基礎寫作訓練話題寫作之二：Describingaperson

Shorthair,straighthair,blackhairLonghair,Curlyhair,BlondhairHowtodescribeappearanceSectionARevisonHehas

short,blond

hairandlotsoflittlewrinklesonhisforehead.Whatdoeshelooklike?Howtodescribebuild(體格)andheightThemanhasamediumbuild,andheisoneheadtallerthanthewoman.YaoMinis2.26mtallandweighs87kilos.好文章的標準1.

全面性(Comprehensiveness):要點全面.2.

正確性(Accuracy):語法正確并符合英語的表達習慣。3.

多樣性(Variety):詞匯短語豐富，結構多樣，句型復雜。4.連貫性(Logic):恰當使用承上啟下的詞語和連接詞，使全文流暢連貫，渾然一體。SectionBStepsforWritingEnglishEssays1、審題到位：內容（要點）體裁，人稱、時態2、要點成句:(1)正確——符合英語語法和英語表達習慣。(2)優美——豐富的詞匯，豐富而高級的結構句式.

3.聯句成文：巧用過渡語和連接詞.4.檢查修改:語法,拼寫,字母大小寫,標點符號.注意：(1)開頭的交代句與結尾的總結句,增強呼應.(2)牢記常識性套話的習慣表達.(3)諺語，成語四個步驟1.Generalintroduction:aged23;bornintoaworker’sfamilyinBeijingonOct.23,1985;growupin…wherehereceivedhiseducation;_______________________________,LuXun,wasthefatherofChinesemodernliterature.盡量用分詞短語，使文章簡潔，通順LuXun,_________________________________,wasborninZhejiangProvince

.概況:age,sex,birth-place,background魯迅,浙江紹興人,是中國現代文學之父。SectionCBorninShaoxing,ZhejiangProvincethefatherofChinesemodernliterature同位語結構，使文章簡潔，通順●2.Appearance外表Mediumbuild,fat,abitoverweight,good-looking…

我的語文老師是個溫和的女人,身材矮小，她長著兩只大眼睛，帶著一副眼鏡。MyChineseteacher，___________________，hastwobigeyesandwearsapairofglasses.MyChineseteacher，________________________,hastwobigeyesandwearsapairofglasses.MyChineseteacherisagentle,shortwoman_____________________________巧用同位語巧用定語從句巧用with介詞短語做后置定語agentle,shortwomanwhoisagentle,short

womanwithtwobigeyesandapairofglasses.●3.

character性格Absent-minded,bad-tempered,warm-hearted,patient…MrZhang,我們的物理老師,善良，而且負責又有耐心。(一句多譯)a.MrZhang,_________________,iskind,responsibleandpatient.b.MrZhang,_____________________,iskind,patientandresponsible.c.MrZhang,ourphysicsteacher

，is______kindtous,________responsibleandpatient.

d.MrZhang,ourphysicsteacher,isakindperson______________________________________.ourphysicsteacherwhoisourphysicsteachernotonlybutalsowithgreatpatienceandresponsibility●4.特長愛好LikesordislikesBedelightedindoing,begoodat,longforsth…longtodo…在她的業余時間里她大都聽音樂讀小說.b.Inhersparetimeshe_______muchtime

____________musicand________novels.a.Sheenjoyslistening

tomusicandreadingnovelsalotinherleisuretime.spendslisteningtoreading●

5.Education教育狀況在清華大學主修自然科學，四年后畢業，他繼續到海外深造學習并取得博士學位。____________________,hegraduatedfromQingHuaUniversityandafter4years,hewentabroadforfurtherstudiesandreceivedadoctor'sdegree.靈活運用多種結構,如非謂語動詞,使文章精煉MajoringinnatureScience●

6.Health健康狀況住了六周的院,現在她看上去很虛弱._____________inhospitalforsixweeks,nowshelooksveryweak.Having

been●

7.詳細特色Somethingindetail–Hewasstrictwitheverybodyandineverythinghedid.Oneday,wewerehavingclasseswhen…–Hewasveryforgetful.Oncehecameacrossanoldfriendofhisinthestreetand...●

８.Bigeventsinhisorherlifetime生平大事2004年8月27日，雅典奧運會男子110米欄決賽上，劉翔以12秒91奪得了金牌，創造了亞洲人在短道項目上的奇跡和神話！

多種結構增強句子表現力OnAugust27,2004intheAthensOlympicGamesman110-meterhurdlesLiuXiangfinallywonthegoldmedalby12seconds91

,____________________________________!OnAugust27,2004intheAthensOlympicGamesman110-meterhurdlesLiuXiangfinallywonthegoldmedalby12seconds91,___________________creatingtheAsianmiracleandmyth!whichcreatedtheAsianmiracleandmyth●

9.Evaluation(評價）

thinkhighlyofhimandallrespecthim;

berecognized/consideredasoneofthemostinfluentialfiguresinhumanhistory;

makegreatcontributionsto…;willalwaysberememberedas…;

1）叢飛為我們樹立了好榜樣，人人都高度評價并尊敬他。2）袁隆平為農業作出了重大貢獻。

注意運用一些動詞、形容詞等短語、詞組;適當運用關聯詞語CongFeisetusagoodexample,so

allthepeople

spokehighlyofhimandallrespectedhim.YuanLongping

hasmadegreatcontributionsto

agriculture.

Summary:

怎樣讓你的文章更有亮點?一.審題得當:不遺漏要點,文體,人稱,時態正確。二.句式表達靈活多變,長短句兼而有之,但不賣弄.三.巧用非謂語動詞，介詞短語，詞組以增強文章的表現力。四.適當運用過渡語使句子更美，上下文更加

協調連貫。請根據以下資料說明，使用5個規范句子寫一篇介紹劉翔的文章，具體內容如下：姓名:劉翔出生地:上海

生日:1983.7.13項目：田徑

身高：188

cm

體重：74

Kg

教練：孫海平

2004年8月27日雅典奧運會男子110米欄決賽中以12秒91獲得冠軍，使他成為世界矚目的焦點。在2008年北京奧運會的男子110米欄預賽中，劉翔由于腳傷，遺憾地在首輪就退出了比賽，再一次使他成為世人關注的焦點。參考詞匯：雅典Athens預賽

thefirstheat男子110米欄

man110-meterhurdles

田徑TrackandField

退出比賽

quitfromthecompetition\failtostart

LiuXiang,borninShanghaionJuly13,1983,is

188centimeterstallandweighs84kg.//HisprojectisTrackandFieldandhiscoachisSunHaiping.//OnAugust27,2004intheAthensOlympicGamesman110-meterhurdleshewonthegoldmedal

by12sec