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Itwasthefirsttimethethreegirls,Maya,SarahandMaryhadmeteachother.Andtheywouldsharethesameapartmentforthecominguniversitylife.Theymovedintotheapartmentontheafternoontwodaysbeforethekick-offceremonyofthenewterm.Theapartmentwasneartheircampus.Itwasperfectforthem,whichwasfurnishedinasimplestyle,neatandclean.Thethreegirlswentthroughinspectingtheapartment.Therewerethreebedrooms,asharedkitchenandasmalllivingroom.Itwastimeforthemtopicktheirbedrooms.“Anyoneofthemisfinewithme,”Mayasaidsoftly.Sotheychosetheirrespectivebedroomrandomly.Theywenttotheirrespectiveroomsandbegantounpack.SarahandMarywereexcitedandhappytoleaveindependentlyawayfromtheirparents.However,Mayawastosomeextenthomesick.Fromhersuitcase,Mayacarefullyremovedaframed（框架）photographofherfamily.Mayaputthephotographatherbedside,nexttothereadinglamp.Staringatherparents’smilingfacesinthephoto,Mayacouldn’thelpcrying.Shemissedherparentssomuch.SarahandMarywanderedin.“Howaboutgoingoutandgettingsomedinner?”“I’mready,”Mayasaid,quicklywipedthetearsonherfaceandforcedasmile.

SarahandMary友好、熱情，為后面SarahandMary做煎餅送驚喜埋下伏筆后面應該如何解決homesick

ThethreeofthemhaddinneratPizzaHut,notfarfromtheirapartmentbuilding.Duringdinnertheychattedabouttheirbackgroundsandlives,buttheydidn’texpressfreelyintheirconversation.Theywerethreestrangers,cautiouslygettingtoknowoneanother.Mayashowedlittleappetitetothepizza.“Mymom’spancakesarealwaysmouth-watering,”shesaid.Whentheyreturnedtotheirapartment,Marywastooexcitedtosleep.WhenSarahknockedatherdoor,Marywaslyinginbed,thinkingaboutthefuture.“ShallwedosomethingtocheerMayaup?”Sarahasked.Para.1Sarah’ssuggestionwasmetwithenthusiasmfromMary.Para.2AsMayawokeup,thepancakeswerereadyonthetable.一開始的陌生在后面如何加深了解、變得熟絡pancake為關鍵線索，貫穿后文引出續寫的線索一.文體解讀文章大意：三位女生Maya、Sarah和Mary首次相遇并決定共同分享一間公寓，開啟大學生活。Maya因思念家人而感到孤獨，但在新朋友的陪伴下漸漸找到慰藉。她們一起度過了在PizzaHut的晚餐，展示出了各自的情感和品格。回到公寓后，Sarah提議為Maya做點什么，希望讓她開心。主題：屬于“人與社會”主題語境下的人際交往子主題。Workouttheplotline二.細讀首句，構思框架Para.1Sarah’ssuggestionwasmetwithenthusiasmfromMary.銜接句How

did

Maryreacttothesuggestion?過渡句WhatdidSarahand

Marydonext?銜接句Howdidtheyfeelatlast?Para.2AsMayawokeup,thepancakeswerereadyonthetable.銜接句HowdidMayafeel?Theme:Howwilltheirrelationshipbecome?Para.1Sarah’ssuggestionwasmetwithenthusiasmfromMary.How

did

Maryreacttothesuggestion?情節構建---情節發展方向

Sarah和Mary要商量具體如何讓Maya開心，可能會圍繞Maya提到的媽媽的煎餅展開行動，比如決定嘗試做煎餅給Maya吃，她們可能會去尋找食材，準備工具，過程中可能會遇到一些小困難，但她們會一起克服。語言表達要點：可以使用描述她們商量時的對話，如“Let'smakepancakesforMaya.Shemissesthemsomuch.”等，以及描述她們準備過程中的動作和心理活動，如“Searchingthroughthekitchencabinets,theyfinallyfoundtheflourandeggs.Theywereabitnervousbutdeterminedtogiveitatry.”Para.2AsMayawokeup,thepancakeswerereadyonthetable.銜接句HowdidMayafeel?情節構建---情節發展方向1.Maya醒來看到煎餅會非常感動，她的情緒會因此得到改善，三人之間的關系也會更加親密。她們可能會一起分享煎餅，聊天，回憶家庭溫暖的時刻，進一步增進彼此的了解和友誼。語言表達要點：描寫Maya醒來看到煎餅時的驚喜和感動，如“Maya'seyeswidenedinsurpriseandherheartwasfilledwithwarmthwhenshesawthepancakes.”，以及她們分享煎餅時溫馨的氛圍和對話，如“Sittingaroundthetable,theyenjoyedthepancakesandtalkedabouttheirfamilies.Mayasaidwithasmile,'Youtwoarelikemyfamilyherenow.'”三.增加細節，開始寫作

