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初考讀后續寫個人成長類(照顧出車禍的母親)閱讀下面材料,根據其內容和所給段落開頭語續寫兩段,使之構成一篇完整的短文。ItwasachillyFridaynight,andIhadjustreturnedfromclimbingoneoftheredrocksofSedona.MyfathertelephonedmeasIwalkedthroughthearchestomydormroomandtoldmethatmymotherhadbeeninaterriblecarcrashandhadbeentakentotheintensivecareunit(重癥監護病房)ofanearbyhospital.WhenIgottothehospital,myfatherledmedownawidehallwaywithmachinesallaround.Astrongsmellofmedicinebroughtasickfeelingtomyalreadyturningstomach.AsIturnedintomymother’sward,thecadaverous(形容枯槁的)conditionofherbodyshockedme.Herfacehadswollen,hereyeshadhugedarkbruise,andshehadtubesdownherthroatandinherarms.Gentlyholdinghercoldswollenhands,Isaid“hi”inacalmvoice,controllingmyurgetocryout.Shekeptlookingatmeasshepoundedherhandagainstthebed,lookingpainful.Iturnedmyfaceawayfromher,tryingtohidethetearsthatwererollingdownmyface.ThatwaswhenitstruckmethatIreallymightlosemymother.Fromthatnighton,mylifecompletelychanged.Uptothatpoint,I’dhadtheluxuryofjustbeingakid,havingtodealwithonlytheexaggeratedmelodramasofteenagelife.Asmymotherstruggledfirsttostayaliveandthentorelearntowalk,mysenseofprioritieschangedsharply.Mymotherneededme.Thetrialsandtroubleofmydailylifeatschool,whichhadseemedsoimportantbefore,nowappearedinsignificant.MymotherandIhadfaceddeathtogether,andlifetookonanewmeaningforbothofus.Afteraweekoftreatmentinintensivecare,mymother’sconditionimprovedenoughtobemovedtoaregularhospitalward.Shewasfinallyoutofdangerbut,becauseherlegshadbeencrushed,therewasdoubtwhethershewouldbeabletowalkagain.Iwasjustgratefulthatshewasalive.Twomonthslater,asortofhospitalsuitewassetupinourfamilyroom,andshewasallowedtocomehome.注意:1.續寫詞數應為150左右;2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應位置作答。Para1:Mymother’sreturnhomewasablessingforusall,butitmeantsomeunaccustomedresponsibilitiesforme.Para2:Mymother’srelianceonmechangedourrelationship.一讀懂原文1敘事視角:第一人稱2故事梗概我的母親發生了一場可怕的車禍,從那天晚上起,我的生活徹底改變了。在那之前,我只是個孩子,只需要應對青少年生活中一些夸張的戲劇化問題。當我母親努力活下來,然后重新學習行走時,我的優先事項意識發生了巨大的變化。我和母親一起面對死亡,生活對我們倆都有了新的意義。經過一周的重癥監護治療,母親終于脫離了危險,可以轉到普通病房,之后,我們家的客廳里安裝了一個類似于醫院套房的設施,母親出院回家康復。二本文主題親情帶給人們愛的滋養和力量,促成我的成長。三構建續寫情節1解讀首句,構思情節Para1:Mymother’sreturnhomewasablessingforusall,butitmeantsomeunaccustomedresponsibilitiesforme.“unaccustomedresponsibilities”是第一段續寫首句的關鍵詞。其中“responsibilities”,可以寫對母親的照顧,如給母親準備一日三餐、幫母親洗漱等;“unaccustomed”,可以寫自己不適應角色的轉變,以致身心俱疲到逐漸適應的過程。在此過程中,學會共情、安慰并照顧好母親。第一段尾句:要與第二段的“Mymother’srelianceonme”銜接,因此可以寫“我”對母親的照顧得到了母親的認可。Para2:Mymother’srelianceonmechangedourrelationship.“changed”是第二段續寫首句的關鍵詞。“我”與母親在事件發生前后彼此關系的變化。這段續寫與通過人物動作、語言、心理、情緒描寫等推動情節發展的段落不同,主要通過概述對比,最后點出文章的主題。四:官方范文Mymother'sreturnhomewasablessingforusall,butitmeantsomeunaccustomedresponsibilitiesforme.
Iwouldfeedher,batheherandhelphertothebathroom.ItstruckmethatIwasprettymuchplayingtheroleofmothertomyownmother.Thedifficultpartformewastryingtobealwaysupbeat(樂觀的,積極向上的),andtokeepmymother'sspiritsupwhenshebecamefrustratedwiththepainandherinabilitytodosimplethingsbyherself.Lookingaftermymotherwasn'tmuchfun,butitfeltgoodtobetherewhenmymotherreallyneededme.Mymother’srelianceonmechangedourrelationship.
