第三部分寫作專題六讀后續(xù)寫第二講雙線深耕——提升表達?寫作技法第五節(jié)寫作技法2——伏筆照應伏筆是作者對寫作下文中出現(xiàn)的情節(jié)或事件，在上文預作提示或暗示，以求前后呼應或者達到出乎意料卻又在情理之中的效果，其最顯著的特征是有伏必應。同樣，照應也是寫作中的一種手法，指作品下文與上文相呼應，即“回應上文”。好的伏筆與照應能起到暗示、點題等作用，使文理通順，合情合理，往往能讓人產(chǎn)生心靈共鳴或收獲意外的閱讀驚喜。所以，在寫作中，要先找到伏筆，才能著手處理其與照應的關(guān)系，進而完成讀后續(xù)寫。一、尋找伏筆，為照應打下基礎(chǔ)(1)留意人物的語言、動作、神態(tài)、外貌和心理等細節(jié)描寫，以細節(jié)描寫為伏筆點。(2)留意文中對續(xù)寫部分有推動或暗示作用的特定情節(jié)或背景，以情節(jié)或背景為伏筆點。(3)留意文中反復出現(xiàn)或重點描寫的特定物品，以特定物品為伏筆點。(4)留意續(xù)寫部分的段首句，以續(xù)寫段首句為伏筆點。二、結(jié)合伏筆與照應，完成寫作(1)在閱讀部分的人物細節(jié)描寫中尋找伏筆，然后在續(xù)寫中予以照應，合理運用符合語境的語言，將語言的輸入和輸出緊密結(jié)合，使文章的情感更加細膩豐富。(2)以閱讀部分特定的情節(jié)、背景或特定物品為伏筆，為下文的情節(jié)變化發(fā)展作埋伏，使續(xù)寫不偏離主題，同時突出主要人物或事件，增加情節(jié)張力，使情節(jié)更具合理性。(3)以續(xù)寫部分段首句為伏筆點，在續(xù)寫的結(jié)尾部分與之呼應，有助于故事情節(jié)在故事發(fā)展的高潮之后更意味深長，給讀者留下更深的閱讀感受。閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。SnowhadjustmeltedoffthegroundthatAprildayatourhouseinReginaBeach,Saskatchewan.Myhusband,Doug,hadjustcleanedupthepoolinpreparationforsellingourhouse.Theyearbefore,Doughadlosthisjobwiththeprovincialgovernment,andnowourfinancialsituationwasgrim.Indespair,wehadfinallyputourhomeonthemarket,andarealestateagentwasduetoshowuplaterthatday.Evenworse,wewouldhavetogiveupourtwobelovedGreatDanes,BambiandBrigitte,becausewecouldnolongeraffordthecostoffeedingthem.ThethoughtoflosingourdogsandourbeautifulhomewasalmostmorethanIcouldbear.Deepindespair,IsattypingupresumesandcoverlettersforDoug.OutofthecornerofmyeyeIcouldseeourthirteen-month-oldson,Forrest,ashelayonthecarpet,playingnearourbig,gentlenanny－dog,Brigitte.Ihadn'ttypedmorethantwosentenceswhenourotherdog,Bambi,beganbarkingfuriouslyandrunningbackandforthtotheslidingglassdooroverlookingourpool.Iracedtoseewhatwashappeningandnoticedthattheslidingdoorwasslightlyopen.Suddenly,IrealizedForrestwasnowheretobeseen.Inapanic,Iopenedthedoorandranoutside.ThereIwassurprisedtoseeBrigitte,whowasterrifiedofwater,splashingaroundinthepool.Thentomyhorror,myeyescaughtsightofForrest'syellowsleeper.Brigittewasbravelydoingherbesttokeephimafloatbyholdingontohissleeperwithhermouth.Atthesametime,shewasdesperatelytryingtoswimtotheshallowend.IrealizedthatForresthadsomehowopenedthedoor,wanderedoutandfallenintothepool.Inasplitsecond,Idovein,liftedmypreciousbabyoutandcarriedhiminside.ButwhenIrealizedForrestwasn'tbreathing,Ibegantogointoshock.WhenIcalled911,allIcoulddowasscream.Ontheotherend,aparamedictriedtocalmmedownsothatIcouldfollowhisCPRinstructions,butinmyhysteriaIwasunabletocarryitoutsuccessfully.注意：1．續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應為150左右；2．請按如下格式在相應位置作答。Whentheambulancearrived,IrodewithForresttothehospital.___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ThepressdiscoveredthestoryandsoonPurinadogfoodcalled.___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________寫前導讀：本文是一篇記敘文。丈夫失去工作后，我們決定賣掉房子并且放棄兩只心愛的小狗。一天，13個月大的兒子Forrest(福里斯特)不慎掉入泳池，小狗Bambi(斑比)著急地提醒我們，而小狗Brigitte(布麗吉特)正努力地救Forrest。Forrest從醫(yī)院回來后，兩只小狗會有什么反應？最后兩只小狗留下了嗎？答案天天積累先練后背根據(jù)提示合理聯(lián)想，續(xù)寫出小語段1．祖母睡醒后，困惑不已，但看到來訪者熟悉的臉龐，祖母高興地叫喊并擁抱他。____________________________________________________________參考翻譯：