在已定框架范圍內，依據情節發展和生活常識，推斷故事中人物所見、所做、所思、所說、所想等給每段增加5至8個具體細節，我們稱之為叫“58細節添加法”。Para.1相關句子:情景一::描寫Sarahand

Mary溝通對話的場景（兩個達成一致意見）①KnowingthatMayawasstrugglingwithhomesickness,theywantedtomakeherfeelmoreathome.“Let’ssurpriseMayawiththebestpancakesever!”Marysaid,herenthusiasmcontagious.知道瑪雅一直在想家，她們想讓她感覺如在家一般。“讓我們用史上最好吃的煎餅給瑪雅一個驚喜！”瑪麗說，她的熱情很有感染力。②TheycametoasettlementthattheydecidedtomakehomemadepancakesforMaya,somethingthatwouldremindherofhome-cookedmeals.

“Absolutely!Let’smakeMaya’sday.”Maryreplied,hereyestwinklingwithexcitement.他們達成了一個協議，他們決定為瑪雅自制煎餅，一些能讓她想起家常飯菜的東西。“包的!讓我們讓瑪雅開心吧。”瑪麗回答，眼睛里閃爍著興奮的光芒。情景二:描寫Sarahand

Mary具體行動（準備過程）①Withtheintentionof

givingasurprisetoMaya,SarahandMarywokeupearlythenextmorning,andstartedcooking.Theyrummagedthroughthekitchendrawers,theirhandsmovingswiftly

insearchofthenecessaryutensils.Aftergatheringtheflour,eggs,andmilk,theyfacedthechallengeoftherecipe.Sarah,withherphoneinhand,scrolledthroughcountlesscookingwebsitesuntilshefoundwhatseemedliketheperfectone.

為了給瑪雅一個驚喜，莎拉和瑪麗第二天一大早就起床了，開始做飯。他們在廚房的抽屜里翻找著，雙手迅速地移動，尋找必要的用具。在收集了面粉、雞蛋和牛奶之后，他們面臨著制作食譜的挑戰。莎拉手里拿著手機，瀏覽了無數個烹飪網站，直到找到了一個看起來完美的。情景二:描寫Sarahand

Mary具體行動（準備過程）①It's5:00inthemorningwhenthealarmrangintheirears.Withoutamoment’shesitation,theyscurriedintothekitchen.Searchingthroughthecabinets

liketwoeagerdetectives,theymanagedtofindsomeflour,eggs,andmilk.However,therecipewasabitofamystery.Sarahwhippedoutherphoneandquicklygoogledit.凌晨5點,鬧鐘在她們耳邊響起。她們毫不猶豫地跑進了廚房。她們像兩個急切的偵探一樣在櫥柜里搜尋，終于找到了面粉、雞蛋和牛奶。然而，它的配方有點神秘。莎拉拿出手機，迅速用谷歌搜索了一下。情景三:描寫Sarahand

Mary具體行動（制作過程）①Mixingtheingredientswithcare,Mary’sbrowfurrowedinconcentrationasshewhiskedthebatter,determinedtogetitjustright.

Despiteafewminorsetbacks,likethebatterbeingabittoothickatfirst,theyadjustedandpersevered.Withseveralattempts,theymadeitatlastanddeliciouspancakeswereputonthetable.小心地混合著原料，瑪麗一邊攪拌面糊，一邊全神貫注地皺著眉頭，決心把它攪拌得恰到好處。盡管遇到了一些小挫折，比如一開始面糊有點太厚，但他們還是堅持了下來。經過幾次嘗試，他們終于做出來了，美味的煎餅擺上了桌子。情景三:描寫Sarahand

Mary具體行動（制作過程）①Followingtheinstructionsascloselyaspossible,theybegantomixthebatter.Marycarefullypouredthebatterontothehotpan,herhandsteadydespiteherexcitement.Asthepancakescooked,theirfaceslitupwithanticipation.他們盡可能嚴格地按照說明，開始攪拌面糊。瑪麗小心翼翼地把面糊倒在熱鍋上，盡管她很興奮，但她的手還是很穩。當煎餅烤熟時，他們的臉上充滿了期待。Para.2相關句子:情景四:Maya看到煎餅的情感描寫1.Maya’seyeswidenedinamazementandherheartswelledwithaffection.“Youdidthisforme?”sheasked,hervoicefilledwithdisbelief.Withtearsofjoystreamingdownherface,shehuggedSarahandMarytightly.瑪雅驚訝地睜大了眼睛，心中充滿了愛意。“你這么做是為了我？”她問，聲音里充滿了懷疑。她高興得熱淚盈眶，緊緊地擁抱著薩拉和瑪麗。②Mayablinkedinsurpriseandthenherfacebrokeintoahugesmile.Touchedbeyondwords,shefeltalumpinherthroat.“Thisissowonderful,”shewhispered.瑪雅驚訝地眨了眨眼，然后臉上綻出燦爛的笑容。她感動得說不出話來，感到喉嚨哽咽。“這太棒了，”她低聲說。③