Inthepast,wehadmorethanourshareofthestrains(緊張)ofmother-daughterrelationships.Theaccidentthrewusintoarelationshipofinterdependence.Togetmymotherback,Ihadtohelpregainherstrengthandabilitytoresume(恢復)anindependentlife.ShehadtoacceptmyhelpaswellasthefactthatIwasnolongerachild.Sincethen,wehavebecometheclosestfriends,genuinelylisteningtooneanotherandtrulyenjoyingeachother’scompany.五:補充素材1我承擔起的家庭責任:①Ibroughtmealstoherbedside,fedherandcleanedupafterwards.Also,Ishoweredher,supportedhertoandfromthetoiletandwashedherdirtiedclothes.②Itookontheresponsibilitiesoflookingaftermymotherandcopedwithwhatmymotherusedtotakeup.Ialmostdevotedallmytimetoattendingtoher.Icookeddishes,washedclothes,preparedmedicineandsoon.③AsItookontheroleofherprimarycaregiver,ourdynamic(相互作用的方式)shiftedfromthetraditionalmother-daughterrelationshiptooneofmutualdependenceandsupport.④Iembracedtheseresponsibilitieswithopenarms,knowingthatIhadtheopportunitytocareforthepersonwhohadalwayscaredforme.Iquicklyadaptedtomynewroleasherprimarycaregiver,assistingherwithdailytasksandprovidingtheemotionalsupportsheneeded.2有關unaccustomed的情節①Iwasoftenburntoutandexhausted,butIfeltsweetdeepinmyheartsincemymother’sconditionwasimprovingdaybyday.②Thereweremomentsofexhaustionanddoubt,butIneverwavered(動搖)inmycommitmenttoherwell-being.Ilearnedtoprioritizemytimeandmakesacrificestoensurethatshereceivedthecareshedeserved.Itwasachallengingjourney,butitwasalsoajourneyfilledwithloveandgratitude.3我與母親關系的改變①Previously,shewasalwaysthereformewhenIneededcomfortandcare.Sometimes,WhenIwasstressedwithmystudies,Iwouldtakeoutmyangeronher,whichalwaysledtointenseargumentsbetweenus.Now,however,Ibecamemymother’sstrongestsupporter,bothphysicallyandmentally.Theoccurrenceofourquarrelswasreducedenormouslyandourrelationshipimprovedsteadily.②Inthepast,Iwasanaughtykidwhoalwaysbotheredmymumanddad.Ilivedundermymother’sprotection.What’smore,Iwasignorantofresponsibility.Butnow,becauseoftheaccident,Ihadchangedtotally.Mymotherwitnessedmymaturityandmygrowth.ShegraduallyfoundthefactthatIwasnolongerakid.Shealwaysgreetedmewithgratefulandsatisfiedsmileswhichmadewarmthsurgingwithinme.4主題句①True,thisterriblecarcrashrobbedmymotherofherhealth,butitalsoshapedmeintoamorematureandindependentindividual,uponwhommymothercouldalwaysrely.
②Sincethen,wehavetrulyenjoyedeachother’scompanyduetothelovebetweenamotherandakid.六:考場作文高分賞析Mymother’sreturnhomewasablessingforusall,butitmeantsomeunaccustomedresponsibilitiesforme.Dailymedicalroutinesandcleaningproceduresbecameapartofmyduty,whichwasanarduous(艱難的)andstrenuous(耗費精力的)process.EverytimeIwentbackhome,theinitialmatterwastocheckmymotherifshehadanyprogressforrecoveringwhilepeersofminewereprobablyinextra-curricular(課外的)activities.Thereweremomentsofaccountingitasabotheringtask,butafterIwitnessedheruneasy(不安的)expressionsandwobblingfigure(搖晃的身影),theannoyanceperished(湮滅)forever.Atdawn,Iaccompaniedhertoundergo(經歷)thetoughexercisetorelearntowalk;atnight,Icleanedherskinwithawettowel,withcautionofeverymovement.Therewardwasmymother’stinge(一絲,少許)ofsmile.Mymother’srelianceonmechangedourrelationship.AsifIhadbeenaparent,shewasatoddler(學步的幼兒)indesperateneedofloveandcare.Simultaneously(同時),theaffectionbetweenusdeepened.Gripping(抓緊)tightlyatthehandle,mymotherinchedherway(緩慢移動)littlebylittle,sweatglistering(閃亮)onherforehead.Herstony(冷冰冰的)eyesboreinto(盯住)mine,rendering(使變得)mebothtouchedandheartache.Iwasaside,cheeringupforher.Atimeportal(大門)wasopened,remindingmeofmymemoryoflearningtowalk.Oneday,wewereintoxicated(極其興奮的)bybliss(幸福)andhappinessbecausemymothermadeit,exuberantvitality(生機勃勃)radiating(散發)fromourhouse.Thespringarrivedasourlovedissipated(驅散)coldnessandgaverisetomiracles.【點評】此篇續
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