Grandmaopenedhereyesandsatup.Apuzzledlookappearedongrandma'spaleface,andthenshestruggledherfeettogreetthevisitor.Seeingthefamiliarface,sheshoutedinacheeryvoiceandhuggedhimintoherarmswithherliptremblingconstantly.參考翻譯2．媽媽生日，大為驚喜，激動地抱著我。____________________________________________________________參考翻譯：Astearsstreameddownherface,Isaid,“HappyBirthday,Momma.”Withthat,shegatheredmeupinsuchawarmembracethatIcanstillfeelittothisday.“Thankyou,Doll.Yourdadwouldbesoproud，”

shewhisperedasweclungtoeachother.參考翻譯專題限時練(二十一)[9](時間：25分鐘)閱讀下面材料，

根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。(2022·福建省莆田市高中畢業(yè)班第二次教學質(zhì)量檢測)Alongtimeago,whenIworkedinAhmedabad,wewouldoftendrivetoMountAbuforshorttrips—ittookusanywherebetweenseventoeighthourstodriveup.Thatyear,mycloserelativeswerevisitingfromLucknowduringtheholidays,andwemadeaplantovisitAbuforthreedays.Sincethereweresevenofus,includingmybrother'sfamilywhoalsolivedinAhmedabad,wehiredtwocabs.Wepickedourselvesintothevehicles,stacked(堆放)ourluggageonthecarriersontopandstartedout.Agoodtimewasbadbyall,andsoonitwastimetoreturn.Duringthejourneyback,westoppedataDhabaforteaandsnacksneartheMehanadistrict.That'swhenInoticedsuddenlythattheropewithwhichtheluggagewastiedonandofthecarriershadcomelooseandoneofthesuitcaseswasmissing.Itmusthavefallenoffsomewherealongtheway.Althoughitdidn'tcontainanyvaluables—justclothesandsomecash,wedecidedtoretraceoursteps,drawingbackfourkilometres,lookingforthebag.Butluckwasn'tourfriend:wecouldnotlocateitandreturnedtoAhmedabaddepressed.Afteraboutamonth,oneday,whileinmyoffice,IgotacallfrommyassistantthatacertainMrShahwantedtoseeme.Iwasinthemiddleofameetingsohewasaskedtowait.AfterIgotdone,Icalledhimintomyoffice.Iwaslookingafterthedevelopmentofsmallindustriesinthestateatthetime,somyimmediatequerywas“Howcanwehelpyou?Doyouwanttosetupanindustryorareyoufacinganyissuesinyourenterprise？”Towhichhesaid,“No,sir.Ihavenotcomeforanyofficialhelp.Itisapersonalmatter.Didyoulosesomethingrecently？”O(jiān)fcourse,itallcamebacktomeandItoldhimaboutthelostsuitcasefromthecabbackfromMountAbuamonthago.注意：1．續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應為150左右；2．請按如下格式在相應位置作答。ThenShahtoldhissideofthestory._________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Butthegentlemaninsistedondeliveringthesuitcasetome.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________寫前導讀：本文是一篇記敘文。作者和親人開車去旅行，返程途中休息時，發(fā)現(xiàn)一個行李箱不見了。大約一個月后，一位先生請求見作者，他是如何找到作者的？他堅持親自將行李箱帶給作者的舉動又給作者帶來什么啟示？答案[10](時間：25分鐘)閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。(2022·遼寧省名校聯(lián)盟高三3月聯(lián)合考試)6-year-oldJessewasplayinginthefieldwhenhesufferedanelectricshock,leavinghimunconscious.Hewasrushedtothehospital.Whenheopenedhiseyes,hefoundbothhisarmsgone.Hismotherwasindeepconcern.ShewasawarethatJessecouldn'tdependonhisparentsallhislife.SosheguidedJessetolearntousehisfeet.Toherdelight,withinthreemonths,Jessecoulddomanythingswithhisfeet,evenwrite.ItwastimeforJessetostartschool.Onthefirstday,hewaslaughedatbyotherkids.ThenJessesurprisedeveryonethathewrotemuchmorebeautifullythanthenormalkids.Whilewalking,Jesseoftenfellbecauseitwashardforhimtokeepbalancewithoutarms.Hepracticedagainandagainuntilhemadeittowalksteadily.Thenhecouldevenrunfast.Attheageof10,Jessebecameanathleteofthedisabledtrackandfieldteamofhiscity.Hepracticedveryhard.Attheageof14,hewasabletorun400metersin56seconds.Anditwashopedthathecouldcompeteforthenationalchampion.However,theinternationaltrackandfieldrulessuddenlychangedandhiseventwascancelled.Noone'slifeiseasy,especiallyforthedisabled.ButJessedidn'tloseheart.Hechangedtoswimming.Hewastalentedandbecameaprofessionalmemberattheageof17withthehopeofwinningthequalificationofenteringtheOlympicGames.Butjustbeforethe