高考英語作文潤色與提升以應用文為主1/55專題一：優異作文基本特征2/55優異高考英語作文六個基本特征1、層次不亂 2、句式多變3、亮點若干 3、巧妙串聯4、蠢錯不犯 6、整齊卷面3/55層次不亂開頭：引出話題（第一段）主體：陳說觀點或給出提議

（第二段）結尾：呼應、總結（第三段）4/55題目：假設你是李華，你朋友Liz剛才進入高中，在交友上面存在一些問題，請你依據以下提醒，幫她度過難關。要交朋友首先要做一個朋友。要和朋友同甘共苦；患難之中朋友才是真朋友。情誼需要時間和投入(effort).5/55DearLiz,______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________

Yours,LiHua6/55層次不亂開頭：引入話題主體：陳說觀點或給出提議結尾：呼應、總結通常只需要2-3句話。提出話題，并說明你有提議。7/55第一段：引出話題通常只需要2-3句話。I’msorrytohearthatyouhavetroubleinmakingfriends.Asfarasi’mconcerned/Formypart/Inmyopinion,therearesomewaystosolvethisproblem.8/55層次不亂開頭：引入話題主體：陳說觀點或給出提議結尾：呼應、總結通常只需要2-3句話。提出話題，并說明你有提議。每一個觀點或提議之間要保持層次清楚，加上適當過渡詞語。9/55第二段：陳說觀點或提議Tobeginwith,youshouldbeafriend...Then,youneed...Lastly,itisalsoimportanttodo....Firstandforemost,youshouldbeafriend...Secondly,youneed...Lastbutnotleast,itisalsoimportanttodo....10/55層次不亂開頭：引入話題主體：陳說觀點或給出提議結尾：呼應、總結通常只需要2-3句話。每一個觀點或提議之間要保持層次清楚，加上適當過渡詞語。總結，并提出美好愿景。11/55第三段：呼應、總結，或者表示愿景。Allinall/Inshort/Inconclusion/Inaword,youcanimproveyourpresentsituation.Andibelieve,withyourtrying,youcanovercome...12/55DearLiz,I’msorrytohearthatyouhavetroubleinmakingfriends.Asfarasi’mconcerned/Formypart/Inmyopinion,therearesomewaysto..Firstandforemost/Tobeginwith,youshouldbeafriend...Secondly,youneed...Lastbutnotleast,itisalsoimportanttodo...Allinall/Inshort/Inconclusion/Inaword,youcanimproveyourpresentsituation.AndIbelieve,withyourtrying,youcanovercome...

Yours,LiHua13/55句式多變長短改變主、被動改變主語改變同義詞改變同功效句型改變橫向比較改變14/55亮點若干高中詞匯高中常見短語高級句型各種復合句倒裝句強調句型虛擬語氣句型非謂語動詞結構15/55巧妙串聯起：firstofall,tobeginwith,aboveall...承：inaddition,besides...轉：however,ontheotherhand...合：inmyopinion,allinall,inaword...16/55蠢錯不犯：初中二年級學生就應該掌握基本語言表示能力。1.Iverylikethebook.2.Hewasveryangrily.3.Therehavemanystudentintheclassroom.4.Thecarisyellowcolor.17/55整齊卷面英文書寫大方、圓潤、自然；詞與詞間距適當字母大小適當無大面積涂改不影響交際18/5519/5520/5521/5522/5523/55專題二肅清基礎語言錯誤24/55中學生英語寫作中常見14種語言錯誤：1.主謂不一致MyfatherandIlikesgoingfishingbythelake.Largequantitiesofsoilhasbeenwashedaway.25/552.時態、語態混用Lastnight,Ihadenjoyedaparty.Thepaintingonthewalldamagedseriously.∧was26/553.句子成份殘缺Istoodupandsawthereaboy.Theyoungmanrunninginthestreet.∧∧waswas27/554.習慣搭配誤用Ionceheardfromtheanimallikethis.Wepassedawaythebuilding.ofby28/555.名詞單、復數不分Imademanyfriendinthesummercamp.WecangetsomeinformationsfromtheInternet.29/556.動詞單、復數不分Ourteacheroftensaythatsuccesslieinhardwork.Mr.Smith,togetherwithsomestudents,arecomingtoourschool.30/557.贅詞現象多發Ihopeyoucanreturnbacktoourschoolsoon.We'llholdapartyonnextSunday.31/558.近義詞誤用Theschoolrequeststhatallthestudentsshouldweartheschooluniform.Iquarreledwithmyteacheraboutmygrades.32/559.基本詞匯拼寫錯誤IfliedtoNewYorkdirectlyfromBeijing.Thiswillbedoneimmediatly.33/5510.前后人稱不一致Theboywasborninapoorfamilybutsheworkshard.Wewatchedafewmoviesandwelovedit.34/5511.動詞原形作主語/賓語Takeawalkafterdinnerisverygoodforyou.Atthatmoment,Ididn'tfeelliketakeawalk.35/5512.邏輯主語與主句主語不一致Preparingdinner,thedoorbellrang.Walkinginthestreet,acarhitanoldman.36/5513.一個簡單句出現兩個謂語Therewasnoworktodo,hewentbackhome.Ireceivedyouremail,Iwasveryexcited.being∧When∧and37/5514.中式英語Nextweekhaveaparty.IsorryyouIcan'twithyougoBeijing.38/55有則改之，無則加勉；專心則易，無心則難。39/55專題三：第一反應與抑制第一反應40/55他是個好人。第一反應測試：Heisagoodman.generous,humorous,interesting,smart,gentle,warm-hearted,hospitable,easy-going,devoted,open-minded,modest,friendly…41/55對不起，我不能和你一起去北京了。I’msorrythatIcan’tgotoBeijingwithyou.WouldyouacceptmyheartfeltapologythatIcan’tmakeittoBeijingwithyouaswehaveplanned?IsorryyouIcan’twithyougoBeijing.42/55存點錢是很主要。Thereisnodenying/Itisbeyondanydisputethatdepositingsomemoneyinthebankiscrucial.Sometimes,whetheryouhavemoneyathandmeansthedifferenceoflifeordeathforalovedone.43/55專題四：打感人心句型和打翻人胃句型

