastooexcitedtoutteraword,memoriesaboutmyrepeatedwritingcomingback.NotuntilthatmomentdidIknowallmyeffortspaidoff.Realizingitwasmyteacher’sencouragementandtrustthatmotivatedmetowinthecontest,Icouldn’twaittotellhimthegoodnews.Nosoonerhadmyteacherseenmethanhegavemeabighug.Iexpressedmysinceregratitudetohim,saying,“Iwouldnothavewontheawardwithoutyourencouragement”Plot1ItoldmyteacherthegoodnewswritevividlyPara2Plot2HewasproudandencourgedmetogoonwritingPlot3IlearnedalessonHiseyeslitupwithpride,andhecongratulatedmewithabroadsmile.HearingwhatIsaid,hepattedmyshoulderandreplied,“Butthemostimportantthingisyourattitude.Keepworkinghardandnevergiveup.”Ilearnedthatwithhardwork,determination,andthesupportofthosewhobelieveinyou,anythingispossible.Andfromthatmomenton,Iembracedwritingasanewfoundpassion,forevergratefultotheteacherwhohadseensomethinginmethatIhadn'tseeninmyself.語言積累詞匯短語片段1.Ifyou’rewillingto

applyyourself(努力),Ithinkyou

haveagoodshotatthis.haveashotat試著去做；有機會做到/有機會獲得...Youhavetodoeverythingyoucan.Youhavetoworkyourhardest.Andifyoudo,ifyoustaypositive,thenyouhaveashotatasliverlining.必須最大限度地去努力，你必須全力以赴。如果你這么做，并保持樂觀。你就會看見烏云背后的幸福線。——電影《烏云背后的幸福線》applyoneselfto(doing)sth.使自己全神貫注于；使（注意力）集中于Hehasappliedhimselftothistaskwithconsiderateenergy.他花費大量的精力投入到這項任務當中。2.Encouragedbyhiswords,Iagreedtogiveitatry.giveitatry/giveitago試一試Idon’tthinkitwillliftmyspiritsbutIwillgiveitatry.我想那不會讓我的情緒好起來，但我會試一試。Ifyouaretimepoor,youneedrunforonlyhalfthetimetogetthesamebenefitsasothersports,soperhapsweshouldallgive

atry.3.WhenIfinallyfinishedit,thethoughtofwinninghadgivenwaytotheenjoymentofwriting.IfIdidn’twin,Iwouldn’tcare.

當我終于寫完它，獲勝的想法已經讓路于寫作的樂趣。若我沒有贏，我也不在乎。givewayto讓步于；屈服（可用來寫：情緒轉變）（消極轉積極）Mom’sworrygavewaytoastrongsenseofprideandcomfort.媽媽的擔心變成了強烈的自豪感和安慰感。品質名詞persistencen.堅持couragen.勇氣endeavorn.努力diligencen.勤奮patriotismn.愛國主義generosityn.慷慨friendlinessn.友善forgivenessn.寬仁之心loyaltyn.忠誠thankfulnessn.感激honestyn.誠實integrityn.正直形容詞的對應詞匯persistentadj.堅持不懈的courageousadj.勇敢的hard-wordingadj.努力的diligent=industriousadj.patrioticadj.愛國的generousadj.慷慨的friendlyadj.友善的tolerantadj.寬容的loyaladj.忠誠的thankfuladj.感謝的honestadj.誠實的upright/righteous第二步：情節設計(Para2)P2:Iwenttomyteacher'sofficeaftertheawardpresentation.showmyprizegratitude老師表揚:creative,improve