Follow-upwriting

characters:event:Reuben(a12-year-oldboy)Dora(theboy’smother)Theshopkeeper

Reuben,a12-year-oldboy,wantedtobuyabeautifulbroochforhismother,Dora.Readforbriefinformation

theme:LoveReadfordetailedinformation1.Whydidthebroochcausehisheartracing?2.Whatkindofpersonishismother?3.What’sReuben’sbehaviorwhenaskingtheshopkeeperwhathewanted?4.Inordertocollectenoughmoney,whatdidhedecidetodo?Aboysawabeautifulbroochinashopwindowthatsethisheartracing.Butthepricewastoohighforhim.Slimandbeautiful,shewasthecenterofthehome,thegluethatheldittogether.Standingproudandstraightinhisflour-sackshirtandwashed-outtrousers,hetoldtheshopkeeperwhathewanted..Onhearingthesoundofhammeringfromasidestreet,Reubensuddenlyhadanideathathewouldraisemoneybysellingusednailbags.非謂語同位語從句定語從句形容詞作狀語beginning:Wishtopresenthismotherwithanexpensivegiftdeveloping:Carryouthisplansecretlytobuythegiftending:……Discussthequestions,writedownsomepointsPredict1、HowdidReubenfindenoughusednailbags?2、WhattroublemightReubengothrough?3、Whatencouragedhimtoinsist?4、WhatdidReubenfeelduringthemoney-savingprocess?……Everydayafterschool,Reubenstartedhisplan.Organizethepointsbyusingadvancedsentencepatterns.

sentencepatterns(句式)定語從句,狀語從句,名詞性從句,強調句.非謂語…Predict1、WhatwouldReubendo?2、What’shismother’sreaction?……Finallythetimecame!Tomysurprise,mydaughterwhoalwaysdrivesmecrazypresentedmewiththeflowers.ThemomentIsawtheflowers,tearswelledupinmyeyes.Movedandspeechless,Ihuggedhertightly.Itismydaughterwhoteachesmealessonoflove.定語從句狀語從句形容詞作狀語強調句ApossibleversionEverydayafterschool,Reubenstartedhisplan.Coldandhungry,

Reubenwanderedthestreets,searchingforthenailbags

carefully.Tosavemoremoney,heevendecidedtodeliverpapersintheearlymorning.Exhaustedandtiredashefelt,hestillinsisted.Itwas

thebroochintheshopwindowthatremindedhimwhathedidwasworthwhile.Afteralongtimeofhardwork,hemadeiteventually.Paragraph1:Finallythetimecame!ApossibleversionParagraph2:Finallythetimecame!Hetookoutthesodatin,pouredthecoinsoutandbegantocount.Fivedollars!Hishardworkpaidoff!Holdingthesodatinfirmly,Reubenrushedfortheshoptobuythebrooch.Themomenthegotthebeautifulbrooch,heburstthroughthefrontdoorandplaceditinDora’shand.NeverhadDorareceivedsuchagift.

Speechlessandhappy,sheheldhersontightlyintoherarms,withtearswellingupinhereyes.HomeworkPolishyourwritingbyusingadvancedsentencepatternsandproperconnections.注意：所續寫短文的詞數應為150左右；應使用5個以上短文中標有下劃線的關鍵詞語；續寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語已為你寫好；續寫完成后，請用下劃線標出你所使用的關鍵詞語。問題1.對話（直接引語）太多2.第一段行數太少（6-7行）3.無下劃線4.時態亂用5.個別情節扯太遠

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受好心人捐贈）堅持Stick(stuckstuck)todoingInsistondoingCarryon撿Pickup美句賞析1.Badastheweatherwas,hisdesireforthebroochneverchanged.——302藍素倩2.Heranagainstthestrongwind,searchingforthenailbags.——302王軼雯3.Itwashisdeterminationaswellashislovetohismotherthathelpedhimtogetthebroochfromtheshopkeeper.——302徐逸文4.Staringatthemoneyhegained,hisheartwasfullofexcitementandhappiness.——302曹威5.Withthedarkapproaching,Reubenfelttiredandhungry,butloveinspiredhimtocarryon.——302戴夢娜6.Everytimehethoughtthathecouldbuythebroochsoon,excitementandhappinesscrowdedinonhim.——302戴夢娜7.Herushedtotheshopwithmoneytightlyheldinhishand.——302戴夢娜8.Loveisreallyafantasticthingthatmakesthefamilywarm.——302錢雨薇9.Love,suchamagicalthing,madethefamilyfullofwarmthinthecolddays.——302孫雪穎10.Mother’sloveinspiredhimtoovercomeallthedifficulties.——302譚熒瑩11.Hepickedupthenailbagsoneafteranother,exhaustedbutsatisfied.——302譚12.Everytimehethoughtofhismother,hefeltenergetictoraisethemoney.——302錢瀅13.Theheavierthesodatinwas,thehappierhewas.——302胡雪苑14.Withthebeautifulbroochheldinhandscarefully,hewalkedstraighttohismother.——301周可行15.SheheldReubeninarms,enjoyingthehappiestmomentinherlife..——301周16.Nomatterhowbadtheweatherwas,hestillranfromonecornertoanother,tiredbuthappy.——301金東輝17.Nevertheless,hestilldidithappilywithoutcomplaint.——301高展陽18.Motheropenedtheboxwithasurprisedlook.——301趙燁男19.Bad

astheweatherwas,hecarriedonseekingnailbagstoexchangethemforfivecents.——301施怡瀟ApossibleversionEverydayafterschool,Reubenstartedhisplan.Coldandhungry,

Reubenwanderedthestreets,searchingforthenailbags

carefully.Tosavemoremoney,heevendecidedtodeliverpapersintheearlymorning.Exhaustedandtiredashefelt,hestillinsistedon.Itwas

thebroochintheshopwindowthatremindedhimofwhathedidwasworthwhile.Afteralongtimeofhardwork,hemadeiteventually.Paragraph1:Finallythetimecame!ApossibleversionParagraph2:Finallythetimecame!Hetookoutthesodatin,pouredthecoinsoutandbegantocount.Fivedollars!Hishardworkpaidoff!Holdingthesodatinfirmly,R