讀后續寫微探——捕捉和照應續寫點可續寫點

一篇完整的文章中，作者通常會圍繞某個主題來寫，在篇首,篇中或篇末設置伏筆(ahintpredictslaterdevelopmentsinastory)，這些統稱為可續寫點。Para1.IguessDadwasfeelingalittlebettertoo.Iwentdowntobreakfastlate,butassoonasIwalkedintothe

kitchenhesmiledatme.“I'vebeenthinking,”hesaid.“1.

Maybeyou'reright.Youdidearnthemoneyandwhat

Iwantmorethananythingisforyoutobehappyandtolearntobeindependent.Maybeyoushouldbuythecar

ifitmakesyouhappy.”Suddenly,Ididn'tknowwhattosay.Para2.Afteramoment,Iwasabletospeak.

2.Isaid,“Idowantacar,butmaybeIdon'tneedonerightnow.

3.

Youalwaysletmeuseyoursandthatmoneywouldcomeinreallyhandy

whenIstartcollege.And

4.I'mreallysorry

aboutwhatIsaidyesterday.”

“I'msorryforwhatIsaid,too,”hesaid.Atthatmoment,Iknewthatmyfather

onlywantedthebestformeandthatIcouldalwaystrusthim,evenwhenIdisagreedwithhim!與上文銜接Para1.IguessDadwasfeelingalittlebettertoo.Iwentdowntobreakfastlate,butassoonasIwalkedintothe

kitchenhesmiledatme.“I'vebeenthinking,”hesaid.“1.

Maybeyou'reright.Youdidearnthemoneyandwhat

Iwantmorethananythingisforyoutobehappyandtolearntobeindependent.Maybeyoushouldbuythecar

ifitmakesyouhappy.”Suddenly,Ididn'tknowwhattosay.與上文銜接

P2：

Ihadbeensavingmoneyfrommypart-timejobforthreeyearsandnowIwantedtouseittobuyacar.

Para2.Afteramoment,Iwasabletospeak.

2.Isaid,“Idowantacar,butmaybeIdon'tneedonerightnow.

3.

YoualwaysletmeuseyoursandthatmoneywouldcomeinreallyhandywhenIstartcollege.4.

AndI'mreallysorryaboutwhatIsaidyesterday.”

“I'msorryforwhatIsaid,too,”hesaid.Atthatmoment,Iknewthatmyfather

onlywantedthebestformeandthatIcouldalwaystrusthim,evenwhenIdisagreedwithhim!與上文銜接

P3：

IfinallyfellasleepandwhenIwokeupIdidn'treallychangemymind.ButIfeltalittlebetter.

Para2.Afteramoment,Iwasabletospeak.

2.

Isaid,“Idowantacar,butmaybeIdon'tneedonerightnow.3.

Youalwaysletmeuseyoursandthatmoneywouldcomeinreallyhandy

whenIstartcollege.

4.

AndI'mreallysorryaboutwhatIsaidyesterday.”“I'msorryforwhatIsaid,too,”hesaid.Atthatmoment,Iknewthatmyfather

onlywantedthebestformeandthatIcouldalwaystrusthim,evenwhenIdisagreedwithhim!與上文銜接

P3：

HefeltIdidn’treallyneedacar.Afterall,IcouldusehisanytimeIwantedto.

Para2.Afteramoment,Iwasabletospeak.

2.Isaid,“Idowantacar,butmaybeIdon'tneedonerightnow.3.

YoualwaysletmeuseyoursandthatmoneywouldcomeinreallyhandywhenIstartcollege.4.

AndI'mreallysorry

aboutwhatIsaidyesterday.”

“I'msorryforwhatIsaid,too,”hesaid.Atthatmoment,Iknewthatmyfather

onlywantedthebestformeandthatIcouldalwaystrusthim,evenwhenIdisagreedwithhim!與上文銜接

P1：

Butthen,Ihadnevershoutedthewords“Ihateyou!”inhisface,either.與開頭銜接Para1.IguessDadwasfeelingalittlebettertoo.Iwentdowntobreakfastlate,butassoonasIwalkedintothekitchenhesmiledatme.“I'vebeenthinking,”hesaid.“1.

