讀后續寫系列微技能--對話描寫

（DialogueinContinuationWriting）

對話(dialogue)是故事角色在整個故事中對彼此或對自己說的話。它可以用來揭示人物的性格和個性，它也可以用來推動情節向前發展，并展示情節發展的過程。Whatisthefunctionofdialogueinastory？

對話描寫的原則：

①對話要為推動故事情節服務，每段出現一兩句即可；②對話描寫必須反映人物的心理與情感，刻畫人物的性格；③不宜過長，側重口語化詞匯，避開生僻詞匯；④盡可能結合動作描寫，明確對誰說。對話描寫存在的問題？？？標點符號使用不夠規范xxxsaid對話標簽用詞單一復雜冗長堆砌成段標點符號使用不夠規范對話標簽用詞單一復雜冗長堆砌成段LearningObjectives一、標點符號的規范性Shesaid,“Ourbuswillarriveinfiveminutes.”①說話人在前

當Sbsaid位于句首時，后面一般用逗號;引號內第一個字母大寫,句尾標點符號放在引號內。Sbsaid,“Xxxxx.”

規規矩矩【觀察思考】【探究總結】一、標點符號的規范性“Ihopeyouwillbehere,”hesaid.“Idon'tcare!”hesaid.“Why”heasked.②說話人在后

當sbsaid位于句末時，引號內第一個字母大寫,陳述句句末用逗號，疑問句用問號，感嘆句用感嘆號。引號外第一個字母小寫。“Xxxxx,

??？”sbsaid.

規規矩矩【觀察思考】【探究總結】一、標點符號的規范性③說話人在中間當sbsaid位于句中時,

前面引號內句末用逗號，引號外第一個字母小寫；sbsaid后面一般用逗號，后面引號內第一個字母小寫?！癤xxxxx,”

sbsaid,“xxxxxx.”

規規矩矩“That’scool,”hesaid,“canIhaveatry”【觀察思考】【探究總結】一、標點符號的規范性“Xxxxxx,

??？”

sbsaid.Sbsaid,

“Xxxxxx.”

“Xxxxxx,”

sbsaid,“xxxxxx.”①

說話人在前②

說話人在后③

說話人在中間

規規矩矩一、標點符號的規范性1.“comeon！Youcandoit.Iwhisperedtohiminasoftvoice.2.“Iwillneverdothatagain,”Heansweredfirmly.3.Irantohimandsaid:

“getupandrun!”

4.“Thankyousomuch,”Hesaidwithachokingvoice,“ButIdon'tknowhowtopayforyourkindness.”Come”he,Get改錯hebut注意標點&大小寫標點符號使用不夠規范對話標簽用詞單一復雜冗長堆砌成段規范表達LearningObjectives二、對話用詞的豐富性用詞---如果續寫中語言描寫較多，那么一定要避免通篇都是“said”，而要靈活多變地使用表示“說”的動詞換個詞唄用詞---不能只是said---換個詞

說道________回答道________問道_______拓展資料說______解釋道_______嘆氣地說______同意地說______大笑地說______請求_______尖叫道___________大聲地吼道___________承諾________抱怨道________說服________安慰________道歉________建議_______耳/低語____________

shout/yell/roarlaughsayreplyaskaddexplainsighagreescreamcomplaincomfortbegpromisewhisper/murmursuggestapologizepersuade各種各樣的“說”1.“Whydon’tyouwanttoacceptthiswonderfulopportunity”___________thebossonthephone.2.“Shallweleavenow”he___________tousandwelefttheroomveryquietly.3.“Help!Help!Ican’tswim,”___________thefrightenedboy.4.“Iwillneverdothatagain,”I___________.5.“Ididn’tlikethatmealatall,”________thecustomer.askedwhisperedscreamedscreamwhisperpromiseaskcomplainFillintheblankwiththerightverbform.用所給動詞的正確形式填空。promisedcomplained對話標簽用詞單一復雜冗長堆砌成段規范表達豐富表達LearningObjectivesHowtoexpress"say"morevividlyThink

(三)給各種“說”加點料加點料唄在直播節目中，李發出一聲驚人的喊叫，“我的媽呀，答應我，買它！”Inalivestreaming,Lishoutedinasurprisingtone,“Oh,myGod!Promisemetobuyit”!skill1加語氣