Maya’seyesflutteredopen,andinaninstant,hergazewasdrawntothetable.Herheartskippedabeatasshebeheldthestackofpancakes.Overwhelmedwithemotion,hereyeswerefilledwithtearsofgratitude.“Youtwoareamazing!”sheexclaimed,hervoicechokedwithhappiness.瑪雅的眼睛抖動著睜開，瞬間，她的目光被吸引到了桌子上。當她看到那堆煎餅時，她的心猛地跳了一下。她激動萬分，眼里充滿了感激的淚水。“你們倆太棒了！”她叫道，她的聲音因幸福而哽咽。情景五：共同品嘗煎餅以及暢談--①Sittingdown,Mayatookabite,andasthefamiliartastespreadacrosshertongue,asenseofwarmthandbelongingwashedoverher.Thethreegirlssataroundthetable,sharingstoriesoftheirchildhoodsandthelovetheyhadfortheirfamilies.瑪雅坐下來，咬了一口，熟悉的味道傳遍了她的舌頭，一種溫暖和歸屬感席卷了她。三個女孩圍坐在桌子旁，分享她們童年的故事，以及她們對家人的愛。②Astheyallsatdowntoenjoythepancakes,Mayaopenedupaboutherfamilyandbecamemoretalkative.Allofthem

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fears.,enjoyingthehappyandharmoniousmoment.

當他們都坐下來享用煎餅時，瑪雅開始談論她的家庭，變得更健談了。所有的分享他們的家庭、夢想和恐懼的故事。，享受快樂和諧的時刻。

情景六：結局（theme)①Inthatsmallapartment,onthatordinarymorning,adeepandlastingfriendshipwasforged,fillingtheirheartswithawarmth

thatwouldcarrythemthroughthechallengesofuniversitylifeandbeyond.在那個平凡的早晨，在那間小公寓里，他們結下了深厚而持久的友誼，這讓他們的心中充滿了溫暖，這種溫暖將帶著他們度過大學生活的挑戰，甚至超越大學生活。②ThelaughterandthewarmthofthemomentbegantoeaseMaya’shomesickness.Witheachword,theirbondgrewstronger,andinthatmoment,theyknewtheyhadfoundnotjustroommates,buttruefriends.笑聲和那一刻的溫暖開始緩解瑪雅的思鄉之情。每說一個字，他們的關系就更緊密了，在那一刻，他們知道他們找到的不僅僅是室友，而是真正的朋友。③ThesimpleactofmakingandsharingpancakeshadnotonlycheeredMayaupbuthadalsocementedtheirfriendship.Inthatsmallapartment,anewchapteroftheirlivesfilledwithfriendshipandsupporthadbegun.制作和分享煎餅這個簡單的行為不僅讓瑪雅高興起來，也鞏固了他們的友誼。在那間小公寓里，他們的生活開始了一個充滿友誼和支持的新篇章。

④Inthatmoment,theyknewthattheywouldbethereforeachotherthroughtheupsanddownsofcollegelife,unitedbythesimpleactofkindnessandthepoweroffriendship.在那一刻，他們知道他們會在大學生活的起起落落中相互支持，通過簡單的善意行為和友誼的力量團結在一起。下水作文

Sarah’ssuggestionwasmetwithenthusiasmfromMary.TheycametoasettlementthattheydecidedtomakehomemadepancakesforMaya,somethingthatwouldremindherofhome-cookedmeals.

“Absolutely!Let’smakeMaya’sday.”Maryreplied,hereyestwinklingwithexcitement.Withtheintentionof

givingasurprisetoMaya,SarahandMarywokeupearlythenextmorning,andstartedcooking.Theyrummagedthroughthekitchendrawers,theirhandsmovingswiftly

insearchofthenecessaryutensils.Aftergatheringtheflour,eggs,andmilk,theyfacedthechallengeoftherecipe.Sarah,withherphoneinhand,scrolledthroughcountlesscookingwebsitesuntilshefoundwhatseemedliketheperfectone.Followingtheinstructionsascloselyaspossible,theybegantomixthebatter.Marycarefullypouredthebatterontothehotpan,herhandsteadydespiteherexcitement.Asthepancakescooked,theirfaceslitupwithanticipation.

AsMayawokeup,thepancakeswerereadyonthetable.Maya’seyeswidenedinamazementandherheartswelledwithaffection.“Youdidthisforme?”sheasked,hervoicefilledwithdisbelief.Withtearsofjoystreamingdownherface,shehuggedSarahandMarytightly.Sittingdown,Mayatookabite,andasthefamiliartastespreadacrosshertongue,asenseofwarmthandbelongingwashedoverher.Thethreegirlssataroundthetable,sharingstoriesoftheirchildhoodsandthelovetheyhadfortheirfamilies.ThelaughterandthewarmthofthemomentbegantoeaseMaya’shomesickness.Witheachword,theirbondgrewstronger,andinthatmoment,th