Maybeyou'reright.Youdidearnthemoneyandwhat

Iwantmorethananythingisforyoutobehappyandtolearntobeindependent.Maybeyoushouldbuythecar

ifitmakesyouhappy.”

Suddenly,Ididn'tknowwhattosay.Para2.Afteramoment,Iwasabletospeak.

2.

Isaid,“Idowantacar,butmaybeIdon'tneedonerightnow.

3.

Youalwaysletmeuseyoursandthatmoneywouldcomeinreallyhandy

whenIstartcollege.And

4.I'mreallysorry

aboutwhatIsaidyesterday.”

“I'msorryforwhatIsaid,too,”hesaid.Atthatmoment,Iknewthatmyfather

onlywantedthebestformeandthatIcouldalwaystrusthim,evenwhenIdisagreedwithhim!捕捉和照應續寫點微技能

1.品讀原文首段，捕捉可續寫點2.留意細節描寫，捕捉可續寫點3.關注高頻詞，捕捉可續寫點4.留意原文結尾，捕捉可續寫點5.解讀續寫所給首句，捕捉可續寫點捕捉和照應訓練

1.提煉原文四要素WhoWhenWhereWhatTom,JaneOneweekendinJulyintheforestJanewaslost.

Team1&2------原文首段

Team3&4&5

------細節描寫

Team6

------高頻詞

Team7

------原文結尾

Team8------解讀所給首句Teamwork

捕捉和照應訓練

2.仔細品讀原文首段背景續寫點：

照應方式：July,Jane,Tom,intheforest,startedtoquarrel,walkedaway

Ifitweren'tforthatquarrel,Iwouldn'tbetrappedhere.捕捉和照應訓練

2.仔細品讀原文，留意細節描寫細節描寫續寫點：照應方式：“Tom,help!”shesaidwithexcitement.“Tom!”shecried.“Help!”捕捉和照應訓練

2.仔細品讀原文，留意細節描寫細節描寫續寫點照應方式：Thetreesmadeitimpossibleforpeopletoseeherfromabove.Fortunately,thistime,thehelicopterdidn’tmissher.捕捉和照應訓練

2.仔細品讀原文，留意細節描寫細節描寫續寫點照應方式：HerangerandtirednessweresweptawaythemomentshesawTom.

Janewassoangry;Asnightwasbeginningtofall,Janewassotiredthatshehadtostopforthenight.捕捉和照應訓練

3.仔細品讀原文，關注高頻詞高頻詞續寫點：照應方式：helicopter,yellowblouseJanewildlywavedheryellowblouseonhearingthehelicopter.捕捉和照應訓練

4.仔細品讀原文結尾原文結尾續寫點：照應方式：Janetookoffheryellowblouse,thinkingthatsheshouldgotoanopenareaandflagthemiftheycamebackagain.Shecontinuedtolookforanopenarea.Janewildlywavedheryellowblouseonhearingthehelicopter.捕捉和照應訓練

6.仔細解讀所給首句所給首句續寫點：照應方式：Para.1:But

nomorehelicopterscameanditwas

gettingdarkagain.Para.2:

Itwas

daybreak

whenJanewokeup.Duringthefearsomedarkness,Janefeltverycoldintheforest,althoughitwasalreadyJuly.Surroundedbythefearandtiredness,Janefelttiredandfinallyfellintosleep.Shebecameenergeticafteranight’ssleep.Para.1:Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.Para.2:ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.Writing

Sample

Butnomorehelicoptercameanditwasgettingdarkagain.

Duringthefearsomedarkness,extremelyregretfulforleavingalone,Janefeltverycoldintheforest,althoughitwasalreadyJuly.“Ifitweren'tforthatquarrel,Iwouldn'tbetrappedhere.”shethought