44/5545/55審題：“十年后我”---“感性、充滿想象”切忌：套用了太多所謂“萬能句式”，破壞了這種“感性”，使之變得“太理性”、“太剛”了：

（1）利用了大量表示次序詞句(太過理性)：

Firstly,secondly,thirdly,finally;

Tostartwith；Lastbutnotleast;

Myfuturelifeisasfollows.46/55審題：“十年后我”---“感性、充滿想象”切忌：套用了太多所謂“萬能句式”，破壞了這種“感性”，使之變得“太理性”、“太剛”了：

（1）利用了大量表示次序詞句(太過理性)：

Firstly,secondly,thirdly,finally;

Tostartwith；Lastbutnotleast;

Myfuturelifeisasfollows.47/55（2）利用了大量表示強烈觀點句式（語氣太剛）：IholdthepointofviewthatThereisnodoubtthat…Istronglybelievethat…Iamfirmlyconvincedthat(therewillbeexcitingandwonderfulchangesin…/itgivesmeastrongbody)Itgoeswithoutsayingthat…WhatIwanttostressisthat(healthisveryimportanttous)48/55（3）利用了大量總結、轉換、強調、轉折等語氣、句式，不夠得體。Allinall,…/Generallyspeaking,Asamatteroffact,Asformysparetime,…AsfarasIamconcerned,Ihopebecomeadoctor.Whenitcomestomyownfamily,itoccurstomethatIwillhave2children.Itisknowntousthatfamilyisthemostimportantthinginourlife.Ontheonehand,…ontheotherhand…49/55注意：在結構清楚，邏輯通順基礎上，要注意句型多變，句子優美。50/55（1）利用大量強調句和倒裝句，給人非常生澀感覺。Inmysparetime,soactiveamIthatIwillgofishingwithmyfamily.Itisaftertenyearsthat…（2）在同一篇短文里，堆砌了大量一樣句式：It’sIthatwanttobeateacher;ItisIthatamfondonchildren.ItisIthatlikemakingalotoffriends.ItisfamouscitythatI’llgoto…（3）中式英語，意思相差較大,或完全不達意。LoverOrganizeafamilyIhopemywillbelittlespeakEnglish.51/55那些能稍微充滿想象句子，就顯得難能可貴：…Mytwosonssurroundingmesmilelikesunshine.…Onweekends,Iwilltakemyfamilytothebeachtohavearest,enjoyingthesunrises.…gooutforapicnic,huggingthenatureandstrengtheningouremotion…cleverandoptimistic,mydaughterisgoingtobethesortofgirlwhospreadsunshinetoothersthroughhersmile.…Lovecanadddelightfulcolortolife.52/55

MyChineseDream

Tomakeourmotherlandbecomemoreandmorepowerful,teenagersshouldplayaroleinrealizingChinesedream.Recently,ourclasshasheldameetingaboutthis.ThereIwilldiscusshowIunderstandChinesedream.Maybeeveryonehasadream,whateveritis.Dreamislikewater,whichcanwaterourheart;dreamislikesunshine,whichcanmeltthesnow;dreamislikewind,whichcanblowawayfoginfrontofoureyes.WhenIwasachild,Iwantedtobeadoctor,whocansavethedyingpeople.AndnowIwanttomakemyfanilyliveabetterlife.