基本結構為:

in

a/anadj

tone(語氣，語調)加點料---修飾動詞said加點料---修飾動詞saidskill1加語氣

基本結構為:

inatone以一種溫柔的語氣in

a

tone以一種愉悅的語氣in

atone

以一種堅定的語氣in

a

tone

以一種粗魯的語氣in

a

tone

以一種悲傷的語氣inatone以一種好奇的的語氣inantone以一種不耐煩的語氣加點料唄

in

a/anadj

tone(語氣，語調)soft/gentle/mildpleasantfirmsadrudeimpatientcurious“Ididn'tmeanto,”shemurmuredinalowvoice.“我不是故意的，”她低聲說。skill2加嗓音

基本結構為:加點料---修飾動詞saidin

a/anadj

voice(聲音)skill2加嗓音

基本結構為:

inavoice用一個高的聲音inavoice用一個低的聲音inavoice用一個響亮的聲音

inanvoice用一個惱火的的聲音inavoice用一個堅定的聲音inavoice用一個顫抖的聲音

inanvoice用一個局促不安的聲音加點料---修飾動詞said加點料唄in

a/anadj

voice(聲音)awkwardtremblinghigh

lowloud

firm

annoyed

特朗普是如此生氣，以致于他在辦公室大聲吼道，“這下完蛋了！”SoannoyedwasDonaldJohnTrumpthatheroaredloudlyintheoffice,“It'sover”!加點料---修飾動詞saidskill3加副詞

基本結構為:adv.大聲地難過地溫柔地不情愿地不耐煩地生氣地禮貌地

絕望地真誠地堅定地loudlypolitelysincerelygentlyfirmlyimpatientlysadlyunwillinglyangrilydesperately加點料---修飾動詞saidskill3加副詞

基本結構為:加點料唄adv.鞏固提升完成句子1.Shelookedathimwithanangryglanceand____________________“Leavemealone!”她生氣地看了他一眼，不耐煩地說：“別煩我！”2.Hestoppedmeand___________________,“Idomissyou!”他攔住我，輕輕地說：“我真想你！”3.“Whobroketheglass”theboy_________________________.男孩聲音顫抖地問道，“誰打碎的玻璃？”saidimpatientlyaddedinasofttoneaskedinatremblingvoice“說”動詞+副詞“說”動詞+語氣“說”動詞+嗓音注意標點&動詞鞏固提升4..“Iwouldloveto,”_______________________________.“我很樂意這樣做，”艾米麗用一種愉快的語氣說。5.Ina_______________________he_____________________,“Okay,Iguess.”他用顫抖的、局促不安的聲音不情愿地回答說:“好吧，我想。”Emilysaidinapleasanttonetrembling,awkwardvoiceansweredunwillingly“說”動詞+語氣“說”動詞+嗓音注意標點&動詞6.Thechildren_____________________,"HappyMother'sDay!"孩子們大聲說：“母親節快樂！”shoutedloudly“說”動詞+副詞“說”動詞+副詞復雜冗長堆砌成段規范表達豐富表達豐富表達LearningObjectives續寫微作文Lastweekatadinnerparty,thehostessaskedmetositnexttoMrs.Rumbold.Mrs.Rumboldwasalarge,unsmilingladyinatightblackdress.①_________________________________________________(當我在她身邊坐下時，她甚至連頭都沒抬一下).②__________________（她的眼睛盯著自己的盤子，）andinashorttime,shewasbusyeating.Itriedtomakeaconversation.“Willyoubespendingyourholidaysabroadthisyear”③___________________________________(我微笑著禮貌地問道).Shedidn’tevenlookupwhenItookmyseatbesideherHereyeswerefixed/focusedonherplate鞏固提升____________________________________________________________________________________________Iaskedpolitelywithasmile“No,”④________________________________（她頭也不抬地回答，“說”）.“WillyoubestayinginEngland”⑤_________________________________(我繼續用溫和的語氣說）.“No,”sheshookherhead.⑥_____________________________________________________（我絕望地問她晚餐是否吃得好）.“Youngman,”⑦_____________________________________（她用一種惱火的聲音回答）,“ifyouatemoreandtalkedless,wewouldbothenjoyourdinner!”sheansweredwithoutlookingupIcontinuedinagentletoneDesperately,Iaskedherwhethershewasenjoyingherdinner鞏固提升sheansweredinanannoyedvoiceSummary①

規范標點符號②

豐富對話用詞（詞）③

豐富語段內容（句）Homework運用所學對話描寫技巧，把下面的語篇拓展資料完整。（2021

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