讀后續(xù)寫：PurpleTomatoes范文【批改與點評】段落續(xù)寫：①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“為什么這個女人如此慷慨?”可知，第一段可描寫作者對女人的幫助感到不解，想要弄明白原因。②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“然而，我再也沒有見過她”可知，第二段可描寫作者尋人不得，但理解了女人的行為并決定把她的善良傳送下去。續(xù)寫線索：感到困惑——尋找線索——尋人不得——理解善意——傳播善良續(xù)寫的主題還是很常見的“善良”與“愛的傳遞”，情節(jié)發(fā)展容易把握，不容易寫偏；主要是需要運用多種寫作技巧，來展現(xiàn)考生的文字駕馭能力、語言運用能力和情感表達能力。語言修正：1--拼寫錯誤:scratchone’shead撓撓頭，表示疑惑不解。2--詞性誤用：eager是形容詞。3--詞義理解和詞性變形錯誤：應(yīng)該是doubtful.4--left拼寫與her意義上的錯誤：應(yīng)該是leftanypersonalinformation.5--語言的地道表達：應(yīng)該是inthefollowingdays.6--語法錯誤：應(yīng)該是hopethat從句。7--語法錯誤，應(yīng)該是謂語，而不是非謂語：改成welled.8--意義與語法錯誤：應(yīng)該是Iwasconvincedthat+后面句子用musthavedone表示對過去的肯定猜測：一定已經(jīng)去其他地方了。9--單詞、單配錯誤：應(yīng)該是holdsagratefulattitude.10--單復(fù)數(shù)錯誤：應(yīng)該是awoman.此句可以修改得再精煉些：findsbsharingsthwithothers.【參考范文】【possibleversion】

Whywasthiswomanbeingsogenerous?

Wejustmetoncebutshegavemesomuch,whichpuzzledmealot.Ineededtofindoutthereasonbehindit.Nextmorning,Iwenttomybossandtriedtodigoutsomecluesthatwouldhelpmefindthiswoman,butfailed.“ShelefttheboxwithanoteinitandspedoffbeforeIcouldsayaword”,mybossexplained.Itriedsomeotherwaystofindher.However,Ineversawheragain.

Icouldonlyassumethatthewomanwhohelpedmeisafairyintheworld.Thereasonwhyshelentmeahandisbecauseofherpurekindnessandgenerosity.Now,Ihavemyowngardenandmyowntomatoes,andherrandomactofkindnessinspiresmetosharemygardenharvestswithanyonewhowillhaveit,justlikeher.【詞匯激活】行為類發(fā)現(xiàn)、找出：digout/findout

②匆忙離開：speedoff/hurryoff③假定：assume/suppose情緒類使困惑：puzzle/confuse/baffle

②仁慈、善良：kindness/benevolence【點睛】[高分句型1]Wejustmetoncebutshegavemesomuch,whichpuzzledmealot.(運用了which引導(dǎo)非限制性定語從句)[高分句型2]Nextmorning,Iwenttomybossandtriedtodigoutsomecluesthatwouldhelpmefindthiswoman,butfailed.(運用了that引導(dǎo)限制性定語從句)[高分句型3]Icoul